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Oh no, I’m beginning to feel the effects of sleeplessness kick in, so many apologies for a possibly incoherent review.
I should start with how much I loved this chapter! It covered some important things and not to mention there was some hilarious Snape awkward shuffling and later on some more awkward Snape shuffling as he hightailed it out of that classroom.
First things first! I did appreciate that Hermione countered Remus’s point with the fact that Sirius is a terrible person as a teenager, because I agree. *punches Sirius* Bullying is terrible and has horrific long-term effects on a child, and it’s just really depressing to read about coming from James and Sirius. However, I think Hermione leaned too far in her defense of Snape because, I mean. No one Imperiused him into learning the Dark Arts. That interest was all his own doing, and that was the spell that landed Hermione in the Hospital Wing, so Snape definitely did have a hand in all that.
Also I actually snorted aloud when Snape is all like “I don’t know” when Hermione asks him why he’s there because, well, I KNOW. WE ALL KNOW. Stop deluding yourself, Snape, you kind of like Hermione and feel bad that you put her in the Hospital Wing, which you totally should feel bad for. I’m very glad that he performed the healing spell, otherwise I would still be very mad at him.
But then he gets all embarrassed? And then proceeds to ignore Hermione for like forever?? And now practically sprints out of whichever place Hermione goes to??? COWARD. YOU DON’T DESERVE HER.
Though that detention scene is hilarious. I love how they’re just awkwardly scrubbing, and afterwards, their awkwardness is so awkwardness that even Slughorn notices the awkward.
I am so sorry for this review, I really should’ve waited until morning to type this, but I was too excited.
ANYWAY please know I just loved this chapter a lot! And I will be back to read more tomorrow because I am veryyy sleepy right now. Good night!
~Eva
I am actually so delighted with the way you are handling Snape’s character right now. At the beginning of this chapter, when Hermione was crying (the poor girl, I just wanted to hug her and give her a shoulder) and Snape was actually kind of acting decent, I got (very irrationally) excited, thinking that Snape was getting better. However, I am very glad that you continued to show how easily Snape could turn nasty towards Hermione, even though she wasn’t the one who did anything wrong, because she’s only known him two days, and a person can’t change so quickly in two days. (And I really should’ve known better haha. *slaps self*)
(Though that brief moment when he was civil towards her was extremely fun to read.)
That being said, on how much I appreciate that you’re consistent with Snape’s characterization, I would still like to write a letter to Snape. It would go something like this:
DEAR SNAPE,
YOU ARE AN ARSEHOLE.
SINCERELY, EVA
Because who does he think he is, talking to Hermione like that, huh?? Because Hermione is amazing and wonderful and the epitome of a kind and brave soul (she is literally abandoning her life to save Snape, the least he could do is show her some respect, even if he doesn’t actually know what she’s there for haha) and Snape just is not allowed to say such horrible things towards her. It’s pretty much against the law. And being embarrassed about being protected by a girl is, uh, not good, Snape. Tsk, tsk.
Of course, bullying is actually disgusting, so once again I would like to request punching Sirius Black in the face. And also James, a little bit, though he made up for it some by pulling Sirius back near the end.
Most importantly, though, I’m upset because the idiocy of these boys (started by James and Sirius, and then escalated by Snape with his lack of anger management skills) got Hermione injured. Was it one of Snape’s spells? He shot a flesh-cutting thing at James by the Black Lake in Snape’s Worst Memory. Ughhh I hate what James and Sirius did to Snape, but also it’s no excuse for how Snape keeps treating Hermione. It’s just an endless repeat of what he did to Lily, except Hermione actually has to bear it because she doesn’t really have much of a choice. Though, she does seem to be respecting him a little bit? I hope she doesn’t get too ahead of herself, because he hasn’t exactly proven to be consistently kind just yet.
That last scene, though, where he’s carrying her to the Hospital Wing? Really sweet. I really wonder what spell Snape was using there, and how the lulling incantation makes it work! (I don’t actually expect an answer in the following chapters, I’m just talking to myself.)
Ahhh I loved this chapter! I’m going directly to the next one now because I lack the self-control tonight haha.
~Eva
I’m only going to review one chapter today, because I’m too sleepy. :(
Onto the story!
Oh my goodness, does this mean that Hermione is meant to meddle? I certainly hope so, because then I can stop feeling stressed out that she’s going to irreversibly damage the future haha. Also, I love that she goes and researches when she’s unable to sleep. It’s such a Hermione thing to do.
That scene with Remus was so heartbreaking. You wrote it really well, in talking about how Hermione grieves even as he’s right there in front of her. Everything that Remus says just makes me want to give him a great big hug because, I mean. He’s so embarrassed that he has to tell her she broke the rules. That’s just adorable, and a strange sort of kindness, and I love it. ALSO WHEN HE’S EXCITED ABOUT AMELIA?? So cute. His awkwardness in asking Hermione about her was just so well done, I’m getting excited all over again typing this out.
