Name: MuggleMaybe (Signed) · Date: 20 Jan 2019 09:58 PM · For: Counting Stars

Hello again. (Still for the Magical Menagerie and BvY team black)

 

I knew I was into this fic but I didn't realize exactly HOW into it I was. They're going on a round the world trip together?!? I get to read about self-definition and enemies-to-lovers AND world travel all in a single fic writen by one of the my fic writers?!? THIS IS EXCELLENT NEWS.

 

(Clearly I didn't spend much time pondering the title lol)

 

I am currently unimpressed but intrigued by Heath. I suppose this bodes well, because it means he gets to have an actual character arc but listen, a person's flatmate is not responsible for them! Adult lessons #1: You are your own responsibilty. Raj deserves better =P

 

Your depiction of Dennis Creevey is waaaay different from how I generally imagine him, which was interesting and fun even if it took an adjustment. I like to think he became a high ranking auror though, that's really cool.

 

Working as a body guard really seems like a waste of an auror's talents, and I woul dnot blame Molly for feeling miffed... except also she'll get to travel the world for free? So that seems very worth it. 

 

Molly is so sharp in the chapter, all glaring and foot tappingand crossed arms. I respect her for being able to hold her own but I'm already eager to see her in a moment of softness.

 

I assume this fic is Molly/Heath. I don't ship it just yet but I have 100% confidence that I will soon. 

 

I AM VERY EXCITED ABOUT THIS FIC

 

xoxo Renee

 

Name: MuggleMaybe (Signed) · Date: 20 Jan 2019 08:30 PM · For: King of Anything

Hello! I'm here for the Magical Menagerie and BvY Team Black.

 

I always love your stories and this was no exception, although I do agree with your A/N that it's different from your usual. But different can be good!

 

Molly is a next gen character who intrigues me, precisely because I imagine being the oldest child of a father like Percy would involve a lot of pressure. You've captured that idea perfectly And I think, in addition to being a very believable family dynamic, it's really normal at Molly's age to feel like your life is out of your own hands, like you're heading toward a destination someone else picked out and you're not even sure you want to get there. It's very true and relatable. I'm excited about the premise of this fic!

 

As always, the dialogue and narration is excellent. 

 

Now, the break up scene. What the heck dude? Just get it over with, ok?!The whole idea of the long drawn-out break up needs to die. And maybe she thinks he's perfect, but I find him kind of annoying.

 

(Look, I find all perfect-seeming people incredibly intimidating, and that's annoying. So this is typical me. But still.)

 

I'm glad she at least recognizes that he's borning.

 

I really love Molly for wanting to make her life her own. It's not easy, though.

 

Ok. The parents. Percy and Audrey. I'm sorry to say, but they're kind of the worst. Who the heck talks to their TWENTY YEAR OLD daughter about biological clocks???? She is so young and not everyone wants children and it's perfectly possible to have children even in your 30s and UGH. LAY OFF, ok mum?

 

Percy was comparatively likable in this, actually. Who would've guessed lol

 

I really hope things improve for Molly soon. Great start to this fic!

 

xoxo Renee

Name: Tecla Sunrise (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Cups

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Originally left on 07/09/2017

so cute and funny! heath is just too lovely to be true ;))

Author's Response: Heya! Thanks for dropping by! I'm very pleased that you're enjoying the story so far :)

Name: AlexFan (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Cups

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It's been so long since this story was updated! I was so excited for it when it started (and I mean I still am) and I'd check back like once a week every week just to see if there was a new chapter.

I really love your writing still and how well it fits with the story. This reminded me of why I was so excited for this story and why I loved Molly so much. She's so sarcastic, I like her toughish kind of nature and how she won't take any bull from anyone. I was surprised that she would go out drinking with Heath though, I figured she'd be the sober friend hauling Heath home. And she's such a relatable character, the one thing that is constantly going through my head is same every time she does something.

I'm so excited to see what kind of shenanigans Molly and Heath get up to in Pisa (and I knew she was going to miss the train I was like girl who are you kidding here.)

Author's Response: SO SO LONG. I am a terrible updater.

I'm very glad that you're still enjoying the story. And I'm also very glad that Molly continues to be a favourite, too. Haha, she usually is the sober friend hauling people back home, but Heath has that effect on people. He's just great that way.

Of course they were going to miss that train! Heath is not so great that way.

Thanks for the wonderful review :)

Name: merlins beard (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Cups

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Originally left on 10/24/2015

Hey there,

so this is the actual review for the swap. (I know, I rambled on in four other reviews already... forgive me. As I said, I just can't seem to pass by that box here.)

I'm really glad you decided to work on that story again, as I'm really enjoying it so far.

This chapter starts out with a lot of action. They're running from an angry mob. And apparently Heath is messing up a lot - who would have thought ;)

I was actually cheering Molly on as she scolds him... and I would have loved to have them end up kissing there, hidden away in that alley - but I guess it's just too early for that...

Okay so I just have to say one thing. Your Molly reminds me so much of how other people write Rose. In fact, I have been having trouble with the names in the reviews. I have typed Rose and deleted it again quite a few times here. That's probably a hint that I have read way too many Rose-Stories.

Running for their lives because of a POSTCARD??? I kind of feel sorry for Molly. She has to put up with that annoying American tourist. But I do have a feeling that she'll actually enjoy his company later on...

Those apparating licenses sound awful. so many restriction... it seems to be the whole parchment thing - Muggle computers suddenly seem much more convenient. Somehow our driving licenses are okay to use pretty much everywhere (not sure about North Korea tho)...

Hm no Molly, I'm pretty sure you shouldn't let him go out on his own. You'd never find him again.

OH, SO NOW MOLLY IS THE ONE WHO GETS DRUNK. I LIKE THAT - DIDN'T SEE THAT ONE COMING.

And hey, she kissed a girl and she liked it (see what I did there?)... I bet that surprised Heath quite a bit...

