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Hi, Jill, my dear! Here for your holiday gift! <3
Ah, yes! The seat thief is back! :D I wonder what the right tan of coffee is for Emma, but I bet very dark... :P Also, of course the pretty blonde is Clarke! I don't remember if I guessed so when we first met her or not, but anyway I'm very excited for this date too... is it bad that I'm currently shipping Emma/Clarke more than Memma? :P Maybe because Murphy seems just so toxic at the moment... but of course the chemistry between them is just as insane as always... if they would just be honest about their feelings... but I love the chemistry between the two girls, too. It's obvious that there is something deep brewing there, and as I said, I'm excited to see where it goes... Erm... I feel like I've been rambling a bit too much, sorry :P
I'm a little bit angry at Murphy right now... his behaviour in that last scene felt a bit entitled... on the other hand, they've been both playing at this stupid game where they claim they don't want a relationship one moment and act like they have the exclusive on the other the next... so, yeah, I guess it's Emma's fault as much as Murphy's, if you can even talk of fault... again, why can't they just be honest about their feelings? It would make everybody's lives so much easier :P (but I suppose that wouldn't give you a story to tell, and it wouldn't be Memma, right? :P)
Sorry if this review is a bit short and a bit of a mess... but lovely work as always, my dear! <3
Big snowball hug and happy holidays!
Chiara
Hello, Jill, my dear! Here for our swap! <3
Oh, my! These idiots! Why can't they just admit that they care for each other, that they want something deeper than just casual sex? But sure, sure, keep being in denial... you are only making things hard for yourselves, but if that's what you want...
I do feel a bit bad for Murphy... I suppose that message would hit hard... and I can totally understand being too busy and exhausted to answer to a message, especially when the message requires some emotional effort to process... so, no, not blaming him at all for that.
But I'm blaming both of them for getting nowhere with that confrontation! It was just so frustrating to read, lol! And then, of course, it ended in sex and they are back to where they were before the message... or maybe not? Because even if they didn't say what they should've said, those things are on their minds, so maybe they'll come out sooner or later? Guess we'll see... and what is it about James? Does Murphy think that if he became serious with Emma, he would betray his friendship somehow? Is it that the real issue? I suppose I can see it, but...
Okay, I love James and Nate being super competitive. :P I mean, I do feel for Nate a little, it can be annoying to be the loser, especially when the winner is being unsufferably smug about it... :P Is Murphy going to give James a run for his money? Because I think James would need it, lol! :P
Did I mention before that I like Raven? She's just so clever, sees right through people's bullshit, and Emma and Murphy need someone to call them out on their nonsense, right? Of course she would immediately notice that Murphy is not really there with his mind, and it's not so hard to guess why... ;) I wonder how Emma took his "sorry, can't" reply... I hope not too bad...
But back to Raven... she's so clever, but not when it comes to her own feelings and James, and I think that's so cute... :P Isn't that how it always goes, though? We are always the last to realize when we fancy someone? ;)
Sorry, this review is a mess... but great chapter as always, I really enjoyed reading it!
Thank you so much for the swap, always a pleasure! <3
Big snowball hug,
Chiara
Hi, Jill! Here for our swap! :D
Oooooh, the stunning desk thief... I wonder where this is going, if anywhere... :P Such a typical college situation, but it never gets old, lol! :P
Really enjoyed watching their interaction, btw! And yes, I subscribe, quit smoking, Emma!
Ah, Murphy... why are you like this? But I guess that's just how they work, trying to get the other jealous and all that... never works as one would like, does it?
Okay but still. You’re Emma. You feel things and you feel them deeply. Yes, exactly, what Raven said! Emma can deny feeling for Murphy all she wants, but we all know she does... and we all know that this relationship isn't exactly healthy for either of them... but that's why we readers are so invested in it, am I right?
It's so typically Emma, sending that message just because she wants to prove a point with Raven, when this is the last thing she actually wants to do... and Raven is not impressed, of course. She knows it's not going to last... hopefully, it won't create additional useless conflict, though... (or maybe it will, and again, that's what keeps us readers engaged, so... :P)
Another great chapter! Very curious to see what happens next! ;)
Thank you so much for the swap offer!
Big snowball hug,
Chiara
hey jill
here for our swap!
