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NO. ROLF. YOU SELF-SABOTAGING FOOL. I am so upset with him right now aghhh -- I can’t even imagine the look of hurt on Luna’s face because I am a thousand percent confident that she was never this hurt by anything in the books (not including the more dire situations caused by war). People called her names behind her back all the time, Hermione kept insulting her to her face, but Luna was always so resilient and let things bounce back. AND THEN ROLF COMES ALONG. I could smack him, I swear! I cannot believe that he has the gall to shout Luna away and then direct the blame outwards, with his “people always leave” nonsense! Is this what happens when they leave? He shouts at them until they go away??? Because I don’t feel sorry for him at all if that’s the case!
Sorry for ranting so much omg, I am so upset. It’s so heartbreaking seeing Luna saddened -- it’s just such a rare occurrence! I understand being hot and angry and frustrated, but ONE DOES NOT GO SHOUTING AT YOUR BELOVED. [wail]
I can’t believe this is the last chapter up so far!! I am so sad!!!! Please, if you get the chance -- can you update soon so that my heart can fix itself? I love this story so so so much. :D
Love, Eva
I continue to read and be positively amazed by how incredible this story is!! I absolutely love how beautiful your imagination is -- I never in a million years would have thought to look for magical things in Muggle artworks, but you did! It’s almost eye-opening, in that these things that we’ve become so familiar with may suddenly look magical and unique just from shifting our perspective a bit! Thank you so much for this; it gave me this wonderful thrill like there is secret magic hidden in the Muggle world. :D
I loved the development of Rolf throughout the chapter!! I went from thinking, “No, no, Rolf, one does not get to enjoy the company of a Luna Lovegood without also doing things for her!” (a thought I still stand by, though it perhaps may not be applicable :P) to “Oh, he loves her and treasures her so so much” (even if he didn’t actually say it haha)!
“the immature offspring of homo sapiens terrified Rolf” omg Rolf. It’s okay! Just another species of animal. :P
I adored that entire scene with the Potters. All Rolf needed was another nerdy human (this time in the form of one small Albus Potter), and then he was fine! Oh, I would give anything to read more about Albus bonding with Rolf -- when the precious child looked up at Rolf like he was a knight in shining armor, I wanted to weep! <3
This is amazing and perfect and wonderful! Thank you so so much!! Excited for the next chapter!
Love, Eva
THESE CHAPTER TITLES. To me, they’re the most romantic chapter titles I’ve ever seen, particularly since we’re talking about the wonderful Luna and the grumpy Rolf! I love your characterizations of these two so much. I will forever be disappointed that Luna never played a larger role in the books -- but that’s okay now, because I’ve discovered this story, and she’s written absolutely PERFECTLY here! And Rolf is, you know, Rolf, and he absolutely should be nicer to her, but I can’t help but love him dearly anyway as he stubbornly continues to deny his attraction to Luna. :D
I do understand him, a great deal. It makes sense that he turns to animals to soothe him, because he understands them! I’d imagine that he’s not so good around people (exemplified by his behavior towards Luna, haha), and so he feels a lot more insecure about his relationships with them, particularly when they leave.
I am SO FOND of the fact that Luna just decided to tag along on all his expeditions. Literally where would he be without Luna’s mystical mind? Nowhere! He should be more grateful for her. <3
“Do you think the yellow neon worms are jealous of the pink and purple ones?” This is the most Luna thing!!! I read this and became so excited because it’s so her!!
Rolf prefers the color yellow!! The color yellow!!! He is so smitten! Oh, that kiss in the cavs was the most romantic thing, and to have the beautiful lightshow afterwards is the most perfect timing! I do hope that Luna got her injury treated safely, and that in the future, Rolf will perhaps be less rude to Luna? :D
Sorry for all my exclamation points omg, this story just makes me so happy!
Love, Eva
HOW HAVE I NOT DISCOVERED THIS STORY BEFORE. I am constantly on the lookout for good Luna/Rolf stories -- I’m always so fascinated by the kind of person Rolf must’ve been in order to remain happily married to Luna! And this story is already shaping up to be so good, even though I’ve only read the first chapter so far!
I already adore Rolf SO MUCH. I love and admire his personal ambitions; it must be really difficult going into the same field of study as a famous relative! But I already have so much faith in him. Even if he should open his mind to the possibility of Luna Lovegood following him about. <3
The fkejjow is such an ingenious creation -- I found myself gasping in awe when Rolf said he was “determined to see the change to scales and gills once they made their voyage to the sea.” I assume you made this creature up, which is so amazing and impressive, and I want to witness this beautiful transformation for myself! They must be such gorgeous creatures!
