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Hi Noelle,
Last review to finish the story. Very descriptive after scene in that apartment. It makes us feel like we were at the love making even though the story doesn’t start until afterwards. (I particularly like the curtain coming down. Is she still tangled up in it?)
Comparing Remus to the wolf is always interesting as he tries to ignore or do battle with it. I find it interesting that giving into the wolf this time is actually a good thing because it will make Dora happy (and Remus too, but of course, it will take him months to figure that out.)
I’m not sure if these rare pair snippets were for a competition or gifts they were for a variety of people, but you picked some very interesting relationships and showed them in a variety of ways. Very creative ideas.
Author's Response:These shorts were all written for an event hosted by a rare pair group. We had to write stories from prompts and gift the stories to other people.
Thank you for reading my collection!
Hey Noelle,
Beautiful metaphor with the tapestry. Whereas most people thing of the outside versus inside ugly versus beautiful. I like how you considered the front and the back. “You cannot have the clarity of image without the mess underneath.” Sybil knows this so is this based on her own visions and prophecies or is it because she seems things in Severus Snape that others do not? They are threads interwoven but what does the entire tapestry represent? I’m considering Severus’s life (since we look at the messy back and beautiful front) or life in general and they are but two threads in it.
I also like the comparison of his lips, daytime sneering and nighttime worshipping. It gives a romantic edge to a character that most would consider anything but.
Author's Response:Thank you so much! I really like the idea of Sybill and Severus being entwined in some way and may explore it in a longer form at some point
So, I got to the end of this one and thinking it would end in a death, but instead it ended in a life. I first reaction was “oh shit.”
Stupid, stupid boy. All that hard work. All the plotting and planning and now it’s ruined. (If it’s even true. I wouldn’t put it past Bella to lie, especially since she knows he’s planning something.) Perhaps he shouldn’t have been thinking with THAT brain.
Perhaps she will turn toward a more motherly perspective once the baby is born, but I doubt it. Look at hoe Delphini turned out.
I liked this story. I find it such an interesting pairing, but with the way she pulled him out of the no man’s land (Purgatory? Limbo?) I can understand how they came together.
I love the little adventure that they created to save their Sleeping Beauty Daddy and how it parallels his own experiences waiting for Luna to rescue him ten years before.
I particularly like the idea of “True Loves Kiss” or Loves True Kiss.” Is there a difference? Which one would actually wake one up from the depths of sleep?
A delightful little story about a fun rare pair.
You always think of Lily as uptight and rule following. Who knew she could be such a . . . well, I think you picked the right word of succubus. The dream sequence is done very well as Severus walks through different images of her. I like the image of her as “blurred, muted tones, calling him like a will-o-wisp.”
I wonder where this conversation will go next? Is this before or after he drops off the sword? How exactly does Severus Snape help Harry along his route? After all, isn’t he the one that told him he had to die? Or are you envisioning more of an AU?
Everyone has their secret vices, their way to let off a little steam. There is no doubt that these two have more stressors than typical (perhaps even the typical Death Eater since they have to deal with Voldemort and a castle full or rebellious teenagers.) I wonder if Voldemort knows of this little extracurricular activity (or if he even cares, but it is a muggle club.)
I’m not surprised that Severus only partakes in water for he is a man that (almost) never loses control.) Even in the midst of the lights and smoke, he could apparate back to being the perfect Death Eater or Headmaster in mere seconds.
When I saw the pairing for this chapter, I cringed. Severus should only be paired with a few highly desirable partners: Miranda, Mearna, maybe Hermione, if she’s lucky. Then I read the byline: Hogwarts Professor Orgy and I’m cringing more . . .
Okay, you went there. I didn’t like the line: “Severus’s cheeks burned, which was ridiculous considering most of his blood was rushing the opposite direction of his head” and the plant’s Horny Goat Weed was amusing. (I’m betting that isn’t a canon potion ingredient.)
What a sweet story. You can see Harry’s compassion for those he loves throughout this and Oliver’s obsession with Quidditch, no matter the costs (like a throbbing arm.)
Stories about talking to Fred at his grave always make me tear up, but it’s nice to see how others besides his family and Harry remembered him. I liked the phrase about his heart being hollow and filled at the same time-great description for the moments. I wonder what the conversations between the twins and Oliver were like when they made this promise to win the Club World Cup. (Is this different than the World Cup with Puddlemere?)