I'm so glad to be back with the story after your re-write of this story. i loved how reading this story that i'm like instantly falling in love again when I come back to it and i'm excited to see the story developed more. i love the contrast between emma and her brother how you've described it. there is obviously a lot of feelings especially on emma's part about how they do things. i love emma's chaos personally. i love emma mentioning that she was seeing murphy so needed to look nice but no particular reason. i'm so obsessed how down hard she is for him.
i love the raven/james reunion being a little too much considering they see each other so recently. we love an idiots in love trope and can't wait to see how raven and james mesh together. their vibes are very promising so far. look to seeing more raven in general. again the twins contrast against each other with their love lives. the line about happiness feels so powerful. I'm very impressed at james level of being oblivious to memma.
memma's chemistry is insane like erriobroibobrob3r KEYBOARD MASH good. i love them and your words are AMAZING. i love the messy nature of them as a pairing. its all so perfect. <3
Abbi xx
Finally got through work and adulting enough that I can get back to this story which is fantastic because I have been DYING to know what is about to happen. I haven’t noted this yet, but your Taylor references are exquisite and this chapter title has me with :eyes:
Okay. Back into the drama. Let’s do this! (but like…maybe there won’t be drama and maybe Murphy will just be honest and vulnerable and who am I kidding he’s gonna be a dick and ruin everything isn’t he?)
AHHHHH Even while she’s thinking about how much she likes Clarke SHE’S NOT MURPHY. I.AM.SCREAMING!!!!! That is enough reason to go tell him how you feel and get a straight answer out of him! No one else is ever going to be Murphy my girl. Oof it’s so tough to still be holding onto him like she is and not pursuing something stronger, she’ll never get over him that way.
But I guess she doesn’t really want to get over him does she? She wants to get under him - ayoo! Can’t blame her there either. HOLY SHIT. What?! Wait No seriously WHAT?! Is she dreaming? THE FUCK IS HAPPENING RIGHT NOW JOHN MURPHY?! I’m so glad I’m in the privacy of my own home because I quite literally just shrieked.
NOOOOOO GOD DAMN IT. I knew it probably was a dream but I still had hope XD
Oh Emma. Ugh I wanna just wrap her in the biggest hugs. I’m glad Jasper is there for her. Oof your writing just feels so effortless through this whole first half. I’m fully engrossed in this dream, then her rushing to the bathroom, then she makes this hard pivot and starts crying out of nowhere - but it isn’t out of nowhere, you’ve laid such good breadcrumbs to motivate this into such a human moment of almost grief in a way. This sadness for the relationship that never was she’s maybe - just maybe - actually letting go of.
The range of emotions she - and me - just went through is a testament to your skills with character driven writing. Loving this chapter and I’m only half-way through.
My one gripe is that Jasper needs to shut the fuck up. He don’t know. Otherwise I’m team Jasper all the way.
Eek okay she’s going to end this. She’s going to try and end this at least. It’s for the best. Clean break girly. Clear your head and your heart. OR MAKE HIM FIGHT FOR YOU but that’s on him to do so we’ll see how this goes.
So what. His response was SO WHAT. CAN WE SAY IT LOUDER FOR SOMEONE IN THE BACK?! EMMA GIRL DID YOU NOT HEAR HIM? Did I read that wrong? She said you know this means something to you too and he said SO WHAT. THAT’S AN ADMISSION. THAT’S AGREEMENT. Honey he didn’t say no I don’t or that’s not true or it doesn’t matter how I feel we can’t be anything more he said SO WHAT IF I DO YOU’RE CHOOSING CLARKE!!!
I am seriously heartbroken right now because she was CRYING on a bathroom floor wishing she could choose him - convincing herself that she couldn’t because he’d never admit how he felt - hyping herself up to end things so pumped and focused on her anger and bitterness that she missed him slip up and be honest in that moment. It’s almost like she was so thrown by him seeing her so clearly, that she was only ending things because of Clarke entering the picture that it overshadowed what else was said. TRAGIC.
OH GOD AND JAMES KNOWS?! And she’s about to be stuck in a car with him for hours? He couldn’t have waited until after the trip to drop that on her?! Girl has been going THROUGH IT today.
So grateful for the swap. Can’t wait for the next chapters to drop. Good luck on this rewrite! So far it’s incredible and I’m sure you have even more twisty drama up your talented sleeves.
