Name: Oregonian (Signed) · Date: 22 Mar 2022 07:22 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hi. dropbear.

(for the Race Across the Galazy review drive)

I'm not famiar with the fandom or background of this little episode, but you write so clearly and precisely that it is a pleasure to read it anyway, even not knowing what happened before or what will happen next.

I enjoy your writing style. The sentences are smooth, nothing feels awkward or jarring, and every phrase, every sentence does its duty, contributing something substantial to the story, so that you have managed to pack a lot of characterization, and even description, into a small amount of words.  No filler that just clutters up the storyline. Speaking of which, this piece leaves me eager to know what the storyline is.

So, for a piece of flash fiction, I would say that this is a definite success!

Vicki

Name: PinsandKneazles (Signed) · Date: 21 Mar 2022 03:41 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hi, I'm here with a galazy review for you :)

 

This is a really fun first chapter or standalone story. Lena must have wondered what the heck when Kara was buzzing the flat to get in when she had her own key, but it's perfectly conceivable that she could have lost the key and needed assistance to access the flat...except she doesn't know who she is. Which is pretty worrying; has she suffered some traumatic injury that's made her forget? It's pretty miraculous she managed to find the right flat if she can't even remember her name. LOL at Lena thinking it's some massive joke or something that will turn into an amusing anecdote in the future. It's probably more serious than that, right? :eyes:

 

That's just adorable that Kara is surprised at the news of Lena being her girlfriend because she's gorgeous <3 and also a little sad that maybe she feels she's punching above her weight? The comment about matching costumes must have suddenly made Lena aware that this might be concerning rather than amusing...

 

Great job with this story! I really enjoyed it and I'd love to know what happens next <3

 

Meera <3