Name: Renacera (Signed) · Date: 30 Jan 2021 09:34 AM · For: Three Small Glimpses

Awww, this is such a sweet snippet of time! You're totally right that we get this scene from Harry/Ron/Hermione's point of view, but not from anyone else's.

I love that you started this with Lucy! I'm kind of a sucker for Percy and Audrey, so seeing a moment with their daughters was nice. :)  And I loved that she was trying to listen, but she's also 12, so...sorry Perce.

Then we have a lovely moment with Astoria. She's such a sweetheart, and I love how much she loves Scorpius. The unconditional aspect of that is so precious, and her insistence that Houses don't matter is so very in line with how I picture her as a character.

Finally, we have Teddy lamenting the difficulties of being an adult, haha. Me too, Teddy, me too. (I say, at 28 years old...)  But it's a cute moment where he has to buckle down so that he can get things together before theatre school (!!!) and before Victoire graduates. They're a cute couple, and despite his insecurities, I think they'll make it. 

Really good job with this! It was a nice add-on to the epilogue.

Best,
Emily


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Name: melian (Signed) · Date: 20 Jun 2017 08:06 PM · For: Three Small Glimpses

*transferred from HPFF*

 

That was really sweet! Three little vignettes from that day at Platform nine and three quarters, when the epilogue was set. I liked how you set it up, with first a Weasley, then a Malfoy, then a Lupin, with different generations and different reasons for being there.

 

 

First let's lookat Lucy. I liked how she wondered if her father had intentionally sabotaged her second year at Hogwarts with his broomstick regulations. After all first years aren't allowed them, are they? Lol. Nicely done. Her seeing Uncle Harry was a nice segue into the next headspace, which was Astoria Greengrass Malfoy.

 

I liked how youc haracterised her. She nodded at Harry, Ron and Hermione ("the three most famous people in wizarding Britain", as of course they would be) but they didn't notice her among the crowd. And why would they? There were probably a million people who wanted to talk to them.

 

And last but not least, Teddy. You're right, Teddy. Being and adult is hard work, especially when your significant other - and it was a new relationship, by the sounds of it - is not yet there. After alll, she's legally an adult as you have to be 17 to be starting seventh year, but she's still got that year at school. It's an interesting juxtaposition, isn't it?

 

All in all a lovely look at the platofrm that day. Well done!

 

Cheers Mel