You know what I’m super worried about? That Hermione wasn’t actually supposed to meddle. I have a terrible feeling that by getting both Remus and Amelia’s hopes up, something’s going to happen and they’re going to both be so disappointed and heartbroken that they’ll blame Hermione in some way. I think the most realistic situation is that Remus changes his mind on asking Amelia out, because he’s a werewolf with that whole “who would love a werewolf” attitude he’s got going on. And then Amelia’s really sad. And then Hermione’s really embarrassed that she read the whole situation wrong.
Please don’t let that happen. I just want Remus and Amelia to end up together. *prays*
When they get to class later, I was hoping for her to talk to Snape (and it looked like he was going to, for a second!), but of course Edgar GETS IN THE WAY. Gosh darn it, Edgar.
Also, Rita Skeeter is so in-character that I simultaneously want to laugh and also toss her in the Black Lake. I’ve forgotten how completely infuriating she was in Goblet of Fire; she’s just so nosy and rude and ridiculous, which you got perfectly here. Hermione’s response in French to her was the most hilarious thing ever. I’m so relieved that she knows French. I was getting really stressed out about that. (I get very easily stressed out while reading fics haha.)
Professor Crabtree sounds like a darling. I would probably give a kidney to be in his class, because he just seems like such a fun teacher.
I really love how Hermione has to pretend not to know how to do certain types of spells, in order to keep her cover. Hopefully the other students won’t be too jealous of her? I don’t want her to lose friends or anything. ALSO AHHH SNAPE SEEMS IMPRESSED?? I don’t know how to feel about that! Is that a good thing or bad thing that Snape is only noticing her after she demonstrates a strong magical ability?
I really want to read and review the next chapter, but I need to sleep. :(
I loved this chapter, though!
~Eva
Just this one more chapter for today, because it’s 2:31 a.m. as I’m typing this, and I really need to learn how to sleep properly haha.
So I kept forgetting to mention this in the previous reviews, but I love your descriptions. Whenever Hermione’s on her own, and just thinking, you write the loveliest descriptions of her settings, and it really helps to solidify the time and place. That paragraph describing the Black Lake in the beginning was absolutely magical-sounding.
And I said last review that I would be so happy to have an entire chapter dedicated to Hermione and Snape interactions, but I was ridiculously happy anyway, even with just half a chapter of Hermione and Snape content. (Half a chapter is already a lot, what am I even saying.) The entire Potions scene was absolutely amazing, and made for quite a mind-twisting thought process, as well. I would first like to state that in the books, Slughorn, as a human being, fundamentally annoys me. I think you emulated that well here, haha. He’s vaguely patronizing to students he’s unfamiliar with, and as soon as they perform extraordinarily, he changes his tune. I thought you wrote that wonderfully.
Most importantly, though, I LOVE TIME TRAVEL STUFF. Like, did Hermione teach Snape the crush-to-get-more-juice method, which is why he wrote it in his book, which is how Harry learned it, which is how Hermione learned it, which is how Snape learned it?? WHAT. Hermione never would’ve learned it if Snape hadn’t written that down in his book, but also Snape never would’ve learned it if Hermione hadn’t told him. My mind is blown. (Is this what they call a paradox? Idk. I’m bad at words.) You set up such a cool scenario, and I love love love it!
Snape begrudgingly conceding that Hermione is better than him at Potions (though she used his methods haha) is the best thing ever.
And at dinner! (Aside from that nauseating display from Rita Skeeter and Gilderoy Lockhart, of course.) I love how you always include little details of how other characters are acting, especially the Marauders. It really adds a lot to their character, to have their little dumb moments noticed by Hermione haha. And that stare between Hermione and Snape?? It was strangely hot. I’m feeling very confused. Yep, can’t wait for further character growth from our resident future Death Eater. (I can’t figure out how to write that without it sounding sarcastic, so just please know I am genuinely excited for Snape’s arc, and I’m not being ironic.)
I think I’m always going to love Amelia and Remus. They’re really adorable together. It’s just really sad what happens to both of them. When Hermione was just sitting there, grieving Remus while the teenaged Remus was right there, I was feeling so so sad omg. Remus was one of my favorite characters. Way to stab me in the heart. :(
Literally every time Sirius shows up I want to punch him in the face.
Hermione’s musings at the end are super interesting. I’m wondering what it’ll mean in the long run. Hmmm.
Another brilliant chapter! <3
~Eva
AHHHH SO MANY GREAT THINGS HAPPENED THIS CHAPTER.
Okay, at this point in the story, I do harbor a general dislike of Snape’s attitude. I can understand where it comes from, but it doesn’t mean he has a right to it. And plus, I love Hermione too much to see her insulted by Snape yet again (she really got the brunt of it in both worlds, didn’t she?) so I don’t feel too favorable towards him right now.