Rolf thinking that Luna’s “oooo!” was a mating call of the fkejjow is so funny omg. I feel like it could very well be a mating call for Luna Lovegood hahaha! He seems to be somewhat aggressive towards other humans, and I wonder...was there anything specific that caused this tendency in him? Was he wronged at some point in his life, therefore dedicating his entire study towards magical creatures? I’m so curious to find out!
I’m imagining both Luna and Rolf perched in trees for six days straight, and I can already very much say it’s a match made in heaven. :D
Oh, nooo, poor Rolf!! I hope that the fkejjows didn’t hurt him too much. But Luna’s HILARIOUS “Rolf, I think you may be correct . . . Carmella birds are much more peaceful and would never attack. I’m so glad I followed you!” makes his fall worth it, imo. :D
This is so brilliant, I’m so excited to keep reading!
Love, Eva
Hiya,
It’s me again for the Centre for Magical Disease Control Review Event, round 1!
Oof, this chapter was a tough one to read as well – I don’t much like mean, angry Rolf either. It’s especially tough to read after the happiness of the Paris chapter, which I thought would really help Rolf to relax a bit, and to change his point of view to be more open-minded, like Luna, but it seems that, at the height of frustration, he still can’t appreciate anything he doesn’t perceive as strictly, directly relevant to his research.
It’s really sad to see him so overcome with his obsession to finish his book and finally leave a mark on the world that he doesn’t realise how good Luna is to him, and how much he needs her. When she reached out to hold his hand after they’d disillusioned themselves, I thought his “He should have thought of that” was because he knows that holding hands and feeling each other’s presence would give them the strength they need to get through the desert, but instead Rolf can only think of practical things – you really threw me for a loop there, but I enjoyed how you repeated that phrase.
It was so heart-breaking to see Rolf be so mean to Luna, even when she remains entirely calm and understanding, that he just sends her away – it also makes me think back to the second chapter, when he said everyone he’d ever met had disappointed him eventually, and how accurate that statement really might have been when here, it’s so clearly him that is in the wrong, and him that is being hurtful. Still, he seems to regret his harshness towards Luna – as he should! – and their earlier chemistry was strong enough that I still have some hope for their relationship! Although, considering the quote in its entirety now, I dread the destruction that’s apparently to come. Either way, I’m anxious to find out if and how they recover from this!
Love,
Julia
Hello,
I’m back for the Centre for Magical Disease Control Review Event, round 1!
This was such a sweet chapter! Rolf is so incredibly awkward, I love it! His anxiety and nervousness about meeting new people – and especially children – comes across so strongly, so it’s really lovely to see him putting that aside as best as he can because he knows it will make Luna happy.
Your depiction of Albus especially was so cute! It was really adorable to see how interested he is in Rolf’s research, and how that helps Rolf to bond with him, and to get over his fear of children, even if Lily’s reaction to the worms was a bit of a setback for him.
I also love Luna’s surprise for Rolf! That’s such a fun idea, to connect the wizarding world and its magical creatures to a real-life artist, and it was really sweet to see Rolf examine the pictures, searching for creatures, just like he would the jungle or the Sahara Desert. And I love the idea of the Eiffel Tower being in the image of a magical creature! It’s such a nice way for Luna to bring him closer to her method of research, of seeing hidden things, and who knows, maybe this new perspective will help Rolf make the breakthrough he needs for his book!
Love,
Julia
Hi there,
I’m back for the Centre for Magical Disease Control Review Event, round 1!
I love the new insight we’re getting into these characters! I just want to give Rolf a hug, who hurt him in his life that he sees everybody he meets as just another person that will ultimately disappoint him? But it seems like, despite his being determined to keep her at distance, she’s made herself quite at home with him, and he seems to have accepted her, the way he always talks about them as a group, even if he doesn’t want to admit it to himself yet – I think he does secretly like her :D (And of course, at the end of the chapter, he is willing to admit as much!)
Luna is just absolutely adorable, I love how she cares about the creatures’ feelings, even if Rolf thinks that’s unscientific. And her invention of the reverse extendable ear (and eye?) is utterly brilliant, I love that you show how she doesn’t just rely on conjecture and following others, as Rolf might have it, but is capable of making her own, fantastic innovations, too!
The kiss they shared in the cave was also incredibly lovely, I loved how, even though they’re kissing, they still remembered why they came into the cave in the first place and how passionate they are about the creatures!
Love,
Julia
Hi there,
I’m here for the Centre for Magical Disease Control Review Event, round 1!
