Name: starlitcastles (Signed) · Date: 04 Feb 2021 02:55 AM · For: Chapter 1

Hello!

 

I'm here to drop a review for the Fairyland Event and am here for the Frost Kitten team!

 

From the foreword, I want to say that this will be a different story than what most are used to reading yet it's actually cool to see your take of Harry's childhood and life prior to Hogwarts and see what comes out from it. I also do understand that your story is also the result of the frustration with how Harry's treatment in the books especially regarding Dumbledore so it's cool that you're writing something that will make things better (and perhaps easier) for Harry. I'm excited to see the story of your original character: Lisa Westfield and her being the caretaker and guardian for Harry will take. The quote also definitely fits as well.

 

Okay so another thing I want to mention is that I'm guessing from reading this that Lisa is a Seer since we're told that she has dreams and I'm wondering if the visions from that of her dreams are what lead her to take Harry from the Dursleys and knowing that it's a bad idea to leave him with the Dursleys. I think it's good that she's willing to change things even if it may possibly complicate and change much of the course in the events of the story. The change is what probably excites me the most because we're seeing what outcome can result from this. 

 

Your descriptions of how Lisa handles Harry when she takes him away from The Dursleys is so vivid and lovely and we can see that in spite of not being a mother, she still tries to be gentle and or at least does her best to pick him up and take him away. One good example that you do is this part: "As she'd hoped, the baby reached for the warmth of her flesh, whining lowering into small hums and gurgles. Lisa first set to winding the baby tighter in the sheets, she could learn swaddling later."  It shows a great deal of her care for him while on her mission. It also shows that she'll also be a wonderful and better guardian than his aunt and uncle which definitely is something that I look forward to in this story.

 

My question regarding what's happening is: will there be consequences for her if anybody shall find out what happened to Harry? I'm quite curious as to see how she'll not only raise Harry as her own but if any of her actions will come back for her or to Harry in the future and impact both of them.  The way you ended with Petunia reading the letter from Lisa and her reaction to it is not only spot on in terms of her characterization but also shows that Lisa made the right decision. It also does raise the question if there will be a possible meeting between the two in the future if he ever decided to visit her after years of living with another guardian and what her reaction would be in different circumstances.  I do slightly hope we get to see her in a future chapter.  I really like the way you set this whole thing up and am looking forward to the next chapter to see how Lisa is going to raise Harry and what's next on her journey.

 

Overall, can't wait to see what's in the store for the next chapter!  Keep up the great job!

 

-Anni

 

Name: sinnersandsapphics (Signed) · Date: 22 Aug 2020 03:29 AM · For: Chapter 1

Hello, Tulips!

I’m excited about you joining the site and already getting a story up, so wanted to leave you a review!

Your author’s notes about all of the abuse in the books is so real, as is the fact that quite a bit of it just gets kind of swept over. Also big mood at “Growth is realizing your fave people aren't all that amazing. Growth is writing fiction about what could've gone better.”

I am such a sucker for Harry having a safe, happy childhood, so thanks for writing this.

Lol yes at how similar muggle suburbs look. Do wizards have suburbs? I hope not cause they’re kind of hell, though I like to think they’d at least look more interesting

At first I thought Lisa might have her foreknowledge through being a time travel, but it looks like she’s a seer. That’s interesting! It gives good flexibility for her to know enough to act, but maybe not all of the specifics for what to look out for. I’m curious about the amount of details she’ll have to work with, and if her relevant visions will continue, or her actions in this story will be based on what she saw so far. I guess she can’t have too many more visions of what we saw happen in the books, if taking Harry away from the Dursleys has a significant change on that course of events.

I have so many questions about Lisa! Like how old is she and which other characters does she know personally? What was she doing with her life before she dedicated it to Harry?

+100 to not caring what Dumbledore’s reasons are. Though that also makes me wonder if Lisa only saw the pain in store for Harry or also the good. From Dumbledore’s standpoint, any misery Harry suffers is justified if it helps him defeat Voldemort. I think that’s ew and imagine Lisa did too, but it makes me curious if that outcome was part of her vision. Is she aware that she’s disturbing the course of events that leads to Voldemort’s defeat? (though lol it’s also the same course events that leads to Voldemort’s return to power). On a more compassionate level, I wonder if disturbing the course of events would change (or risk changing) the meaningful relationships he forms with people like Ron, Hermione, and Ginny. I don’t believe the risk of losing any of those things justifies the abuses Harry suffered, but I’m curious what direction this story will take things.

I’m going to hypothesize that Lisa is a Gryffindor. Hufflepuff is possible to, but the whole making a snap decision to kidnap a baby for its own good seems like peak Gryffindor energy to me

Ugh “concrete cradle” such a good and painful description

Ohh wait what Lisa was in hiding? With “her kind?” Does that mean seers, or something else?

That ending makes me curious about Petunia and if we’ll see more of her, and if she has a shot at some sort of redemption. 

This is such an interesting start, and opens up a lot of questions (lol obviously as my review became more a hundred questions than actual feedback)! I am super curious to see what comes next and what direction you take all of this

Sam.

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for the absolute sweetest review!! It's probably the best I will ever receive.
Yes, Lisa is a seer. I feel that JKR didn't actually put a lot of thought in the show of Seers and their potential in the canon verse itself. The reason was to of course discredit Trelawney but there was so much to the prospect. So I used a seer. Plus a time traveller wouldn't have the means to raise baby Harry.
A lot of Lisa's backstory is going to be discussed in the coming chapters! I'm already so inspired for her that I have a lot of chapters already planned whoops!
The way I saw it, Dumbledore was the one who set in motion the things that happened to lead to Voldemort coming back, which is why in his mind he saw himself justified in whatever happened to a little boy who grew up completely fine which if my psychology course is correct is a load of waffle. He wanted the prophecy fulfilled and that's the end point.
But oh you're getting way too close to plot points so I won't divulge anymore!!