Oh and OBVIOUSLY they missed their train. I wonder if they have certain things that they HAVE TO visit for the Daily Prophet? If they do... they'll have to try a little harder to actually make it there. (then again, 70 days are rather long... they should make it)

So no romance in Paris... but Paris is a very romantic city. well, maybe in Italy. I love Rome... and there's always Casa di Giulietta in Verona or they could visit Venice... I can't wait to see where they go next... and I'd very much appreciate it if you updated rather sooner than the last time ;) you see, I'm kind of loving this story, and I'd love to keep reading...

I'm not commenting on anything writing style wise because I'm just too tired to really pay close attention... but nothing major came up. I really like the description you put in (it can always be more description for me, I just love description), and I didn't miss anything major.

I admire you for picking this back up after so long - I'm having trouble with exactly that right now :(

Until next time - I really enjoyed swapping with you

xxx

~Anja

PS.: Please don't stress/feel obligated in any way because I left more than one review. It's just what I do, and I expect nothing but the one for the swap in return.

Author's Response: Hola! Thank you so much for all your wonderful words of kindness and support and love. Also I am in awe of you and how you went above and beyond the call of the review swap. *hugs*

When I started this story I wanted there to be a lot of action in it, and when I returned to it, I was like IT HAS BEEN FOUR CHAPTERS AND NOTHING ACTION-Y HAS HAPPENED I MUST FIXED THIS. And then I realised why I was procrastinating writing an action sequence - BECAUSE THEY ARE VERY DIFFICULT TO WRITE. It was fun trying to fit in their personalities into that scene though!

There is no such thing as too many Rose stories! Molly does sometimes read a lot like stereotypical Rose, I agree, but I hope, with time, that she just becomes MOLLY.

OF COURSE MOLLY IS THE ONE TO GET DRUNK. Responsible people acting irresponsibly is one of my favourite tropes! And of course, Heath being Heath, just rolls with it :P

Yes, there are certain things they have to visit for the Daily Prophet. Also, I feel like I made a grave mistake when I randomly chose seventy days as the magical number of travelling days because THAT IS A LOT OF DAYS.

Molly is probably too hipster for romance in Paris :P And let us see what Italy shall bring to our dynamic duo! Perhaps a little hand-holding at least? ;)

Thanks for the lovely reviews! I really enjoyed our review swap :)

Name: Pixileanin (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Cups

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Originally left on 09/26/2015

Hi hi! This story is back! Woot!

I was kind of sad to see no updates to this for so long, but here's another chapter, so I decided to come out and see where you're taking this.

Thanks for doing the review swap, by the way!

Okay, so first impressions are that Heath is much more comfortable ""winging it"" than he is in planning. That's not necessarily a bad thing, but it's throwing Molly for a loop. I like how this highlights the differences between Molly and Heath.. and my fingers keep trying to type ""health"" instead of his name. Backspace, backspace, backspace...

Anyway, the point is that I think you showed their differences really well in this chapter, leading with the argumentative nature of Heath with total strangers and then closing with his ease at the clubs, while Molly's just trying to be practical at the beginning and then she's a bit unhinged with the bar scene. Heath seems to be enjoying this about her, that she's unable to ride him as hard inebriated as she was earlier in the day.

And oops about the train. I'm guessing, but I bet it was Molly's hangover that did it too. Turned tables are a beast. :P

Action-wise, I loved the first scene where they're running from the enraged shopkeepers screaming at them in French, and you threw in a lot of great characterization there too, with all the small details about each character.

The whole bit about the Apparition license complications was necessary to explain why they'd get the chance to hang out in these different foreign places, and Heath is certainly taking advantage of his circumstances to have some fun. It makes me wonder if they will find out more about the Stonehenge connection when they go on to Italy. There's got to be some ancient stuff lying around there too, if Stonehenge connects to France... I'm really hoping for more of that story to come out. It interests me greatly.

I'm not going to be any help at all if you mis-translate something in French or Italian. Everything looked great to my uneducated eyes. :) The footnotes were nice, but I feel like I didn't need them since everything was explained in context, or maybe I'm familiar enough with cultures to ""get it"" without explanation. I'm sure some of your readers will appreciate the literal translations. I know a lot of people are interested in that sort of thing.

It's really great to be back in this story. The banter is fun and barby, just the way I like it. The characters are interesting and lively, and your descriptions paint the scenes vividly where I can ""see"" where you're going. Actually, I can't really see where you're going with this story, but I'm hopeful, because I LOVE the stonehenge mystery and I'm just DYING to know what that's all about.

Heath's little notebook is hilarious, I don't know why. I would love to see him write more in it as the adventure continues.

Thanks for the swap. Need more of this!

Pix

Author's Response: This story IS back! Yayayay!

I'm pretty sure Heath has an allergy to plans. It's actually ridiculous. If I knew someone like him in real life, I'd actually go insane, since I'm a lot more like Molly in this respect. Also I caught at least three ""healths"" when I went back to edit this chapter. Clearly, I didn't think this through when I chose a name for him.

They really are two very different people. I want to show how similar they are, too, soon. It was a lot more apparent in the first two chapters when they were apart, I think. But now they're together, it's time to see that there are parts of them that are the same. And Heath very much is a man of the moment - if Molly can't yell at him, then he's happy!

Goodness, action is so difficult to write! Thank you so much for actually enjoying it!

Ooh! I'm not going to say what I'm going to do about the Stonehenge mystery. Stonehenge is a mysterious place, so it's fitting that this part also remains hidden for the time being.

Everything looks great to my also-uneducated eyes, so yay! I included the literal translations just in case. I'm very pleased that everything makes sense in context, because that's important for the sake of the flow of the story.

Aaaah! Thank you so so much! You are too kind!

Heath's little notebook is unintentionally funny, and I don't know why, either. I just giggle when I write it.

Thanks so much for the lovely review :)

Name: marauderfan (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Take It Easy

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Originally left on 01/11/2017

I don't want to be the person who says I told you so, but didn't I warn Heath not to go on about 'what could possibly go wrong'? And he didn't listen to me. So in a way I'm unsurprised to see that he didn't respond well to the totally rad cosmic travel and instead emerged with a broken arm.

Molly makes a good point. I know the Boston Tea Party was all about freedom and rebellion and stuff but seriously, what an abominable waste of perfectly good tea.

