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Hi Jill! Snowball fight! <3
Aww these two. You know, I liked how you balanced the third-act/ eleventh-hour grand gesture moment with time for Emma to still reflect, like Murphy coming back to apologize and say he still loves her certainly meant something but it wasn't a bandaid -- he still wanted to know that she would choose him after the high of that moment was over, and he showed to her that he was really committed.
The cheeky little quips throughout -- "if you're going to say my speech for me wait until I'm in the room" / "I'll kill you... I'll have Bellamy kill you" / "it's more romantic when it's the middle of the night" -- left me with that happy, nostalgic teen romcom feeling even after all the angst. And Rapunzel/Flynn!! A fictional couple who are truly relationship goals, for this other fictional couple to emulate. <3
Melanie
hiiiii i'm back for a second gift review :)
oooohhhhh yk one of the things i love about this fic is the way that you weave together the prose parts and the chatfic parts. it works so well to tell different aspects of the stories - and it's much nicer (and easier!!) than reading through a wall of text where people are having conversations (or, i suspect, trying to find a way to write all of the conversations without it starting to feel repetitive :/).
ahhhhh i love this one: the way resolutions are starting to come together, with perri and raven setting things right between them, with murphy's intervention; with raven apologising to emma (though a lil bit of me thought she could have been nicer about accepting it). though i gotta admit i'm a little disappointed (but not surprised - is that a cliche??? :P) that the gang have decided to stop trying to fix murphy and emma's relationship. it's really not working, all their attempts, and it seems to be just sort of making them all upset (although clarke and bellamy have sort of got through it all somewhat unscathed). but still :/
also the whole necklace thing: yes, murphy is an idiot, honestly. but i do get why he's feeling like that. i think it's almost the main way you can tell that he's upset haha - him jumping to conclusions and this sort of paranoia about jasper's friendship with emma and how far that goes.
so excited to see where you go with this and what happens - and if we'll get to see the raven-and-emma catch up :)
laura xx
hi jill!!!! happy holidays - just dropping off a lil gift for you :)
omg you're really putting emma through it aren't you??? though i gotta admit, i had a feeling that emma's assumption that murphy had slept with emori wasn't going to turn out to be right - it just seemed like a twist that had yet to come :/ but ahhhh it still hurts a bit when emma finds out, yk??
i loved the sense throughout this whole chapter that emma was feeling a kind of sad numbness, as though she had just become so used to things going wrong and the constant sense of sadness she'd been stuck with for so long. and it kind of contrasted to the kind of calm that clarke brings with her and then the sort of slightly angry calm that murphy has down by the beach. it's a real skill to make so many different versions of a sort of calmness - or at least of emotions that on the surface seem kind of similar.
and murphy with the calm, sort of collected snipe at emma and jasper and their friendship oooff. though i kind of get it from his perspective - emma's been doing well at pushing him away but she's super super close to jasper. and it's not fair of him to make the comment, but i can see where he's coming from - and that's kind of the best-worst thing about this story haha, that so much of it is so understandable and so human in the way they all react and i lovelove that.
so so curious to see where this goes from here - and if emma can even start to mend things because ooooof there's a lot of stuff to start mending and it's hard :/
laura xx
"jasper and james both start with j"
MURPHY IS SUCH AN IDIOT AND I FEEL LIKE HE'S AN IDIOT *ON PURPOSE* BECAUSE HE CAN'T BE THAT DAFT, RIGHT? RIGHT?!
