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Hi Meg! I’m here for EvS May 2020, team E :D
Give Hermione an inch and she takes a mile! She reads in her magical time-traveling text that it’s okay to just be yourself and let what changes change as long as you’re not actively trying to change things—and then she’s setting up Remus and Amelia right after that :D
I love how you showed Hermione’s frustration as she tries to “learn” a spell she already knows—and I’m not surprised that Snape was impressed by that. Just as she’s impressed by his studiousness I’m wondering if he is noticing hers.
Yours,
Noelle
Hi Meg! I’m here for EvS May 2020, team E :D
Ugh, how uncomfortable for Hermione. It does seem that adult Snape has somewhat matured from this teen-aged version that snarls at everyone around him like a wounded dog. I love that she has to be partners with him—and I LOVE how she followed the Half-Blood Prince’s instructions to produce the more perfect potion. But I also really appreciate that Snape both wrote down the instructions—and refused to take credit for them. I’ve always thought that he was very proud that way, and wouldn’t take credit for somebody else’s work.
Rita and Gilderoy are truly gag-worthy.
I agree, Remus is more mature and sweeter than the other Marauders. It’s really cute that Amelia has a thing for him.
I’m really wondering what Snape is thinking since Hermione keeps staring at him. Even though he shouldn’t be rude to her, it must be…odd to have this pretty girl staring at him.
I love this first shiver-y moment where Hermione realizes the first thing she changed by going back in time!
Yours,
Noelle
Hi Meg! I’m here for EvS May 2020, team E :D
Even though Hermione has given herself a full course load, it’s all classes she’s taken before. I enjoyed the scene in Transfiguration where she sort of forgot herself and just did the spell—and everyone else was like, how did you do that so fast? She’ll have to be careful not to be too good at everything—and she’s likely going to get bored pretty fast :P
Eager for her first Potions class with Snape the student!!
Yours,
Noelle
Hi Meg! I’m here for EvS May 2020, team E :D
It makes all the sense in the world that Snape would be suspicious of anyone who tried to help him—but dude, she’s trying to help you! I’m glad Hermione was able to keep her cool here, but it looks like she’s going to have an uphill battle even to just get him to talk to her.
Sirius needs to chill out too. Dude, she’s not interested. (Great character work though :).
I’m glad that Hermione has made sort of a friend in Amelia Bones. No way she’d be able to get through this thing all by herself. She needs some sort of support. Gilderoy as head boy makes me giggle—and ugh Rita!! I hope Hermione is careful, she doesn’t need Rita snooping around after her.
Yours,
Noelle
Hi Meg! I’m here for EvS May 2020, team E :D
Having to meet everyone at once must have been even more of a shock for Hermione. I’m glad that she got some rest and some food before she had to deal with all of that. Good call on changing her hair color and covering up her scar—it would for sure cause too many questions.
Lucius and Bellatrix were creepy—and seeing young Gilderoy must have been sort of sad, knowing how he turned out. But not as sad as seeing Remus full of life and still with all his friends. I like how you pointed out how much more broken he was when Hermione knew him in the future.
Lily is so cold here! But it’s understandable, considering what went down at the end of the previous term for them.
And now Hermione’s face to face with Snape!
Yours,
Noelle
Hi Meg! I’m here for EvS May 2020, team E :D
Even though Hermione has had a shock, it’s believable that she’d be this quick on her feet. She’s so capable and good at improvising when she has to. But seriously, how is she going to handle seeing all these people—most of whom are newly dead to her—in their vital teenage years? She’s so young herself. This is a huge deal for her to try to accomplish this—but I guess it’s too late for her to turn back now.
I wonder what Ron and Harry are going to think if and when they find her missing in the future. But I guess she might make it back in time that they wouldn’t notice her missing.
I love that Dumbledore is just as enigmatic with himself as he is with everyone else.
I guess that he’s right that she can’t go changing a bunch of things—but the temptation!! It’s good that she chose to go in Ravenclaw—if she were living with the Marauders all the time how could she possibly keep her cover? And how could she hope to win Severus’s trust?
Ravenclaw tower sounds dreamy—and I love that the common room happens to have the very book she needs when she needs it.