- Jacquelin
Here Again (2/3)
Literally just kept reading because I am so scared for the reason that Murphy had to just suddenly show up at her house - it felt like a cry for help or solace and boy did he not get either - but also this title has me SCREAMING already and I just need to know what’s happening.
Missing someone at an important event means YOU CARE ABOUT THEM GIRLY POP. You’re not wishing Clarke was there I notice?!
Ok Dropship party time! These two have a really cute dynamic. Emma and Clarke I mean. They’re not fiery like her and murphy, like that hot spark, more like an adorable sort of cozy chemistry.
OF COURSE HE’S JEALOUS! He is keeping his distance from you love. He’s putting distance between you because he needs it. Because if he’s going to not ruin your happiness he needs to not be close to you because he can’t be close to you and not catch on fire aren’t you paying attention?!!?!
AHHHH How am I supposed to not keep reading with an ending like that?! What is Emma gonna do - is Murphy gonna let her do it? Will her breaking them off be enough for him to tell her he doesn’t want that, that she shouldn’t be with Clarke?! Probably not but ahhhh what is it gonna take damn it? AND WHY DID HE SHOW UP THAT NIGHT?! Okay, I have to go to work but all I wanna do is keep reading. Alas. I will return soon!
- Jacquelin
Hey! Here for our swaps (1/3)
Ahh! I was wondering if Jasper was gonna rat him out. Jasper out here stirring the pot and making delicious drama for me to eat up.
I love the way you have Emma using being sleep deprived as a reason for being paranoid. It’s such a good justification to excuse those feelings away.
I’m conflicted about Raven. I don’t know if she was flirting with Murphy on purpose or if she’s just a flirty person. If she was doing in with intention that’s pretty crappy. She knows how Emma feels. She teased her about wanting it to mean something more so for her to be now injecting herself in between them is shitty. Not acting like Emma or Murphy are top tier, but Raven doesn’t have to be in their mess. At least she oughta say something to Emma about it.
Oh this cutie is back?! I knew it was gonna be Clarke! Ah and she’s all twisty about this date. That’s so cute. Oop. Murphy walking in so smooth. Jasper giving him the evil eye is sending me. I’m freaking here for it. Keep on them Jasper!
Oof. I love the detail that he’s not taken his eyes off of her. She’s all dressed up and he is hooked! Oh no. I feel like something really awful happened. Or that he pulled himself by his bootstraps and was gonna tell her his feelings but then once he heard she was going on a date and saw how dressed up she was he lost his nerve. But he really needed her tonight and he’s not ever gonna tell her and then be mad that she wasn’t there and just ahhhhh
I love this. I’m obsessed with their constant misalignment.
She could explore what something more means with Murphy - actually explore it, not just assume it won’t work and that he’s not boyfriend material.
Great chapter! Awesome tension. The stakes feel like they're raising and I'm scared, excited, and horrified for what it means when they collapse.
- Jacquelin
Hi, Jill! Here for our swap! (Sorry if I'm a bit late...)
Oh, James! Hello there! :D I think he was always gone in all the other fics I read, so I never properly got to meet him... I love the idea of him being super organized, opposite of Emma who is totally chaotic! But it makes sense, and makes for a great sibling dynamic, I'm sure! :D
Oh, they are organizing a surprise birthday party for Raven? That's so sweet of them, even if Raven doesn't have great appreciation for her birthday or surprises... and aww, how cute that James and Raven seem to have this sort of unaware attraction! Isn't that how it all goes? Everyone can see they are into each other and a perfect couple except themselves? :P (That hug surely was something... so sweet!!!)
Okay, Emma... let's pretend for a little bit longer that there's nothing serious going on between you and Murphy... and that the effort you are putting into looking good for him doesn't mean anything...
Poor Emma... going through all the tragic what if scenarios... :P I had to chuckle at that, lol! :P
At least, the surprise party was juat a quiet night out with friends, so not to bad, Raven, right? ;) Yes, that's what happiness feels like! <3
And here we are again... There was a small piece of me that wanted to ask him what this meant. So it does mean something more than sex to you, after all? And I'm quite sure it does mean something more for Murphy, too, even if he'd probably never admit it... but we'll see how everything evolves in later chapters, right? ;)
Lovely chapter as always! Thank you so much for the swap! :D
Big snowball hug,
Chiara
Hey Hey! Here for our swap :D
Ohhh! We’re getting a lil’ Murphy POV :heart eyes: AHHHH the turmoil! *And yet* Ok, I’m now flailing around because he thinks she’s predictable and that means that he knows her well enough for her to be predictable! AND HE FINDS IT ENDEARING!