That being said, everything he’s said so far has made me want to laugh, because he’s actually so grumpy and grouchy and anti-social, and were it not for his exploits into the Dark Arts and general Death Eater activities, I would find him so relatable. Every time he just sort of stares deadpan at Hermione, like he’s just 200% unimpressed with her attempts at talking to him, I just want to snort. It makes Hermione’s life much harder, but it’s honestly hilarious. Also, Snape being suspicious of Hermione working with Sirius really seems to be a logical conclusion to jump to, from his perspective. You write these two so well, ugh I’m in love with their characterizations.
And I love the Sirius presented to us in the novels, but your teenaged version of him really deserves to be knocked down a couple of pegs. WHEN A GIRL SAYS NO, SHE MEANS NO. *smacks him upside the head*
Hahaha I love that Hermione ships Amelia and Remus but doesn’t want to meddle in case she completely destroys the timeline that comes afterwards. Speaking of which, I wonder how this story is going to end? I don’t see any way this is going to be a happy ending, because she has to return to her own world at some point, right? But on the off-chance that it is a happy ending... I’m preparing to celebrate. Just in case.
Oh my goodness, I’ve just loved every single glimpse you’ve given us of the people from the Marauders era. Seeing how idiotic James and Sirius are has been a lot of fun (though at this point, they definitely don’t seem like they’ve matured at all, no matter what Remus tries to say to Lily haha), and I’m always going to love Remus, and I actually felt the comforting presence that Lily was to Hermione. I want to be Lily’s friend tbh. She sounds cool. I wonder if Hermione’s going to hang out with her at all.
NEXT CHAPTER IS A LESSON WITH SNAPE. I’m going to be so happy if the entire chapter is dedicated to the lesson.
Wonderful chapter! <3
~Eva
It’s high time for me to finish reading this, so thus begins my next reviewing project. (I was going back and looking through the chapter reviews to see where I left off, and omg my old reviews were so cute and tiny. Well, never fear, Essayist Eva is here, and I am going to ramble so much you’ll want nothing more than to shut me up.)
Here we go!
To start, I’m really sad because I can’t see the CIs made by Kaitlin. I wish Photobucket links still worked, because there were a number of beautiful graphics made by TDA artists that are lost now.
Anyway, onto the story. I was actually wiggling my foot in excitement while I was reading this, because not only did we get a clearer look into Hermione’s head (and her absolutely wonderful snark!) but we got to meet everyone! And I am so impressed with how you portrayed the teenaged versions of the famed adults we know from the novels; they obviously still share the characteristics of their adult versions, but they also do act more teenager-like. I was absolutely shocked when Rita Skeeter and Gilderoy Lockhart were revealed to be dating, but the more I thought about it, the more it made sense. (Someone has to go and write a twisted romance fic about the two of them lmao. Deceiving the world one story at a time.)
I should probably go in order. So from the very beginning, I do like how you didn’t shy away from showing how James and Sirius bully Severus. I definitely don’t think it’s an excuse for Severus to be joining the bigoted Death Eater cult, of course, but it’s a huge flaw within teenaged James and Sirius, and I think it’s important to consider that in their overall character.
OKAY BUT LET’S TALK ABOUT HOW IN-CHARACTER HERMIONE AND SNAPE’S INTERACTIONS WERE. I swear, if teenaged Snape ever had a chance to speak with Hermione, this is exactly how it would go down. His rudeness and bitterness towards people who try to help him after a humiliating experience is well-documented (like what happened with Lily by the Black Lake), so I thought it was great that you wrote him like this. I’m so excited to see how his relationship with Hermione grows and improves over time. Right now, he seems to, uh, generally dislike her, but I’m sure that’ll change. He seems to find her pretty at least (or, at least, that’s how I’m choosing to interpret his weird jealousy-like actions after Sirius flirted with her).
Hermione’s baffled snarks after each failed attempt at interacting with Snape in a civilized manner were hilarious. She’s so funny. I could listen to her inner thoughts all day. Especially that scene when Dumbledore was announcing her as his niece! I was smiling so hard; her embarrassment was absolutely adorable.
Sirius...needs to calm down. Like, back off, buddy.
I really appreciate your introductions to each of the Ravenclaws. Like I said earlier, I think it’s amazing how you handled their characterizations. And I absolutely adore Amelia Bones, and she’s so sweet, kind, and thoughtful (like, she condemns James and Sirius for bullying Snape, while continuing to criticize Snape for his decisions to work with the Dark Arts), and it hurts me that she’s going to die a brutal death later. I don’t know, I feel like she alluded to a super interesting point, like, she does seem to be putting the blame on Snape for making his choice, and I respect that. Most of all, right now, I’m so curious to see how Hermione works to bring him away from that dangerous edge.
This was such a riveting chapter! <3
~Eva
Hey, Meg!
