Name: blackballet (Signed) · Date: 17 Feb 2023 11:36 AM · For: the conversation

Hi there!

Here for a review from the FFT event.

 

I just got done reading Chiara's first installment of the Jimmy series, so I'm so glad I've stumbled upon this story!

I've never realized it, but the insecurity that Ron feels sometimes is quite simlar to the way you describe Peter here. Inadequate, not truly a Gryffindor, it must be horrible to feel that was when you have friends who are so opposite. And you describe the sickness that comes with self-doubt so well.

Oohh I love how he so clearly trusts whatever Remus says, just because he knows it'll be the truth. Ugh I know that fear of being watched! Peter's reaction, "you've been thinking about it?" is totally valid and scary. We never want people to think about our own perceived failures!

AWww, this is just so sweet and just what Peter needs. Remus knows it's not enough to say, we'll always save you. Peter wants to contribute, wants to defend everyone -- and Remus will help him do just that, my heart <33

 

What a lovely little chapter! thank you,

blackballet (cat)

Name: ShazaLupin (Signed) · Date: 03 Feb 2021 08:05 PM · For: the conversation

Hi there!

 

Ah, this was a nice start to what sounds like an interesting story. Everyone reacts differently under pressure, and I can totally see Peter just freezing and being so worried about messing up that he just doesn't do anything at all. It must be even harder for him when he's with the other marauders and they're all fighting back, and if they're like what we know of them, they're all pretty good at spells and duelling in general.

 

I'm glad Remus was kind to him about it, although I wouldn't have expected anything else from him. I'm glad they're all going to help him, although I don't for a minute think it's going to be a smooth ride. 

 

I'm excited to see where this goes, a great first chapter!

 

Shaza

Written for the winter in fairyland review event.

 

Name: victoria_anne (Signed) · Date: 07 Dec 2020 05:23 AM · For: the conversation

Hi there! I'm here to spread some holiday cheer! I didn't even scroll past this story haha. As soon as I saw a Peter/Remus fic, written for Chiara no less, I couldn't go past it!

 

What a perfect opening paragraph! I love how quickly you're able to get into Peter's head and tell us so much about him already. That dream is so spooky, but again, it tells me a lot about how Peter's mind works.

 

Oh Remus <3 He's just the sweetest. I love how Peter recognises all these little gestures in Remus. Their relationship feel so sincere and believable. The fact that you can make these characters feel so real in such a short amount of words is just amazing.

 

Ohhh my heart. When Peter realises how much his friends love him after having all those doubts and insecurities is just so beautiful. But it's also devastating because even with these feelings he ends up betraying them?? I have so many emotions right now.

 

This was such a gorgeous start to a story! Your writing style is absolutely beautiful!

Name: Felpata_Lupin (Signed) · Date: 05 Dec 2020 01:11 PM · For: the duel

Hey, Dottie, dear! :)

Sorry if I didn't get here sooner, the chapter wasn't showing in the story shell (maybe is hidden?) and I had to use the link you posted in my wishlist thread... also, I'm on my phone at the moment, so this review will probably be a bit more quick, and I probably won't quote quite as much... :P but anyway... :D

Aww, this chapter!!!! So lovely! Really! Than you for getting me of that actual Peter/Remus at the end, it was so very cute! <3

I loved how Peter managed to defeat the three Slytherins! Cowards! Attacking my precious children, 3 on 2, without a reason, only because they were an easy target without James and Sirius around... and what did they do to Remus??? That seemed something really bad...

I love that it was the will of protecting Remus, of bringing him to safety, that gave Peter the push he needed to react how he did! I loved his thoughts, how he took inspiration from his friends and put their training in action! And how he was thinking about telling James and Sirius what he'd done! It feels very Peter, again! :D

When Remus told him that he looked great... and the way they both blushed... aww, my shipping heart is so full, they are adorable! And then of course James and Sirius interrupt in the thick of it... but they are going to talk later!!! <3 <3 <3 And Peter wondering if it's a dream, but his dreams aren't that good... and then pinching himself... ah, I love it! <3

Thank you so much for this wonderful present!

Snowball hug!

Chiara

Name: Felpata_Lupin (Signed) · Date: 04 Dec 2020 06:27 AM · For: the conversation

DOTTIE!!!

OMG! I love this! So, so, so much! It's perfect! All of it! Can't wait for chapter 2! You are wonderful! <3

I love the idea of Peter freezing in battle... and even having nightmares about it! I actually have a scene in one of my stories where Peter does exactly that during an Order mission... very different circumstances, of course (and his friends weren't that understanding there...) but still, I 100% support this image of Peter! <3

Remus pulling him aside and trying to reassure him, to tell him that he's still brave and to offer an actual way to help... that, also, is so very Remus! And of course he's right, courage is not absence of fear, is being able to overcome fear and do things despite of it. I can see how Peter would protest that he's not able to do things despite of it, but still, the fact itself that he goes along with his friends in these fights shows bravery? Anyway, I really love everything Remus tells him! And I love how Peter catches all of Remus' mannerisms: the James-like gesture of passing a hand through his hair (I loved that so much, it's almost as if they are all together so much that they pick habits from one another, and I love that idea), the look he gets when he's thinking hard on something... maybe I'm reading too much into it because I like to see it that way, but I could feel an undercurrent of Peter fancying Remus there, with how close he observes him, and that His belief-his praise-warmed Peter's body, starting in his stomach and expanding out. It could be just the feeling of being appreciated and the gratefulness, but I believe there's something more there? Ahahah, I'm rambling again, it seems... :P

It was a bit of a surprise when James and Sirius appeared at the end, too! I wasn't expecting them to be there as well... but it was so lovely to see all three of them closing around Peter, seeing all three showing their support and appreciation like that! It's perfect! Aww, I adore these four! And I absolutely love to see Peter feeling so grateful for his friends and knowing how much they care for him! He needs to be reminded! Really, this gives me all the feels! <3

Favourite paragraph (or maybe not favourite, but definitely one that I particularly enjoyed): That didn't sound right to him-it was the opposite of everything else he'd ever heard-but he also knew that Remus wouldn't lie about something like this. Not to Peter, or their other friends. And sometimes Remus believed in stupid things-like that he was a monster-but most of the time, he wasn't gullible. If he said something was true, it most likely was.

Okay, need to go now! But thank you so, so much for this wonderful present! I'm so glad I gave you a push to write a Peter-centered story! Really looking forward to more!

Happy holidays and snowball hug!

Chiara