“What’s worse than dying?” Heath asked. -- Being expelled?

Why did the Daily Prophet and/or Auror Office not supply Heath and Molly with international Apparating permits? That could have come in really handy. But, I guess this way it provides Heath with an interesting angle to his travel articles, in that most travel things in the Daily Prophet probably don't have Muggle travel involved.

When Molly makes plans she doesn't mess around. That's a lot of impromptu planning! I guess the question now is how many of her plans will get derailed because she has to go find Heath and get him out of whatever impromptu thing he's walked into willy-nilly. It will probably happen at least once. Maybe 26 times.

Also I don't often get to say that I learned something new by reading fanfiction but today I did, with your mentioning of the Carnac Stones. The place sounds really cool :D

I really love this fic so far! It's so imaginative and fun, and I'm so glad I came back to read more of it!

Author's Response: The best part about Heath's reaction is that Molly is totally fine! And surprisingly unruffled for being transported into another country.

There are better things to throw away than tea! Those Tea Party people were rebels, indeed!

Being expelled is definitely the answer to that question, haha!

More on those Apparating licenses later!

Plans being derailed ONLY 26 times? I think you underestimate the power of Heath!

I've always wanted to write an educational fanfic :P

Thanks so much for the wonderful review, once again :)

Name: merlins beard (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Take It Easy

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Originally left on 10/24/2015

Hey I'm back again.

Okay so this sounds like a really, really terrible way to travel. Heath is my kind of person. I usually do plan a lot, but I've been making myself just wing it a lot more recently and I kind of love it. There's always a way out of a tight spot, and you don't always need a backup plan... I think Molly and Heath balance each other in a very sweet way. She can learn a few things from him, but she can also teach him quite a bit.

I like the locations you pick, although the scene here is fairly similar to stonehenge (other than the beaches), so I'm hoping to see different sites described in the next chapter. Paris is going to be good... maybe things get a little romantic there? If not, that's fine, I can wait. Italy is also very romantic... and they have great wine...

I'm loving this story, it's going on my reading list so I don't miss any updates.

xxx

~Anja

Author's Response: It is a horrible way to travel. Heath's probable notes on it would be: 0/10 would not recommend. You will break your arm and then have to be saved by your cranky partner. Not ideal. Winging it is just so hard, and I admire people who can do that, but that's just not me. Molly and Heath do balance each other, yes!

Definitely a different site in the next chapter. I chose this place because it WAS similar to Stonehenge, built around the same time, geographically close, and was similarly spooky. Because plot. And haha, so many people want a little romance in Paris, but it's been two days! I don't know what to say about it! And Italy does have great wine...

Thanks so much for the lovely review :)

Name: TreacleTart (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Take It Easy

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Originally left on 02/21/2015

Hi there,

Just finishing up my review of your final chapter (at least thus far) from your review request.

I was very happy reading this chapter. For some reason the last chapter was odd to me and this one seemed to get your story back on track. I love that they've been randomly transported to Brittany because the best adventures happen in spontaneous circumstances!

Poor Heath. Breaking his arm and passing out! Certainly not very manly, but definitely understandable. He seems to be interested in Molly suddenly, but I suppose her taking care of him might have something to do with it.

Molly is also starting to warm up a bit. I think that's due to seeing Heath being vulnerable. Most women seem to dig that in a guy. Just remember not to have her break down too quickly in the story.

I'm so excited to see what their trip to Paris brings. I'm not sure if you've been to Paris or not, but if you haven't and need help with ideas for locations aside from the Eiffel Tower and the Louvre De Livre...I've been recently and could give you a laundry list of cool places that they could visit. If you already have it planned out or have been yourself...don't mind me. I'm just trying to be helpful is all. :)

Overall, this chapter is probably my favorite of the four and I can't wait to see what's next. Thanks for a good read!

~Kaitlin

On a side note, I think a previous reviewer mentioned this as well, but in the scene where Heath says ""What could be worse?""..I too pictured Hermione saying ""expelled!"" :)

Author's Response: The best adventures do seem to happen in spontaneous circumstances, indeed! I understand what you mean about the story feeling more ""back on track"". I think in the last chapter I was trying to find my feet a little. The first two chapters set up the main characters, but then the story changes track.

Heath's interest in Molly has a lot to do with the fact that Heath genuinely enjoys getting to know people. Hopefully, I can make that come across more in later chapters with him.

Molly's warming up definitely has a lot to do with that! And yes - I'll be certain to keep that in mind.

Thank you for offering your help! I went to Paris recently, but since it was my first visit and I wasn't there for very long, I did all the main tourist-y things. So don't be surprised if you get a random PM from me soon :P

Thanks for your lovely reviews. They've been super helpful, and I'm sorry for taking so long to reply, once again.

And haha, she's definitely channelling her inner Hermione with that line!

Name: Japans Arc Angel (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Take It Easy

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Originally left on 02/17/2015

The very first section was mind blowing. The depiction of the brutality of silence was wonderful, and truly commendable. The relationship development is particularly interesting, especially on Molly's part, who seems to be much more complex as a person than first implied, or is shown to the characters and the reader.

There was however another instance where you stated something, this time, ""she didn't appear to be very concerned by this"" and the character then stated this afterwards.

I am however enjoying the references to the world of HP, such as the French aunt or the half-repetition of Hermione's ""or worse expelled"" statement. Though you don't go into great detail, there is enough for the story to make sense without the knowledge, but also makes sense and gives enough away to those who are HP fans.

I am hoping however that Molly does not become too Hermione - esq, as, she appears to be very similar to her at some stages. Which is not unreasonable considering they are family. However it is good to see the slight Weasley Fire in her, which I would like to see presented a little more.

Many thanks

Author's Response: That first section was just great to write and remains my favourite piece of writing from this story. Ah, I'm so glad that you find Molly to be complex! There are aspects to her that are yet to be discovered or fully explored still. It's part of the charm of writing her, really.

Haha, thanks for pointing that repetition out again - I seem to do it a lot when I'm writing Heath!

I've tried to include more references to canon in this story than my other ones, especially since Molly isn't a character that is too often written about, so stories about her need a little more grounding in the reality of the world to be believable.

