Name: Felpata_Lupin (Signed) · Date: 14 Dec 2019 07:39 PM · For: Monday

Hello, Melanie, dear! I'm here for your request! :)

This was a really nice first chapter! :) I don't think I've ever read a story focusing on Audrey so it's all new territory for me, but I'm liking what you are doing with her character so far! She's the kind of character I can recognize myself a little in, so that's even more nice! :D

Her morning routine was sooooo familiar... well, except bumping into her sister's naked boyfriend part... :P

Monday. I didn’t detest Monday like a lot of people did. I didn’t love it, either. No, Monday and I had a calm, mutual understanding that bordered on indifference. Monday understood that I had to have a respectable job, and I understood that Monday was necessary in order to do it. That's a way to see it... (I still count myself in the Monday haters number... :/)

Btw... what counts as "proper breakfast"? Toast sounds like plenty acceptable to me? I usually do much less... but, well, whatever... (I really like Vivian, btw, and the relationship between the two sisters! They are obviously very close, which is always lovely to read! <3)

Mr Cornwell seems so dislikeable, like some bosses can be unfortunately... *shrugs* I'm so glad Audrey is getting this chance to do something different! And I suppose this transfer is how she's going to meet a certain red-head, right? *whistles* I'm already excited! :D

For someone who grew up in the countryside, moving to the big city must be difficult... personally, I think London is very pretty, but being there as a tourist and living there are two very different things... also, I've grown up in a city, so... sorry, I'm digressing... :P

I love the relationships Audrey has with her family! Her dad seems a very nice man, and I love that he's so passionate about plants! The colour-changing roses sound so pretty, too! The way they interact is just so sweet! It's really lovely! <3

I'm very curious to see how things move from there and how Audrey will adjust in her new role! I'll see you on the next chapter in a minute! :)

Snowball hug,

Chiara

Author's Response:

Hi Chiara, and thank you for this! I’m glad you’re liking Audrey and even identifying with her a bit. Back when I started writing this (which was years ago; I abandoned it and am so happy to have picked it up again) any characterization I ever read of Audrey went in one of two directions: either she was a female version of Percy, or she was his polar opposite, some free-spirited, scatterbrained, or sassy person. I didn’t frankly see either of those options working out as a long term relationship for him. So along came this Audrey, a kind, conscientious, introverted person who I think could be good for him.

 

Btw, as far as breakfast goes, I don’t even eat breakfast most days, so Audrey’s got a head start on me with her toast! I envision her having been raised in a fairly traditional sort of environment in terms of her mom having managed the household, similarly to Molly Weasley, and constantly feeding people, so I’d like to think she was brought up with a healthy appreciation for a full breakfast, and hot meals in general!

 

I have visited London and absolutely adored it, but as someone who was raised in a suburb and transplanted to an urban environment, I can attest it can be really overwhelming.

 

Making Audrey the focus of the fic really allowed me to delve more deeply into supporting OC’s like her family members, and I am really happy you’re enjoying them so far!

 

Hugs,
Melanie

Name: StarFeather (Anonymous) · Date: 08 Dec 2019 07:43 AM · For: Monday

Hi, Melanie! I stopped by from the review request thread. :)

 

Honestly, I enjoyed your story. I like your definition about Monday. :)

 

I've read Percy-Audrey world written by the other author, it was good and yours is very promising. I didn't notice you wrote from the first person's POV 'cause your description was written so naturally from Audrey's filter. I could catch the other family members' characteristics and I like your Audrey's father who retired from the Ministry and now being engaged in planting greens or inventing new species.  The bush rose she got from her father must be very pretty, I felt like I wanted to watch the color change. I imagined colorful  Christmas illumination on the Christmas tree.

 

I understand Audrey's awkward feeling towards her sister and her boyfriend. I am curious  to know how she will change from the next chapter, yes we know Percy will be described from her eyes or her mind movement. I guess their mind game will begin soon. So exciting!

 

 Her old boss was a little impatient guy, I hope the new boss will treat her well,...oh wait, the boss could be Percy? 

Keep posting the review request. I'll be back.

 

Kenny

 

Author's Response:

Hey Kenny! Thank you for taking the time to review this! I am glad you're liking it.hank you especially for your comments on Audrey's father and his gardening hobby and the rose bush. Those were fun parts of the story for me to create.

 

I think you'll find that her new office will be much better. :)

 

Hope to see more of your thoughts on this story as it continues!

 

Melanie

Name: hopelesslyaddicted (Signed) · Date: 05 Dec 2019 03:00 AM · For: Monday

To be honest, I'm not a huge fan of 1st person POV. Never have been. Idk what it is, but I could never get used to it. It's always been 3rd for me. Nevertheless, I think you did amazingly and for Audrey's character -- this is what I love about minor characters; even though there's so little to go off of, we can explore it in our imagination! I think you portrayed it admirably and how I would imagine Audrey to be.

As for the beginning, I thought it was Percy with the talk of the Ministry and all. ((Unless it was and I just didn't see it for some reason.))

Great job, dear!

Author's Response:

Thank you! I think I can see what you mean about 1st person. I myself prefer 3rd person to 1st most of the time as well. I think there are a lot of risks with 1st person and it can get maybe a little too cliche and self-inserty sometimes. I almost rewrote this in 3rd person years ago but made a conscious decision to stick with 1st because I want to portray Percy exclusively through Audrey's eyes.

Melanie

Name: potionspartner (Signed) · Date: 25 Nov 2019 01:52 AM · For: Something Different

Hi, I'm here for the Ravenclaw BvB. 

I always wondered who could handle Percy (or who would even be interested in him); however, despite their rough start, I can see them working well together.  She's laid back enough to deal with his shenanigans and she's precise and exacting enough in her work that she won't drive him crazy. 

I like how their introduction. Percy is definitely acting very Percy. (I guess the war didn't change him too much.) I feel sorry for Audrey though. She's obviously not super comfortable around new people or changes and he isn't helping any. You did a nice job with her characterization, demonstrating both her work ethic and her shyness. Thank you for not making her instantly have a crush or decide he’s handsome etc. Your description of him and her reaction fit much better with both their initial meetings and her personality. Hopefully, she'll be able to soften his edges and bit and get him to "loosen up." I look forward to seeing how you convince Percy that she isn't a total idiot. 

PS If you transferred this story from HPFF, there is also a way to transfer your old reviews. 

 

 

Author's Response:

Thank you for this thoughful review!

 

I think I started this fic long ago because of exactly your first comment - I was trying to devise who this woman might be who works with him. Any other Percy fics I'd seen involving Penny or Audrey tended to make his other half into one of two things: either she was the female incarnation of Percy, or she was his exact opposite, very flippant and gregarious, a wild child, or scatterbrained and relatively undisciplined. I decided I did not see him working out with either of those two extremes.

 

If you do decide to keep reading, I think you will find that the war has changed him in a lot of ways, but old habits do die hard, and in his heart he can still be pretty insecure and tightly wound. But I also believe he is a kind-hearted person - he's just really Type A and hard on himself.

 

Percy never gets to be a heartthrob, and this fic is my fun way of changing that. ;)

 

Thank you again for reading and reviewing!

Melanie