Yours,
Noelle
Hi Meg! I’m here for EvS May 2020, team E :D
Hermione’s been through so much trying to keep her boys alive—and she just can’t stop can she? I appreciate that after going through the battle, and everything that came before it, she can’t let go of Snape’s death. It was so senseless—it served no purpose, and I agree with her—if he’d wanted to save himself surely he would have put forth more of an effort to do so. It’s like he just gave up.
Sending herself back to 1976 must have been a total shocker. How is she going to accomplish her mission? And more important—how is she going to get home?
Yours,
Noelle
Meg!! Thank you for this update <3
Hermione and Severus are soooo cute together. I love how, now that Sev is comfortable around Hermione, he's actually able to help her relax some herself. Although it's totally understandable that she'd be freaking out at this point over the antivenin. And the fact that she's going to have to go back to the future at some point *_*
The scene on the island was so sweet and peaceful, and I sort of love how flustered she gets when she's trying to lie to Severus.
Lovely job!
Yours,
Noelle
Hello my dear!
I'm hear to sneak in a quick review for you for the CDMC - Round 1 because birds are f-ing dangerous!
It's so sad to imagine Hermione having nightmares about Severus dying. It's pretty tragic to consider that she's falling in love with him even though she knows what his future holds and without knowing if she'll be able to change it or not.
I love the little bits of humor that you work into this. I definitely don't naturally think of Snape as being particularly humorous, so it's nice to see you bring that side of him to life. The drawing was very clever, but also a bit sad considering what Hermione is currently having nightmares about.
Aww. It's so sweet seeing him ask her to be his girlfriend. I mean I kind of already assumed they were officially dating, but clarity on both parts is always a good thing.
I'm happy to see that they're making progress towards an antivenin. I am a bit surprised that Snape doesn't question her a bit more on why she's decided to make this super complex potion. I mean I get that she's trying to gain an apprenticeship, but why an antivenin? Why not some really cool potion? I mean how many massive basilisks are just crawling around biting people?
Their tickling antics are adorable. Definitely the sort of handsy teasing that can lead to a lot more. I have a feeling that one of these days this is going to lead from one thing to another.
Thank you for a light fluffy chapter! I'm looking forward to getting back for more soon.
~Kaitlin
Hey Meg!
I'm here to leave you another review for the CDMC- Round 1 Research assignment!
Ooh. A tungsten stirring stick? I love that idea. I think it'll come in very handy and be a sweet reminder of who she was in his life. I'm curious to see what she engraves on it and how he reacts to it. I also am really curious to see what he ends up getting her for Christmas. I'm glad that they'll have the opportunity to spend the holidays together. I think it'll be a good bonding time for them without classes and a lot of other people to interrupt them.
Ugh. That flashback was gut wrenching. How difficult it must've been for him as an adult to realize she was the girl he'd been so deeply in love with. No wonder he was so bitter and angry towards everyone. It's like being haunted by a ghost. It's interesting that he handed her that potion stirrer specifically too. It must've been really weird for him.
I love the playful dynamic that is developing between the two of them. I think it's really cute how they tease and fight with each other. Seeing Hermione dangling upside down momentarily and Snape rolling around like a turtle were hilarious images. The thing that was nice is that it never felt like it wasn't in good fun.
And yes!!! Finally, a super hot snog session. I have been dying with all these little chaste kisses, so it's nice to see things get a little more intense. And who knew Snape was smooth? Lol. The way he flipped her over and started carrying on. Yowza.
I am glad that he stopped when she asked him though. Things were getting hot and heavy and I know it must've been frustrating for him to stop, but he was very sweet and respectful about it.
Poor Hermione though. Man, she needs to cut herself a break on all of the depressing thoughts. She keeps circling back to how he's going to be miserable, they'll never be together, and then he's going to die. It's a pretty depressing train of thought and one that doesn't really seem to be doing her any good. I feel like she should just try to enjoy the time she has while she has it.
I'll be back for another chapter soon! Good work as always!
~Kaitlin
Hey Meg!
I'm here to leave you another review for the CDMC- Round 1 Research assignment!
Man, this relationship really is moving at a snail's pace. I guess they don't call it a slow burn for nothing. I think you do it purposefully to torture your loyal readers. Yes. Very Slytherin of you my snake friend.
