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Hey, Taylor! Here for your request! :)
Uhm, so Sirius and Remus disappeared at the same time? Suspicious...
And James and Lily also disappeared at the same time? Even more suspicious... :P
(Btw, typical Sirius' thinking, that going to the movies alone is boring... and Remus' reply of "some people actually care about the movie" Lol! Also very typical Sirius "not making the rules"... :P)
Okay, confession, I'm not familiar with ATLA, so I didn't catch the references... *hides*
Sorry, this review is very short, but I really enjoyed the chapter! I'll see you on the next one in a minute! ;)
Lovely work as usual!
Snowball hug,
Chiara
hi i'm still here, this is definitely not a swap you do not owe me reviews for it i just need to finish this and idfk
NOOOOO WHERE IS THE LIVE TEXTING OF THEIR CONVERSATION YOU HAVE BETRAYED ME
"i stole lily's phone and made the unilateral decision to upgrade her lololololol
"i'm going to fuck james now, as one does"
YES that is truly an iconic line, i feel like it's highkey (maybe just lowkey?? idk) egotistical for me to say that but the point is :joy: i am deceased
"the inappropriate jokes are *why* we come" i love this sentiment within a statement that could be interpreted as inappropriate
+100 i love this it is genius
also oh my god incredible way to work this conversation into the chatfic without having them text it +1000
okay that last review was short, idk if it was too short, idk anything, but i need to finish this fic and i might as well review while i do it
OH HEY NOVEL REVIEW BADGE WHEN THE FORUMS ARE FINALLY BACK
(why am i like this)
idk peter, someone in a relationship can totally be a heartbreaker, it's just that the heartbreak comes without sleeping with them etc
(why am i)
"now who's the one ignoring all the grey bubbles" i mean fair but also, a few minutes on read =/= three weeks, come *on* sirius and also come *on* remus
(why)
(okay sorry i just needed to finish that "why" string, it was calling to me)
(and in fairness my avoidant ass *totally* gets it, fun story this one time i was tired of a vague "what are we" thing so i texted the guy asking and then put my phone on silent and ignored it for hours, then i saw he'd responded and took a shower and made lunch rather than read it)
(i made *lunch* i feel like that says a lot all on its own like have you *met* me)
(i did that for a conversation *i fucking started*)
(why am i like this)
(anyway i am badmouthing remus and sirius way too much given my personal history with this shit :joy:)
"not when the bros are stressing you the fuck out" :joy: :joy: :joy: incredible
"speaking of which, i've gotta go make one of my own" :joy: :joy: :joy:
OH MY GOD yes lily pause the episode
hiii here for our swap from the other day i'm on top of things really i am
omg lily i love it
i love it so much
utter perfection
omg james i love it
i love it so much
utter perfection
and i love how pleased with themselves they are, it's the appropriate level of pleased bc omg
"there are two imposters among us" amazing
i am lowkey impressed by mary and marlene rolling with it as much as they are
lololol "i am concerned by the implication you fucked in his backyard on a different night" :joy: :joy: :joy:
this is priceless i am ded
oh my fucking god dorcassss fucking hell i mean really is that really necessary this is just ughhhhhh i am so annoyed at her right now i just want marley to be free of like bad ex girlfriends who keep hooking their line in you because idk why idk idk it's just annoying let marley be happy pls.
hell fucking yes block her number ughh why is mary being all reasonable just ,,,,okay i mean maybe dorcas isn't all bad but but but no i'm still annoyed with her and don't want marlene keep getting hurt.