You gave a bit of humanity to Marcus Flint. We always seem him as the big Slytherin quidditch player and bully but all bullies start somewhere. It also says something about his family life and neglect that he’s willing to follow a Bog Mimic for a bite of food. (I found it interesting that he could see the Threstrals after his grandfather died. I wonder if there is a story there.)
And Luna is so Luna. Knight on horseback coming to save the day but acts as if she didn’t even realize there was a boy in distress. I love the little ending with butter versus marmalade—just a whimsical touch to add to Luna. (When I read it, I wondered if she only had butter for breakfast.)
I like how you accented Pany’s attributes with sentences set in different paragraphs. It leads the reader to think about each one and how it created the 23 year old Pansy we have today. . .well, almost. It looks like Pansy has a slight soft spot. Ron has obviously matured and is comfortable in his own skin with the jokes he pulls . . . or perhaps he’s just full of anger at the world around him and doesn’t care anymore. Either way, you set up a nice moment of “what if” before he drops his hand.
I am curious about one thing. Assuming Harry Potter is dead (since Pansy turned him in 7th year) and Ron is Public Enemy #3, who is Public Enemy #1 and #2?
Wow Draco! Could you have picked a more opposite pureblood? I like how you set up the differences between the Slytherin and Gryffindor. From the amount of dance practice and execution of dance moves to the clothing (yesterday’s overone eggs) and just ability to move round the room. Pansy was the “perfect” companion but his eyes aren’t even looking at her. Being Pansy, I’m surprised she wasn’t more catty than just an arched eyebrow, but perhaps she doesn’t quite understand what he’s thinking as he looks over at Ron. However, I don’t see this “interest” going very far, but I could be wrong. After all there is a thin line between love and hate.
GO OFF, REMUS! :D
By now you already know I'm obsessed with your Remus, and I love the themes in this little ficlet. The Wolf representing Remus's passions and desires, not only this curse that makes him feral, but something that perhaps just connects him more strongly with the primal urges everyone has anyway. Only Remus has always tried to err on the side of shoving that part of him down, even while the Wolf tries to bring it out. So while there's this really animalistic aspect of what's going on here, it's also... incredibly human??? The things he desires are no different than what others desire. And the Wolf is the part of him that's like, "LET ME HAVE THEM." And it's becoming more and more impossible to deny that part of him, particularly when he doesn't know if he's going to make it through tomorrow.
And then of course, putting all that armchair psychology aside, this is just sexy as hell, with his possessiveness and dominance and recklessness all bubbling to the surface. *fans self*
Ok, how adorable and sweet, by the way, that sex turns Dora's hair pink jsdfh;asjkdf;
And this ends on an incredibly touching note, and the possessive and wild bits mingle with the tender when he realizes what he wants most of all. <3
Melanie
(mountain mystery reviewing!)
Author's Response:AHHHH I'm so glad you like how I write Remus!! I was kind of afraid to work with him as a character, and he definitely surprised me when I started writing him. So I'm glad it's working out well.
Thank you for this lovely review!
hi,
here for the murder mystery reviewing event :)
i thought this was such an gorgeous piece, i love all the planets/gravity and the like imagery to describe their relationship. i thought the opening was wonderful because it really highlighted in such a vivid way of alecto living her best life. she seems very peaceful and happy in that situation, they both do. they've made this a mini haven because they needed that. the world has taught them that they're 'unwanted' 'ugly' which is sad regardless about what i think about these characters in canon. this piece feels both sad and joyful which is very mixed emotions piece. i thought you did such a good job showing those emotions and exploring their feelings.
Abbi xx
Author's Response:Thank you so much! I had a lot of fun with this one :D
"Luna kissed like the Springtime . . ." is a wonderful sentence. Luna has always brought to mind someone I met when the world was younger, and that sentence captures why she does so. Thank you for this story and the rest of this collection. It's been such fun to read.