Oh, my Merlin, I'm so behind with this, I'm so bad... but I'm here now with a snowball (hug) for you! ;)
Ahahah! Hogwarts will always be the same in that aspect, news always travel fast, especially when it's about teenage romance gossip... :P Poor Hermione, though... that must be mortifying...
But I'm so glad she's finally accepted that she has feelings for Severus! It was about time! (okay, I'm jumping up and down... can't really write ordered reviews... anyway...)
Hermione's denial is so good and so real, even if a tiny bit annoying. Then, again, everyone trying to judge her relationship with him and lecturing her is so annoying too... I do understand they worry for her, but honestly! Then, again, I would probably be that person as well (?) Severus isn't really the person you would want to see a friend with (seeing it from an external perspective)
And btw, Remus is the cutest (yes, I'm biased, I know...) I love that he was so embarrassed when he brought up the subject, and I loved that he showed his concern but in the end backed off and apologized, it's definitely like him.
Oh, my Merlin! The tension between Hermione and Severus when he pulled back her hair... that was so intense and so adorable! I love those two! Like, Siriusly! And Severus getting all jealous when she mentioned being cornered by Otto and Edgar? Aww, if that isn't sweet, I don't know what is... :P
A good Truth or Dare game! Those are always funny! :) But poor Hermione, they are being rather cruel... and I really, really hate Rita! Guess it served for her to finally admit her feelings, but it's still not funny to be subjected to that... then, again, that's how teenage work, I suppose... :P
I'm really curious about what will happen now... will she follow her heart? And if she does, where will that lead her? So many questions, I love that you left the chapter in a sort of cliffhanger, too...
This was so great, and I will hopefully be back soon!
Love you,
Chiara
I'm so proud of Hermione, covering all her bases! It's smart of her to think of disguising herself to look different so that the characters won't remember her once they're older.
I thought the Hogsmeade scene was really well done, between Hermione's conflicting feelings about Rosmerta (though I get the feeling that's going to disappear in a little while as she falls for Snape) and her run-in with the two infamous Purebloods. I keep forgetting that Hermione has already saved the Wizarding World, and that she still has her scars and her trauma from the situation. Seeing a young, healthy Bellatrix Lestrange must have been quite scarring.
And we also get to meet the Marauders, Lily, and Snape! I see their dynamic is as recognizable as ever, with the Marauders bullying Snape and Lily coming in to defend the victim (until she realized it was Snape). I've always been uncomfortable with the way the Marauders' bullying was brushed over in the books, and based on the way you wrote this, I don't think you're going to do the same. I really appreciate the attention to detail.
As I was reading this chapter, my feet were wiggling, waiting for Hermione to prepare to meet Snape, haha. I can't imagine what their first meeting will be like. Will their relationship initially start off like Draco and Hermione, with a bitter sort of prejudiced hate? Or will she immediately find Snape to be a better soul than everyone had thought? SO CURIOUS.
One thing I was worrying about for Hermione is how she's going to get back to her regular time. If I remember the books correctly, they never did anything special to return back, they just lived through the hours as an extended part of their life. So I'm excited to see what your headcanons are on the matter! I always love it when Harry Potter fanfics expand on the original magic system.
This chapter is setting things up for the rest of the story, so a lot of details were introduced. I never expected that Dumbledore himself would claim Hermione as his niece! That was a unique touch. Additionally, I was quite happy when Hermione chose Ravenclaw as her temporary house, just because I really believe that she would have fit incredibly well in Ravenclaw. I hope we get to meet a few of her housemates!
The premise of this story is so interesting! I've never come across a fanfiction with the Hermione/Snape ship before, so reading a story like this one will be a first-time experience for me. Since I'm going to be reading (and hopefully reviewing) each chapter separately, and since you've already written a large amount, most of what I say will probably be fairly useless, haha.
My first thought is how different seeing young Snape from Hermione's perspective will be. From the first chapter here, I can already tell that she's sympathetic towards him, and maybe this is what will help guide Snape later in the end. Personally, because I view Adult Snape as a generally awful human being who did end up acting for the greater good in the end, reading about Young Snape, before he's fully grown and entirely responsible for his own decisions, will be fascinating.
I'm excited to see where this story goes!
Hello Meg! :D
Nosy housemates are the bane of my shipping existence! The majority of my is perfectly okay with the beautiful slow burn that's happening here (they should be able to take their physical relationship as slow as they like) and then the smaller part of me is dying for it! However, that part also realizes that you probably know what you're doing with your own characters and the slow burn is good for me anyway.
I love that Hermione's the only one who gets to see him past his grumpy-face...reputations and all that. Slughorn's remarks on their relationship would make me uncomfortable too, haha--but I'm totally okay if they have too much fun.
Uhoh, serious talks with Dumbledore. Yes, I mean, he absolutely does have a point, she's certainly affecting the past in a way that was not intended, but, honestly, what better way to show Severus Snape his worth than by loving him? Understandably, Hermione's upset by the prospect of having to leave soon, too, and I'm fearful of what it will do to Severus. And going home is SO SOON! Oh my goodness, I'm so excited and worried about what's to come!!
