Name: Noelle Zingarella (Signed) · Date: 20 Apr 2020 03:14 AM · For: The Artist

Hi Barbara! I’m here for your Challenge Entry Review :D

 

You said in your story note that you were challenging yourself to really dig into the detail work of description—and I would say you met that challenge extremely well. I loved all the vibrancy of the images you used—the way that you showed the Artist playing with every part of his medium. I will confess, that I had my suspicion of who the Artist was when Michael (yay!!) was questioning how an Artist creates near the beginning—and when the Artist started to create from nothing, then I was sure that this story was taking on the mother of all Origin Stories—God creating the universe! (And I agree, it would have been to much of a give away to use a capital H for he when talking about the Artist).

 

The scope of this story is enormous—the biggest thing you could hope to describe in a story—but it works and it works so well. I think this is because Michael, our narrator, doesn’t ever question the Artist’s ability to do what he’s doing. He just describes what he sees and he doesn’t get too philosophical about it. He lets it be playful and fun—and so very beautiful.

 

I ADORED the part about the colors coming into being and the different personalities they had. I think my favorite part was when blue and yellow were dancing together and wound up creating green.

 

Your language use throughout the story was dreamy and so fun! I could tell that you were enjoying playing with the words, and taking your time creating all these wonderful images.

 

The very end, when the Artist created the soul and man made me get choked up.

 

Thank you for this wonderfully creative entry to my challenge!! 

 

Yours,

Noelle

Author's Response:

Michael never would have questioned what the Artist did or how he created--definitely a clue to his identity.

I loved the colors part too. I felt like it was the pinnacle of the story and I couldn't quite get the other parts of creating the land and the animals to the same level as "Let there be light" and "separating night from the day." (although my second favorite part was the formation of man.

It was supposed to be visual arts first: paint-light, day/night; glitter or glittery paint-water, clay-earth and them moving into musical artistry for the animals. Not sure if that's how it turned out but that's how I was imagining it.