maybe it's like,,, a defense mechanism for him, like he doesn't want to admit to himself just how far gone he'd been for emma (and let's be real, *still is*) because of his ~~~issues with emotional relationships and all that good angsty stuff BUT OH MY GOD DO I WANT TO STRANGLE HIM
i also want to strangle emma
:joy:
but i mean they're just ???????????????????????? i hate them but in a good way
also i feel like emma and her particular brand of ~~issues really doesn't handle well rejection or when someone's mad at her which i get, but i think that for her it's just *more* than this would be true for most other people because these people are her chosen family, her dad is ugh, her mum and brother are gone and she *needs* them and i feel like even through these texts that's just so plainly obvious and i think that all of them know it too, and hopefully that means they're a lil more forgiving (even though trauma etc doesn't excuse a person's behaviour, but it's just something that gives a little depth to why someone might be acting the way they do, in this case the way emma does and i feel like you do a really great job of showing that!)
also just a sidenote but emma and raven's chat being called the twisted sisters knowing their..ahem...history...made me spill some wine because i laughed out loud. just sayin' :joy:
kris
Hello, Jill, my dear! Here for our swap! <3
Well, wow! This one was intense... who would've imagined this happened between Emma and Raven? :O Again, if only these idiots talked more, instead of keeping it all in and exploding at the worst possible moment... *shakes head* but I guess that's what makes this group interesting :P
The Emma/Jasper friendship-but-maybe-something-else dynamic is so interesting! "Okay, ready?" Jasper called, his arm brushing against Emma's. If only there'd been sparks. There's just so much complexity there, and I love it... I know I shouldn't focus so much on that, but... and it seems a lot of your characters are wondering about this, too, so I'm not alone in this, right? :P
Okay, I have no idea what "True American" is exactly, but yeah, you did give a basic picture of it, and it definitely sounds the kind of entertainment this group would enjoy... :P But wow, did it have unexpected consequences... :/ I think Clarke will think twice before pulling another party like this... :P I hope that Raven can fix things with Perri... and I hope that Emma talking to Murphy will bring somewhere good... maybe this is not all bad after all? (But wow, Raven, that was harsh! I mean, I sort of get it, I suppose Emma can get pretty self-absorbed that way, but maybe, as I said at the start, you could've talked about this earlier and not caused such a scene in front of everyone?)
What happened between them was clearly a mistake, but sort of understandable, I guess? They were both in a very fragile state, and they just seek comfort in each other... I mean, not the best thing they could've done, but... and wow, I don't remember exactly the scene when Emma found Murphy with Emori, but I didn't realize that the "she's no one" comment hit so hard and deeply... I guess it makes sense... no one likes to be called that... and if it brought back her father's words, that would be even more hurtful... maybe Raven is right and Emma is oblivious of the rest of the world, but no one can deny that she has been through a lot... :/
Another great chapter! A lot of shocking things going on in this one, but I love the complicated relationships you're portraying in this story and the way you're building on them little by little, it's really fascinating to watch unfold!
Thank you so much for swapping! :)
Big snowball hug,
Chiara
Okay, came by real quick to leave a bonus review because I was sort of done reading this chapter before I realized I had started it lol
I absolutely love the chaos of the big chat group. They all cracked me up but these lines especially had be rolling:
perri: but they didn't kill each other or run away/ perri: #growth and the vodka aunt: pretty sure that's clarke's job/ the mom friend: I hate you
They're so much fun. It makes me want to be a part of that chat haha
And the drama between Raven and Emma... I can't help but think maybe Raven's right? Like not that Murphy dodged a bullet but maybe there's some sort of misunderstanding Emma's not seeing? And maybe that's why Murphy was so mean when she went to his apartment?
Another great installment <3
Quilly
OMG - that flashback completely broke my heart! I feel so terrible for Emma!
I want to say the hardest thing that comes after a break up is the moment someone moves on to someone else, especially when you haven't been able to do the same. I really don't *think* that's what happened with Murphy (maybe I'm just in denial haha). I feel like there's more to the story than that. But he really did do a good job of letting Emma believe that's what had happened.
When Emori asks who she is and Murphy says "no one" - I felt that in my soul. And then this line - "What was she supposed to say? His soulmate? His person? She used to think so, but now she wasn't so sure. My poor baby Emma. How absolutely devasting.