Author's Response:Thank you so much! Luna is such a precious character :D
Hi Noelle,
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Wow, I love this pair here! I never really understood the pairing, but again, you make everything go so well :)
I feel like Remus is generally so closed off and controlled, not allowing anything to shake him or allowing himself to lose control, but with her, he's different. I love the waty you describe their trek through the flat, and how he can see and smell the history that Dora has with others.
It's sad and hard to face, but Remus does well with chaos. After all he's been through, he's used to disappointment, and I think that he's finally able to face his real desire for her. I love how vulnerable they can be together in this moment. Maybe it's the sort of feralness he feels with Dora that makes him realize how much he wants to marry her. I would totally love to see more from this pair!
Thanks again!
Cat
Author's Response:This is definitely a challenging pair. I'm glad to hear that they made sense together in this little story :D
Thank you so much for this lovely review!
Hi Noelle,
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Okay, this one I feel like I could get into.
I love how you start by taking about being bound by Fate, it's just too prefect for Trleawney. I also have this vision aobut the two of them being intellectuals and just talking about pedagogy and I can see it.
I also love the imagery of the tapestry, winding them together, making them entangled. :) And then the threads come back in the threads of fate.
Oof, those last few lines remind me how damaged the two of them are, especially Severus. I think she probably has such a different perspective of people in general, being able to see the future or at least parts of it. It's almost like, things matter less when Fate is concerned. I just love this one! It's so broddy and dark and just what I need.
thanks Noelle, please make more of these :)
Cat
Author's Response:I could definitely see revisiting this pairing in a longer story. The idea of Snape and Trelawney getting together is intriguing, what with the way she affects his fate in canon.
Thank you so much for this lovely review!
Hi Noelle,
Back for another review event review!
omg, now this pairing, I almost can't believe.
WOWWWW this is so good. I was so confused at first, but then, hearing Neville's intention, it all makes sense. I can see him falling for her in the past, or at least using a relationship as a way to get close to her. And to hear that, even though she fits so well with him, he still intends to kills her, it's just awesome. I don't think Neville gets enough credit for his aptitude for vengeance, though idk if it'll be as easy as just killing her.
Also, I see how you used "pregnant" to describe the full moon and then her pregnancy at the end, I see you. I kind of doubt that Neville could condemn his future child...but who ever knows with Bellatrix? But besides that, all the language you use surrounding death in this is great for such a doomed relationship (or is it?)
bravo, and thank you again!
Cat
Author's Response:Thank you so much! This is a story I have been thinking about expanding on. It would just be so dark and twisty....
Hello, Noelle, my dear! Here for the review event! :)
I was looking for something light and easy and I stumbled upon this collection (that I've seen being highly recommended on the forums... not that I'm surprised knowing you...) and I decided to stop by, and I'm very happy that I did! :D
Ron/Draco is one of those pairings I would've never dreamed of... and yet it weirdly makes sense? And the way you present it here, so simply and innocently... it really made me smile! :) I love the Yule Ball setting! I love how they aren't even interacting, Draco is just admiring him from afar (loved the way he's so captured by Ron's eyes), while impeccably dancing with Pansy (and of course they would be nothing short than perfect, that's how Slytherin elite dancing would look like, right?) And I love how Pansy notices and teases him, without malice or jealousy, just plain, friendly teasing... and Draco denying is so sweet! :P And you capture all this in just 200 words and that's such a feat, too! :D
This was absolutely lovely, and you can bet that I will be back to check out the other drabbles in this collection very soon! <3
Big snowball hug for now,
Chiara
Author's Response:I really love Ron/Draco! It's my preferred side pairing if Hermione is paired up with someone other than Ron. Draco pining over Ron was super fun to do here.
Thank you for this lovely review!
hi!
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omggg, i never imagine myself reading this pairing but is it just me or is their chemistry off the charts? it's dirty and a bit seedy but it works like I can feel the tension during that conversation. i love the characterisation of snape because i've always enjoyed your version of him whatever story you write as always feel his depth as a character rather than the canon version. I also think you killed this weird vibes that filch had going on. Snape was obviously feeling it a lot! ;) I can only assume that dumbledore knows about these arrangements and goes away occasionally so they can play haha.