I love the way you phrased this sentence “when he realized he was supposed to be the one to speak first.” It says so much more about the tension and silence that was lingering between them then just hesitation.
He winces when she calls him by his first name AHHH the drama!!!!!
I’m obsessed with the way he’s desperate for answers yet doesn’t give her any and also doesn’t realize he’s not giving her any. It feels so honest and human. This whole argument does. Neither one of them is saying what they really mean, they’re skirting around it or outright lying to hide from it so of course they’re frustrating each other!
These two know how to get steamy that’s for sure! Their chemistry the whole chapter is spicy XD
Also, I love these little nods to the show with the bar names! Fun way to bring those pieces into this AU.
Hmmmmm Seems Mr. Murphy is getting some feelings for Raven in the mix :eyes: Things gonna get verrrry spicy soon if that’s the case! But then she claps back at him with the Taylor Swift line!!!! YESSSSS DRAG HIM!!!!
Oof. This last bit hits so hard. He’s just hanging with his friends so he really isn’t doing anything wrong - but all he needs to do is be honest with her! LET YOURSELF FEEL SOMETHING DAMNIT!
Wonderful chapter. Loved getting insight into Murphy’s side of things and seeing him wrestle with these feelings. He doesn’t want to get too attached - even though he already fucking is - but so long as he can pretend he’s not then he feels safe enough to stay with whatever this is. These two crazy kids.
- Jacquelin
I really like the dichotomy you’ve drawn between Emma and her twin brother, the way he’s super organized and the way that she just drifts along. It shows the way two people who grew up together can be vastly different, almost opposite to each other. The sibling vibes are great here!
The lengths they go through to get Raven a much deserved non-celebration are adorably touching. It’s nice that Emma recognizes the issues Raven has with her birthday, but also it’s good of her to make the day special in a way that Raven otherwise wouldn’t experience. Perhaps in time they can overwrite the bad with the good.
Ah, but Emma sneaks in that thought about looking good, and we all know what she’s thinking, yeah?
Okay, so I’m not as sure as Emma that James doesn’t know what’s up with Murphy and her, because otherwise he wouldn’t have asked. I think Emma may be a little bit oblivious herself about this point. I guess we will have to wait and see.
Okay, yeah. I am sensing a lot of sweeping things under the rug here. This chemistry is bound to blow up sometime soon.
(grabs popcorn)
Pix
Hi! I'm here for our swap!
I don't know who that girl is, but how dare?? That was Emma's spot! I have a feeling we're going to see this girl again, but I hope next time, she doesn't steal Emma's seat. She was really rude. I wonder if this is Clarke? I only watched a couple episodes of the 100, but she's the only blonde I remember. And is it possible that Murphy has a new unknown rival?
Okay, but food really is the way to a girl's heart. Especially fries. And they have a standing friend date! I love that they make time for each other. It's really sweet, and Emma even brought Raven fries! Also, love the James mention and the ghost of a smile on Raven's face at the mention?
Murphy did what now? How dare. Someone's not going to get any fries.
Oh, yeah, the roster is totally doing its job.
...She's ending it?? I don't blame her after the Snap he sent, but I'm with Raven on this one. I don't think it's going to last very long, even if, as Emma said, they aren't dating.
Okay, Raven, putting smiley cups on coffee cups is adorable. But she absolutely has a point about Emma and Murphy. And Emma is absolutely hiding from her feelings, and I wonder how this is going to come back to bite her in the ass. The text still being unread three days later says something about Murphy, and I wonder how the next chapter's going to play out with these two not speaking.
Wonderful chapter as always, and I'm intrigued as to how Emma's going to get out of this situation. I am also wondering why Murphy would send that Snap. Maybe to make her jealous? Or, I don't know, Murphy, tell her how you feel! Or Emma should tell him how she feels!
Well, maybe not tell him right now. I do think that this is an interesting start to the relationship, and I'm really excited to see how it develops from their 'break-up'.
Thanks for swapping, and I hope you have a nice day!
-A
Hi! I'm here for our swap!
Emma has absolutely no chill. I love this about her, but she has absolutely no chill when it comes to Murphy. 'For no specific reason'. Rightttttt, so that's what we're calling it? The denial is strong with this one, I see.