I'm glad she was able to talk things out with Miller at least. The end of a friendship can be just as heartbreaking as the end of a relationship. It's nice that they were at least able to restore that friendship. I liked that Miller adviced her to talk to Murphy and that he told her he was unsufferable without her. I hope Emma listens but Idk... I feel like her showing up to his apartment *was* her trying to reach out and it massively backfired on her, so it's going to take a lot for her to be able to take another leap like that again.
It was so good having a chance to return to this fic. I can't wait to catch up on it all and see how it ends <3 Thank you for the swap opportunity btw <3
Quilly
Hi Jill! Here for our swap! <3
Oh boy. These two are really bringing it down to the wire here, second to last chapter and she gives back the necklace. *screeching* It is a Serious, symbolic move, but maybe one that Murphy needed here, to tell him the time is past for trying to be pedantic and clever -- not time for asking "why would I say sorry" or point out that "we were never friends" -- even though I know what he meant, like, don't say it that way!!
I lovedddd the bit about how she wanted closure and actually he's been giving her closure, it's just not the closure she expected or wanted. I found that so clever!!
<3 Melanie
jill!! :) i'm back!!
ooooooooo so much happened in this!! :o so much dramaaaaaaa :P this is super exciting and super twisty - and ahhhh i dunno what's going to happen when emma finds murphy - and i really hope raven and perri will be okay <3 (also emma really was oblivious about that, because even i'd worked that out and i only know the characters from this story :P)
(also i have no idea what true american is but it sounds dangerous :P and definitely chaotic haha - and ahhh yea drinking games also bring out the drama and the hidden emotions people are pretending they don't have :P)
that whole raven/emma confrontation was suuuper fierce. i really feel for both of them - but i also kinda feel it was coming and that at least they got it out of the way, if that makes sense?? like, hopefully they can sort of move on from here and become friends or friendly again - however tentative and slow it is. not being friends with someone in that situation is so hard and so sad.
ALSO i gotta say you tricked me a lot haha - i don't know whether it was intentional or not, but i kinda thought it would be emma and jasper and i was just like ughhhh it's gonna be so awkward and so difficult between them afterwards :/ so it was actually a bit of a relief that it was raven, in the end :P
i'm so so curious to see what happens next, with emma finding murphy and whether or not she and raven (and perri!!) can ever make up and get somewhere close to normal again. ahhh poor dramatic children :P
laura xx
Hi, Jill! Here for the review event, and to see how your idiots have been doing... :P Congrats on your Inkys noms, btw! <3
You know, I've recently started to watch the 100 and I might've spent a bit too much of my free time binge-watching it... :P Anyway, it's nice to have a bit more context for these characters now :D I love Jasper especially, and I'm loving him here, too! <3
I think I especially loved how this chapter is so friendship-centric! There are so many different relationships explored and all of them seem so complex and so meaningful and I love it! I'm especially intrigued by the relationship between Emma and Jasper... they are obviously very close and they understand each other at a deep level and are a big support for each other, but I was intrigued by that jasper: yeah. i really love her / bellamy: But you're not in love with her? / jasper: unfortunately not Makes me wonder if there isn't a romantic aftertaste, after all?
(I love how Clarke and Bellamy are basically parenting the whole group, btw... I guess it's fitting with their character... and of course the whole group is plotting to make Emma and Murphy get back together, even if they aren't being exactly collaborative here... I hope Clarke's idea of the party won't end up in total disaster... :P)
What is it with Perri and Clarke not being friends? And what's the full story about Murphy and Emori? Which parts doesn't Emma know that might change how she views it? Well, guess we'll find out later?