I am happy to see that Hermione is finally being honest with Amelia about her situationship. I mean Amelia is her friend after all and she'll want Hermione to be happy regardless of her personal opinions on Snape.
I think it's a good thing that Hermione had a bit of a breakdown. There is a lot going on with her and holding it all in can be so incredibly toxic. Having a good cry is a bit cathartic and the fact that Snape is there to hold her and comfort her probably made her feel significantly better. I appreciate that though it was probably alarming for him to find her bawling over an exploded potion, he still held her and allowed her to release the things that were bothering her. That's important.
And yay! Finally a kiss. I know that feeling of having balled your eyes out and then suddenly looking up and wanting to kiss the person comforting you. I thought you conveyed that feeling really well and the aftermath of the whole thing seemed very realistic.
Yes! Slughorn is the best. That whole scene was hilariously awkward. I love how nonchalant he was while Snape and Hermione were turning bright red. Perfect dad moment.
I am curious to see what happens to Snape and Hermione in the end too. I feel like when she goes back to her normal timeline it might be too creepy for them to be together again. I mean he'd be a much older adult and she'd be barely legal. That's a lot of age difference to overcome...not to mention all of the life experiences he'll have had since she left him. I just don't know how it'll work.
But maybe her sudden disappearance and reappearance and his inability to have her as his is part of what makes him so bitter and miserable as an adult. Maybe she is what shapes him into who he becomes. Kind of depressing when you think of it that way.
I'll be back for another chapter soon! Good work as always!
~Kaitlin
Hey Meg!
I'm here to leave you another review for the CDMC- Round 1 Research assignment!
Ugh. Hermione is the worst. Her response was so tempered and lackluster. Why can't she just tell him she has feelings for him? I think she's really making the whole thing worse by trying to limit the relationship. It makes things confusing for him and I could see him really getting fed up with it all. I suppose he'll be happy with the fact that she's admitted she wants more than friendship for now, but I don't think it means that she can keep giving him mixed signals when he tries to kiss her.
Remus is such a good guy. I'm glad that he's starting to come to terms with Snape and Hermione's situationship. I agree that he doesn't have to like it, but it's good that he recognizes her capability of making her own decisions.
Eh. I think I still disagree with the assessment of her and Ron's differences. I think he was light where she was heavy. He was someone who could get her to stop thinking so much and laugh. A first love doesn't always have to be a lasting one, but it's sort of sad to see her not seeing the potential value in it now.
That being said, what she is developing with Snape seems to be beneficial to both of them. Who knows if it'll be a passing fancy or something deep at this point, but it seems to be moving in a fairly serious direction considering they haven't so much as kissed yet.
Seriously? This story is going to be the death of me, I swear. I thought for sure while she was laying on the ground panting, he was going to lean down onto her and kiss the living daylights out of her. Instead, it's just a chaste, quick kiss. No butterflies. No huge fireworks. No stuff of legends. Bah.
One thing that this has me considering is his path in life. What if Hermione going back in time and then disappearing inadvertently sets him on the path that he ends up on? Like if she hadn't interested him in potions, would he have maybe become a ministry worker? Would he have worked so hard to redeem himself as an adult? I feel like maybe this is going to turn into one of those butterfly effect scenarios where no matter what she tweaks, his fate is sort of sealed.
I'll be back for another chapter soon! Good work as always!
~Kaitlin
Hey Meg!
I'm here to leave you another review for the CDMC- Round 1 Research assignment!
It's fair that Snape would've been upset with her about how she ran out when it looked like they were finally going to kiss. Hell, I'm upset on his behalf. I guess, kudos to him that he was able to shake it off and enjoy the rest of the night anyway.
Sirius is a horrible, shameless prat. I think James is right. He is losing his touch. Or at least that touch was never going to work on Hermione. Again, it really isn't their business though what happens with Snape and Hermione. I'm sure they justify it the same way as everyone else, but I am glad she held her ground and put them in their place.
Slughorn is such an opportunist. I love it. Of course, he'll help Hermione with the things she needs to brew a complex and potentially dangerous potion. It's going to make him look good, so what does anything else matter. At least he was a little more cautious in terms of the ingredients.
