Name: prideofprewett (Signed) · Date: 29 Oct 2020 11:26 AM · For: Chapter 1

Right so I am a sucker for all things Prewett/Weasley. Naturally I had to read this fic about my boy Gideon. 

And wow you totally did not disappoint! This is so sweet. It conveys the whole feeling of being young and in love again, and I just really needed something sweet to read. If Gideon is notorious for pulling pranks on Marlene, she is right to be suspicious of this flower. Also, the level of detail you reference some of his past pranks are just great! And the image of him biting his lip to stop himself from laughing at a memory of one of them, I imagined his expression to be such a cheeky one that is both adorable and infuriating to Marlene.

And the whole idea of Gideon trying to be romantic and not really being romantic with this little poem is in fact, ROMANTIC. He's trying, the poor guy. I love him. I also love how Marlene's keeping him at arm's length, but she has these underlying feelings for him too. I do hope you continue this story as this was a great first chapter!

Thanks for writing! <3 Courtney Gifted for the fangtastic grimtown carnevil

Name: grumpy cat (Signed) · Date: 29 May 2020 07:01 PM · For: Chapter 1

arrrgh this is adorable: 'you do look rather cute when surprised with something disgusting' and also kinda hilarious but man, i think marlene is definitely a lil in ...crush or lust (?? too early to say love) with gideon, it's funny how she tries perpetuate her denial, especially when she notices that she's been thinking of him in a much nicer way than usual so she immediately goes on the offensive and hexes him :D gotta love those enemies to lovers, they're my favourite kind :D

 

omg imagining 'faffy nonsense' and running to him is just!! marlene has it bad for gideon, who...might or might not be honest, who's to know, but at least we get to see all these funny reactions from marlene :D

 

but third year?? it's got my interest piqued, i live for drama, so i *hav* to know what happened :p

 

'Did one reply to rhyming poems?' omg this entire thought process is comedic gold, i giggled at marlene,.... 'was that just to haiku's?' i mean really marlene!! you should maybe snog him or something. get that tension out of you *_*

 

i loved this start to the story, marlene is such an engaging and funny character and her friends seem really nice as well - i can't wait to see where the story goes and what happens between gideon and marlene!

 

kris

 

(rvg, team gold)

Name: Chemical_Pixie (Signed) · Date: 17 May 2020 01:51 AM · For: Chapter 1

Hey Valerie! Here for May RvG (team Gold!). I figure since I roped you onto Team Gold and you pushed our team into the double digits, I should leave this review.

 

Plus I am a sucker for Marlene McKinnon. She's one of my favorite minor characters. And you have this as a Marlene/Gideon story? Incredible! (To show you how much I love this pairing, I have a Marlene/Gideon fic as well, so I am totally pumped to delve into fic!)

 

The classic boy-pranks-girl-and-thinks-girl-is-cute trope. I am HERE for it. Gideon is adorable here. Sure, he really needs to mature and treat his love interest as an actual human being and not doing stuff to just get a reaction out of her BUT... he IS a teenager, and I'm looking forward to his journey.

 

And he seems to be really trying here! A flower AND a poem, heavens. The boy's got it bad for Marlene, hasn't he? I wonder why he's pulled out these tactics within a week of his latest prank against her? Is it because Gideon realized his feelings for Marlene? Or is this another prank? I'm curious to find out more about him!!

 

Marlene is definitely attracted to Gideon, and she seems to be tormented by that, ahaha. And then with her being unable to unname why she's so tormented by it, especially after she discovers that poem in her dorm, lol. I like how she has her girl squad to lighten the mood--and to nudge her in the right direction when needed. I have a feeling that she'll need more of that as the story continues.

 

Also! I like how you bring up some canon names here: Bertha Jorkins and Diggle, and then you have Molly Prewett, too. I like it when fan fic writers tie in canon characters together and link them in ways not covered in the HP books.