Loved this chapter! I'll hopefully be back for more in not too long! <3
Big snowball hug,
Chiara
here for our swap <3
and I love the friend group scheming to get Emma and Murphy back together! one, because it's great fun, and two, because it just shows how perfect those two are together, and that the people closest to them all realize that theyd' be better/happier together.
ten bucks she went home with the hot bartender/ i checked with jasper, emma went home with the bartender oh Emma but how relatable to run away from your feelings with a hot bartender because you've just run into the ex that you still very much have feelings for.
and you nailed drunk texting lolol I'm a little unsure of what exactly Emma's/Jasper's relationship is at this point. It feels a little like he's into her but knows that she only sees him as a friend. Or maybe he's just close enough to her that he can flirt with her without it feeling awkward. Either way, I'm fond of their friendship, and I hope neither gets hurt by the other.
that ending had me rolling hahaha Poor Emma but Perri's 1000000% on point.
i don't have a lot of experience with chatfics but I feel like this really helped us get background information and the POV of side characters in a really unique way.
Thank you so much for the swap opportunity. I really enjoyed this chapter!
<3 Quilly.
mountain mystery review
We are still that "Now kiss" gif. And by "we" I mean "me."
I mean, at least they're speaking now??? And almost behaving like friends??? It was sweet when he picked up on the music lyrics while Emma was playing, and then everyone started singing and there was finally this moment of friendship and togetherness that they've all wanted in the midst of this angst. <3
mountain mystery review
Pffft these clowns crack me up. Like literally their plan at this point is "take them to liquor store and strand them temporarily without a word." Lmao. Desperate times call for desperate measures. I just love how nobody gives a shit anymore about being subtle. XD
Oh, and the Powerpuff Girls chat is so cute, I love that.
So anyway now memma are in the liquor store and possibly going to talk to each other in person instead of texting from the next aisle over. I feel like that gif: "Now kiss!"
Hi Jill! Here for mountain mystery event reviewing!
I love these little bits they've kept of one another that shows just how much of each other's lives they were, which neither of them want to give up. His sweatshirt. The book she gave him that he keeps reading even though he's not a book person. The J necklace.
It's good to see everyone finallyyyyy starting to work their shit out, so.... hopefully Murphy and Emma now??? Now that we all know they still love each other? :D
Hi,
Here for murder mystery reviewing event :)
I love the chatfic element still. It works so well and really shows their friendships off. It provides so much context for how they're feeling regardless if its unsaid or not. Emma isn't someone who takes people being mad at her well. She's almost doing too much in this chapter to tey and make this workout. Calm down girl. I love perri and murphy's friendship here which can be underrated due to the sheer intensity that is memma's relationship. I love how murphy and perri call it out on their shjt but seem to never take their own advice. I'm glad that perri and raven were able to make it up with a little walk down the beach. You've captured the crazy romantic web that being in a mix group of friends brings which personally so realistic. I'm looking forward to going into the second half of this now and seeing how you're going to bring things around considering the divide between Emma and murphy is pretty big atthe moment. I'm still so obsessed with this story! I like jasper and Emma's friendship but I do look forward to Emma's hopefully realising that she doesn't need jasper like she thinks she does.
Abbi xx
hi jill,
here for murder mystery reviewing event.
how does emma have this way of being so heartbreaking?? her emotional turmoil in this chapter is so beautifully played. i love her character so much because she is just so layered. all the emotions of this chapter were pulling at my heartstrings, this is like a live action taylor swift song in progress here. she finds out that murphy didn't sleep with emori and that's so sad because she did lash out with her actions with raven. but murphy doesn't really set her straight at the time? as partners, they both have really amazing and beautiful periods of deep understanding and communicate yet somehow it's still an area as a couple that they need to work on, how is that possible?? they're so similar in so many ways. so imperfectly perfect for each other.
i love the little bonding moment here with clarke, clarke isn't a character that you tend to go into too much detail with but i really liked seeing this dynamic between them here. they care deeply about their friends and each other really. it was a nice moment to see emma emotionally interact with someone. jasper is really the person who keeps partying after everyone has stopped isn't he?? he is emma's protector, he's the person that emma thinks she should want because he always knows what to say and do. which murphy points out but emma has a habit of falling into arms about whoever else is there. murphy does challenge her in a way that no-one else does. can't wait to see more of this unfold!