I absolutely adore your descriptions of the firds, they sound like such cool creatures! I love how much thought you clearly put into the creatures and their specific habits, it’s such a cool detail!
And I love your characterisation of both Rolf and Luna! It makes a lot of sense for Rolf to want to get out of his grandfather’s shadow and finally make his own discoveries, so of course he would be so focussed on his work that he wouldn’t immediately realise Luna was talking! And to just have her pop up, 200 feet high up in a tree, without any preamble is such a perfect way to introduce Luna – because it doesn’t really make sense for her to be there, not according to Rolf, but when has Luna ever cared about silly things like sense or propriety?
I also love how that shows their different research methods; Rolf is so methodical that he would of course be thrown by Luna’s seemingly random proclamations about the firds, which she claims is an entirely different species! I’m really excited to see where their relationship will go, they seem to have such different vibes, but they are ultimately passionate about the same thing, so I’m curious to see if they’ll ever get along!
Love,
Julia
I know I reviewed this on HPFF but I couldn't resist rereading and rereviewing it and hopefulllly you'll repost the rest :D :D :D
I forgot how much I dislike Rolf in much of this story. He's so hyper-focused on his work. I have questions about him being there for 6 days. Mostly, how did he eat and go to the bathroom. Did he go the old fashioned route from ancient Hogwarts?? lololol.
Reading this I wonder how much you're pulling from your own real life science experience. Rolf is so meticulous and by the book that he would definitely pass for a muggle science dude.
I wouldn't have guessed Luna to be the person who would patiently wait in a tree for 6 days watching Rolf watch birds. I wonder why/how he caught her attention.
I'm really really really excited to jump into this story once more!!
-Rose
Hey!
I've just fallen in love with this story again. I think the characterisation for Rolf is so good, I love how it gets annoyed with Luna for all her questioning. They are just so cute together.
I love these little animal things that you're coming up with, I don't know if they are canon or not but I think it's really cool that we're getting a lot of information about that because it really brings a lot to the story. Luna is so adorable wit her 'unimportant' questions! I think what I really like about the first section is how she seems to surprise Rolf a lot which is really nice. Like with the ears, she does something awesome when he is just on the edge of thinking that she is crazy. I think it's a nice way to unfold that relationship and explore what they like about each other. I really think you're doing Luna's character justice which is super difficult in my opinion.
I thought this chapter had lots of great description to build up the imagery for the cave and what they were doing was really great. I love the world building that you've put into this story. They are in locations which aren't familiar to the reader through what we know in canon but your descriptions are perfect for feeling like you've been to these places yourself. I just loved their kiss, I'm shipping this so hard. I thought the kiss was amazing, I liked your use of the senses when it came to Rolf like how Luna felt different to the cave and description of her skin, it came across so really sweet but it also had a intense spark to it. I loved this line " Sparks shot off behind his eyes and it felt like the ground beneath him was swirling."
This is such a fun story with such a likeable pairing that you've created! I love this so much!
Abbi xx
(HC Finale '19 - Vote Maya Chon)
Hi, Beth! It seems House Cup Finale review festa has begun, so I remembered you updated this.
Wow,they appeared in Paris after their expedition in the cave, how romantic. You added Rolf's reluctance spending time in typical sightseeing location not for his study, which is very plausible. You focused on writing how Luna changed his thoughts around Paris. You did great. I often searched the pictures via google everytime Luna informed about the possibility that Monet painted the magical things, actually he was influenced by Ukiyoe from Japan, so Hokusai could be a wizard... hmmn an interesting plot.
I really love you put the episode involving Potters. Mini Harry, Albus is just adorable, I could visualize Rolf's facial expression and Albus Potter's talk.
Well, their romantic mood keeps blossoming, I enjoyed the contrast between fantastic view of Paris with Luna's magic and her lecture around the arts and young Potter's admiration of Rolf as his hero!
please update, Beth!
K
Splendid,,,,,Please update soon
Oh wow ...what a superb chapter to start the fic
Hi, Beth! Team Blue!
I thought I dropped one here in the past (at the previous site), it might be a short review, so I decided to leave a longer one.
Firstly, your description of inside the cave is marvelous, I remembered how J.K.Rowling created the underground world in her books. Your story is also full of fantasy and I like it.
Rolf's grumpy mood (caused by Luna) has been continued from chapter 1, I enjoyed it very much. Then his distraction turned into the other meaning, he recognized her as a witch (woman) not just an annoying Luna Lovegood.
Her interest was focused on his study about the magical creature, the Nitor vermis as well as Rolf's obsession with them, which indicates that they will be a good pair near future and readers will feel happy with it. You did a great job here! The detailed dipctions about Rolf's feeling towards her are all fantastic.
