Name: LadyL8 (Signed) · Date: 05 Dec 2017 03:35 PM · For: Tea with Ms Applegate

Hey There,

 

I'm here for the Winter Holiday Event to leave a review for Team Phoenix. It's been a while since the last time I read one of your stories, so I thought it was about time to come back and check out one of your stories again. Tbh I can't even remember if I've read this story before, but it looks really good so I figured if I have read it before, I can always just read it again. Anyway, I'll stop talking now and start reading :)

 

Okay, so first of all. I'm a big Hannah/Neville shipper, so this is just my kind of story. Hannah is one of my favourite Harry Potter characters, so I was really happy to see your characterisation of her. She's just how imagine her to be: kind and caring. I absolutely love that Hannah buys flowers for Neville every time they fight. I mean how lucky is Neville?! I'd love it if someone did that for me. And with Neville loving herbology as much as he does, that's an extremely thoughtful gift. Hannah is just the sweetest. I love her. And I love how much Hannah clearly cares for Neville, and their relationship is just sweetest ever. You can tell they really love each other.

 

I also found her relationship with Ms Applegate to be really interesting. Ms Applegate sounds like a really lovely and caring woman, and she clearly knows Hannah really well. I love that she listens to Hannah and offers great advice. She's a good friend. And well, I just really liked the story. It was really beautiful and I absolutely loved getting to see more of Hannah and Neville. Great job! Thank you so much for sharing!

 

-   Lotte

Name: Dojh167 (Signed) · Date: 22 Jun 2017 03:16 PM · For: Tea with Ms Applegate

Review transferred from HPFF:

 

I came to read one of your shortish stories before sleep and found you had a new one up - I feel like a winner!

I am very tired, but trying to meet my goal of five reviews for tonight (this is #5), so excuse me if this review wavers in and out of helpfulness.

First, I must clense myself of any preconception that this Hannah has anything to do with the Hannah I write. ufewvkjeicbqocnabcfeipcnel bkvbvwhbolebvkewjbckjebcfekwhgvj edgvcjwey gvwejgkewygckw jevcaweoihkd sifgblaofyhb efueuigwfo hjwhofwuoehuw ebkwefguwi iwefnljweiojfoiweflwe. Okay. Moving on.

The reference to Hannah having gotten quite close to Ms Applegate makes me wonder if she gets flowers on many occasions, or only specifically when she and Neville fight. [nevermind, this is kind of answered later]

Also, women buying men flowers is the best.

The parenthetical aside about the roses seems a little out of place. It suggests a kind of narrative tone that, while I could see you writing, does not seem o continue throughout the story. I think you could achieve the same comment in a different structure, such as "She considered buying them, but..."

I love all of the creativity you put into all of the different kinds of magical flowers! It really adds to the story.

The explanation of the first time Hannah had been in the shop kind of interrupts the dialogue, and makes Applegate's next line seem a bit disconnected. Maybe the backstory description could be moved to earlier in the story?

In the context of their close relationship,Ms Applgate's opening dialogue seems a bit too sales-y, like she's reciting what she always does to customers. I would think she'd be a bit more asual when speaking to someone she knows as well as Hannah. If this is specific information about the flowers you want to get in (which is of course very interesting) you could have her speaking to another customer before she sees Hannah and show the change in her demeanor.

Favorite: "knobwanded flobberworm"

It seems interesting to me that Hannah would miss having a garden more than Neville would when away from Hogwarts.

It also makes me sad that Neville is dismissive and says there are gardens at Hogwarts when Hannah is the one who wants one and she won't be living at Hogwarts.

I can definitely understand Hannah's desire to hold onto someplace special like Neville's Gran's house, especially when she will now be spending far fewer months out of the year with him, and I can imagine she'd want the time she has with him to be very special. And with her working and living at the Leaky Cauldron, it would come to feel more like "her" place, and she would want somewhere that felt like "their" place. Now I want a fic about Hannah when Neville first goes away.

Haha, "The idea of the summer house is good too... How is it that I never see the obvious solutions to our problems" I was right there with you, Hannah.

Hehe, of course Susan is gay.

I love how you summarize the different relationship dynamics of all these different couples. But it makes me sad that Luna lives with any bitterness.

I have to admit, I'm not crazy about this Neville. The fact that he just expects the fight to go away, but doesn't apologize or acknowledge how he upset her, leaving Hannah the one to propose the compromise.

Overall, I thought that this was incredibly sweet. I understand that this was one of your older stories, and hope by critique didn't seem too much or irrelevant. I really enjoyed this story. I am thinking about writing more of my Hannah any day now. Any day now.

Sam.

Name: poppunkpadfoot (Signed) · Date: 21 Jun 2017 10:45 AM · For: Tea with Ms Applegate

Aw wow this was so lovely! It's strange that reading a story about a fight made me feel so warm and fuzzy ahaha.

Okay can I just note that I think Anise Applegate is a great name? Haha. She was really cool, I want to know more about her tbh. That she offered Hannah tea that very first time she and Neville had had a row really endeared me to her. She's obviously a very caring woman.

Aw Hannah and Neville's relationship was really so sweet. I like that you kinda flipped the flower-giving tradition on its head, as it's almost always the man giving the flowers as an apology in m/f relationships ahaha. And also that she wasn't giving him flowers because she was firmly In The Wrong, rather that they had kind of mutually had a fight and she wanted to fix it. That really made it a bit unusual and elevated it above the flower-giving trope.

I also really liked the part where Hannah started thinking about all the different ways her friends fight. Dean and Seamus in particular cracked me up hahaha. Harry and Ginny concerned me but I'm trying not to think too much into it since that's not what this story is about!

I'm glad that we got to see Hannah go back to Neville and see them "kiss and make up", as it were! The summer house is a great idea so hopefully that works out for them! Sucks about the garden still tho :( (I say as though they're real people... hahaha)

Anyways I really enjoyed reading this, great work!

-Kayla