Abbi xx
Hi Jill! Back again with another review!
THE HEA! AHHH I LOVED IT! It was a most satisfying conclusion! <3
The grand romantic gesture is a key element to any romance novel and you totally nailed it in a way that fit for Emma and Murphy! The video featuring all of the happy times they had together (and I even noticed some from your fluff series as well!) was so lovely!
I also kind of loved that Emma put off watching it to get herself in order. I mean, it's sort of nerve racking to have to face something so momentuous, right? Not only that, but it also sort of like, she wanted to regain control where she could control...because she has no control over what she's about to watch and what it's about to do to her heart.
And of course, I loved the whole "this would be more romantic at night," and their nicknames as a nod to their sneaking out in the fluff series! :) Awesome job with that! I definitely think this has potential to be OF. And I think if you incorporated your fluff pieces in it somehow too, it would really give readers a full sense of these characters and like how awesome you can totally go that route with this!
I'm so excited for you and I'll be here to cheer you on always, my friend!
Well done and congrats on finishing this!
<3 Courtney
Hi Jill! I'm here to leave you some reviews for our swap!
Ahhh *screams internally* !!!
"It wasn't a mistake."
*screams some more*
AHHHHH!!
Ok, ngl, I was CONCERNED when they parted ways that an HEA wasn't in sight hah. But those four words have restored my faith hah! But again, I think it goes to show how good you are at conveying emotions with your characters. You also portrayal a realistic fight that was petty, but we see character growth from it, since Murphy and Emma can talk about it like adults.
Like yeah, it totally was infinitely uncool for Murphy to use her father's words against her. Sometimes when we know people so intimately, we know the best way to hurt them. Which sucks, but it happens. We definitely get the impression that Murphy is remorseful for his part in their argument. But Emma isn't immediately forgiving. Which again, totally makes sense. Murphy was one of her key people and he betrayed her, so building back that trust is going to take time. And she made mistakes too.
I like that you show both of their faults and just not pinning it on one of them.
But her heart has other plans. She wants to give in, she wants to protect it...I felt just how torn she was throughout their entire meeting. So again, superb job with following these characters through their emotions.
Also, I loved your descriptions of the beach. They were very calming and contrasted a lot with the conversation that unfolded.
Such a great penultimate chapter! I find myself wondering...what will I do when I finish this story? ;)
<3 Courtney
Ah I see Murphy is a big fan of everyone else getting their shit together except his own. XD
I'm laughing that this entire set-up operation has been backfiring on this group in a major way -- including raising NEW conflicts with the Raven/Emma thing -- and at the end of the day it's (hopefully?) going to have a resolution indirectly due to Murphy's own machinations. The irony of him, the guy who was lured here to be thrown together with his ex hoping they'd work their shit out, now being the one to lure Raven and Perri together to make them work their shit out.
His dumb ass trying to rationalize away the J necklace, I can'tttttt.
Oh nooooooooo, what is happening. One step forward and eight steps back.
Raven's hostility makes more sense now. But with Emma not knowing about Perri and vice versa, I feel like this reveal was bound to happen??
I'm also just over here like whyyyyy won't someone tell Emma that Murphy didn't sleep with Emori? :(
jill!! :) <3 dropping by MUCH sooner than i think we all expected to give you a lil gift for christmas :)
i really, really love the way you weave the chatfic chapters into this, alongside the prose elements - i think i've said this before but it's so so good and it works so well! i would never have thought it would work before you did it, but it really does and you do it so well (though whether it would work without you doing it is still up for debate :P)
it's just... it's so clever because the chatfics mean we get to see some of the conversations that go on around the action - the plotting and the planning and the confessions and so on - without having to read too much filler stuff or the plot having to be rearranged to smooth it out so to avoid having too much filler - you can just focus on the bigger things, the more important instances and it works so well!!