I sense some ghost style romance scenes over the potion brewing between Hermione and Snape. I can just see her stirring the potion and him sliding up behind her, slipping his arms down hers, and kissing her neck. Feel free to use that in future chapters. Lol
I see where Hermione is going with the Phoenix tears, but how is she going to suddenly explain to Snape why he must always have this vial of phoenix tears on him for the rest of his life just in case without blowing what happens in the future. I'm very curious to see how she handles it. Or if Fawkes will even be willing to give any for that matter.
I'm glad that Snape finally plucked up the courage to confront Hermione's feelings. She's probably been incredibly confusing to him. I mean one minute she's leaning in, basically begging him to kiss her and the next she's freaking out and running away. It would make anyone mad and it's unfair to leave him trying to decode things. I hope that she just sucks it up and gives him an honest answer. I feel like at this point, he's earned it.
I'll be back for another chapter soon! Good work as always!
~Kaitlin
Hey Meg!
I'm here to leave you another review for the CDMC- Round 1 Research assignment!
I love that Hermione is getting her pretty girl moment this time round and that Ron isn't there to be an oblivious idiot about it. I'm sure that Snape and all of the other kids attending will notice just how pretty she is and respond accordingly.
Wow. This whole setting sounds super romantic for a Slughorn party. Pumpkins floating, private tables, candles shimmering. Sounds like the perfect environment for Snape and Hermione to have their first kiss....finally...if you decide to take pity on my soul.
Oh. Awkward. I guess it would be sad for Lily to see Hermione and Snape together. And I would imagine it would definitely cause some complicated emotions for Snape as well. It's too bad he didn't decide to open up to Hermione about it a little bit, but I suppose it really isn't necessarily the best time for it.
Yep. You're going to keep torturing me. I thought we were supposed to be friends. Why is Hermione being so absurd? I mean seriously. She's already come to terms with the fact that she has feelings for him. It's obvious that he has feelings for her as well. If she didn't want to hurt him or was worried what would happen when she suddenly disappeared...well, then maybe she shouldn't have allowed things to develop the way they have in the first place. It seems a little bit late to be worried about stringing him into a situation that's going to hurt him.
And of course running out of the room suddenly is going to make everyone think he hurt her, particularly after they'd just shared a lovely dance. I could see why Lily wanted to make sure she was okay. Based on her own experience, she probably thought it was inevitable that Snape would hurt her. I get why Hermione feels prickly about the whole thing, but I do feel like she's being a bit unfair to Lily. She was definitely coming from a place of concern and compassion, not a place of malice, so to be so harsh in return seems slightly uncalled for.
I do love the little exchange about Hermione being surprised Snape could dance and the story that followed. I thought that was a nice bit of characterization. It also seems very inline with the situation in Snape's home.
I'll be back for another chapter soon! Good work as always!
~Kaitlin
Hey Meg!
I'm here to leave you another review for the CDMC- Round 1 Research assignment!
OMG MEG!! HOW COULD YOU DO THIS TO ME? HERE I THOUGHT THEY FINALLY GOT TO THE POINT OF SNOGGING AND THEN YOU RIP IT FROM MY CLUTCHES. HOW DARE YOU.
That is seriously the worst feeling to be enjoying a good dream and have someone end it by waking you up. I can understand why Hermione would've been frustrated. She's been skirting around kissing him for weeks, so it would be frustrating to have it wrecked in her dreams too.
Well, Hermione and Severus definitely aren't doing anything to quash the rumors by attending Hogsmeade together. If anything, they are just further confirming them.
Figures that they'd run into Potter and Sirius. I get why they dislike him and why he dislikes them, but I agree with Hermione. It's kind of a shame that they can't just occasionally exist in the same room without humiliating or hurting each other. It's kind of exhausting to be frank.
I really like that Hermione seems intent on making his Hogsmeade experience better than previous ones. It was good that she got him away from the altercation and to places that she knew he'd enjoy. I hope their return to the Three Broomsticks is better.
Nope. Lucius and Yaxley. I suppose this was inevitable as Snape is on the verge of becoming a Death Eater, but it's sort of easy to forget when he's over there turning into a complete marshmallow for Hermione. I wonder what they needed to discuss with him.
Okay. I have one bone to pick. At the end she talks about the feelings she's having being ones she's never had before. I can get over her moving on from Ron because it's logical and makes sense, but I can't imagine her not having loved him or felt anything for him. After everything they'd been through, I think there would definitely be deep feelings there.