and those text smileys are fucking creepy in my head. just sayin'
lolol omg no no now marlene is overanalyzing smiley faces i'm dying but also who hasn't done that except i mean they always look fucking psycho creepy to me. ahahha and now the lily's smiley is explained sort of hah i'm glad i noticed it way back when :elmofire:
and hah those messages between her and james i mean they're messes but also they're adorable messes together who spy on their friends and i love it
also fucking love mary asking for live updates because yes that's a fucking mood
*fake date* HAHAHAH FAKE YEAH FUCKING FAKE
there is no logic seems like legit the best summary of literally everything they're all ddoing and i love it hahah also james went after her i mean i wonder what for, what could they possibly be doing alone sus very sus love it
but also. still annoyed at dorcas, i don't care that marlene seems to want to uhh idk have what with her but if that's a thing i'm hoping dorcas ends up being a better person than the vibe i'm getting :eyes:
kris
here for our swapppp
oh nooo the dreaded "talk in person," idc whether the takeaway will be positive or negative i hate in-person discussions, like motherfucker *no* just text me so i can have my emotional freakout without witnesses
(just me? probably)
lolololol and then i read "handling drama like an adult instead of spiralling out" and i feel Called The Fuck Out
ily james, that is 10/10 the best way to deal with that situation, and also this is similar to a conversation in wildly illogical scrapbook and for some reason that's cracking me the fuck up
marlene.
marlene.
"i have no idea what it is" you saw them kissing that should narrow shit down a whole lot
"we need a broader escape plan" brb ded
"patently absurd genius" would be an excellent tombstone
(motherfucker did i review this already?? i have definitely read it, if i did oops i will review the next chapter too why am i)
so i know in theory i should've noticed all their screen/display/whatever names before considering i've read like three chapters already but for some reason i burst out laughing while reading them all listed in that first 'how are we all still alive' chat and i love itt
also also i fucking love sirius black who is definitely the hottest person in any room he occupies at any given moment i love him
and peter is strangely precious with his white lie idk i did not think i would ever say that but it's been done
bahhah yeah lily and james writing a white lie that's not actually a lie and trolling everyone seems legit
also wtf is bottomless brunch bc it sounds like a good thing
omg omg remus is once again being all ??? what the fuck dude i'm dying how is he so sarcastic but also he's running away from marlene i'm dying again but also marley needs dorcas to leave her tf alone and let her get over it godd fuck
how are they not even the least bit suspicious that both lily and james are missing and the only places they haven't checked for them are the bedrooms i'm dying over here
but lol okay mary found lily bahh it's still suspicious as fuck
that 'yeah jam how dare you' is just hilarious because i'm betting they fucked each others brains out just sayin'
and she's missing again ahahhaa totally not suspicious at all no zero suspicion i love it
krissss
Hi Taylor! Here for the review event.
I loved the opening section. I thought that the banter about changing the group chat name was a great way of letting Sirius and Remus knowing that they’d been found out. I love how “it seemed like it’d be funny” was James’s excuse, it seems very on brand for him. I loved the name changing shenanigans in the second section. Omg that comment about things that make Sirius gag made me laugh very very hard and I am still giggling. Love it. Such a casual rebuttal of the discussion of everyone being in committed monogamous relationships. I also love the acknowledgement that there will be no lessening of inappropriate jokes, and the declaration that they come for the inappropriate jokes (because they’re all making them lol).
I loved this fic and it’s snarky snarky humour and I will be back to read more of your stuff very soon!
~Liv
Hi Taylor! Here for the review event.
I love the banter between them about the use of smileys. It’s so funny and yet also so accurate. I thought the conversation between Remus and Sirius about them was really well done and was so awkward. I loved the part where Peter got mad at James for ditching the Wolfstar awkward sexual tension and going to pick up Lily. The line about Peter finding his own girlfriend so he could escape was hilarious and made me laugh. I love the belated realization that they missed so many signs of Lily and James’s relationship (I also feel very proud of myself for picking up on them very early, and also they were like, hilarious dumb with how much they missed). Omg the ending! I’m guessing Sirius led with the declaration of love? Great way to end the chapter, I’ll be back soon!
~Liv
Hi Taylor! Here for the review event.