Also, I love how these three put together a birthday celebration for Raven. They all care so much about each other, even if Raven is super-suspicious about it from pretty much the get-go. I love reading friendships like this, and I love how even though Raven seems to have figured it out quickly, she still spends time with her friends and, of course, Jamie.
'Both oblivious and idiots about it'. Hm. Perhaps Raven and James aren't the only oblivious idiots in this fic... But also, the hug between Raven and James is so sweet. The almost picking up! The fact that they clearly have a mutual crush! And Raven teasing Emma about her and Murphy! I am here for friend teasing about being oblivious whilst being simultaneously oblivious about their own feelings. It's just such a delicious irony, especially when they're as in denial as these four seem to be.
And they're sitting next to each other in the booth!! And he oh-so-nonchalantly brushes up against her! Also, yes, Emma, I'm pretty sure this is what happiness is supposed to feel like, but talk to him! Tell him how you feel!
Emma, babe, please talk to him. Please! Stop avoiding your feelings! I get not wanting to ruin your friendship, but pleaseeee talk to him. Pretty please. I do wonder if she's tried to ask him about things before and he hasn't answered, given her thoughts about the situation.
Also, can I just say how much I love the Taylor Swift references throughout this fic. They're sprinkled in so nicely, and I've been making sure to double-check what the chapter titles are so I can make sure I don't miss any references. I especially love the last line's reference, but I do worry that Emma's going to get herself burned even more than this. And definitely not in a fun way.
Also I might start shipping Jamie/Raven. They're adorable. Actually, yeah, I'm shipping them now. I have two ships in this now, and they're all oblivious idiots.
Thanks so much for swapping, and I hope you have a lovely day!
-A
Hey Hey! Here for our swap and more Emma/Murphy content
GAHHHHH!!! These two are such a wonderful trainwreck and I just wanna grab 'em both by the collar and tell them to play nice with each other! I'm really enjoying this rewrite you're doing and am so curious who the blonde girl is! Is it Clarke? Ah! I'm gonna have to read more and find out.
I loved the line about engineering words not making sense. Hard relate on that one XD. Also really liked the line where Raven said she falls in love with baristas who write smiley faces on her cup. That's such a fun, small detail that tells us SO much about Emma as a character. It's the perfect summary of falling hard and falling fast.
And the way you've ended this chapter was wonderful. I mean it's miserable because why you leave her on read for three fucking days Murphy?! But as a structure I really liked that it all led to those final statments and leave us in this wanting more state.
Which is the permanant state Emma and Murphy live in and so they just need to admit that to eachother cause ain't neither of them convincing anyone it's nothing. You don't try and hurt someone's feelings because you feel nothing for them bro - me thinks you doth protest too much!!!!
Lovely chapter. Lovely story. You write this will they/won't they while they already are sort of relationship that's so fun and heartbreaking and dynamic and aggrevating all at the same time lol love it.
Hi, Jill! <3
Finally here for our swap (sorry for the lateness...) and for some Memma goodness, of course! So excited! :D
This was a really fun start to the story! Ah, Emma... sure, sure, you are not getting attached to Murphy, not at all... Poor girl, though... what a disappointing night out... can't really blame her for seeking out Murphy after the Tinder Guy experience...
The chemistry between them is, as always, awesome! Loved the banter, the teasing, the naturalness of their interactions. You can just tell that they are totally familiar and comfortable with each other, free to be themselves, just taking it as it comes, if that makes sense? The way she just marchs in and takes his clothes while he goes on playing his videogame... I don't know... it is sort of wholesome... :P And of course they are so well matched from an intimate standpoint... ;) Their relationship might not be the healthiest, but their chemistry is just wonderful!
Btw, speaking of unhealthy... Murphy and I weren't exclusive. Plus, it was easy enough to ignore the unsettled feeling in my stomach at the thought of Murphy sleeping with other people. And I knew he had. I might sleep with more girls than him, but he slept with more guys. We might both be bi disasters but at least we're upfront about it. (Another fact Jasper found hilarious.) Don't know why, but I found this paragraph so amusing... :P
The morning-after conversation between Emma, Jasper and Raven was so amusing, too! They are a great friend trio, I enjoyed seeing their banter as well... and yes, they are giving Emma good advice, but she's not in the right mood to listen, is she? Also, maybe they are being too harsh on Murphy... and on Bellamy, too... Bellamy's not that bad, is he? :P Anyway...