ahhh poor emma. i really feel for her in this one - i know i know i feel for her in most of these chapters - but in this one it really feels a bit like she's been through the wringer and is sort of losing her shit a bit (though not completely and i'm kinda nervous about the party for that haha - it feels like something's going to give sooner or later for her and being around murphy for too long may well do it). but i liked that: it felt needed, in a way?? and i liked how the messages meant that perhaps she and the others - like bellamy and jasper and perri - could say things via text that they wouldn't say out loud because it's too painful and people need their space to process it, yk??
and ahhhh yea it's hard when you're pushed to hang out with someone when being around them hurts :/ especially when you feel other people aren't taking you seriously or really making an effort to understand.
pshhh murphy though - he could just tell her what happened. i mean, i know emma hasn't exactly been open to listening to him but yk. what happened to giving it the old college try?? :P (nah i do get it - it can feel super super pointless trying to talk to someone or explain something to someone when they just don't want to listen)
ahh you just are so so good at creating these intricate, emotional situations where no one's really right but no one's entirely wrong either - it's just complicated in the way that real life things are and real people are and i just love it so so much <3
i. will. be. back.
laura xx
jill!! whyyyyyyyyyyy (okay, i'm here for tag) now whyyyyyyyyyyy
ughhh poor emma!! i gotta say though one of the things i love most about this story and the way you write it and your characters is how they're dramatic and they assume things - and the misunderstandings are painful and whole-hearted. they're significant and they matter to people and it makes the whole thing hurt in the way that it would in real life and it's so so good. there's a time and place for light-hearted, accidental misunderstandings, but i love the depth in this and the way that their friends are the ones who kind of don't seem to understand how much it hurt and how it still hurts and why it matters so much - and we as the readers get to see it because we get to read their thoughts and their feelings and it just works so so well
i was really hoping for emma to get to take the photo she wanted as well haha - i kinda knew murphy was going to get shoved into the same seat with her but i was really hoping for her he wouldn't :P
i also kinda feel sorry for miller because - i mean, there's a point there: he was her brother's best friend, not hers and the loss of her brother doesn't mean (and shouldn't mean and would super unhealthy for him to do so) he transfers his relationship with her brother onto her, yk?? but it's also not strange for emma to kind of think of him as sort of stepping into looking out for her like her brother - ughhhh it's a painful moment but i really feel for him, because he's sort of in the firing line when it's not really his fault :/
i lovelovelove the details you pack in this: the necklace with a j on it; the mention of the memories at the carnival with her and murphy, the mentions of the texts from raven from the previous chapter... it's so so good and you just have such a gift for creating a fully-fleshed out, fully-immersive kind of world and i love it.
ahhhhhhhhh i gotta grab you in tag again soon so i can read more :P
laura xx
Jill, hi! Here for a little tag! :D
fhudfhjkf vhy OMG THE TENSION IN THAT END MOMENT! Ok, ok, ok, thought let me back it up. I really think the idea of "maybe we shouldn't engage in something because we don't run in the same circles anymore and we're going away anyway," is a great one to explore in a story like this. One major reason that relationships do not work out is due to bad timing, and it seems that Emma and JM have just been plagued with bad timing from the start of this. I also think it speaks to Emma's level headedness that she's in this minute or, at least leaning into it. Little does she know she's about to accidentally fall into the sand with JM lol.
Anyway, the scene with them by the bonfire and singing together was SUPER atmospheric! The way you set the scene felt really cozy and chill...just like you want to be when you are with your people on a warm, summer evening. And then HE started singing along with her! AHHH...omg that was such a great moment and you captured it in such a meaningful way! Seriously, I felt like I was watching a movie there!
