Name: RogueSlytherin (Signed) · Date: 26 Feb 2022 08:09 PM · For: Yellow

Hey Elena! Here for the Gala-z Review Event :D :D :D 

I really enjoyed this one-shot. It was tragic and terribly terribly sad, but in the way that makes the journey worth it - if that makes any sense at all. I don't know I've been in an angsty mood of late so these kinds of stories just speak to me in all their tragedy. 

 

I love that they call eachother Yellow and Black that's so clever and a bit of light-heartedness in such a sad story. Ughhhhh The emotions in this are raw and real and beautifully terrible. I was wondering the whole story who this OC was and if they were maybe a cannon character we knew - but like didn't really know. I love that it's Marlene in the end. I mean obviously I hate what happens, but like that they found each other for the time that they did.


And the idea of Sirius babysitting and being a father himself and being married and so in love and happy and just - ahhhhhh I loved this and I hated this. 

 

- Jacquelin

Author's Response:

Thank you, and I'm sorry...but not sorry ;)

I'm glad it took you on the rollercoaster of emotions as that's what I intended. 

I also liked the Yellow and Black references. It made it more personal to each of them. 

Sometimes I wish I went AU with this story and gave Sirius a Happily Ever After. But, it is what it is.

Thanks for reading and reviewing :)

Name: blackballet (Signed) · Date: 26 Feb 2022 07:03 PM · For: Yellow

Hi Elena, I'm here for the galazy event!

 

I saw your WJ post on the forums and thought I would try sparking some inspiration for you with reviews <3 also, sirius Black and Coldplay?!??! immediately up my alley :)

 

AHK okay, first thing, Yellow and Black?? I love that for them, and this first section is so heartbreaking </3 This scene at the wedding is so happy and carefree, and you juxtapose that with immediately shocking me back to the funeral :( I wish it wasn't hers, but yeah, the Black family is not good at being happy for too long.

 

Oh gosh, what does Sirius think he's done?? :(

 

No No no not a marriage proposal!! Omg, my poor heart. I smiled so easily when they hugged after finding out about Harry, and you ripped it away with the knowledge that they are not going to get their happy ending :((

 

I feel like i am rippling between past and present with each different section. I love the effect! I hate the subject matter, but its very effective lol. 

 

Oh my gosh, what a horrible way to find out :( after being with Harry all day, probably imagining his future with Marlene (i think?) That was such a heartbreaking scene, and a great way to show the Potters defying Voldemort

 

That last bit, where he leaves the ring, so great but horrible in the best ways. Also, reading this alongisde Yellow is just PERFECT, the ups and downs, the melancholy, you capture it all.

 

Love this!!

blackballet (Catherine) 

Author's Response:

Thank you :)

I'm glad you thought the way I wrote this was effective with the emotional rollercoaster. I knew it wasn't going to end happy, so it was meant to take you on that ride.

Thank you for reading and reviewing and I apologise this is a late response. 

Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 25 Feb 2022 09:42 PM · For: Yellow

 

hey - here for the galazy reviewing event :)

 

Full disclosure that I don't even like coldplay but I really really love what you did here! It was such a beautiful story of love and heartbreak here. I loved that he called her yellow, there is something so heartbreaking about that. The description of her as sunshine and so positive in dark times so lovely. I think there is always something special about meeting someone at a wedding that makes it extra romantic. She seems a little bit snark but in the best way. they have an obvious chemistry.

 

the flashbacks are such lovely little snippets of their relationships but it makes the angsty even more! my heart breaks knowing what happens when she mentions him becoming a father one day. the reader obviously knows the faith of the characters. it's so heartbreaking and sobering after just beautiful love drunk scenes during the flashbacks. gosh, leaving the sunflower on the door step was just chilling, so creepy. I also thought it was very effective to refer to marlene through out the piece as just 'her' which makes the last line pack a real emotional punch. </3

 

Abbi xx

 

Author's Response:

Sorry for responding so late.

It was so fun writing Marlene but also so sad because I knew from the start it wasn't going to end happy. 

I really feel for Sirius. He never seems to get a fair go.

Thanks for reading and reviewing :)

Name: Felpata_Lupin (Signed) · Date: 27 Jun 2021 08:54 AM · For: Yellow

Hello, Elena! Here for your "request"!

And I think this is the first time I read something by you, which is a real shame... but I'm glad you pointed me to this story!

Although, wow, this was sad... :( but in a sort of solemn way that I really liked. I really loved the progression of Sirius and Marlene's relationship. I also really loved the way you used the flashbacks, the alternance between present time and past time. I thought it was very effective and a great way to tell their story.

I think you also captured Sirius' character (or at least, the way I imagine him) so well: his spontaneity, his joking nature, his passion and fierce loyalty... I loved his moment with James, how he refuses to hear James taking the blame, how he wants him to go because James being safe is more important that him breaking apart... and of course, the way you write his relationship with Marlene, from the "first encounter" at James and Lily's wedding, to the accidental proposal and his vow to keep her safe... all of that is just so deeply Sirius... I also really, really loved the scene of him taking care of baby Harry. It was a really sweet moment, and it's so sad to think of the relationship they could've had... I'm feeling very emotional now...

The ending is the part that killed me most, I think... Sirius in his dog form just lying on her grave and howling his mourning... and dropping the ring he probably never got the chance to give her... that's so unbelievably sad, but such a beautiful image as well...

This was a really well constructed, deeply emotional one-shot! Thank you so much for writing and pointing me to it! <3

Big snowball hug,

Chiara

Author's Response:

I never meant for this story to be so sad. But for once, I wanted to stay true to Canon and Marlene dies, so it had to be this way :(

I actually miss the Marauders. I very rarely write them anymore, so I try to with each challenge I do :)

I'm sorry this made you so emotional though, but glad you managed to feel so much from this short one-shot. Thank you so much for showing this story some love

*hug*