That last scene was very sweet though. For a boy who has been as neglected, abused, and bullied as Severus has, I think it's a big deal to finally receive unconditional kindness, sympathy, and understanding. I can see why he's falling for her.
Also, I know Hermione couldn't do anything, but I wish she would've hexed Lucius and Yaxley to high hell. Gosh. They're such creeps. You really captured that feeling well.
I'll be back for another chapter soon! Good work as always!
~Kaitlin
Hey Meg!
I'm here to leave you another review for the CDMC- Round 1 Research assignment!
Welp. News is out and of course the fact that Severus Snape has a date has caused a big scandal. And Hermione can deny it all she wants, but let's be one hundred percent honest. Everyone knows it's a date. Even she knows it's a date deep down, which is why she keeps getting so defensive about it. She might as well just own up and call it what it is.
I can definitely see how she might be annoyed by everyone trying to fill her in on what happened between Snape and Lily. She's right too. It really isn't anyone else's business besides theirs. It's nice that they all care enough about her to try and watch out for her well-being, but they're all going about it in the wrong way. You know how it goes. The more everyone tells you not to see someone, the more you want to see someone. That whole forbidden fruit sort of thing.
It's funny that Hermione is so popular in this timeline when you consider how wildly unpopular she was as a child in her own timeline. Here everyone seems to be fighting for her time and attention. I think she really should try and make a bit of time for her housemates and friends though. I get that because she's developing feelings for Snape she wants to spend every waking moment with him, but I always think it's a really bad policy to start ditching friends. Plus, her housemates all seem like such lovely people...even if it is like being friends with ghosts for her.
Ugh. Silly move Hermione. The moment she answered Truth, I knew what was coming. The whole school is discussing rumors of them dating and she didn't think they'd be asking her about what was going on. I do think if she was going to try and play it cool, causing a huge scene the way she did was the wrong move. If anything, she's just confirmed for everyone that there is indeed something saucy going on.
At least at the end of the chapter she finally allows herself to accept that she has feelings for him. Now, maybe I'll finally get some Snape/Hermione action. Gosh, I feel so dirty for even typing that. LOL.
I'll be back for another chapter soon! Good work as always!
~Kaitlin
Hey Meg!
I'm here to leave you another review for the CDMC- Round 1 Research assignment!
Amelia is relentless and I'm glad for it. Hermione really needs to come to terms with all of these feelings that she's feeling. Butterflies. Breathlessness. Hearts skipping a beat. Uncontrollable smiles. She is so ridiculously fancying Snape and yet, she's still trying to deny it. I get her conflicted feelings because of Ron and all that, but technically, Ron doesn't even exist in this particular timeline, so she should just let loose and enjoy what is inevitable at this point.
Did Snape really just ask Hermione to skive off of class? What is this madness? AND DID SHE SERIOUSLY SAY YES???! HERMIONE GRANGER IS SKIIVING OFF OF CLASS!! Oooh. Homegirl has it so bad for him.
When they made it to the boat house, I was really hoping for a "We could be killed or worse, expelled," line from her, but I suppose it wouldn't fit entirely in this scenario. I do wonder what Snape is planning though. Does he think he's going to spend the morning snogging Hermione senseless? Somehow, I don't think she'd mind if he was.
The water fight was very sweet and I laughed a fair bit imagining them chasing each other around and splashing water about.
Ugh. WHY DO YOU TEASE ME LIKE THIS MEG?! She should've just kissed him. Timelines and not yet born boyfriends be damned. The island sounds super romantic though and don't think I missed the way he's trying to initiate physical contact with her. Severus Snape is indeed putting the moves on one Hermione Granger.
That story about how the Marauders trapped Snape on a boat is terrible. I agree with Hermione. I think the punishment definitely should've been more severe. They could've caused him to drown or imagine if Dumbledore hadn't found him as quickly as he had. He could've been out there for days. That's horrifying.
Ugh. Hermione. JUST. ACCEPT. THAT. ITS. A. DATE. I don't know why she's so insistent on denying what's happening here.