-Rumpels
LOOK MEG IT'S FINALLY A NEW REVIEW! See how shiny!?
Ahaha! I'm dying picturing Severus in place of the third year with Dumbledore :D :D Too funny. Also, how amazingly sweet is it that he's just looking at her. Goodness, all my FEELS!
A Witch from Lickfold, eh? Haha! And yaaaaay! I heartily agree that Severus and Hermione should sneak away from the festivities to have some snogging time in the Room of Requirement. In fact, I encourage it. They're just so amazingly cute! And oh-ho-ho, a bed in the RoR? I've sat here typing and deleting comments, but nothing's really coming out appropriately so, we'll move on... :D
I love Hermione's reasoning that he's somehow hiding himself away with this too-big clothes. They're so freaking amazingly sweet --- I love it so much! And it's completely understandable that she isn't quite ready to take that next step because cuddles and kisses are amaaaaazzzzing right now!
And I love how the tides totally switched when it was finally time to get into bed. I think that maybe, subconsciously, Hermione's confidence might've picked up because Severus was suddenly so nervous! It's adorable! But enough psychoanalyzing your characters because there's a little bit of sexy time going on! (Excuse me, it's reallllyy late and I'm losing it :P). I adore how they're both so nervous! It makes sense that being in a bed together would make things seem different.
She would have done it? Wwooooooah! This is what everyone has been waiting for! ;)
Eeee, they're so cute together!
I love it, I love it, I love it!
-Rumpels
So. Many. Xfers. Must finish for space for new reviews!
While I'm getting caught up on transferring reviews to HPFT, I'm going to be reviewing here so I don't get confused (and I'll still be double-posting the comments after, anyway).
Anyway. CHRISTMAS! You captured the specific type of quiet really well -- it's the same type of quiet that Rumpel hates 0.0! Ah, yes, I'd expect something like Christmas to send Hermione into a fit of nostalgia. Poor Hermione :( . That mood ring sounds GORGEOUS! Best friends always give the best gifts! And she finally gets the Pheonix Tears, too! Thank goodness -- hopefully that will work out nicely in her antivenom.
And he still makes her coffee for her. I have this headcanon now with this fic that someday when she returns to the future, they'll grow old together and every day he'll be making her coffee. <3 :D I'm also super excited to see what Severus got her -- like STOKED. He's all nervous so it's gotta be good!
Oh yes, the Room of Requirement. Excellent place to escape other people! And a perfect place that self-decorates to make a fantabulous Christmas! (KISSES! :D ) OMIGOSH he gave her beautiful combs that belonged to his grandmother -- it's so personal and perfect <3! :D *squeeee* He told his mom about her?! OMIGOD the FEELS! AND THE KISSING! AND THE I LOVE YOU! OMGIOD MEG I LOVE YOU TOO! :D :D Hahahah! Now I can squee happily for the rest of the night :D !
Hooray!!</p><P>
...one day, ye shall turn around and you will see WE XFERS. And on that day, you will XFER! *cough*
Why are there so few chapters left of this D: !? *panics*
Rita's such a witch :p. I love that she's already portrayed as wayyyy too nosy for her own good, too -- just as I'd imagine she'd be as a teenager.
D: That there wouldn't be a next time :( . That's so sad. OMIGOD I WISH I KNEW WHAT YOU WERE GOING TO DO WITH THIS AND WHAT YOU ARE GOING TO DO WITH THESE CHARACTERS THAT I'M FALLING IN LOVE WITH! :( *deep breaths*
Hahaha -- 'whatever I'd like?' :p Oh, boy :D. And, yeah, I'm not complaining either. Hooray for kisses :D. Goodness, Severus is full of it today (which is awesome, because it's lots of Snamione fluffiness) AND they're going to their special island!</p><p>Oh yeah, because Hermione had to become (virtually) an entirely different person, it feels like she actually became a different person. :( Poor Hermione. She has such a tough mission ahead of her
They're so cute GAH! I can't handle them.</p><p>Wonderfully wondrous chapter as per usual!</p><P>
xfer bells, xfer bells, xfers all the way!:
Ooooooh it's Sirius.
>A very drunken Sirius. This can't be good. Bad Sirius! *covers eyes* And OMG Severus! Nice use of wordplay in your action scene, by the way. I usually stop every couple paragraphs or so to make comments but I was completely sucked into the scene o.o. Luckily, Remus was there to round up Sirius.
