Name: WriteYourHeartOut (Signed) · Date: 10 Feb 2024 03:45 PM · For: Where Do Babies Come From

So funny again! I love that he's got that sense of humor even after losing Fred, and he seems like he's found real happiness with Angelina. The running joke about kidnapping children is so funny, and the last line had me cackling! Just great. Please write more!

Name: WriteYourHeartOut (Signed) · Date: 10 Feb 2024 03:42 PM · For: Moving Out

This is absolutely brilliant. You really nailed all three characters, and packed so much humor into so few words! This is 100% a conversation I could see having happened in canon. I was smiling from start to finish, you really nailed this! Well done!

Name: blackballet (Signed) · Date: 21 Mar 2022 08:58 PM · For: Where Do Babies Come From

Hi, back for more for the galazy!

 

LOL I love that chapter title. Haha George, come on, be serious for once. Though your George humor is so good, and he would totally ask "should i just go grab one?"

 

poor Angelina, just like, come on, I love you and I want kids. It seems like this is a common thing, him pushing her to the edge and then her just spitting it out <3 I love that, and I would really love to see more of Angelina bc she seems like she would put him in line sometimes :)

 

And I also love thw way her movements are more forceful the more frustrated she gets with his joking. its such a good way of indicating her irritation with George. I would love to see you write more of them, also. Your comedic timing is really something to be envious of

 

Thank you again!!

Catherine 

Author's Response:

Hi Catherine, thanks for reading this. 

 

George cannot be serious.  He just cannot.  I find Fred and George's humor easier to write because it's my humor.  The thing that I struggle over the most is the British accent and colloqualisms.  Drabble is about my limit for writing in British vernacular, so I would find a George/Fred bit very challenging.  Thanks again for the review.

 

-Drew

Name: blackballet (Signed) · Date: 21 Mar 2022 08:55 PM · For: Moving Out

Hi there, I am here for the galazy review event!

 

Oh gosh, I love the way this starts! definitely a Molly Weasley reaction lol. (also, your dialogue is just generally really impressive :) ) But I also get a sense of foreboding, which I know is not really the point, but I can't help it with the twins. Like this is really them growing up and moving out. And of course Molly hates it, but she can't stop it anymore than they can stop the war and its casualties. ANYWAY

 

I do love the way the twins joke with the phrase 'getting carried away'. But they don't want to give up Molly's cooking just yet, of course. I love this little sweet drabble, even though i made some pretty sad extrapolations. You really describe their relationship so well!

 

Thank you :)

Catherine

Author's Response:

Thanks Catherine, 

So I had this idea for a challenge.  One character has the exact same dialogue in three different one-shots.  All the same words in the exact same order.  To see just how hard it was, I wrote one - a one-shot with Helga Hufflepuff, one with James Potter talking to his father about Lily Evans, and one about the twins moving out.  In each, Helga, James, and George say the same words - in the same order - to tell three different stories. 

Turns out it wasn't hard - it was diabolical.  It was so hard that I gave up on it after struggling for so long.  However the section with the twins was too good, so I extracted it and threw it in here as a throw-away drabble.  Thanks for the review.

-Drew

Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 20 Feb 2022 07:48 PM · For: Moving Out

 

Hi - here for galazy reviewing event :)

 

I love this little piece, I thought you did such a good job with the characterization of all the three of the weasleys here. I love how you've really nailed the humour that fred and george have. I really literally laughed out loud when  "Nobody is trying to carry George away." it was delivered so perfectly!

 

I can totally imagine Molly getting quite emotional about George moving out too. I think she is such a mother hen and loves being able to fuss over her kids. she'll be missing him which is why she is so horrified but framing it as 'concern' on her part. you really captured her so well here.  I thought this was really cute and funny piece. humour is tough genre, I wish I could write it like you!

 

Abbi x

 

Author's Response:

Thanks Abbi, 

It so happens that I share Fred and George's rediculous sense of humor, so writing them tends to be 'how would I respond to this conversation?' 