"I don't understand why you don't like him," I protested. "He's Jamie's best friend and we've known him since freshman year-" / "And your brother would be the first one to tell you he's an asshole." Bet James would, lol! :P
Sorry if this review is a bit messy... anyway I really had fun with this opening chapter! Great job as always! :D
Thank you so much for offering the swap (and for the lovely review you left on Jimmy, I'm always so happy to hear your thoughts on it! <3)
Big snowball hug,
Chiara
I really, really love this friend group. You make writing big groups of people seem so easy. Their banter and arguing is peak friendship. I'm also here for another wonderful TSweezy reference - those new vault tracks are SO GOOD :D New album is out soon and gonna ruin all my writing plans when I fall in love with a new song lol
Back to this chapter though. Like I mentioned, you've done a great job bringing in so many characters around Emma and Murphy in this chapter, building their world out more. I really like how you're able to bring a ton of lore and history with these guys without having to dump it all into exposition dumps, it's just sprinkled in as they banter and argue and *cough* lust after one another.Speaking of which *eyes emoji* These spicey scenes are fantastic. I said it in the first chapter and it's true here too, their chemistry is just right there. Even with them trying to act like everything's just chill and only physical, the way they pull each other is great.
Roster, Schmoster. Girl is gonna need the Hercules Greek Chorus to come in and sing 'I Won't Say I'm In Love' before the end of this story :D
- Jacquelin
Ahhhh. Okay the TSwift references absolutely SLAYED ME :D Fucking loved those and they were so perfect for that moment. OMG Not 'The One' on repeat. That one took me out, seriously. Ugh.
I am remembering this story a little more as I read through the chapter, or maybe I read a different story from this world? What I remember is something really sad happening later when they're older and that makes me really sad reading this knowing that is what's to come :(
I'm rambling. I ramble. Sue me. (Please don't sue me). I loved this opening chapter. There's so much heat with Emma and Murphy right off the bat. This magnetic sort of attraction that you've written so naturally between them that the story just opens and it's like yeah, obviously. And I love Emma. She's so real. So freaking relateable. And also so fucking in love with John Murphy :P
- Jacquelin
Hi hi! I'm trying to read and review at least one chapter of all Inky noms, so here I am for your story! I've actually watched the first maybe 3 seasons of The 100 awhile ago, but I don't really remember much, other than... I'm pretty sure I hated John Murphy and loved Bellamy! LOL But anyway, this being an AU made it feel more like OF for me, so it didnt really matter what my memories of it are, it was really great going into it with very little knowledge, which I love!
Anyway, enough of that, onto the story itself! I really enjoy your writing, it has a great flow to it throughout the chapter, it reads really smooth and moves to different scenes and environments without any abruptness. The opening made me cringe SO HARD becasue poor Emma, my goodness, Tinder boy is gross. She's certainly got a better head about her than I would have if it were me, I have to say! haha I like that her and John have this unspoken agreement, though, that even after a night with someone else, they can still seek out the other, and that they're mostly on the same page about these things, even if Emma is slightly in denial about real feelings. I like the slow build between them getting to the point of the night, that they both dance around it a bit before diving into why she's really there and why he knows she's there too - it had a really nice climb from her first knocking on the door to them finally kissing. Also, they have great chemistry, you can feel that right away between them, as they dance around each other. But I can't believe the Bellamy hate in the later section! LOL Great start, I really enjoyed this, and can feel myself rooting for them already.
First person point-of-view. Most challenging to write so I’m interested in the direction you take this.
Okay, Tender boy. Wow! I mean obviously expectations of him were low but he’s hit rock bottom. It sounds like something you’d hear on twitter and can’t believe the audacity.
I love how she waltzes into Murphy’s apartment and the banter she has with him and innuendos are well played. I noticed that she’s asks to borrow Perri’s clothes but rummages through his drawers.
