Name: BellaLestrange87 (Signed) · Date: 30 Mar 2018 06:56 PM · For: Bittersweet

*review transferred from HPFF*

 

Hi Kaitlin! I'm here for our review swap!

I really enjoyed this. Their relationship was really well developed, and very natural.

I feel really sad for Ginny, about Fred's death (which she's obviously having a hard time getting over), and about the fact that she's relying on alcohol to get through her grief.

Their conversation in the pub was very well done. It seemed just right for two people who had known each other during school, but hadn't been *extremely extremely* close, but friendly acquaintances. *rambles on forever*

Angelina's crush on and attraction to Ginny was excellently written. I love how you built it up and showed how Ginny's company gave Angelina the courage to steal brooms from Madam Hooch's office.

Their kiss was perfect. Absolutely perfect. And that last line - such a good way to end the story with!

I loved this one-shot and I'll definitely be back to read some more of your lovely work soon!

~Olivia

Author's Response:

Hey Olivia! THank you for the original review and for transferring it over to HPFT. 

~Kaitlin

Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 18 Dec 2017 02:50 PM · For: Bittersweet

Hello!

 

A Ginny x Angelina pairing is completely new to me (which makes it all the more exciting)! Yeah, I can imagine that Ginny, as well as many others, would be internally torn apart in the aftermath of the war, especially with Ginny now at her brother's funeral. I do love that Angelina wants to help her, to bring that spark back to life that's now missing from within Ginny. Understandably, Ginny wouldn't want to talk about Fred--she's probably ready to get her mind off things. With both of these fabulous ladies being Quidditch players, having them fly together to get their minds off of things makes so much sense, and I love the life it almost immediately brings to Ginny and how much of herself returns to her when she races Angelina around the Quidditch pitch. And, of course, the ending is so sweet and tender--I love the way they came together in this, starting out in grief and finding each other to be happy with. 

 

-Rumpels

Author's Response:

Thank you for your review.

~Kaitlin

Name: Dojh167 (Signed) · Date: 22 Jun 2017 03:23 PM · For: Bittersweet

Review Transferred from HPFF:

 

FSF Award Review #4

Yay, femslash! Better yet, queer Quidditch players. You've got me.

While I don't seen Ginny/Angelina working as a long term relationship, I can definitely believe that there would be a strong attraction between them, and you've written that very well here.

I love how you say that Ginny's fire has become smoke and ash! Perfect, beautiful words. The way you describe Ginny's eyes as dull is very poignant, as it contrasts their usual state, and yet is an easily imaginable visual.

Angelina's attention on Ginny in the funeral seems innocent enough, and could be passed off as decent compassion. However, there must be so many grieving people at that funeral, and the way that Angelina focuses in on Ginny suggests a deeper fascination.

I wonder if everyone dispersed after the funeral, or if most of the Weasleys stuck together. Is Ginny specifically avoiding facing that continued grief?

You're missing an apostrophe in war's in " Now that the wars over"

I'm a little confused by "but with all of the years off of a broom" I'm not sure if it's a grammar issue or just timeline clarity. Ginny would only have been off a broom for a year at this point, correct?

Oops, and missing end-quotes: “Flying.

I love how out of her way Angelina is ready to go in order to try to brighten things up for Ginny.

Returning to the castle in the weight of their grief is very powerful and real.

I guess I never thought before about where Madam Hooch's office would be, but it seems odd that there wouldn't be brooms closer to the Quidditch pitch.

Your description of Angelina watching Ginny fly is breathtaking, and a really effective way to show her feelings. I also love that you make it clear that Angelina knows Ginny is a fast flyer than her, considering her own not inconsiderable skill. I can definitely see how that degree of competition and respect factors into her feelings.

I generally think of Angelina as extremely driven and confident, and you've added a layer of insecurity here, with Ginny having to assure her that she's a good flyer and her feelings of awkwardness towards the end.

Ack, and the ending! I like.

Write femslash always, mkay? =D

Sam.

Author's Response:

Hey Sam, 

Thank you for your original review and for transferring it over from HPFT. You're the best! 

~Kaitlin