No, Molly isn't going to be like Hermione - hopefully. I hope that I can write her as her own person! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, and I really am very sorry about the long time it's taken me to reply.

Name: luvinpadfoot (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Take It Easy

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Originally left on 09/02/2014

You started the story off really strong with their breakup. I loved all the tiny details you mentioned. We all know that guy who'll take you to his favorite crappy coffee shop to break up with you and it set the tone so well for her change and confrontation with her parents. The description with the coffee shop was wonderful and the breakup felt so real. Both of the characters seemed strong from the get go and I liked that he wasn't a bad guy, just kind of an idiot and they grew apart. It happens.

Molly is a really interesting character! I love her narration and how she sees the world from her POV. It makes all the situations a lot more fun to read. She's also ridiculously relatable. Saying the wrong things at the wrong times, tired of constantly working for the job that requires you constantly work even when you get it, bored, annoyed. I love her and I love reading her as a character. Her family dynamics are really interesting too, and I adore the detail with Percy and salt. All your tiny little details make this story come alive so much more than it would without them. They're really just a small addition, but so wonderful.

Heath and Raj's relationship is hilarious. I love Heath's little jokes and the way Raj just seems to roll his eyes at whatever Heath does. Heath isn't the fiancé to uh Molly's friend, is he? (I forgot her name oops.) I just remember the mention that he was a reporter from the States and Heath is a reporter from the States so...at any rate, I'm excited to find out more about him!

He and Molly seem like they make quite the interesting pair too. The teasing and bickering back and forth is quite entertaining to read, and I think they have about as much fun doing it as I do reading it.

Using Stonehenge as a transportation system was a really original idea, and both Molly and heath's reactions to it were priceless. I'm really starting to understand the line in the summary now. Molly is a lot like her father, for all that she wants something more than the boring life.

Poor Heath for getting his arm broken. He's so lucky he's got Molly ferrying him around. No wonder the Prophet requested an Auror for him. He's lovely as a person and so funny, but he might not make it home alive travelling all around Europe without Molly's assistance. And boy is she one for plans!

I don't really have any critiques, though I'd love to be of some help. This story is just really good and I've loved the first few chapters! You're a wonderfully talented writer and this is fantastically hilarious and so well written. Very glad I had the chance to read this! :)

Author's Response: I'M SO SORRY FOR NOT DOING MY HALF OF THE SWAP BUT I SWEAR I'M GOING TO GET TO IT REALLY SOON.

I'm glad that you liked the breakup scene! I write so many stories where people get together, but I've never written people moving away from each other, so that was a lot of fun. And I really didn't want to make her ex-boyfriend a horrible person but like you said - a bit of an idiot.

My favourite thing about Heath and Raj's relationship is that Heath thinks that he's so cool, but Raj knows that Heath really isn't, but agrees to like him despite that. And IS Heath the mysterious fiance? WHO KNOWS?!?!?!?! I do know, but I'm not telling :P

Molly is another person who doesn't think Heath is as cool as he seems to think he is. Heath seems to get that a lot, the poor thing. But they're a lot of fun to write together.

Yeah, Molly is a lot like her father in that sense. I wanted to write a character who realises change is necessary but still resists it. She takes a while to get where she wants to go, simply because she doesn't like the way she's getting there. Did that make sense? Who knows?

I hope that by the end of this, Heath realises that he'd basically be dead without Molly with him. You're right - he has zero chance of making it alive without her!

Thank you so much for this lovely review! It means a lot to me :)

Name: TidalDragon (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Take It Easy

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Originally left on 08/16/2014

Alrighty! Here at the end of what you've got so far.

Here I think description was your strongest suit. While the detail was done well also in the last chapter with Stonehenge, I got a bit lost from the big picture perspective about their movements there. Here it was much more straightforward and the detailed descriptions shone again along with the bigger picture of the area where they landed.

As far as characterization went, I thought Molly's skills and assessment came to the fore well here and you did a good job contrasting her with Heath more clearly in terms of how they approached the situation of finding themselves in an unknown location - especially in their conversation toward the end.

The dialogue for me didn't do too much but get us through the scene, but it did allow you to give us glimpses of the characters' reactions to one another. I think the dynamic is becoming more open and friendly a little rapidly for me, primarily because we've seen nothing from Molly's POV about why she'd thaw. Perhaps that's coming and if it is it will probably prove fine in the end, but if it's staked on the fact she's ready for a shake-up, it's not coming across as enough to me because while she was interested in a shake-up, she's not particularly happy to be on this assignment (based on earlier chapters) and certainly not happy about the Stonehenge portkey decision, so I'm wondering where the smiling behind the cup for example is stemming from.

All in all you write very well, I think there's just some food for thought in a few minor areas that would stand you in good stead to consider. I hope you found the reviews helpful! If you have any questions, feel free to PM.

Author's Response: I'm glad that the description stood out - I spent an inordinate amount of time on it, so it's always nice when people notice and appreciate that :) Practise makes perfect!

The dialogue really took a backseat in this chapter. I sort of wrote this chapter backwards in that sense; usually I rely heavily on dialogue for most things for which I used description here. It was nice, for a change. I agree that they're relationship is moving too fast - I wrote these chapters incredibly quickly and that rushing sort of shows in this aspect very obviously. I have a few ideas about how I can explain that, and maybe how I can tone it down as well without having to alter these existing chapters too much.

Thank you so much for these lovely reviews! As always, you've given me plenty to think about (so pleased about that ) :)

Name: mymischiefmanaged (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Take It Easy

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Originally left on 08/14/2014

Ah I'm kind of disappointed that this is your last uploaded chapter, but here goes...

Absolutely love your description of silence as deafening and Heath's experience of it, as well as Molly being an anchor. It's really beautiful and shows Heath's more mature side again.

It's sweet that Heath's already somewhat attached to Molly and is relying on her. I like how even though this is his trip and she's just being dragged along he really needs her. It's good to see the more caring side of Molly, although I expect she gets a little bit of satisfaction from Heath hurting himself and needing her to fix it up after his arrogance in previous chapters.