Okay, so yeah a little hex could have solved the problem, but I love that it brought out this primal rage in Severus. He's so hot-headed sometimes, and I like that you continue to show that side of him when it's appropriate (and it was definitely justified in this instance). I also want to hop back for just a second to Sirius -- I LOVE how you pointed out (through Hermione) that that version of Sirius was not the same version of Sirius she'd grown to know. I think it was a HUGE piece of support for Sirius' actions in that particular scene, along with his intoxication (of course). You've, of course, already set up his not-so-secret 'crush'-ish on Hermione, as well as his envy concerning the established relationship. So while in a different context I would have been left wondering WHY Sirius would act the way he has, you've set everything up leading to this moment to support it. (And in case none of that came out the way I wanted it to because I'm tired, I'm saying ---- good job!!! :D )
Anyway.
OMIGOD WAS HE ABOUT TO SAY WHAT I THINK HE WAS GOING TO SAY?! :DDDDDD Hooray!
Poor Hermione. She's had to go through so much.
:p He's so stubborn. But Hermione's stubborn, too -- I'm glad she doesn't let him blame himself for what Sirius did.
And I'm also glad that Sirius apologized, referring back to the other large glob of whatever the heck I was talking about up there ^. I mean, of course Hermione doesn't forgive him yet; that's going to be a tough bridge to cross if she ever does decide to forgive him.
Another wonderful chapter!</p><p>-Rumpel</p><P>
xfering through the snow, on a one horse open xfer (? I don't know):
Again, the first line might as well say, "Meg hates Rumpel and is crushing all of her Snamione dreams." :P
>I feel so bad :( he'd better show up!! "Hi"....I'll give him "Hi". "Hi" yourself :(. Attack hug! There, take that! (sry, I'm getting tired :P) Oh - my -goodness! He's so angry. Whyyy are you doing this to me? Poor Hermione can't even properly explain herself without revealing that she's Muggle-born, which she can't exactly do. *headdesk* It's SO complicated!
Oh phew -- Hermione is much more eloquent than I would have been in that situation. AND THANK FREAKING MERLIN!! :D He's not sulking ;). And kisses! And he WAS shopping :D . I'm a much happier Rumpel now, tyvm. Good. No more avoiding. Lots more kisses. Rules are rules.</p><p>Of course Dumbledore has to snatch her up when they've just begun speaking again! Dumbledore's clearly not an avid Snamione shipper or he'd leave them alone ;). Ugggh, caught by the Dumbledore, ruiner of Snamione feels. I mean, yeah, everything IS a bit 'unorthodox' but he doesn't know the feels! Phew. At least Hermione is able to stand up for herself. Go, Hermione, go!
Yeah, and there's the 'going home' bit. ):
Omigosh who IS that? Malfoy? Yaxley? Somebody whose about to get a smackdown? D:!!!</p><p>-Rumpels</p><P>
Copy, paste, fix the formatting -- xfer, xfer, xfer:
He'd better be out buying her a present because if he's up to any pre-Death Eater business I will be livid (with him, not at you ;) ). Hermione will have to whack him with his new stirring stick :(. Hmph
Anyway. It is nice to see Hermione hanging out with her friends -- I adore that group. I wish I had an Amelia, Otto, and Edgar to hang around with. And, of course, I'm still digging Remelia.
Bahahahahah! The boys and Rosmerta... poor boys :p. Oooooh dear -- keeping up with the lies must be exhausting :(. Luckily, she recovered well -- with the exception of Amelia (it's hard to hide things from your bestie...they're mind readers). And, back down Sturgis ;) -- no subtly hitting on Hermione on MY watch!
Oooooooh dear. I mean, I do understand Lily asking Hermione not to hurt him because she obviously still cares about him. But, I do agree with Hermione with the whole pot and kettle thing. But, Severus DID eff up a bit. But it WAS a mistake, and he DID feel badly. I have many conflicting emotions.
<p>OMIGOD WHAT IS HAPPENING! (Luckily Amelia is there for her and a fantastic friend.) I KNEW YOU WERE GOING TO MAKE ME SAD, MEG!!! WHYYY DO YOU DO THIS TO ME?! :(</p><P>
xfer time, xfer time, lalalalala:
I feel so bad for Hermione -- she's facing such a huge burden. Being sent back in time to save someone who shouldn't have died is one thing, but falling in love with them is a completely different situation. I can't imagine the stress she must be under, knowing that she is the ONLY person who can save him and she can't even tell him about it.
Heheheh, Severus' sense of humor gets me every time :D. Ohhh, but Crabtree isn't having any of it today 8-( . And I completely understand -- I can draw a damn nice stick figure, but that's about as far as my artistic abilities go, too.
Aww, Severus is SO nervous :P -- and I love how Hermione gets nervous, too, when he doesn't respond right away :P. They're so funny. Hooray!! Now they are official-official ;). I'll start planning wedding dates, and Meg, you just ride on your own float in the parade I'm throwing, you, okay? Cool.
Ohhhhhhh hey!!! Severus is laying on the moves in the middle of the corridors :D :D :D . Go, Severus! I also love it when he gets jealous, it's completely adorable
Eeghads that's a complicated potion. Severus is proud of her! And why wouldn't he be? Of course, their play-fighting will never stop being amazing -- especially if they end in kisses (and hopefully, for Severus' sake, not Stinging Hexes :) ).