Their relationship is interesting. I’m betting they are pretending it’s simple, but really, it’s complicated, especially when you add that last line in. Definitely foreshadowing; however, as already mentioned he’s an asshole. I have a feeling this first person pov is going to drive the read crazy as they wonder what he thinks through the story.
hi fren!
i ofc absolutely had to check out this new memma thingie you've got going because you know i love their hot mess :D
"That's the stupidest fucking thing I've ever heard," Raven responds. ---this is hands on my favourite line from this entire chapter and it sums up The MessTM perfectly and i wholeheartedly agree with our girl raven, they're two idiotssssssssss
idiots in love
heh
heh
anyhow besides them being idiots-in-love-who-don't-want-to-admit-it-ever, they are also really all sorts of fun and hot in that first part of the chapter before and during their tiny lil hookup and i am absolutely here for that 100/10 great writing
and i very much love their banter, it's g r e a t
this is amazing
kris
Hi! I’m here for an R&D review!
Ohohohohoh, first person POV? This is going to be super fun! I love how we’re going to see everything directly from Emma’s POV because she’s so delightfully snarky and so, so, sooooo in denial about her feelings for one guy who lives on the fourth floor.
…Three minutes? And then he pulled up Tinder? Oh, no, sweetie, that’s not a fizzle. That’s honestly a crime. Like, how dare?? So rude!
Thank you, Murphy! For actually noticing how she looks, unlike Tinder guy. Ugh. I hope that was the last we see of that guy.
Oh. Oooooh. He’s already on the Roster. That explains the look, tbh. Get it, Emma. Especially after the disappointment formerly known as Tinder guy.
Emma, do you have dignity? Do you, really? Also, I see those feelings you totally have for Murphy.
Oh, getting attached? Getting attached? I think we’re a little too far gone for getting them now. I do wonder if Murphy has already gotten attached or if he’s in denial like a certain person.
I love Jasper and Raven, and I love their reactions to Emma being like ‘it’s totally fine, y’all, that’s what the Roster is for’. As much of a hard time as they give Emma, they clearly do love her, and she loves them. And they’re going to have a study party! Yay hanging out with an additional benefit, though I do wonder how much studying they’re going to get done if they’re hanging out.
This is such a great start! I’m super excited to see how it goes, and if it weren’t so late, I’d read the rest tonight! But, alas, sleep has to be a thing. Unlike it apparently was for Emma and Murphy…
Thanks for writing this, and I hope you have a great day!
-A
Hello, Jill!!
Look, you know how I feel about these idiots. I love them so so much. And it will never not be entertaining how much both of them are just absolutely delusional how much they are into each other. Even in this where at least Emma has adimited it enough for Perri to come up with the roster, she is just so convinced that she can girl math herself into not having feelings for Murphy. Which, newsflash sweetheart, you are already in love with him. Exhibit A being the fact that she could have gone straight home (literally one floor up) but instead found herself in his bed. Again.
I just adore Jasper, Raven, and Emma as a trio. They are so different in every way but they just work so well together. Obviously Raven has to be the voice of reason here and I just love that even after all this time, she's like "I don't trust Murphy" and the other two are like "he's literally your best friend's best friend, what?" Honestly, I do not blame her at all, they are the definition of a situationship and do those ever really end well? Lmao, of course they judge her mood for the day on which TSwift song is playing. Your girl is nothing if not predictable.
"I am not getting attachede to John Murphy" - uh, yeah you are babes.
I love them so much and I can't wait to come back for more!!
~Ashley
written for the review event - calling houston
Howdy Jill!
I meant to leave this yesterday (obviously), but I fell asleep on my couch and woke up at 3:00 AM so...sorry.
Anywho, I really liked this one. I do not know the characters, but you are correct that I reviewed something about them before (though somehow I feel like it was another pairing (maybe with this Bellamy character), but I am rambling about something irrelevant.
This nailed the college vibe (minus the hangover). Hook-up culture, Sunday weekend debrief, and naturally the person that you're totally not into, but totally are (which I've always found to be a funny carry-over from like...middle school - obviously minus the increasing naughtines). I have to say, bro really took it to another level being ass at sex and then being an asshole and basically trying to get another girl in bed the same night. I honestly don't know that I've even heard of anyone THAT bad.
I think you did a really good job of capturing MC's emotions too. You can really feel the disappointment followed by her relief - even if it can't exactly be called relaxation because of the feels and what's coming next - when she heads to her neighbor for - ironically enough, something of a booty call.
Definitely a good set-up for a novel as I'm wondering how this dynamic will unfold based on the tags for the story.
Hope you and yours had a merry Christmas yesterday!
