Name: Rhaenyra (Signed) · Date: 24 Jun 2017 10:04 PM · For: Destined

This was an interesting pairing, definitely worthy of the challenge.  Yet it didn't seem like you were trying to force them together for the sake of the story.

 

Trelawney is such an out-there character, almost with a childlike innocence and desires.  She is so full of hope and doesn't realize what people really think of her, which is a bit sad.  You depicted that part of her personality very well in here.  For somebody who is so focused on things outside the "physical realm" it makes sense that she would focus on things that happen in her mind.  Even if those things are things she is creating for herself with the less reliable aspects of Divination.

 

I am not surprised that she had a crush on Lockhart, nor that she found the signs that she wanted to see in the tea leaves.  Why wouldn't she?  It was interesting to see her predicting GOOD things for once... love, wealth, and the like.  It is so unlike what she told her students.  Her seeing what she wanted to see and Lockhart being so full of himself, neither knowing what the other was thinking in the slightest, was both funny and a bit sad.

 

I figured her heart would be crushed at the end, but I have to say that your ending surprised me.  The fact that Trelawney believes that she could curse him for laughing at fate that destiny/God/whomever had set for them was really interesting.  And, despite all her misled beliefs, we do know that she has unusual powers.  It is an interesting thought that his own arrogance could lead to his downfall in more ways than one.

 

Good luck with the challenge!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! Your comments made me really happy and I am so glad you liked this little story! Writing it was quite tricky for me so it's a relief to know it worked, even the ending, so thank you for taking the time!

Name: MuggleMaybe (Signed) · Date: 18 Jun 2017 12:20 AM · For: Destined

Hello!

 

What an unusual pairing you received for this challenge! And, oh, Trewlaney. No. I mean, I think Trwelaney is pretty eccentric, but I like her more than Lockhart, who is actually a jerk. But in this, I actually felt sorry for Lockhart! It's so uncomfortable and invasive when someone insists on believing you're interested in them, when in reality you are not! So, very well done on managing to make him a little more baearable. I mean, he's the worst. haha

 

The dialogue in this is hilarious. I love how much Lockhart struggles to understand what's happening, and then he says he came to ask about HIS future and it's so perfectly in character.

 

I know Trewlaney misinterprets her fortunetelling often, but I wonder if this was a case of fortunetelling first and then seeing Lockhart and hoping he's the man, or of seeing Lockhart and superimposing a wished for prophecy onto him? I feel like it could go either way. She isn't the most genuine.

 

That makes me realize that this uses an unreliable narrator, which can be hard to do. You did a great job of it, though. =)

 

Throughout most of this fic, I found it very funny and light hearted - but then at the end! Oh no! Trewlaney cursed him and it's because of her he lost his memory and she actually succeeded in her declaration of revenge. So creepy, but so brilliant!

 

Well done on making an interesting story out of a truly uncommon pairing!

Author's Response:

Hey! Thank you for reading and reviewing. Unreliable narrators are very hard to write and this was the first time I gave it a shot so am happy you think it worked out. It was mostly aimed to be funny and light-hearted but with a dark touch at the end so am glad you got the right feel while reading this. It was a very uncommon and difficult pairing to write but this seemed to be the best way for me to write it so I am really happy to know you enjoyed reading it. Thanks a lot for your lovely comments! 

Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 17 Jun 2017 04:02 PM · For: Destined

Hey!

So I love the rare pairing! I thought it was a really interesting piece because the characters truly are random! it's quite amazing what you've created for those two characters! It really impressed me with your creativity!

I thought your opening with professor Trelawney's thought process/point of view was really well thought out. I can imagine her really believe this too. I thought she came across really well and you used what we know about her from canon to create her inner monologue was really well used. I loved how much of daydreamer she is. I thought some of the imagery used her fansty was really effective. I thought that her saying 'The seer and her knight - what a mesmerising couple we would make' was a brilliant line.

I can't help but feel bad for poor Trelawney when she meets him for the first time! it doesn't quite go as well as her mind's eye thought it might! your portrayal of Lockhart for me is spot on. I can't help but laugh at some of his lines like ' I understand that women find me irresistible' hahah. oh really? I guess she does! I thought the ending was so good though when she was cursing him because it fits into canon so I thought this was quite a clever little twist! it's hard to feel sorry for him with behaviour like this! This was a fun little read with some really strong ideas and I thought you pulled off this difficult pairing so well! good job! 

- Abbi xo    

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! Glad you liked this! it's a relief to know you think I pulled it off, and that it made you chuckle at times and gave you the feel I was aiming for. 

Name: dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap (Signed) · Date: 05 May 2017 08:21 PM · For: Destined

Silly of course, because when two lovers are fated to be together, no force in the universe can stop their union.

After all of the sob stories I have been reading lately this is already brightening up my mood. I mean Professor T and Lockhart? COME ON NOW! WHY HAVEN'T I READ ANYTHING ABOUT THEM BEFORE?

I SHIP THEM AND I HAVEN'T EVEN GOTTEN TO THE REST OF THE STORY. 

They are fated for each other. It makes perfect sense. Her kooky nature and his....well...actually he's kooky as well. They're both kooky. They're a kooky match made in heaven!

 I could already see the wedding bells at the bottom of my teacup.


This made me giggle like a schoolgirl. 

maybe he wanted to be the one to propose


Oh good heavens. A little forward, aren't we? Well, I guess when you know you know. 

He would carry my curse instead. For I am a seer and my powers would ensure that by the time this year ends, his career, his future, his life… would all be over. 


I might have pumped my fist in the air and said, "YOU GO GIRL!" You know I still back the above that I wrote for my review. I could see them together. Gildeory is so self-involved and Sybil is on another wavelength. It could work, couldn't it? I suppose it doesn't matter because she has cursed him and we all know what happens to him next. He really deserves it for acting like such a pompous cow. I do believe Gildeory was gay though. I think he would have liked men but he probably didn't act on it publicly because it would have tarnished his image and women were his entire brand. I wonder if he obliviated the minds of his lovers too. 
This was a fantastic read though. You had perfect lines here and there for some added comedic relief. I just love the character of Sybil and to see her shine in a new light. Excellent job!

Author's Response:

THANK YOU FOR READING AND REVIEWING! I CANT BELIEVE YOU SHIP THEM AFTER READING AND YOU GOT SO INVESTED IN MY LITTLE STORY. sorry for the caps but I got so excited reading your review. it's amazing to read your comments. I am really glad you liked the characterisation and the overall narrative and tone. thanks!

Name: lovegood27 (Signed) · Date: 28 Apr 2017 05:48 AM · For: Destined

I procrastinate too much...but hello! I'm here to review your entry! :)

 

Tbh, I found this utterly hilarious. Trelawney's character was absolutely on point- ridiculous, slightly creepy, but still arrogant enough to think she had a chance with someone like Gilderoy Lockhart. And about Lockhart...wow, his characterisation was great too. He was also arrogant like Trelawney, and cruel enough to judge someone based off their looks.

 

I found it so funny how Trelawney kept on going on about how the stars ever lie etc. And she was overly romantic and naive about the whole thing. Oh the joys of love. It had finally begun. That cracked me up so bad. I'm surprised she didn't realise she wasn't a Seer after this XD

 

Thanks for the entry! xx

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading and reviewing! I am so glad this made you laugh as it was totally meant to be light and funny but not in a parody way, so am happy that worked! I wanted to exaggerate both of their characters a little bit so am relieved that you found that fun! Thank you so much for the challenge, this was fun writing!