I love Heath being irritated that Molly isn't hurt at all. It's great seeing how her auror skills help her, and he won't be able to underestimate her (not that he was doing that, but you could imagine that he might want to). I'm still a bit confused by why he's been allocated an auror to come with him, but he's obviously realised that it's a big help.

Love love love this line 'He'd been goaded by an old pile of rock into doing one of the stupidest things imaginable'. If you rewrite the chapter please don't get rid of it.

I'm really interested in what more there is to Molly saying she spent lots of time at her Aunt's when she was younger. That seems like a bit of foreshadowing and an interesting part of Molly's past.

Heath's list of French words he knows all being food is a lovely touch. I can completely imagine him thinking, 'yes, I know a little french, croissant, baguette...'.

It's a clever idea that you need a different licence to apparate out of Britain, but I also don't think it seems that believable that they wouldn't have sorted this licence out before starting their travels, given that they knew they were going to be going away for a long time. It might be worth thinking of a different reason for why they need to travel the muggle way? Or maybe their apparition permits haven't come through yet because they weren't planning to leave the country so soon (they only did it because of Heath's rash choice). It's not a big problem but it seems like a slightly implausible plot device and that can interrupt the flow of the story.

I love this clash between Molly and Heath's personalities, with her planning everything to the last detail and his going with the flow. I love even more how impressed he is by her planning, even though it's not what he'd do. Their relationship's written really well so far, although I think their descriptions of each other should maybe be a bit less familiar? They have only just met, really, so I'm surprised they're quite so comfortable with each other already.

Overall, really great chapter and really great story. I'm sad to have reached the end of your uploaded chapters. I'm surprised you feel the need to rewrite this, but if you do I'd say to focus on changing some of the details and content rather than changing the tone of your writing. I know you said it's not the same writing style as your other stories but it's really enjoyable to read and it would be a shame to lose it in a rewrite.

Let me know if you have any questions or ever want to swap again, I've really enjoyed reading this.

Emma x

Author's Response: I, too, am very sad about this being my last uploaded chapter. I actually had the beginning of the next chapter written before this story fell by the wayside. I'm glad that I have that, so there's a solid base from which I can start writing again.

Heath has these great moments - it's what the biggest appeal of writing his character, actually. I'm so very happy that you're liking his moments of maturity and depth as much as I enjoy writing them!

I channel a lot of Molly I when I write Molly's more ""caring"" side. She comes from a big family where the norm is that everyone looks out for everyone else, and Molly is definitely used to being one of those people who does far more looking out than being looked out for (did that sentence even make sense? Who knows?).

When Heath finds out why he needed an Auror to come along with him... well, we're going to see a whole different side of Heath that day (so excited for that moment, tbh). And hahaha - I'm very happy that you like that line. It's one of my favourite lines from the chapter, too.

Mentioning why Molly spent a lot of time at her aunt's place... it's a small thing about her, but Heath will have a blast when he finds out!

I have a more plausible reason why they're travelling the muggle way - I just didn't get to expand on it much in this chapter. I've made a note to remind myself to include it later on somewhere, especially if you feel that it interrupts the flow of the story (somewhat)!

You're right about how quickly their relationship has accelerated. I think I'll have to mention something about why that might be in the next chapter. Thanks for giving me so many things to think about - there's nothing better than that to get the creative juices flowing again!

Thank you so much for the lovely reviews! I'll make getting my side of the reviews done a priority!

Name: AlexFan (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Take It Easy

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Ah yes, more Heath and Molly banter, how I love me some Heath and Molly banter, heck yeah. One second the two of them are about to jump at each other's throats and the next second they're best friends. You can just see the fondness that's coming from Heath the longer he spends with Molly.

Speaking of Molly, you go girl! You show off those awesome math skills of yours and rub them in Heath's face why don't you! I love how he's so shocked about it as well. ""People can do calculations that fast what is this!?""

But anyway, this was brilliant as usual and I can't wait to find out what Molly and Heath are going to do next and what shenanigans they're going to be up to.

Author's Response: Heath and Molly banter is the best kind of banter, let's be real. I think Heath is far more open to liking other people than Molly. Molly isn't cut out to like other people that quickly!

I actually love writing Molly. There's nothing really smug or pretentious about her. She knows what she's good at and what she's not and she's very unapologetic about it.

I laugh every time I think about the Paris chapter! These two are in for quite the shock!

Name: ShadowRose (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Take It Easy

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Hello again!

So I don't quite know what you're talking about when you say this chapter wasn't funny, because I thought it was really hilarious!

Poor Heath, breaking his arm and then passing out in front of Molly. I felt bad for him as he tried to be manly but was almost beaten at that by Molly, who's trained in all these situations and remained perfectly calm about everything while Heath is freaking out. I love how this kind of flips the cliche - usually the guy rescues the girl, whereas here it's pretty much the exact opposite.

I love Molly and Heath's banter, since it's gotten a lot friendlier as the story has progressed. They have totally different personalities, yet they get along so well and play off of one another perfectly.

When Heath asked ""what's worse than dying,"" I wanted noting more than for Hermione to pop out and say ""expelled!"" because that scene came into my mind and I couldn't get it to go away. Of course, it's probably a good thing that didn't happen, because it really wouldn't have fit with the story, but it stuck in my mind nonetheless.

Of course, my favourite line hands down was ""If you Americans hadn't thrown yours in the harbour, you'd know."" That was so perfect and Molly's just so sassy and smart, and it's just really great.

I've really enjoyed reading this so far, and I hope you update it soon, as I'll have to come back for the next chapter!

-ShadowRose (Taylor)

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Author's Response: I'm glad you found it funny!

I loved writing Heath at the beginning of this chapter. He's just trying to maintain his reputation, but Molly just doesn't have time for that kind of stuff. She's too efficient by half :P I couldn't really see the ""typical"" scenario happening, simply because the main reason Molly is along is for stuff like this. She's trained. He isn't.

The banter was a lot friendlier in this one! I was worried about progressing their relationship too fast, but there's going to be plenty of opportunities for antagonism! *cackles evilly*

Writing that scene where Heath asks what's worse than dying, I actually wrote down Hermione instead of Molly in my first draft - the importance of editing!

