Name: MuggleMaybe (Signed) · Date: 12 Jul 2020 06:30 AM · For: Afternoon Delight Pie

hi madi <3 <3

 

I confess, I haven't seen the stage version of Waitress, and I only saw the movie once, a long time ago. I think I was able to follow the story well enough though, and that's largely due to how well it's written, so kudos to you! I think your opening paragraph where you so elegantly and efficiently recount Jenna's past, is very effective for readers who aren't familiar with the source material.

 

You captured Jenna so clearly. Even though I don't remember much about her I felt like I understood who she is, how hard she's worked and struggled, and how immensely loving she is, especially when she mentions Lulu. 

 

Her awkwardness when Dr. Pomatter shows up is adorable. It's like seeing an old crush from high school and feeling 16 again :P And all the interactions with Becky and Dawn around it make it even funnier and cuter and I just loved it! Also, I thought you did a great job capturing those minnor characters. Especially Becky. I think everyone needs a Becky in their life.

 

The actual conversation between Jenna and Pomatter was super cute. (Also that pie sounds delicious omg.) I really hope I'll have a chance to come back to this story soon because they HAD BEST get together when he comes back through town ;)

 

I haven't read much broadway inspired fic and now I really want to. This was so well done, Madi!

 

xoxo Renee

Name: Noelle Zingarella (Signed) · Date: 31 Dec 2019 10:53 PM · For: Afternoon Delight Pie

Hi Madi! I’m here for the Rager :D

 

Wow—a lot has sure happened to Jenna in the last six years! I love the way you tick off the list of crazy events in her life, and also the way the list ticks down to the present day of the story. It really pulled me in.

 

And boy is today going to be a tough day for Jenna! Nothing like your ex walking into your work and trapping you there, is there? It’d be nice if one of her coworkers would just deal with him, but I guess then we wouldn’t have a story ;)

 

I am laughing over the ex-lover pie!! Please make this recipe as a writers journal post—it’s hysterical.

 

All the adorable themed pie names are so homey! And the banter between Jenna and her coworkers is snappy and fun. Even if they are pressuring her a little wee bit.

 

Even though this meeting between Jenna and Dr. Pomatter started out sort of awkward they seemed pretty comfortable with each other by the time he left. I can see why they would have been together in the first place—even though there was apparently a wife in the picture?? I am curious to know if the wife is still around—and what’s going to happen when he comes back through town…

 

This first chapter is fun and sparkling :D

 

Yours,

 

Noelle