The origin of this is that I was thinking (a *long* time ago) about initiating a challenge of having people write three one-shots in which one character in each uses the exact same words in the exact same order to tell three different stories.  Just to see how diabolically hard it was, I wrote one myself.  George's dialogue in this piece are the same words -in the same order - used by a different character in a different one-shot.  It was so horribly hard that I scrapped it - and the challenge - but posted this as a 'drabble' because I enjoyed the scene so much.

Thanks for reviewing.

-Drew

Name: PinsandKneazles (Signed) · Date: 20 Feb 2022 03:53 PM · For: Where Do Babies Come From

Hey, I'm here for a galazy review!

 

This is such an amusing little drabble that comes full-circle; it reminds me of that verse/poem/song that starts off with 'you remind me of a man...what man...etc'. It also speaks volumes about George's ridiculous sense of humour; I wonder if Angelina has to watch EVERYTHING she says and construct her sentences super carefully in case George twists it into something she never intended? I mean, it's simple enough - she wants kids. And George, knowing perfectly well what she means, tries (successfully) to get a rise out of her. Serves him right that she hits him with the graphic stick and gives a birthing description. She could have really gone to town there. I kinda wish she had, haha!

 

This was great! Thanks so much for sharing!

 

Meera <3

Author's Response:

Thanks Meera, 

In this case, George's rediculous sense of humor is my own.  The conversation between him and Angelina could very well be one between my wife and I...with the same exasperation.  You would think she would know better than to ask me questions by now.

The reason she sticks around is probably the same as Angelina's: "At least it doesn't get boring."

Thanks for the review.

-Drew

Name: prideofprewett (Signed) · Date: 19 Feb 2021 02:31 AM · For: Moving Out

As I'm sure you have guessed from my name here, I love Molly Weasley! Even in all of her overly protective and maternal ways. I think you convey her relationship with the twins here as we see it in canon. So I totally see it as a believable portrayal. 

 

The dialogue is just rip roaring, raucous humor. But the end did have me a bit sad with George saying "until there's no more breath in my body," and the insinuation that Fred's "going to be much worse." Just because quite the opposite happens to them in canon. I don't know if this happens within the canon timeline, but if it does, I think it definitely packs something of an emotional punch to see their roles reversed through this little bit of dialogue. 

 

Also, I love how Molly Weasley, domestic queen herself is totally disgusted about how her boys are expecting this level of domesticity from a possible significant other. I believe Molly's life was a choice (if you read my stuff, you'll see my headcanons out in the open as to how things happened for her and Arthur). And she firmly believes in women having the ability to choose their futures. I mean, she grew up in the 60s-70s, so yeah, even if we don't know what Wizarding Society was like then we can guess based on the "Muggle," side of things. So yeah, I kind of got that vibe from her. 

 

And naturally the twins are just the sort who say things to get a rise out of people. And you show them succeeding here in less than 200 words. Damn Drew that takes skill.

 

<3 Courtney 

 

*team ice otter*

Author's Response:

Thanks Courtney, 

I can channel Fred and George better than any other characters in canon.  Somehow, I 'get' their humor, timing, and overall ability to push everyone's buttons just far enough...without going over the edge.

This particular drabble is part of a failed challenge.  The challenge was to take three different characters from three different timelines and 'tie them together' somehow.  I decided to make one character from each timeline speak exactly the same words in exactly the same order.  There was actually a story before this with Rowena Ravenclaw whose dialogue with her father was the exact same words - in exactly the same order that George delivers in this part.  Of course, the meaning is entirely different.  I never ended up finishing it, but this part ended up being better as a stand-alone anyway, so I threw it up here during one of our House challenges last fall.

Fred and George are definitely my favorite characters from the series and I really enjoyed channeling them - if just for a short while - as they decided to tell their Mom they were moving out to live in the joke shop.  I recognize the ending is a bit tragic in retrospect, but it's definitely how they would have talked to Molly at the time.  Thanks for reviewing!

Name: Oregonian (Signed) · Date: 18 Feb 2021 12:42 AM · For: Where Do Babies Come From

Hi, Drew,

 

In this drabble, entitled Where Do Babies Come From, George and Anglina seem to have two differet ideas of the answer to that question!  We see George, not with his brother Fred, but he's still joking.