Molly is just lovely to write. She's everything I aspire to be in terms of sass. If only I could say some of the things she says...

Thanks so much for the reviews! And congratulations for winning the Blackout Battle!

Name: nott theodore (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Take It Easy

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Hi again! I'm actually quite sad that this is the last chapter you've posted so far, because I want to be able to read more of your story!

The beginning of this chapter was really effective after the content of the last one. It seemed really contrasted and I loved your description as you wrote about the type of travel and the two of them falling to the ground.

Haha, Heath made me laugh so much. I really enjoyed reading things more from his perspective in this chapter, and seeing how pathetic he was when he broke his arm. (I'm with him, I have an awful pain threshold.) And then Molly was so practical about the whole situation, which seemed in character with what we've learnt about her so far and also what she explained about the Auror training. It was nice seeing her in the role that is the practical, sensible one - she actually reminded me a bit of Hermione in this chapter, and one of her lines was very similar to one from the first book :P

Oh, poor Heath! Fainting, that must be embarrassing for him! Luckily Molly didn't take too much notice!

I liked the description about the stones at Carnac, and the differences once again in what people have learnt according to where they come from. It all felt very realistic. I really like Molly, too - she's pretty awesome, being able to do all of those things, and I don't blame Heath for admiring her. I think that could turn into something more quite soon, especially with a trip to Paris coming up...

Sian :)

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Author's Response: More chapters will definitely come... Eventually. I just don't know when right now :(

Heath is actually the most adorable thing ever. I reckon his reactions are what everyone's reactions are on the inside when they're trying to put up a brave front. My pain threshold is practically negative, so I'd probably be lying there rolling around on the ground and crying like Draco when he was ""attacked"" by Buckbeak in the third film.

Molly is really, REALLY efficient. Ain't nobody got time for fear and panic in her book! I should change the title of this story to ""Molly Is a Boss and Heath Is Pathetic""!

And yes, I really don't help stamp out any shipping rumours between these two with the next chapter!

Name: maraudertimes (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Take It Easy

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Bonjour, bonjour!

I have returned, much to my delight, and found that this chapter was awesome! I absolutely loved the start, when Heath is thinking about how silence actually can be deafening. It was cool to sort of get inside his head and see exactly what Heath thinks about. It was also kind of sweet to know that his tether was Molly (do I detect a little bit of romance blooming between these too?).

And what happened after was so sweet and cute (and also scary) too! Having Molly fix Heath's broken arm was really cool, since usually it's guys who end up helping girls, and the fact that he passed out was pretty funny (to me at least). I really loved that she's such a busybody and set up camp while he was (probably) drooling. It really shows how dedicated Molly is at doing a job well.

I loved the tea part! It was just so cute and I can definitely see a budding romance, especially after her wrote about it in his notebook! I think my absolute favourite part about the tea talk was when Molly hinted at the Boston Tea Party and throwing tea in the harbour. I think that historical detail really made the moment and it was a really good way to insert some comic relief (something you never lack).

And then her figuring everything out and him being so amazed by it? Can they just hold hands? I really want that to happen, and soon!

Anyways, this was a great chapter, and update soon, will you? I absolutely love Heath and Molly, and hopefully they get reunited with Raj and Socks and Sandals at some point, but I guess we'll see where you take this!

Great job!

Lo:)

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Author's Response: Bonjour, mon amie! Bienvenue a la France!

I wasn't so confident about posting this chapter. It didn't feel as funny or developmental as the others so far, but I must admit that I had a lot of fun scouring Lonely Planet info pages and blog posts trying to figure out how to get from Carnac to Paris!

Heath is adorable here and his tether being Molly - that's the thing about how they form relationships I was talking about in my response to chapter three. There may or may not be a budding romance... Who really knows with these two? ;)

You know it's really strange, but despite the number of things in popular media where the guy is the one who gets things done and fixes and protects - and being very aware of this - I didn't even consider for a second those roles for Heath and Molly. It's so obvious to me that Heath is incapable of looking after himself, and Molly is overly capable of looking after herself. These roles felt a lot more natural. I'm glad it came over well, though!

The Boston Tea Party reference is probably my favourite line in this chapter - I cackled way too hard at this really inconsequential mention of American history!

Since Paris is the next chapter - the things I have planned for the next chapter really don't help the people who don't ship these two. There may even be hand holding and cuddling! Much excitement!

Thanks so much for this lovely set of reviews! Totally made my entire week!

Name: Pixileanin (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Take It Easy

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That's the strange thing about silence. I've often wondered about that. How can silence be deafening, so loud, that you just want some kind of noise to break it apart?

I love how you described the magic of the transportation. It was sort of like Apparition, sort of like a portkey, but you made it your own thing too. I commend you for not taking the easy way out with this. Exciting embellishments all around!

So Molly's skills DO come in handy, and it's on the second day? Or is it still the first? There was night, so I'll call it the second. Well, that was longer than I expected. Haha!

The little digs still continue, ""If you Americans hadn't thrown yours in the harbour, you'd know..."" That made me laugh out loud. Indeed.

Oh, but what if Beard and Socks and Sandals had put a spell on him to do this thing??? Is HE the culprit!?? I am so suspicious. ;) I really like how Molly is so matter-of-fact in all of this. She's been trained for scenarios like this, and the fact that she doesn't fall apart shows us her inner strength. She may be rubbish at expressing herself, but I think in this case, it's to her favor. AND she shows her maths skillz! Molly rocks!

I know from the Five Elements Challenge, that using all three instances of the spell given was one of the hardest things to incorporate into the story without being all ""LOOK! I have used this spell THREE TIMES!!"" Hahah! Does this mean that Heath will be breaking a lot of bones in this story, because that would be sad and hilarious and OUCH all at the same time.

Hey, things don't always have to be funny. I liked this chapter just as well. There was cool stuff going on. Good luck with all of your challenges!

Author's Response: It's like being underwater, that kind of silence. I find it to be really oppressive.

I'm glad you liked the description of the transportation. I wanted it to be a little dangerous and mildly uncomfortable - it was built in the Bronze Age after all.