I think I mentioned the colors of the Nitor vermis in the old review. I would like to repeat it again. Luna's POV about the colors is just terriffic and I smiled at Rolf's thought (his favorite is yellow), too.
It's very Luna-ish that she ended in her wicked gash before having a very romantic experience with Rolf. Their life is full of adventure and their interest is developed to the same route. I expect you to write more, please!
K
Here for our swap:
This was really sweet. I always wondered what Rolf was like and how Luna fell for him.
Just you wait Rolf you'll eventually fall for Luna and she might even convince you about a few things.
I hear Luna is a very difficult character to write but you did a great job.
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I love the details you've used to describe Rolf working so hard as an opener. He seems so intent on making a name for himself, so focused on his research that he doesn't notice that he's not alone. It's funny that he thinks at first Luna's exclamation has come from the birds.
Poor Rolf! She's got him so flustered he has no words. He's got some huge chip on his shoulder about not only Luna, but other people in general, which makes me wonder what's up with him. And I like the stiff, formalized mannerism you've given him. It proves his sentiment about people being a waste of time, and that he's hyper focused on what he's doing.
Luna's in her own world here, but her knowledge of things related to Rolf's research blends in well with the narrative. She seems to be there more for the delight of discovery instead of trying to prove something to others... which, now that I think about it... must be Rolf's issue. He hates people, but he feels like he still has to show them that he's worth something. That's definitely a characterization that Luna would be able to deal with.
In my head, I always believed that Luna's "pretend creatures" had some basis in the truth. I love how open to new ideas you wrote her, and the way she reacts to the discovery that the birds really are firds, like Rolf insists. All the elements that you used were great: the details about the new species, the way that Rolf is super-focused on his work, and meeting in a tree (which for some reason, I was super excited about), gave this a great setup. And you threw in some crazy, life-threatening action, which is important too, because researching in the wild can be very dangerous! I'm sure Rolf was horrified, as was I, about the demise of his equipment, and probably a bit more upset that Luna was completely unharmed by the ordeal. I have a feeling that Luna is going to prove her worth far easier than Rolf will.
This was such a fun read! Also, I too have pictured TJ Thyne's Bones character as a great characterization pick for Rolf. Great choice!
Pix
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I really love reading Luna/Rolf stories, although I don't do it nearly often enough. I really adored this one - very fluffy and lovely!
I really liked the way you characterised Rolf. Usually he's shown as being somewhat like Luna - a little wacky, but I like how you took his wackiness in a different direction. He's a scientist, not a believer in fairytales. Evidence is the air he breathes. And his desire to establish his name, different to that of his grandfather, is the blood that pumps through his veins. The kind of single-minded ness and concentrated for the type of science Rolf does is rather suited to ambition, and I really liked this rather well-rounded look at Rolf, even though the story is less than two thousand words.
I also felt as if I really knew all about the firds by the end of this! You included some lovely details about them, so that they were really part of the story, and not merely a plot device.
Can I get a sequel please? I'd love to read more about these two and how they finally fall in love and go on lots of wacky adventures and discover all the firds!
I'm finally here! Sorry for the delay. ♥
I am so excited to get into this story - I find Luna to be such a fascinating character (and so difficult to get right, but I'll get to that in a minute!), and I love seeing Rolf - from what little we know about him, he must be a fascinating guy in his own right.
You had me hooked from the first paragraph. I loved the way you described Rolf and his surroundings for two reasons: first, the picture you painted was just so incredibly vivid, and second, I could see so much depth and promise in what you said about fkejjows - it was just wonderful world-building.
I also loved the way you showed part of Rolf's motivation as being based around a desire to make a name for himself, rather than just building on his grandfather's fame. It was perfectly done - I can totally see why he'd feel that way, and while I don't know quite how old he is, if he's at all close in age to Luna I'm assuming he's probably in his mid-late 20s or early 30s. That time frame makes perfect sense for this evolution in his career and perspective, which made the character feel realistic and rich from the start.
I wasn't sure how you'd choose to depict Rolf and Luna's initial meaning. Sometimes he's shown as being immediately enchanted by her, and while I've seen that work, I think this is my favorite take on it so far. You got Luna so right (which is a feat in itself! She's so tough to write in so many ways), and his reaction to her... perfect.
His reaction actually brought something important that often gets overlooked, because Luna is such a popular character among fans: she's really quite annoying sometimes! Hermione's irritation in OotP in particular is not unreasonable, and neither is Rolf's here. Luna marches to the beat of her own drummer, and while that's a lot of fun, it can be infuriating when you encounter it in an actual person, especially if they're mucking something that you worked hard for up.
