Name: blackballet (Signed) · Date: 18 Feb 2022 10:34 PM · For: Loony Lovegood

 

Hi there! I am here for the galazy review event

 

 

I have to say, I was really drawn in by this concept. I am pretty fascinated with Luna, and can't wait to see your take on her.

 

Wow, I usually just review as I go but I could not look away from this story. The way you start this one-shot, "people agel ike wrinkled pages of books long forgotten..." That sentence took my breath away. 

 

And then the part about Harry's mother--it's almost like Luna sees that happening to herself, eyes dulling, not like they once were. And she knows what things not to ask about. 

 

And when he reminds her of the memorial, Luna can't seem to grasp that. I am reading that she is suffering from quite severe PTSD, but I am not sure. Whatever it is that has a hold on her, you are portraying it beautifully. I can really feel like I am standing there with her, trying to make it through to reality. 

 

I love their relationship, as well. It's so amazingly fleshed-out here. I would love to read more from you! Your writing is so captivating <3

 

blackballet

Author's Response:

I am glad you enjoyed this! I was quite worried about it. I am not sure if it will fit with the event anywhere, but if you liked this you might also like Jigsaw Memory towards the end of my page. Thank you so much for all of your lovely reviews. It has really made my week 

Name: RogueSlytherin (Signed) · Date: 18 Feb 2022 09:12 PM · For: Loony Lovegood

Hey There! Here for the Gala-z event :D :D :D

But also cause this poem tells me this story will WRECK ME and I’m kinda here for that. The summary itself is such a hook! Wow. Okay this is seriously so heartbreaking but beautiful at the same time. Wow. Sorry I’m just repeating that, but the way you’ve captured this feeling of getting lost in one’s own mind, of losing themselves in memory is so raw and real and honest and just – heartbreaking.

 

I love the way you use repetition of words, like getting stuck on a detail. ‘By and by and by and by’ and then later, ‘books and books and books’. And the way she describes Harry talking as ‘too much sound with no meaning.’ That’s such a gut punch. Then when he triggers a memory for her and she wants to go to the kitchens, but she can’t articulate why, the why is in the books – in her memories – so she turns to go get them and explain – but then –

 

Incredible job! Honestly such an amazing scene you’ve put together here.

Author's Response:

Thank you for the reviews! I am glad you liked them! Not sure if it fits anywhere for the event, but if you liked this you might like Jigsaw Memory towards the end of my AP. Thank you again for a lovely review!