There's more to Molly than a desire to change her life and making a boss cup of tea. And It's so sad the Americans will never know what you're missing out on... (I'm not British, but tea is still part of cultural DNA).

Beard and Sandals is not the culprit - all Heath. He has an insatiable thirst for doing the mildly dangerous and incredibly stupid. And yeah, I didn't want to write Molly as being incapable of everything. She's trying to find her way in life, but it still doesn't negate the fact that she's survived more than two years of gruelling Auror training.

Yes. Heath is going to have a lot of broken bones. I'm so sad that I Didn't finish this story in time for the challenge, but I'm still going to include all the elements in later chapters. I will complete this challenge if it kills me! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing - especially since you did all four! Wowee!

Name: Maelody (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Take It Easy

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Can I just say that I love how Heath is more of the damsel in distress than Molly is in this story? It's just such a turn in characters that it's refreshing and I really like it.

Poor guy broke his arm and what he really worried about was his manliness! This is just too amazing. By the way, for never being to these places, you do an amazing deal of description and detail. I can at least picture where they're at.

I was really confused as to why they couldn't just apparate, but you did answer that and it helped out a lot. Though I maybe would have mentioned it just a little sooner as to keep readers from being confused for so long. Or maybe I'm just a little slower than most haha.

I think this chapter was plenty funny. It had more sweet moments, too, and I really liked it. I'm so excited to see how Paris goes!

You're doing an awesome job! I'm in love with this story already! Keep up the good work and I look forward to chapter five! :D

Author's Response: Of course Heath is the damsel in distress! That's why he needed to bring an Auror along in the first place, to keep him out of trouble.

I'm glad that the places seem real! It's difficult to write about places you've never seen, but it's a fun sort of challenge.

Hmm... I didn't think that not mentioning Apparition earlier might be causing some confusion. I'll look into how I might clarify that!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Take It Easy

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Hello!

Sorry about the lateness, some things were happening ;).

That's right, Heath, man up. I loved the descriptions in the beginning, it made everything quite visceral. That was obviously not the best means of transportation :p, but may just have been the quickest. His little remarks about her magic, and British-ness, make me laugh. I think I especially loved Rose's comment about the American's throwing all of their tea into the harbor.

Duh, Heath, didn't anybody ever teach you how to fall in the correct fashion? No? Me neither. Somebody should teach me.

And they are lost, because Health couldn't resist transportation via rocks. Heheh. Well at least they found out where they were, and, as Heath said, they *didn't* fall into the ocean, so that's a good thing!

Willy-nilly :), I've had to use that recently...it was an impulsive NEED to use willy-nilly (but I have no idea why).

Their bickering amuses me!

Great chapter, and sorry again about my tardiness!

-Rumpel

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the beginning! That went through about five rewrites before I was satisfied. Description is my Achilles' heel! And no, Stonehenge definitely was not the best means of transportation! I loved including that bit of American history! My inner nerd couldn't resist :P

No one's ever taught me how to do it either, but it seems like something one should know!

Heath is quite the optimist. He might not know how to fall properly, but he definitely knows how to get back up!

Willy-nilly is a seriously underrated and underused word in the English language. We should bring it back ;)

Thanks so much for reading!

Name: marauderfan (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Uncharted

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I love Raj even though I don't even think he's going to show up much in this story. He puts up with living with Heath, and he sings Celestina Warbeck in the shower. Another minor character I love who probably will never show up again is the woman wearing fluorescent green robes and walking her pet ferret on a matching leash. Even the unimportant details in this story really shine, which just makes it so much fun to read!

HAHAHA, of course wizards in the USA are using the metric system! I thought this tidbit was so funny as I usually consider the USA to be a bit backwards in not accepting the metric system, but turns out it's just the muggles. Wizards have been up to date with the times since the metric system was first invented! And that in itself is funny too because wizards are generally such a backwards society themselves, or at least just a little antiquated - you know, using quills and parchment, a wireless, etc. So great. Also, you will probably be amused to know that I just googled the origins of the metric system because after reading this I was curious if Napoleon really was the one who thought it up XD

Warthogs... XD

As much as Heath is shown in a kind of silly way here for stashing away his chocolate frogs, I can kind of relate because I did the same thing stocking up on dark chocolate Bounty when I went to the UK.

The guy welcoming everyone to Stonehenge is totally one of the people from the futuristic utopia in Bill and Ted's Excellent Adventure. As soon as everyone walks in I'm expecting some powerful music to play.

How lucky are all these wizards and witches who get to just camp at Stonehenge?

Ooh, I love the idea of Stonehenge as part of a network - like a prehistoric King's Cross, as Molly describes it :P Honestly, the idea of it transporting you to an unknown destination sounds absolutely awesome. Well, mostly awesome. The only thing that would kind of suck is that you may not be adequately prepared for the climate. What if it sent you to somewhere high in the Himalayas, and then the Sahara? Assuming that someone built structures out of rocks there. I mean, other than that, it would be totally amazing. But Heath is tempting fate by repeatedly asking what's the worst that could happen. You never ask that question, because it always does happen, haha.

Ahh! This just got so exciting. Great chapter :)

Author's Response: Unfortunately, you are correct. Raj will not be showing up much in this story. However, I have plans for a sequel, and he WILL feature as a main character there! So there is more Raj in the future, but the future is just very distant. Haha, the woman with the pet ferret is great. Perhaps, one day, she will also get a story...

The Wizarding kind of the United States are oddly forward-thinking in their use of the metric system :P Thanks to Fantastic Beasts and Where to Find Them, they seem pretty backward like the rest of Wizarding folk in other aspects, however. And I'm always pleased to inspire a google!

I find nothing odd in stockpiling chocolate. Nothing odd at all... *looks around shiftily*

Oh, powerful music definitely played. No one heard it except Socks and Sandals, that's all.

The witches and wizards are pretty lucky. I made myself jealous writing that.

Being transported to an unknown location is basically Molly's worst nightmare, and Heath's dreams come true :P I tend to agree with you and Molly. What if you're transported to the middle of the ocean?! Heath's head needs to be screwed on properly, for sure!