Hi Jill! Here for our swap and so excited to see you have a new Emma/Murphy story to enjoy. You know, it's funny, because I've never seen the 100 but I never feel like I'm reading your fics fandom-blind. They feel like an universe that I'm all too familiar with, which just speaks to the magic you've been able to create with these characters throughout your various fics. Anyways, sorry, I digressed...
Tinder guy is such a disappointment. I couldn't roll my eyes high enough. Seriously, at least have the decency to wait until the girl's left, dude. It's not that hard.
I know he's awake because he'd texted me while I was out at the bar - and the joke's on me, because I should've come here in the first place. OF COURSE YOU SHOULD'VE!!!
Honestly, you're the queen of creating chemistry. How is there so much of it already when we're barely in chapter 1?!?! When I tell you that their whole converstion already had been squealing and being all ::hearts eyes::
But of course they're both acting too-cool-to-have-serious-feelings with each other. Murphy with his whole "you're the one who came here, not me" and "I could keep playing" bits. But I mean, he texted her first, she was with a guy at a bar, let's give the guy a break as he pushes to let her make the first move - and, boy, does Emma not disappoint in doing just that. *fans self*
Loved all the Taylor talk. It made me laugh out loud because of course Murphy merits King of My Heart and of course a bad break up would merit the 1. hehe
Thank you so much for the swap opportunity <3 Can't wait to see what else you have in store for us with this wonderful new story.
Quilly
hi jill,
here for winter gifting! (i think we both know that I would be here either way though haha)
i think i run here as fast as possible because new memma fic? I love that you have so many ideas for them and I'm so here for it. I loved watching out set up all the relationship. EMMA WANTS HIM SO MJUCH ALREADY. it's chapter 1 ahh!
i'm screaming like chemistry is top tier here. my favourite bi disaster is back. I love her insistence that she's not getting attached to him which is just brilliant, the 'roster' idea. bellamy mention?? I'm screaming likeeee. the scene between murphy and emma was good. like dialogue is *chefs kiss*, calling him 'wholesome' and just there back and forth. i wanna know what's going on in murphy's head but he seems like so unbothered, he's gotta be desperate for her as much as she is for him! ahaha.
i love all the references to queen taylor. how you name how name the title and chapter titles after her songs. do i need to listen to this song closely for more hints about the plot?? i think you also work off pure vibes too though! I love how you directly had them chatting about taylor and how the songs predict emmas moods which is hilarious but i love that detail. the banter between jasper, raven and emma is so good. her friends are here for a reality check. i lovelovelove that you package these characters any which way and i'm already totally sold on the concept. can't wait to see what you have in store for these idiots! <3
Abbi xx
Hey! New Story! I was going to throw a snowball, but then I started reading this and had to put the ammunition down because I was so caught up in it.
Let me try to explain.
First off, that guy needs serious snow down his pants. I mean, really. Tinder while she’s STILL THERE?? That’s pretty inexcusable. Do people actually do this??? Nevermind. It’s college. People do all kinds of inexcusable things in college. But still. Ouch.
Also. This list. I have a lot of feelings about this list. Specifically, one big feeling, and that is that it’s not doing its job. In fact, it’s doing the complete opposite of its job. When Emma has to go through the trouble of keeping score for all the hookups she has that aren’t Murphy, we all know that IT’S NOT WORKING.
But seriously, these two have the most excellent banter. And the most excellent nonverbal connection. I’m sure, in this brand new shiny story, you’ll get into the reasons why Emma feels like this isn’t going to work as a Real Thing, but you’ve pretty much established that on many levels, it works just fine.
And really, it’s like he was just sitting around waiting for her to show up, so there’s that too.
“Am I that transparent?”
Uh, yeah. I think you are. ???? But I love how he makes her take the first move anyway.
SCENE BREAK SEGUE WAS GOLD!
Sorry, I flailed a little there. I mean, yeah, Jasper was talking about the Tinder man-whore, but still. It was great. And I love how you show in this scene how wonderful Emma’s friends are and how supportive they are of each other. But hey, I see that bit of gray creeping in, the cracks that I’m expecting to show up about why Emma and Murphy aren’t supposed to be meant for each other. Her friends are clearly not on board with this guy.
“But I wish they could see what I see in him…”
Hmm… now I’m wondering. Is the Roster for Emma, or is it for her friends?
(looks under the couch for chapter 2) Did you drop it somewhere? Is it still in the oven? I’ll go get some tea and wait around for it to show up.
Pix
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