However, it's not two jokesters feeding off each other, because the other person in the conversation is his wife Angelina, who wants to talk seriously about an important subject.  As I read this eight-line conversation, I wondered , why is George joking?  Why is he pretending to be obtuse?

 

I wondered if he wanted to avoid the topic by pretending he didn't understand her meaning and continuing to speak like that for two more lines of dialogue.   Maybe he doesn't want to have a baby now and also doesn't want to talk about it.

 

Or perhaps he's so accustomed to turning everything into a joke that he fails to notice when it's not appropriate.   Fred, the person he used to banter with, is gone now, and there's no one to take his exact place.

 

You show that Angelina is getting annoyed with George's failure to take her wishes seriously by her actions -- "She set the teapot down on the table forcefully" --  and her exasperated words -- Oh, for heavens sake, George."  She calls him an idiot.  You have to say everything precisely with George because he refuses to understand the usual interpretation; it's like talking to a house-elf.

 

George's final line implies that he belatedly realizes that he may have pushed her too far, but then he turns the blame away from himself and back onto Angelina --  "Why didn't you just say you wanted kids?"

 

At that point I would have bashed him over the head with the teapot.  This is a clever drabble, with a lot said in just a few lines of conversation.  Good job.

 

Vicki

Snow Foxes

Author's Response:

So this entire exchange was written in my head for two entirely different characters in the series that I'm writing now.  The conversation didn't fit in any of the novels I had written up to this point, so I captured it here, just because I found it absolutely histerical...and because it required so little editing to change from my OC to Angelina and George.  I found it so like George to 'channel' his brother to avoid a difficult conversation.  If you don't want to talk about it - make a joke.

There is definitely something to your idea that with Fred gone, George acts out like this - just to get a rise out of people.  Like you mention, he seems to know exactly how far he can push people's buttons before he has to back off a little.

Thanks for reviewing!

-Drew

Name: Oregonian (Signed) · Date: 18 Feb 2021 12:18 AM · For: Moving Out

Hi, Drew.

 

I see that these little drabbles, your first postings on your Author Page, haven't received any reviews yet.  Well, let's change that.

 

I don't know about you, but I'm glad I'm not Molly Weasley.  Can you imagine trying to carry on a conversation with these two jokesters?  Year after year?

 

You write the two brothers with just the right touch.  So deft that I didn't notice, the first time around (and maybe Molly didn't either), that when she complained about the twins' moving into the joke shop, they instantly changed the topic to George's possible future bride.

 

It's joke after joke, turning their mother into the perpetual "straight man" for their instantaneous comebacks.  I doubt that Fred and George talk like this between themselves 100% of the time (I checked out the final chapter of Goblet of Fire to make sure they knew how to talk seriously), but as you depict them, they sure know how to push their mother's buttons.  

 

The ending of this drabble is sad, if you stop to think about it.  Molly asks if the boys will always be like this, and Fred says, "...not me, Mum.  I'm going to get worse."  But we all know what is going to happen to Fred., and the joke turns into tragedy.

 

Nicely written.  A very good job.

 

Vicki

Snow Foxes

Author's Response:

Thanks Vicki - these drabbles were feeling a bit lonely.  Thanks for dropping in.

This particular drabble is part of a failed challenge.  The challenge was to take three different characters from three different timelines and 'tie them together' somehow.  I decided to make one character from each timeline speak exactly the same words in exactly the same order.  There was actually a story before this with Rowena Ravenclaw whose dialogue with her father was the exact same words - in exactly the same order that George delivers in this part.  Of course, the meaning is entirely different.  I never ended up finishing it, but this part ended up being better as a stand-alone anyway, so I threw it up here during one of our House challenges last fall.

Fred and George are definitely my favorite characters from the series and I really enjoyed channeling them - if just for a short while - as they decided to tell their Mom they were moving out to live in the joke shop.  I recognize the ending is a bit tragic in retrospect, but it's definitely how they would have talked to Molly at the time.  Thanks for the review!