I can't even get over how cute these two are. :D I think it's just from habit, but I have this unnerving feeling that you're going to do something to make all the happy go away (at least for a hot second), and something bad will happen *covers eyes*.</p><P>
xfer for you, and more xfers, and more xfers:
Ohmygoodness, a quick look at the chapter index and I thought this was the last chapter posted. :D Happily, I was wrong! Hooray!
Hermione should give Severus and Advent Calendar, where he gets one smooch a day til Christmas :P. Best gift ever. *cough* Or those things are nice, too :P
Oooh, that's awesome! I love the time change flashbacks. I wonder how this will affect the long-term, hopefully it'll be good 8). I would say that her inkling is on point, and that the only reason he would give her that stirring stick would be to send her that message. I mean, obviously in the future there's going to be a significant period of time in which a relationship isn't really appropriate, and they'd both have to wait, so that totally makes sense.
Yes, yes she does see something she likes ;).
Gooooooodness these two are so freaking cute! He's soooo sweet! And forehead kisses!</p><p>A playful friendly duel turns into full-on snogging? I will take it! In fact, I'll dance! :D :D Wooooah, things got a bit warm there, didn't they. *cough cough* ;)
And then, again, SO FREAKING SWEET I CAN"T TAKE IT! >< Ahhhhh! I love it!</p><P>
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Is the first line really saying, "and there were no more kisses ever again because Meg hates Rumpel"? ;) :P But, yeah, that totally makes sense -- he's being super careful not to cross any lines and lose her like he lost Lily. I'm placated for the time being since they're officially together and whatnot.
Why do I get the feeling that running through the Forbidden Forest alone won't end exceptionally well. Oh, phew! A unicorn horn! Well, I guess then it did end exceptionally well, which is good :)
Aww, Amelia's such a perfect friend, though she didn't react quite as victoriously as I had when I found out they kissed :p! And FINALLY Remelia is happening! *dances* I love me some Remelia
Ohmygoodness, that's so sad! Poor Hermione -- thank god Severus is patient with her. He has NO IDEA what's at stake :(. "Merlin, from the way you were crying, I'd thought someone died," -- oi *headdesk*
Freaking Slughorn. :p That oughtta kill the mood, eh? IN LOVE <3 .</p><p>Hooray!! They'll be spending the break together! Maybe there will be smooching! Or more cheek kisses, because that was adorable. Gahhhhhhhh so much good
-Rumpels</p><P>
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Hooorrraaaaaaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyyyyy!!!!!!! OMG FINALLY FINALLY FINALLY! Excitement and butterflies and hand holding and happy!!! :D YAAAAAAAAHOOOOOOOOOOO! *fireworks* Meg, I'm about to hold a parade in your honor, I swear.
Of course she's going to research it :P. She wouldn't be Hermione if she didn't. :P Remus is a sneaky werewolf. Awww, this chapter is full of Snamione feels and Remilia feels and Hermione and Remus are gettign along so well.. This is a squee-filled chapter, I'm surprised I haven't woken everyone in the house up.
Hermione and Severus sitting on the island, cuddling. I'm dying from the cute. So, so, so damn cute! And Hermione's falling in Looooooveee! And there is the tickling! Too adorable. AND FREAKING FINALLY A SMOOCH!!!!!! :D :D :D You get TWO parades tonight! Heck, you can have all the parades! *throws confetti* And that kiss was rather smooth on Severus' part -- I love it!!!!!
He's apologized? D: Poor Severus. Luckily, Hermione is good at making Severus happy :D . And now she's super-determined to save him! :D :D</p><p>Hooray!
I can sleep now, I think! :D :D
Ican't wait to read the next chapter (but I should REALLY be getting to bed). Make sure the next chapter stays where its at for tomorrow. Stay.</p><p>-Rumpels</p><P>
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Yep, Hermione WOULD come up with a backup plan, wouldn't she? She has so much to worry about, and trying to stay focused on her mission has been proving to be MAD difficult. Severus being so damn adorable is no help :P.
Ergh, Sirius Black (and James Potter). I'm surprised he doesn't fall over with such a big head. ( D: OMG FRED AND GEORGE D: ) . Lol, Hermione made THE Sirius Black stutter. That's amazing. Like, seriously, hell hath no wrath like angry Hermione. She's terrifying. Luckily for Sirius and James, Harry happens to look just like his dad -- and the best friend card has been played. Even THEY were saved by Harry and Harry doesn't even exist yet.
Slughorn's so gullible :p. And a pass to the Restricted Section, it is! Hermione'll save him yet (I hope). It's totally in Severus' nature to be suspicious and want to know what's going on. Nice! More Snamione time! And, yeah, it's an excellent idea to get Severus' help on looking up stuff to brew an antivenom. If anyone can do it, the two of them together should be able to.