I was wondering when Lily might show back up. It is a bit awkward that she was meddling in someone else's business, but as Hermione notes, it makes sense considering the history. I think she just wanted to make sure Hermione didn't get hurt the same way she did.
I'll be back for another chapter soon! Good work as always!
~Kaitlin
Hey Meg!
I'm here to leave you another review for the CDMC- Round 1 Research assignment!
I like that you've made Dumbledore a little more tender and thoughtful about what Hermione might be going through than he ever seemed in canon. It is a lot to ask basically a child to go back years into the past and fix the errors of her predecessors. I'm glad he recognizes that.
And then there's the switch back to that infuriating character that we see in canon. Everything is vague promises and cloaked in mystery. That is very much like him to leave her feeling less certain than when she arrived.
Aww. Now a relationship really is starting to form between Hermione and Severus. There's no way he'd be waiting for her to walk her to class if he wasn't interested. Her reaction says all that needs to be said about it too. Obviously, she's fallen for him as well.
I can definitely understand why Amelia is kind of put off by the whole thing. I myself feel similarly. Having only known Snape as a grouchy, bitter, chip on his shoulder angry person, it's hard to envision this softer, more sensitive version of him. With Lily, his feelings were more possessive and jealous, so seeing him be gentle and reasonable with Hermione is really a weird feeling.
Subtle Hermione. The Marauders are debating becoming Animagi, so she starts a mini-debate within earshot to try and convince them. Seriously, did anything happen without her or is it just that she's influenced literally everything in the timeline? Edgar's response about sneaking into the girls' loos was quite amusing though.
Oooh. Hermione has now challenged Snape. I feel like this could go badly if he doesn't succeed. He doesn't like being made to look a fool...and this could do just that. It's kind of like she's setting him up for failure to prove a point.
Well, that went a bit better than I'd expected, to be honest. Snape didn't shut Hermione down. She did manage to help him....and oddly, he brought food and butterbeer. He is so absolutely head over heels for it...and even though she's in denial, clearly, she is too.
I'll be back for another chapter soon! Good work as always!
~Kaitlin
Hey Meg!
I'm here to leave you a review for the CDMC- Round 1 Research assignment! I know it's been awhile since I've dropped by to leave a review, but I'm planning to make up for it now. So with that, let's get started...
Oooh. Snape and Hermione have a study date....that Snape initiated. This is going to be interesting indeed.
I thought you did a good job of allowing us to see a little bit of vulnerability in Snape when he asks Hermione why she doesn't fancy Sirius the way all of the other girls do. You can tell he's starting to develop feelings for her and he wants to make sure he isn't going to get absolutely destroyed by her suddenly wanting one of the Marauders instead. It was definitely smart on her part to tell him what he wanted to hear. She's right that it'll help him build up trust in her in the long run.
Yay! Success. He's asked her to study with him again the next night. I sense a pattern here. It's hilarious that his "that wasn't as bad as I expected" commentary is as close as it gets to a compliment from him. He really can be such a curmudgeon.
Of course, the Marauders have to come meddle in her business. What's it to Sirius if she was studying with Snape or not? I am glad she stood up to him, although I do think she was perhaps a bit unfair. That said, the optics were certainly good and knowing that Snape saw it all is likely to benefit her in the long run.
It is sweet to see how Hermione and Snape's relationship is developing. Ick. Did I really just say that? Lol. I can tell that he's finally starting to let his guard down around her. I think that's obviously important to the success of her mission. You can see little cracks forming in his armour though.
Oh dear. Dumbledore is always doomed to ruin things when they're just starting to work well. I guess the fact that Hermione has to return eventually to her own timeline is inevitable, but can't they just be happy for a while. It's almost as if he senses her getting attached and wants to remind her that she'll only end up hurt.
Clearly, since there are so many more chapters to go, she isn't going anywhere for a fair bit. I assume there will be quite a bit more romance to come before then as well. I do wonder how they will eventually explain her disappearance away.
I'll be back for another chapter soon!
~Kaitlin
MEG!!! HAPPY HOLIDAYS, MY LOVE!!!
