Name: abhorsen (Signed) · Date: 14 May 2017 11:58 AM · For: A girl with red hair soft as velvet, glossy as silk

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Ooooh, I liked this. In my head canon, Dominique is always, always queer, so it always feels weird to me to read a Dominique who’s straight. When I saw your story, I had to read it.

 

I loved this. Your prose was really lovely; the way Dominique described Imogen’s red hair as opposed to Weasley red hair was vivid and sensual. I could almost see Imogen’s hair, and honestly, by the end, I was a little jealous.

 

I also really enjoyed the juxtaposition between Dominique’s daydreaming about her and the actual interaction at the end of the story. I got this sense of elegance and dreaminess from Dominique’s thoughts - almost like I imagine people saw Fleur, and presumably Victoire and Dominique herself. But the real Imogen was a little bit of a firecracker - I loved it.

 

Amazing job. :)

 

 - Branwen

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Name: Stella Blue (Signed) · Date: 29 Jan 2017 05:25 PM · For: A girl with red hair soft as velvet, glossy as silk

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Hey Kapa! I'm here with the Pride weekend reviewing event on HPFT!

eee I love this. You use your words very well - your descriptions are just stunning! I love the way you describe Imogen's hair with all the adjectives that relate to feeling - velvety, silky, etc. Especially as she's only admired Imogen from afar so this is all just wistful thinking for her, but it's clear she's had these feelings for a long time.

This is a great characterization of Dominique as well - with a sister like Victoire who is the first Weasley grandchild and (I've always imagined) looks a lot like Fleur and is similarly popular, Dominique is kind of in the shadow of her older sister and you conveyed that feeling really well in Dominique's sort of resent of the expectations placed upon her by her classmates (or at least the boys).

they seem to think that love only can blossom inside the hallowed halls of Hogwarts -- okay I love this so much because isn't this the way it's always portrayed in like every fic ever, and the books? your teenage love is your love FOR LIFE. haha so I appreciated that jab.

I can totally relate to Dominique being so shy around her crush though :P and I love that Imogen is so confident and perceptive (well... maybe she didn't need to be perceptive, as it's highly likely Dominique wasn't as subtle as she thought :P) and talks to Dominique at the end! I loved the scene when they met eyes across the room and I'm so happy it turned out well for both of them :)

Congrats on the every words counts challenge as well. I think that challenge brings out really incredible writing because you can only say so much with a limited word count, but you definitely succeeded - you said SO MUCH, conveyed so many feelings, with those 500 words. I really enjoyed reading this!

 

Author's Response:

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Hello, Kristin!

 

Thank you so much for reviewing this story, and I’m happy you liked it! Having my writing described as “stunning” is just… wheeee! : )

 

I’m glad you like my characterisation of Dominique here – she’s ne of my favourite Next Gen characters because there are so many interesting directions you can take her in! And her relationship with her older sister is always ripe for drama and/or cuteness, haha!

 

Hehe, I always like it when people catch my “jab”, as you say, at the traditional fanfics trope – and the Canon itself, as you point out – of “your teenage love is your love FOR LIFE”, hehehe. So nice catch! : P

 

I like the idea that Dominique wasn’t as subtle as she thought – maybe everyone but the boys vying for her heart, who are too caught up in their own wishful thinking, have already guessed that Dom likes Imogen, hahaha! (And maybe people try to point it out to those boys all the time, and they’re like “Noooooo, that’s not possible! She’s gonna end up with ME!”…) : P

 

I’m happy you think the ending works, and that you think I managed to get a lot across! I really enjoyed reading your review, haha!

 

/Kapa