I love the quote at the end - I can't wait to read on! Amazing job!
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26th July 2016:
Hi, Beth! I came back here for your Hot Seat Review!
Ha ha ha, Hurricane Luna! Nice! It's entirely different from Molly's sorrowful story I read yesterday. This story has cheerful and comical mood. It's entertaining. Newt Scamander's centric movie is coming, so I had much expectation before I read this story. You didn't betray me. Rolf's observation scene is very interesting. I wonder what the new species, the fkejjows are like. Did J.K.Rowling write about them? I have to check them in Newt Scamander's book later.
The timing when Luna entered is super! His activity as a scientist, observing firds boosts anticipation for a romance, even if Luna's dressing looks funny. Observing a mating pair raising its young from a hatchling hinted that their romance (Rolf&Luna) will also begin. Rolf can't forget her. Your description about her and their first encounter is super! The visual scene remains in our mind for long. I could imagine his confusion at her annoying chat and behavior (a kind of stalking). I love the scene with Rolf falling from the tree the best.
I'll be back soon.
Kenny
Hey Beth,
I'm super excited to be here yay. So this is a pairing that I really haven't read before so I was interested to see what you did with the characters. I always imagined Rolf to be similar to Luna I guess but I really enjoyed this version of him. I can see him and Luna are going to be really work more in a chalk/cheese way.
I like how subtle some of your characterisation from the first sentence when you're just setting the scene we already get a sense of the type of person Rolf is from the way that you describe carefully getting out his things. it's such a small detail but I can already see he's quite strict, practical and sensible character. I'm so impressed that we get to see that through his actions and not just his thought process. it's great story telling.
I loved having a little snippet into Rolf's working life, I really like how you set it up and give a lot of description into his routine. In fics we don't see too much of magical jobs so I enjoyed getting that information but also help set the scene. I love how Luna just pops up so randomly and scares the life out of Rolf!
I love the obvious contrast between Luna and Rolf in this chapter, how calm she is and how annoyed he is getting. It injects a subtle humour isn't this chapter which I really like and it sets up a really strong dynamic between the two of them, I'm looking forward to see where you take this story. the quote you used to inspire this piece is amazing btw xD
- Abbi xo
Hi Beth! I couldn't resist reading some more of your wonderful writing, and since Luna is one of my favourite characters, this seems like a pretty perfect combination.
I'm pretty fascinated by your title - Hurricane Luna. It seems like such a contradiction in terms, because Luna is always such a calm, friendly person, but I really like the idea that she could turn Rolf's life completely upside down, so that he doesn't recognise it from the life he was living before, and in that light it's a brilliant title and concept.
Rolf Scamander is a character that I've only read in a handful of one-shots before, I think, and I was really interested to see your characterisation of him here. You managed to include so many aspects of his character in this one chapter, and it was brilliant. He's so determined to make a name for himself and achieve something in his own right, rather than revising his grandfather's work, and that seems to cause him to be a very scientific and serious person. He doesn't seem to like people very much, either, and I can see how he'll work well with Luna for that already, because she's someone who always tries to be true to herself and doesn't seem to care that much about what other people think of her.
It made me laugh that Rolf had been studying the creatures for days, and was so serious and exact about it - thinking he was making a new discovery - and then Luna appears and says she's been sitting there watching him for days, and her and her father have known about the creatures for a long time. It was so interesting to read their first interaction with each other, and I'm looking forward to reading more of this story when you post it!
Sian :)
Hello, I'm here for the winter wonderland event!
I have missed your writing, Beth. And it's not that I don't miss all the angst that I'm used to from you, but I found this very enjoyable and equally satisfying. Although I might be slightly (okay, largely) biased because LUNA. And honestly, comparing her to a hurricane is both contradictory and absolutely perfect. She has such a light presence, but when noticed and taken into account, she becomes very hard to miss. She also does creep up on you out of nowhere propelled by her sense of wonder.
Rolf is just perfect. He is so serious (ah, scientists. We really do need to learn to chill.) and methodical. He is the complete opposite of Luna who believes in all sorts of things and doesn't try to find an explanation for everything. They will totally balance each other out. Although knowing Luna, she might have a bit of a predominant power. After all, she is a hurricane.
And that quote truly is stunning and inspirational. I think you did it justice with this lovely story.
Overall it was pretty good. Liked the discription. Pretty decent flow. I will say I think the ending was fairly abrupt. Even if you just added a few extra lines that would have added a better closing, it would be fine.
I'm curious though on how they end up getting together after this! :D
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