OMG THE FIRST TEXT BAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH I legit cackled I love how surprised they all were and how blasé Lily was about it. And then how James confirmed that they were dating and the second chorus of “what”s killed me right after I had recovered from laughing about the first round. I just love how confused everyone is and how easily Lily and James are spinning the narrative to make it seem like they didn’t hide it. I loved the little Among Us reference about how if it was a round they would have all been killed by Lily and James. This was very very entertaining to read. I loved the conversation between Lily, Mary, and Marlene at the end of the chapter, especially all the silly references to sex (and to the other two not wanting any information at all whatsoever about Lily and James in bed…. Or not in bed).
This was really good and I’ll be back for more soon!
~Liv
Hi Taylor! Here for the review event.
I continue to love the way you write everybody. I love how supportive Lily and Mary are of Marlene even though they have absolutely no idea why they’re being supportive of her. I love how everyone seems to be getting their shit together with their relationships this chapter (even if that’s the extent, I’m still proud of them all) and I love that they’re finally figuring out what’s going on with Lily and James. I also love how they also needed to know what was going on between Dorcas and Marlene before discussing the Lily and James sitting in a car and potentially kissing thing. I loved the final conversation between Lily and James and how they decided to just confuse the heck out of all their friends about how they had never really hid their relationship (which I mean, everyone was hilariously bad at noticing things so they didn’t really have to put any effort into it lol). Also the line “I would like ‘patently absurd genius’ carved into my tombstone” was very funny and also I think it’s such a James thing to say. I’m very much looking forward to the next chapter after all the stuff that happened in this one.
I’ll be back soon!
~Liv
Hi Taylor! Back for the review event.
I love how Lily’s friends are slowly figuring out that something suspicious is going on with her. Also her discussion with Peter and the line “we may have a situation on our hands” I just love how understated that is about the idea of James and Lily being together.
I love the Among Us references in the group chat especially the “there are two impostors among us” title. I also love how Sirius and Marlene immediately jokingly blamed each other and then continued that joke through. I love their discussion about James and Lily (and the continued Among Us references, especially the part about doing tasks in electrical aka death zone central). The discussion about bloodstains being the thing preventing mass murder was very sassy and very hilarious and I loved it.
I loved the ending text monster paragraph that Dorcas sent to Marlene. It was exactly the kind of thing that you would expect to see and I thought it was written really well.
This chapter was great and I’ll be back for the next one soon!
~Liv
Hi Taylor! I’m here for the review event.
Okay so I really liked the conversation between James and Sirius at the start of the chapter, for two reasons. First, I’m really happy that Sirius is talking out his feelings with someone and trying to work out what the best thing to do is instead of just doing something and having it turn out horribly. Second, I’m not entirely sure that I believe James when he says that he definitely didn’t sleep with Lily. I feel like all these little things are hints of Jily that will show up later. Loved the conversation between Lily and her friends, especially the random keysmashing because of how well it represents Marlene’s feelings. I love the mental image of a very high Sirius trying to make homemade cookies, because it just fits so well. I also laughed at the fact that he ignored ready to go cookie dough in the fridge in order to destroy the kitchen (and then ordered cookies anyways).
James and Peter just being like “oh dear” was very funny. And the banter between Lily and the rest of them after she announces her plan to borrow their kitchen was very funny. I loved the final conversation. I think it’s hilarious how they’re all like… looking at the fact of Jily being a thing and just going “wow all these things are very weird maybe they’ve already started drinking that explains it they’re definitely not together nope” and not putting things together at all.
This was a great chapter and I’ll be back for the next one!
Liv
Hi Taylor! I’m here for the review event.
I love how Lily is just texting everyone unintentionally until she finally gets James to come pick her up (and not even by texting James). I’ve very intrigued by what exactly her plan of thanking James appropriately is, although I have suspicions ???? I’m not 100% sure that I believe Lily about her sleeping on James’s floor. I love the banter about Lily having to change her nickname in the flat chat. I thought the chapter ending was really good and a really good way to end the chapter, with Sirius discovering that Remus has a date. Also I’m not sure how I just noticed this but I love that Marlene’s chat nickname is “the dad friend” when she’s probably as equally unqualified as Lily to be parenting any of them.
