Name: PinsandKneazles (Signed) · Date: 24 Feb 2022 07:51 PM · For: The Summer of Broken Promises

Hello!

 

It must have been tough on young Albus to be left with the responsibility of his younger brother and sister; a responsibility he really didn't want, when he could have been off doing great things with his talent and seeing the world. And Godric's Hollow is probably not the most happening place on the planet :/

 

It's sad that Elphias has gone off to Greece alone, but it would have been super selfish of Albus to make him stay, even though I expect he secretly wanted to. The fact that it's considered 'a waste of his brilliance' reminds me of just how much growing up Albus did between these teenage years and his headmaster years at Hogwarts. But Bathilda is holding out a lifeline to him in the shape of Gellert Grindelwald here, even though he can't quite see it yet, and I don't blame him; other people's ideas of 'good companions' are rarely our own, especially considering there's a generation gap or two between Bathilda and Albus!

 

Three years is a long time when one is a teenager, and those three years seem destined to be dull ones...

 

I'd love to read on if you ever decide to continue this story!

 

Meera <3 (galazy review)

 

Name: Felpata_Lupin (Signed) · Date: 11 Jul 2021 02:52 PM · For: The Summer of Broken Promises

Hello, Lacy! :)

I saw your lovely review on "That crazy week" and I thought I'd return the favour... also, welcome to FFT! :D

I really, really loved what you did with this first chapter! There aren't many fics out there about this fateful summer in Dumbledore's life, so it's very interesting to read... and I have to say that your writing is really good, too! I'm not particularly good at description, so I'm always impressed when people can do it well and find the right balance so that the narration doesn't slow down too much. Your writing seems truly mature and well crafted, such a great job! ;)

Poor Albus... I would say that he's being quite selfish, but at the same time I can't find it in myself to blame him... he's only nineteen and has gone through so much loss and he's suddenly been thrusted with the responsibility of taking care of his younger sibling... even if he wasn't a genius with great ambitions, it would be so hard to deal with... knowing his best friend is enjoying a wonderful trip he had to renounce because of these unfortunate circumstances can't be easy, either. I would be frustrated as well. And Godric's Hollow doesn't sound like it has many distractions to offer... Yes, I do feel for him a lot... :(

I am very curious to see how the first encounter with Grindelwald will go... I'll need to come back when you update ;) I liked the way you wrote the meeting with Bathilda, she really gives those old lady vibes... I wonder how much she really knows about their story? That comment about Albus' father not deserving what he got was curious, to say the least...

The fight with Aberforth was absolutely perfect, as well! And I feel for Aberforth, too... I can see why he would be frustrated and disappointed with his brother... Albus playing the "I'm head of the household" card wasn't very tactful, either... it's sad seeing them so at odds, but I'm not at all surprised by it... it's all really hard for the both of them...

I'm not sure if I've made this justice, but brilliant work so far! :D

Snowball hug,

Chiara