I thought this was a good occasion to read on a little bit on SSS... and I'm so happy I did because this chapter was just delightful! <3
Seeing Hermione finally deciding to take the risk and admit she has feelings for Severus was already incredibly exciting! I find it still sort of hard to believe, but also I've been looking forward to it for so long! And it makes me so happy! :D
Remus!!! Isn't he the most adorable creature in the world? (Yes, I'm biased... I'm still right... :P) Of course he would immediately notice the unusual subject Hermione was reading about, and it would make him immediately suspicious... he is way too perceptive... (still, it could've been worse... it could've been James and/or Sirius who caught Hermione reading about time-travel... I bet they would be much more pushy...) His reaction when Hermione mentioned Amelia was just adorable! He's so sweet! <3 <3 <3 And I loved how he was accepting of Hermione's relationship with Severus! That's very like him, being happy for his friend even if he can't really understand their choice! He's so precious, I love him so much! <3
The fact that Hermione and Severus have their secret island where they can be alone together is just so romantic... the island itself sounds so beautiful (although I probably wouldn't be much of a fan of the cold... but I guess it would be worth it?) It was such a sweet scene, with them just leaning onto each other... and then the tickling!!! I love it!!! It is hard to imagine Severus in such a light, but I love it! I love seeing him so happy! :D
And... oh, my Merlin! They kissed!!! I know it was just a quick thing, but it was still so wonderful to see after so long... and of course Severus would immediately think that he'd ruined everything... :P And of course Hermione wouldn't mind at all! I love that at this point she's just stopped overthinking and is accepting whatever is coming! Everything has really changed so much and I'm so curious to see how things will move on from there!
If Severus Snape died, Hermione was positive that a part of her would as well. And she would be damned before she'd allow that to happen. I'm sure I've told you before, but you have the best closing lines! And this one was just perfect! I really hope everything will work out in the end!
Wonderful work as always! I'll be back!
Snowball hug and happy holidays again!
Chiara
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Oh no, the detail about her and Ron's first - and only - kiss! </3
I love how you contrast Hermione's raw emotional side with her more rational side, highlighting both her vulnerability and strength. Like, it's a very disorienting experience she's fallen into, but she is there on a mission. And ahh, there's my answer - she's there to focus on "correcting" only Snape‘s future. T-T I like that Hermione thinks that maybe she wouldn't even exist if she changed anything else - which is sad, but indeed perhaps that constellation of events could have been what brought Neville, Luna, Ginny, etc. into the world, and the slightest variation would nullify any one (or all!) of their existences.
I also like her reasons for choosing Ravenclaw - to avoid Harry's Parents & Co so that she's not tempted to tell them anything, and also so Snape might be more accepting of her help. Also like that she keeps the time traveling book as a sort of guide - feels like it'll become invaluable later. Great second chapter!
I return for more SSS!
Ah, she went back to the Marauders era - the fun begins! Er, fun for the reader, as poor Hermione is far from comfortable at the moment, ha ha. I can only imagine how alone she must feel - she’s not only separated from her friends but not even in a time period where they exist yet! And still Dumbledore is always a step ahead, having her pose as his niece.
It’s very Hermione of her to immediately understand the gravity of the situation, and then immediately understand the role she has to play to neutralise a big freak out- knowledge comes before emotion, in a way. I like the characterisation of Madam Pomfrey, all business and reluctantly letting her go off with Dumbledore.
Oh, I also like how you contrast Hermione’s experience of walking through Hogwarts now vs her experience in the future. Like, yes, she’s traveled back, but she’s still carrying the trauma of having to survive the battle that destroyed her beloved school - her second home - and left many people she knew dead. T-T
“The students who would be arriving the next evening had known no war. They only knew the beginnings of war. Whispers. Rumors.” - What a weird feeling - knowing what happens in the future when you’re in a time where people are only dimly aware of the scope of things, oblivious to how much the bad things will exacerbate and become the experiences you lived through. I think a very interesting question that can crop up in a time travel narrative is whether or not an atrocity should be stopped - there’s so many arguments for either side - so I’m anticipating to see if Hermione will limit herself to just saving Snape specifically. Will she contemplate doing other things to influence her future?
Oh no, the detail about her and Ron’s first - and only - kiss!
