Name: justawillowtree (Signed) · Date: 07 Feb 2018 12:29 AM · For: Hide and Seek

Hi there, I'm here for your requested review! And your request was super interesting, too, so I actually really enjoyed myself while doing this one. The reason why I chose this Fred and George fic is because we all know of their reputation as tricksters and pranksters, and how they literally can't go five minutes without blowing something up (usually on purpose). So the premise of them being adorable little children while remaining their mischievous selves appealed to me a whole lot.

 

However, I am someone who enjoys reading a ridiculous amount about children, and that may not apply to everyone else. I do think that it's important to consider that tastes will vary between people, and that my favorites will not be everyone else's favorites, so I may or may not be a good representation of people's general opinions, lol. Just as a warning. I'm just letting you know what appealed to me and why. (The way the summary was worded was very cute and inviting, as well.)

 

I really loved seeing the different ways Fred and George just acted as...themselves. Like, they made a giant mess in the kitchen while attempting to clean up, they were completely unable to remain in their room quietly without any trouble... These two just bring giant messes with them wherever they go. And I really liked the way you portrayed the chaos that follows them constantly.

 

Reading about all the tiny little things they did (with all your adorable descriptions of their siblings as well, I mean, BABY RON?? SO CUTE) just made my insides feel all warm and fuzzy. So I'm very glad that I picked this piece to review!

 

I thought the summary was just fine; there wasn't anything about the summary that I thought needed fixing. It definitely drew me in, so it works as a summary very well, in my opinion. As for your other concern, the readability -- I'm not entirely sure what you mean by this, but I'm just going to talk about how interesting the piece was. Which it definitely was. I was so fascinated with the things that little Fred and little George did that I just wanted to continue reading about their lives without ever stopping. (Just a quick note here, I'm really sorry if I sound super incoherent. I can't think from exhaustion right now, haha.)

 

My only concrit for this piece would be the giant shifts in chapter lengths. I think that unless a point is being made that requires the different lengths and tones of chapters, I do think the chapters should be more evenly spaced all throughout the book.

 

Other than that, adorable!

 

~Eva

Author's Response:

Hello!!

 

I get a lot of reads on this story on a different site, and I had a feeling it was for the cuteness factor.  :)

 

The first three 'chapters' are a continuous story, but the others were one-shots that I sort of dumped into this story as standalone additions.  Perhaps I should either separate them out, or make an AN about that.  Hmm...

 

The little things the twins were up to were my favorite part about writing this story.  They would be thinking about the next thing and the next thing... and just sort of go with the flow like kids do.  It was also challenging, because each adventure they had, there had to be some kind of story to it, you know?  They can't just up and "let's build a sand fort" without something resulting from it, right?  

 

Anyway, thanks for playing along and going with my strange request.  I appreciate your thoughts on the piece, and on my AP as a whole.

 

Pix