 

And the most pressing question of all: what was the incident in third year? I wanna know! (How you referenced this incident is a great tactic for writing an opening chapter, well done!) 

 

-Abby

Name: abhorsen (Signed) · Date: 10 May 2020 04:53 PM · For: Chapter 1

hey, welcome to hpft + gryffindor! i'm just dropping off a review as part of the gryffies' red v. gold common room activity! <3

it's a fun story, bc on one hand, it sounds like marlene's skepticism is totally warranted - but on the other hand, from the outside, it's really obvious to anyone reading this that gideon really fucking likes her, and neither the flower nor the poem was a prank. you've done a great job of really showing the chemistry they have in a way that's playful and funny - there's not really true animosity there, and it's so fluffy and adorable.

this is a sidenote, but i also like the way you've characterized gideon in a way that definitely shows a lot of similarities with fred and george while still giving him his own personality - it's a nice call to their family relationship.

(also, keeping one's wand in one's hair is amazing - i love that visual!)

amazing job, and again, welcome to hpft!

Author's Response:

Hi, and thank you so much! 

Ah Marlene and Gideon, it is totally warranted haha! It should be made clear soon as to why :) I'm really happy you enjoyed it, as I had fun writing it so I was just a little nervous to finally put it out there. The new chapter will be up soon! I just need to get through finals really quick haha. 

And yes, I've always felt that Fred and George had to have had something similar with their two uncles that we never got too know too much about, and I feel like maybe that connection to their Prewett side, keeps Gideon and Fabian alive in Molly's eyes. That's my take on it, at least!

My brother has a collection of wands and my hair is so long that once or twice, I've actually put one of them in my hair to hold it up. Since then, I always imagined that, had I gone to Hogwarts, that's probably something I'd do often and can imagine girls doing it that as well. :) 

thank you again for your review and kind welcome! I'm also exited to participate in the RvG activity! 

Name: victoria_anne (Signed) · Date: 10 May 2020 02:05 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hello! My name's Bianca. I hope you enjoy your time on HPFT! I'm dropping by with this review as a little welcome gift, and also because when I read the summary and the tags I knew it would be something I would like to read! It's also a really unique pairing, and I don't read nearly enough about the Prewett twins!

 

Ooh, what was the horrifying incident that happened in their third year, I wonder? And I love that Gideon and Fabian are pranksters like their nephews! Marlene's attitude towards Gideon is really sweet, like she knows he's just going to joke around but she can't help but be drawn to him. It sounds like they have a bit of history, even if not all of it is good! He obviously likes her, and is just going about it the wrong way to show it, haha.

 

That poem is so cute! I absolutely love your writing of Gideon! He's so cocky and unashamed but I tihnk he could be a bit of a gentleman if he tried. But there's definitely an attraction between them and I can't wait to read more about it!

 

At the beginning of the story you swap between present and past tense quite a bit, but it's nothing major :) It stays consistent after that.

 

This was a lovely start to a story! I really enjoyed reading it, with its focus on underrated characters, and especially when two of those characters are obviously crazy for each other! Great job!

Author's Response:

Hi Bianca, thank you so much for reviewing and welcoming me, it means a lot! I'm happy to hear you enjoyed the chapter so far, and can't wait to post more soon as soon as I've finished the next chapter. 

I've always both loved and hated the fact that Molly had brothers we never got a chance to meet, andI suppose, because of that I have always wanted to explore their stories. I haven't really even read too much about them in other fics, but an unspoken story has always been forming in my head over time. I'm glad to finally sit down and write about a little bit about them. And yes, I wanted Fred and George to have this little connection to their uncles :) 

oh my... I did notice that! I was having a hard time submitting this chapter (I got slightly confused haha!) and had made some edits, that once going through after it had been validated, realized didn't actually switch over. I'll definitely look those over again ^_^

All in all, thank you so much for your awesome review and kind welcome. I will definitely be posting the next chapter soon :)