Ooohhh, yeah! If the Pheonix tears could cure basilisk venom, then they should help with Nagini's venom -- that's damn clever, is what that is.
Awwwww -- Severus is so sweet sometimes, I swear I don't know how Hermione can resist. HOMG that's one hell of a cliffhanger!! Dammit. Now I HAVE to read the next chapter because I simply just go to bed now ><</p><P>
xfers!
Any 'not-date' with Severus is a special occasion :P. Urrgh, Malfoy and Yaxley are going to become problems, and I highly doubt they're actually going to be drowning in puddles anytime soon. Also, the Marauders not around to ruin Snamione fun is the ONLY reason that that night being a full moon is good, because poor Amelia is without Remus and I'm SO rooting for Remelia.
Speaking of Amelia -- she's such a good friend :D. I love, love, love that Hermione has someone to talk to and who, despite her feelings about Severus, ultimately supports Hermione. They're my BROtp for SSS.
Considering how her first Slug Club Party went (in the future), I'd be nervous too
*whistles* Severus sounds exceptionally dapper tonight ;). I bet he and Hermione make quite a pair, all put-together like that! I love that he checked her out :P -- couldn't help himself. And of course Lily's jealous -- they probably look stunning!
Poor Severus. I mean, he did what he did and hung out with who he hung out with, but I still feel bad. He made a mistake :( . I can't wait to hear his side, if Hermione ever gets it out of him.</p><p>Wohoo, dance time! :P I hope Severus lightens up around Amelia, eventually. At least she's having fun (even if it's sans Remus). OMG that's so sad! And Severus can dance!
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH! STAHP doing that to me >< lol! Ugh, my heart my actually stop one of these times. Well, an almost-kiss is an almost-kiss.
Omygoodness Hermione vs Lily. This is going to be scary *covers eyes*</p><p>-Rumpels</p><P>
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OH THANK MERLIN IT'S FINALLY --
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That wasn't funny >< . A dream? A dream! That's just not fair.
And, yeah, after a dream like that I'd be overanalyzing and overthinking everything, too. You know what would solve that conundrum? If she kissed him for real. :D *cough* Just a thought... haha!
Edgar can wait all day if Hermione's dreaming about Severus :P. And hooray! Severus decided to go! :D Amelia's such a good friend -- and hopefully, Hermione will have something to talk about with her later :D (I have no idea if I worded that last part so it makes sense so bear with me.)
I really love how this shows this awesome side to Severus that virtually nobody but Lily was able to experience (because this is pretty much how I'd imagine he would have been around Lily). You still portray him as an awkward outlier from others, which is on-point because although Hermione's reason for coming back is to save him by showing him his own worth, it will still take a whole heck of a lot for him to change completely. And scooting back to the last chapter (I think), part of Hermione's hesitation lying in the fact that if she does start a relationship with him in this time, HOW will it affect him in the future (TLDR: will she hurt him in the future with this whole time-travel escapade). So, I think you're doing an excellent job with both of their characterizations and the progression of the plot AND (lack of) progression of a romantic relationship thus far :). (There, this paragraph is all the semi-quality review you'll get out of me tonight; onward with more squeeing and shouting and emojis!)
OMG HE'S JUST SO DARN SWEET WHEN HE WANTS TO BE!! ...and then there was the Marauders; come to ruin all squee-worthy moments. They are really putting a damper on my Snamione. It's SO frustrating and SO sad that Severus has never been able to experience Hogsmeade like everyone else because of James and Sirius. >:( They're big bullies!
And it's adorable when they're together and happy, and no one in the world is bothering them -- and then comes along Malfoy and Yaxley. And of course, they take a shot at Lily, who isn't even there to defend herself. I hope those two slip outside and drown in a puddle (because apparently, I'm violent tonight).
And then the last four paragraphs...just...afklaldmjijdlfjdlfoadifj! SO CUTEE!!!! :D :D I SNAMIONE THEM SO MUCH IN THIS ! lol</p><p>Another wonderful chapter!!</p><p>-Rumpels</p><P>
LOOK HI I CAUGHT UP!! Sorry about not leaving reviews on all the chapters in between. Got swept up in the story (and... was also too lazy to type). You know how it goes. Anyway, here we are.
As much as it pained her, she would have to let things unfold, no matter how horrible they would become. -- this is such a sobering thought. like it's scary enough going to the past and being hyper-aware of everything you do and the potential impact it might have, but when you add that to the fact that you have to watch history unfold as you know it, the horrible events and all, that's got to be so excruciating. And Hermione's a person who always reacts to situations she doesn't like by actively doing something to change it. Fighting voldemort, starting SPEW, etc, so this must be especially hard for her to just sit on her hands and do nothing.
The fluff with Severus in the past few chapters has been really sweet. There's a sentence I never thought I'd say. But it's remarkable how much he's changed and how open he is with her, it's so sweet.
Great work on this chapter and you are a lovely person ♥
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