Abbi xx
Author's Response:I stumbled on this pairing on Ao3, and I just love it so much. The idea of these two crabby, unwanted people finding each other makes me so happy.
hi again!!
here for the murder mystery reviewing event (and basically because i can't wait to see what you're going to do next with these pairings!)
this was so beautiful! it was interesting that you used oliver/harry as an established relationship but it totally worked for this piece. I love how romantic they are with each other with call backs to some of the things we saw in canon which was cool to work those things in. I'm so happy for them that they won the cup as husbands. I think when people read oliver that they often forget that he went through the war in very meaningful way too. he was there at the war, it's so heartbreaking but i loved his moment to connect with fred's memory. they were good friends and the moment about him winning the cup feels bittersweet because he wanted fred there too. this was a lovely little piece. well done.
abbi xx
Author's Response:Thank you so much :D
hi,
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i can't get over how random these pairings are but i'm enjoying them so much. i don't think i could have come up with this pairing in like millions years yet you took the concept and worked it too perfection. I really enjoyed this and i thought the situation you created was so creative. I love the pureness of their meeting, luna is so fabulously weird but she is who he needed in that moment. you get some great moments of character building for flint's character like details on his childhood and family. they seem very typical pureblood however you created such an innocent conversation between the two of them at the end. I love the idea of having them grow up with that trope of 'best friends to lovers' or even 'enemies to lovers', 'opposite attracts' vibes in the future. wonderful piece.
Abbi xx
Author's Response:Thank you so much! This was a fun one to write :D
Hi,
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I thought this was so well done, i've seen this pairing before that i thought you did a beautiful job at making this so subtle yet so clear. they had a chemistry between them that pansy didn't seem to understand but she knew it was there. i said that i liked your characterization for pansy in the first chapter, while they aren't meant to be the same pansy, i thought you did an amazing job at giving us a realistic peak into her mind.
she comes across as so hard but there is something so soft in her soul too. she has a heart regardless what draco says. the heart wants what it wants! i loved ron's little joke in this chapter too. i thought this was so great. very interesting to get a little snapshot into an AU when voldemort won. i don't think i've read anything like that so it was fun to see something a bit different for me!!
abbi xx
Author's Response:Thank you so much! I hope that eventually Pansy gets away and can be with Ron and they can be adorable and sarcastic together :D
Hey,
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I can honestly say that I've never seen this pairing written before nor even thought about the fact it could be a thing. I loved that you made it a thing. Draco's feelings are so funny, the repeating of 'Ron Weasley' like he just can't believe that he feels like this, trying to shake himself out of it. I'm obsessed with your characterisation of Pansy here too. she literally says one word but it was so perfect. just cutting and fabulous but Draco knows how to handle her. I like the how the dance is elegant. it reminds me like swan swimming but like under the water the legs are going crazy to keep them afloat. Ron Weasley makes this boy weak. I'm here for it.
Abbi xx
Author's Response:Thank you so much! Draco/Ron is one of my favorite rare pairs. I hope to do a longer story with them at some point
Hi Noelle,
back for an event review!
Okay, you're after my heart with Regulus
WOW that was such a good use of the fairytale. I love how we entered this story with Regulus thinking about his family. It's such a dream, something that he probably never thought he would have. and that moment when Luna kisses him <3 I love that juxtaposition you use -- that she's Springtime and he's the cold of winter being metled.
I didn't realize at first that this wasn't an AU, and that Luna had actually saved him!! that's such a great idea and I also love that he is actually the sleeping beauty that was saved. I would SERIOUSLY love to read all about their life together.
also love that he doesn't want to be a Black anymore, and so took Luna's last name :)
thank you!
Cat
Author's Response:AHHH thank you so much!! They are so precious together
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Ahh, Lily and Severus.
OOHOHO my gosh, that was a wild ride. This was such a good depiction of the obsession that Severus has for Lily, and to know that the love was returned. Or at least, the lust. I think Lily is typically depicted as an angel of a character, but here it seems that she might have had a bit more love for Severus than we thought.
Of course, it all could have been in his hand, but we'll never be sure. If it was just a way for Lily to get Severus to help Dumbledore figure out about the Horcruxes, than that's her prerogative. But for Severus, he's failling for her again. That was such a sad and also satisfying depiction!
Thanks again,
Cat
Author's Response:Thank you so much!! I love dark!Snily for sure, and I love it when Lily is very morally grey
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