Loved this chapter, will be back soon!
~Liv
Hi Taylor! I’m here for the review event.
I love the discussion about Dorcas coming to the party and the sass about democracy and about that not being a democracy and about Lupin not really counting as a vote. I love the fact that she was already invited before the discussion took place as well. I love the discussion between Mary and Peter. I know I said in previous reviews that I think James and Lily are a couple (or on their way to being a couple) but I think this confirms it for me. Peter and Mary are SO convinced that James and Lily are just making a terrible decision to go watch a movie surrounded by other couples and it’s something that would be absolutely hilarious if they were wrong. Love the dig that they thought Marlene was just going to add Dorcas to the groupchat without really asking for permission, and also I’m happy that Dorcas and marlene are getting along enough that she’s getting added to the friend group chat. “Lighten up Lupin” is the funniest name I’ve seen for a group chat – it’s even better than Lupin’s nickname, which was my previous favourite.
This was a great chapter and I’ll be back soon!
~Liv
Hi Taylor! I’m here from the review event.
I love the opening section. It’s so like them to go the the playground after a night of drinking and play on the playground. You did a great job with the drunk texts as well, and I love how Lupin’s response was just “coming”. I am very suspicious of Lily. Part of me thinks that she wasn’t actually on the phone and that she was actually with James. She seemed very quick to go “oh yes I was on the phone”. Also I love the conversation between Remus and Sirius. “Get out of here with your logic” is a hilarious line and absolutely something that hungover Sirius would say. I also think it’s interesting that James is very quick to say that he and Lily have plans for Valentine’s Day, and also I’m surprised that nobody questioned them (but of course they’re being made fun of, I love it). I think the ending was the best part – the name change from “lily you’re not responsible enough” to “lily you’re not allowed to be responsible” was absolutely hilarious and so was Lily’s very resigned response.
This chapter was great and I’ll be back for the next one soon!
~Liv
Hi Taylor! I’m here from the review event.
I’m very suspicious about everyone being out of the bachelor pad on a Sunday afternoon. I love the banter between them all about going to the movies alone or with someone – it’s so hilariously snarky and I love the sass. Also I love that Dorcas and Marlene seem to be more friendly, and hopefully their relationship/friendship continues to grow. I love the part where they all change their nicknames in the chat to Avatar characters and the brief allusion to the Marauders by referencing “moony”. I love the shade being thrown at Lily for interrupting the movie, it’s so sassy. I am very interested in the ending of this chapter, I think it might bode well for *things* later in the fic. This was great and I’ll be back soon!
~Liv
Hi Taylor! I’m here for the review event.
I really liked the start of this chapter and you’ve done a great job making me curious about what specifically happened between Dorcas and Marlene that’s preceded this. I love the discussion about what smiley faces mean because that seems exactly like the sort of thing you’d do while overythinking everything while making arrangments to meet up with your ex. I love the fact that Lily and James immediately decided to spy on Dorcas and Marlene because I can definitely see Lily wanting to make sure her friend is doing okay. And their banter about James being the best was absolutely hilarious. “The best at driving me insane” lol I died. The texts between Mary and Lily (specifically the part where James took over her phone) were also hilarious and I love your ability to write snarky chatfic. I love the ending, especially the “we stan a drama queen”. Absolutely hilarious and this was great. I’ll be back for the next chapter soon!
~Liv
Ch 15
*It’s the final chapter, duh-duh-duh duh, duh-duh-duh-duh* (sung to the final countdown)
Aw babies are all happily committed, even Peter! How adorable of them all :stitchfeelslove: They even go so far as to rename not just the bachelor pad chat, but also the one with Lily, awwww. And then she and James go have some fun together, lol -- I love that that line came from one of Branwen’s reviews as that’s definitely fitting both for this story and for Branwen as a person :P And now they’ve GOTTA have a house party to celebrate everyone not being single anymore or something and I think that’s cute :’) The bad/dirty jokes, especially as one is coming from Remus of all people are a fitting end for this chatfic and I can’t wait to see what happens in those James/Lily text “outtakes” in relation to this fic. Great job on this one overall and jfc on the ridiculous wait until everyone else figured out James & Lily were dating and then finally everyone figuring out their relationships too. A happy ending for everyone! :)
~Madi
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Hi again taylor!