Thanks for the wonderful review! :)

Name: Your Secret Snowflake (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Uncharted

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Originally left on 12/29/2015

I'm back again for another chapter!

And you didn't disappoint of course. In just the first few paragraphs, it's already pretty hilarious. Heath was late in his own flat? Raj the wannabe soprano? (Also, Socks and Sandals... love him and his predictions!) All your characters are pretty hilarious/awesome in their own ways. Molly has quite a few snarky comments, whereas Heath just has general misunderstandings of things that we're all familiar with, Platform 9 3/4, the Hogwarts classes as clubs and chocolate frogs! It's really well done, because when they converse with each other, it just flows really well and is easy yet interesting to read.

Characters aside, I love where you're going with the plot too. Heath is just so eager to jump in an explore, who knows what crazy scenarios he'll put the pair into? I'm sure using the Stonehenge as a teleportation device is just the start of many cool ideas.

Anyway, I'm still loving this story!

It's funny, exciting and awesome!

-Your Secret Snowflake

Author's Response: Raj is great. I will write more Raj in the future, I think. He has become a character who is very dear to my heart and he probably exists for a total of ten lines all up. What a guy.

I love writing HeathandMolly - I wrote that on purpose because that's how I think of them in my head. Like symbiotes. Some day, they will start to think of each other like that too.

Thanks so much for the reviews! I have enjoyed them immensely and am pleased as punch that you have enjoyed the story so far!

Name: merlins beard (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Uncharted

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Stonehenge as an old train station... hmmm sounds familiar... I think I read that in a children's book somewhere... I really like the idea tho, and I also think it's great that they visit Stonehenge first, because Heath is right, the british witches and wizards don't travel much. Even a weekend trip to see Stonehenge would be too much for many of them...

I'm not sure what to say to Socks and Sandals (other than his terrible fashion sense... I'm really not picky, nor do I have even the slightest idea about what's fashionable, but even I know you just can't do THAT)

I wonder if we're going to hear more about Rose's aura... it seems to be different, since she feels stuff the others don't notice..,

Can't wait to read more,

xxx

~Anja

Author's Response: Really? There's a story about Stonehenge as a train station out there? I want to read it! That sounds SO COOL. I basically chose Stonehenge as their starting point because I'm a giant nerd and Stonehenge is cool. But Heath has a point - the wizarding community doesn't really enjoy leaving their comfort zone all that much.

Yup. Socks and Sandals is weird. But the point is that you meet a lot of weird people when you travel. It's part of the charm!

And ooh! Spooky aura around Molly! Yes, more fun times ahead about that *smirks*

Name: TreacleTart (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Uncharted

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Hello again,

I'm here to finish the review that you requested on the forums.

So Heath and Molly are off on an adventure! I'm excited to see where they end up. The back and forth between them is really great. Molly is cool as a cucumber and it's going to be hard for Heath to really get her to warm up.

I did find the flow of this chapter to be kind of off. The jumping ahead in time periodically threw me off a bit. I see that it's separated by dividers, but I think you could improve on the way that you transition the different sections.

I also noticed some awkward sentences in this chapter. It seems like you try to cram a lot of detail into one sentence. Sometimes it works, but other times it doesn't. I would suggest maybe breaking some of that up.

And finally...The Hippie dude is not my cup of tea at all. In all honestly I found him to be rather annoying and I felt it detracted a bit from the story. I guess I just don't see an old Hippie working as a tour guide in the UK. Maybe if this was some cute beach town in Los Angeles the character might fit more. His repetitions of ""Dude"" over and over again also seemed fairly stereotypical.

I hope this doesn't come off as overly-harsh because I certainly don't mean it that way. I really am enjoying this story.

~TreacleTart (Kaitlin)

Author's Response: Hello! *waves*

Adventure time! I've never really written an adventure story before where the setting changes so often, so I'm looking forward to the challenge, as well as being a little scared about how I'm actually going to do it.

The time jumps are very choppy. I have to work on the transitions, for sure!

Gosh, my sentence structures get a little out of hand sometimes. Thanks for letting me know!

I've had mixed reactions to the hippie. I really enjoyed writing him, and I'm surprisingly happy with either reaction to him. Some people have loved him for being so weird, other people have not. Some of his dialogue could do with a little work though...

No, it's not harsh at all! I'm very happy that you're being honest :)

Name: Japans Arc Angel (Anonymous) · Date: 02 Oct 2018 11:58 PM · For: Uncharted

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It is nice to see the slight relationship development between Molly and Heath, their typical British/American conversations are subtly amusing.

But I was a little sad that Raj wouldn't be coming along on their adventure! Hoping that he makes an appearance soon.

I did wonder though, perhaps there's a specific reason for it, why the train? I would have thought that they would apparate, or at least use a portkey.

It was nice to hear of Agatha again, I hope that she's a source of persuasion for Molly throughout, and the driving force behind her changing her life to what she wants, rather than what is expected of her.

I'm not usually into the whole predicting the future to give away the story thing, but I think you handled it fairly well in honesty. You gave a snippet away but didn't babble on and ruin what's coming, so that was very well done, even if I'm not totally convinced by Socks and Sandles as a character.

I do think however, that last exchange between Molly, Heath and S&S could have been filled out a bit more, rather than a simple serious of statements, perhaps indicating how they were feeling in regards to the situation and to each other.

Awesome cliffy through! Definitely makes you want to read on, which I will be doing!

Many thanks

Author's Response: Yes! Molly and Heath trying to get along is always fun to write. And as for Raj... I have a sequel in the works that will feature him as the main character, so there is definitely going to be more Raj at some point.

The only reason I used a train was because I wanted to write these two together trying to get along in a confined setting. A portkey would've made more sense, but it's fun writing wizards using muggle technology.

I wasn't sure whether or not I wanted to include that predicting the future scene. I decided to use it because it sort of fit Socks and Sandals' character. He's definitely not everyone's cup of tea, but that's sort of the point - some characters rub you the wrong way.

Oh, goodness! Yes, that last section is totally rushed! Thanks for reminding me of that! Something else to add to the editing list!

Thank you so much for this lovely review :)