Hi! I’ve been meaning to get into this story for a long time, having seen it before on HPFF and noticing that it’s been so praised (congratulations!) Plus, the idea of Hermione going back in time to, er, save Severus Snape (ha ha) is hugely intriguing. I’ve never given much thought to the Hermione/Snape pairing, nor have I ever felt particularly passionate about the Hermione/Ron ship (I have, however, very recently discovered that I’m something of a latent Dramione enthusiast). But after this first chapter I’m already drawn in, and I foresee myself jumping on this ship.
I love how you’ve taken the canon events and essentially grafted your story onto them - this feels like a natural continuation of JKR’s tale, which makes it incredibly easy to fall into. I love the idea that Dumbledore had another plan set aside for after the Battle; that he so thoroughly thought out what would happen beyond his death that he secreted a Time Turner and left instructions. That’s very on-brand for him. This setup, for me, recalls “Prisoner of Azkaban” when Dumbledore (in a similarly sly manner) intended Hermione to use the same device to save Buckbeak from execution. So, yeah, it’s just really plausible. I also love that Hermione is having her own adventure independent of Ron and Harry, that we’ll see how she operates on her own and we’ll get intimate with her thoughts and feelings (I suspect there will be soooo many feelings when Snape enters).
Lastly I find the idea behind this story, of going back in time to save Snape from his ultimate fate, so compelling - though I’m sure it would be with any character, as the idea of defying fate (or time travel in general, really) is so innately engaging. There’s the possibility of influencing the course of history, which is huuuge. I mean, this is such a sticky thing - how will she carry this plan out? Will she come into contact with Harry’s parents? Will she “mess” anything up? How will she interact with her former (future?) professor now that they’re both the same age and in equal positions of power? Will Hermione consider any of the friction they had when she was his student, or does the realization that he’s essentially a good guy dispel her problems with him? I do believe that Hermione tries to see the best in everyone, and from her interior thoughts, she seems willing to do that with Snape.
UGH there is so much to consider - I repeat, this is so stickyyy - and I’m excited to dig into it!
Couldn't resist more SSS, could I? :P
Hello, Meg, my love! Here for our swap! <3
Oh, my! OH, MY! Did he really just ask? And of course now she can't run away... why did you break the chapter there? Don't you know how much I hate cliffhangers?!?
But let's start from the beginning...
Typical Hermione, coming up with a plan B... and a very clever one, too, it seems... I do wonder if she'll manage to brew the antivenom and if it will actually save Severus in the end? I'm quite curious about how this all is going to end, honestly... that's part of the fascination of time-travel fics, I guess... you never really know how much history can be changed... :P
Ah, James and Sirius... my favourite, although irritating, mischief-makers! Of course they would try to dissuade Hermione from frequenting Snape... we all know their thoughts about him... and we all know how idiotic they can be, so... I liked Hermione's thoughts about them, btw. Especially about James. It must be so hard for her seeing Harry's features on him... and honestly, James might have many flaws, but deep inside he's a sweet boy. You really can't dislike him... and yes, his loyalty to his friends is commendable! Although did you really have to go and make me sad with Peter's betrayal? Rude! (Sorry for all the blabbering, btw... you know how I am about the Marauders...)
Ah, Slughorn, Slughorn... it is way too easy to get him do whatever you want if you are talented enough, isn't it? I appreciated that he was cautious about the ingredients at least... I guess he would be at least a little bit suspicious after everything that happened with a certain Slytherin student by the name of Tom Riddle... but still, Hermione got what she needed, and that seems good. Although I'm still not sure how her plan will work out.
And then Dumbledore! Have I ever told you how good you are at writing Dumbledore? It's so hard to get his voice right and yet you nail him every time! It was a fun way to ask if he had Fawkes already. :P And great idea to use phoenix tears, too... well, I guess Hermione is the brightest witch of her age for a reason... :P
And finally, the last scene... and... OH, MY!!! (Did I already say that? I'm quite sure I did...) We are really at a turning point in their relationship, and I'm excited and a bit anxious about what will happen next, how she'll answer and what effect it will have on their relationship! Also, the way Severus addressed the topic, his reluctance and everything... how cute!!! <3 (I just called Severus Snape cute... hope you are proud of yourself... but maybe I already did so earlier in the story, I don't remember... I mean, he is cute... and I'm blabbering again...)
Wonderful, wonderful chapter! You are the best and I adore you! I will hopefully be back soon! <3 <3 <3
Lots of love and snowball hug,
Chiara
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