And then OMG JILL THE TENSION AT THE END!! I WAS DYINGG!! HIM LOOKING AT HER NECKLACE AKA HER BOOB REGION LIKE FUCK THAT WAS HOT hahah. And her biting her lip!! STOP!! But don't!! Anyway all those little details in that moment added to tension of the moment and how they WANTED TO but were afraid to, for very obvious reasons.
Fabulous chapter! You have me stressed though because HOW ARE THEY GONNA GET TOGETHER? OR WILL AN HEA NOT HAPPEN BECAUSE THEY'RE BEING SUPER RATIONALE! AHHH...I WANNA SPOIL MYSELF BUT I ALSO DON'T HAHA.
Great chapter, I'm excited to have a couple more to check out before we get to the big ending! You are building up the possibility of them SO WELL!
<3 Courtney
Hello, Jill, dear! Here with a little review for your wishlist! Happy holidays! <3
Okay, confession... I've been away from this story way too long and I've forgotten a lot of details... so sorry if there are bits I should know about but don't remember... :P
Ah, the carnival! Who doesn't love those? :D But yes, I can see how this would bring back painful memories for her now... between the breakup and the loss of her brother... :( Can't blame her for getting distracted and overwhelmed by all the memories... :(
Can't blame Perri for getting annoyed about the selfies, either, lol! :P I'm not the biggest fan of selfies myself... :P And yeah, taking pictures and being the subject are two very different things... :P
It's normal in big groups in places like these to split up, but I can see how it would feel a bit sad for Emma... and I guess it has a different taste than just "we enjoy different things" given the fractures within the group... I don't remember, why is Raven angry at her? And what is it about Perri really wanting to ride with Raven??? *eyes*
Of course, they would set it up so that Emma and Murphy would be riding together! That's the typical move mutual friends would make, right? But it didn't work out too well... :( Although, maybe it served for something? I don't know, they exchanged some pretty harsh words, but I feel like they were words that needed to be spoken, and now that they are out, they can reflect on things and possibly move on? Am I being optimistic? Guess we'll see...
The flashback scene... I'm with Miller, honestly... of course, Emma is heartbroken right now and not thinking straight and so she's just lashing out, but Miller doesn't deserve this burst of anger, and I don't think his friendship is disingenuous just because he didn't think of immediately writing to Emma when Murphy started dating again... after all they'd broken up, didn't they? And if Emma had been sort of distant herself... she really can't blame him for not telling... and the I was just Jamie's twin sister, the poor girl with the dead brother comment really felt unfair and out of place... :/ Of course, I can't fully blame Emma either, since she's obviously suffering, and when you're suffering you can say and do things that don't make full sense... :(
Why can't these people just communicate properly??? But I suppose you wouldn't have a story to tell if they did... :P
Nice job as always! :D
Big snowball hug,
Chiara
This time, she was going to be the one who left him.
Oh my goodnesss! My heart aches for herrrr!!!!
Hi, Jill! I'm here for some gift giving and thought I'd start on Cruel Summer now that I've finished Sparks Fly.
I mean, I knew they were going to be broken up for this one, but I didn't realize how sad it would make me. I miss them being all lovey-dovey with each other.
And poor Emma! Outwardly, she almost seems fine. It's been months. She's out with her friends. She's flirting for free drinks. She's dancing on the dancefloor. But you do a great job of showing the sadness she's feeling on the inside.
And then we see that for a moment there, Emma did want to make things right with Murphy? But that didn't work out? So maybe he was the one to decide they wouldn't be getting back together? Ugh, I don't think my could handle Murphy turning Emma down. But her saying she was going she was going to be doing the leaving this time aroudn makes me think that's exactly what happened? Unless she never got to him?
Okay, okay enough with the questions. I know I need to read along. I just love these two much, it's hard not feel personally invested hehe anyways, I'm so excited to be back in this world and I'm excited to see that I have the whole completed summer ready for me to read <3
Love, Quilly.
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