Name: grumpy cat (Signed) · Date: 20 Feb 2021 11:53 PM · For: Chapter 1

i both love it and hate it when remus is being self-deprecating, love it because the personality trait seems to fit him kinda perfectly, what with his background and being a werewolf and all the baggage that comes with it, but also hate it because i just want to shake him and hug him out of it because he's so brilliant and a wonderful human, and him laying in james and lily's bed thinking these thoughts makes me sad, especially because i know that lily and james most definitely do not think that about their friend. and i love the way you've written the friendship and love between lily and remus here, he really really needs love at the moment and i'm happy that lily is there for him!

 

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Name: ShazaLupin (Signed) · Date: 27 Jan 2021 03:49 PM · For: Chapter 1

 

Hi again!

 

Aww, poor Remus. He really does overthink things so much and he is so hard on himself. His friends care for him and love him and he just thinks that can't possibly be true. I love the idea of LIly and Remus being the quiet ones together, and at Hogwarts going off together for some peace and quiet. I imagine that was hard to come around the in the boy's dormitory, and probably the girls too knowing teenage girls! 

 

This was a very sweet piece, and I'm glad LIly could make him feel al little better, even if it's only for a little while. Although it makes it quite sad when you think about what happens after. 

 

Another lively piece!

 

Shaza

Written for the winter in fairyland review event.

 

Name: prideofprewett (Signed) · Date: 27 Jan 2021 02:33 AM · For: Chapter 1

Dottie this is absolutely adorable! I always loved the notion that Lily and Remus were true friends. And that is what we see here. Remus and his constant companion, self-loathing and guilt. Lily with her kindness to do something nice for him, such as stitch up his coat. I love the detail about her wanting to learn this skill as a result of becoming pregnant. I mean, not everyone suddenly harbors that desire, but I thought it was really sweet. And that end snuggle was just adorable! You really found a way to turn Remus' angsty emotions into something light and fluffy at the end. I really like your writing style and how you convey character's moods. 

 

<3 Courtney 

 

* team ice otter * 

Name: sinnersandsapphics (Signed) · Date: 22 Aug 2020 03:50 AM · For: Chapter 1

Hello Dottie!

Yayy, you’ve uploaded your first story to the archives! Let’s celebrate by giving it its first review, no?

When I saw Lily and Remus I got excited and thought this might be connected to the polyamory story you mentioned. I have read more words and chilled my butt that that’s not the case, and I like that you’re exploring Lily and Remus dynamic in different ways, romantic in that story and platonic in this one.

OMG REMUS SHUTUP I mean stop being awful to yourself and saying your worse company than a crying baby! Maybe yelling at you to shutup isn’t going to help your negative self image but it’s how I FEEL

I think you make a good point, that Remus would be feeling a deep sense of loss, no longer being able to share the full moon with his friends like he used to. Ugh it’s a really deep sadness that the “happy days” of those years are over, especially given that that was a kind of low bar for happiness to start with.

I feel like Lily and Remus have such an important dynamic, and reading this I realize I haven’t seen nearly enough of it. I am really glad that this piece is platonic, because I think focusing on quiet m/f friendships is so important. I am also ready and curious to see what you do with them romantically. 

I liked the line “it’s not a baby’s nature to be quiet, nor is it James’ or Sirius’” and the quiet implication of the contrast that it is in Remus’ nature. I’m used to a very extroverted version of Lily, so seeing her more drawn to (or at least appreciative of) quiet moments here is nice

FYI I’m not sure if you changed the color of your text in the editor or some formatting got transferred when you pasted from elsewhere, but the text color for the story is really hard to read on the dark skin =/ I was still able to read it by copy/pasting the text of the story elsewhere, but that’s something to be careful of in the future

This story was so tender. It is sweet in a way that is laced with a very understandable sadness, but it made me smile to read. Thank you so much for posting! I’m excited to see what comes next from you!

Sam.