Oooh we got ourselves a spicy chapter!! I’m glad (maybe?) that Sirius and Remus tried talking to each other, but clearly it didn’t help at all and then poor Peter has to semi-witness the blow up later, bless him. But also bless him for being willing to stay in the house and then live-chat everything to James purely for the gossip and drama :elmofire: Now with the Gaang chat, I love that moment because now they’re all recognizing the little (big) things they all missed over the last few months, and that is just perfect. The discussions of James and Lily having to change their names in the various “bachelor” group chats is great and also Lily’s evil smiley faces give me big “will cut a [person] with a smile on,” lol. Only one more chapter!! D:
~madi
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Hey Taylor,
omg, this was a blast!
you've really captured lots of fun in this chapter, they is something very uplifting about writing something so amusing. I found myself smiling a lot through the piece, the marauders together are so good. They bounce off each other so well from the each chat, I love serious Remus "these nicknames are stupid" like he isn't even serious if anything he is perhaps too cool for them haha.
i love the little details like Lily is kinda dubbing herself 'mom friend' because it's probably how she feels but mary is just calling out on that straight away which made me laugh. The screen names like all following on from each other is amazing. I think you're really good at balancing your characters out, like you can make them work in big groups so everyone is kinda involved in the action or doing something that adds value to the humour of the piece.
I LOVE LILY. she is taking charge of the situation, the boys are so clueless. I need a friend like lily. she's a good friend. 'HAIRCUTS EXIST'. I love the progress of drunkness like the last messages are basically understandable. is james hooking up with Lily? I can already picture the next chapter!
thanks for making me smile!
Abbi xx
You fuckin legend, taylor! :elmo fire: x 3 billion because of how :chefskiss: James and Lily’s plan went off to just gaslight the shit out of everyone else :joy: The repeated “what”s are just CLASSIC and makes all of them look like idiots (which they are) because holy shit guys, y’all probably share two braincells among you, and they’re never with one person at the same time. Also aw the girls are still super supportive of it and also still want the deets bc that’s what best friends do. And the guys are just like, wait you’ve been sleeping here?? And Lily is just like, flabbergasted that they literally hadn’t caught on until now. I LOVE IT ALL! AND there’s still two chapters left? What have you got in store?!
~madi
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Marlene and dorcas deciding to chat in person about the huge text dorcas sent the other day (or x time) is sooo adult of them and i just :stitchfeelslove: ALSO I FUCKING CALLED THEIR COLORS!!! I am more proud of that than I probably should be lol but I don’t really care :P I’m glad Dorcas and Marlene had a good chat and decided to get back together after their separate growth journeys they clearly needed to go on before this. Now Sirius and Remus just need to get their shit together, am i rite? Also!! James and Lily caught k*ssing in the car omgggg and then “fighting” omgggg taylor this is great gossip fodder for group i love it. James and Lily realizing they’ve been caught out and then deciding to go full fuck it is going to be so exciting to see, it’s either going to crash adn burn or be the most magnificent thing ever :elmofire:
~madi
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FUCKING FINALLY, TAYLOR!! :elmofire: x 1 billion. Everyone has finally gotten it together and figured out there’s something funky going on with James and Lily and decided to, of course, make a group chat excluding just the two of them to gossip about it. Also I really really enjoy that you went with the Among Us theme for this new group chat -- it unironically fits the situation much better than I could have ever thought it would, and, again, for some reason the color choices you’ve given everyone seems fitting too. I take it Lily would be red and James would be brown? :P The fact the group is gonna ~wait~ to call them out though is peak friend group staking out and I am so here for it! I am looking forward to the next chapter very very much :elmofire:
~madi
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