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Yay! We finally get to meet Bill! And I love his charming manners and the way he speaks; there's almost a ye olde way about him. And the banter between he and George when they're joining forces against Percy (all in good jest I suppose, just like brothers are with each other, especially when they hail from a large family). Also, the fact that it's mizzling really sets the scene, because Cornwall is one of those areas that's very prone to a mix of drizzle and heavy mist (but be it's location stuck out into the sea).
Percy says 'arse' poshly!!! HAHAHA!! Of course he does! And the conversation about unicorns was quite enlightening - at least I think it's meant to be - George and Fred used discarded/shed hairs in fireworks for their explosive properties? I wonder if there's soe connection with the exploding unicorn hair wands? And what became of Fred's wand?
Victoire is adorable! You write her so naturally - I think kids are so difficult to get right, but she's perfect, she really is! And I love her natural 2-yr old shyness when Bill tries to get her to speak in different languages. Also her obsession with George haha! She seems to make a beeline for him. Just too cute!!
Audrey really has a hang-up about Voldemort's name. I wonder if that's partly due to being homeschooled and feeding off her Dad's fears? I love how Percy stood up for her, even though it wasn't Hermione's intention for Audrey to cut her hand. I wonder what Fleur meant when she said about "smashing more plates"?
I almost had a tea/keyboard interface moment when I got to the part about Percy's Fred and George anecdotes and the dream diary for Divination.
So many lovely, sad, revealing moments in this chapter, but my heart exploded when I got to those three words (said twice) at the end...because it's been so obvious for ages now.
Ahhhhhhh!! <3
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Author's Response:Hi againnn! <3
So the thing about Audrey's reaction to Voldemort's name is -- she really has no more a hang-up about it than anyone else in the magical community (putting aside the Order and Harry's circle). I think it's easy to forgot that when we read the books, because we, along with Harry, become desensitized to the use of the name. Harry and his friends come to be comfortable with it, but it is very Not Normal for your standard magical citizen. And whenever anyone else hears the name in the books, they usually react pretty strongly, yelping and spilling whatever they're holding, etc.
The entire Weasley family -- SO's included -- have become accustomed to using Voldemort's name, and by this time, especially 4 years after the war, they wouldn't even think twice about using it. But 4 years wasn't going to eliminate that fear for the rest of the population. In Book 1, Hagrid lost it when Harry said the name, and that was 10 years after Voldemort was believed to have been truly defeated already back in 1981. So I knew there was no way this totally ordinary non-war-hero girlfriend of Percy's was going to deal well with hearing 'Voldemort' kicked around, and it's a tangible example of just how different (and, she believes, inferior) she is to this group of people who make up the rest of Percy's life.
Fleur's comments about breaking dishes really just meant that the Weasleys are a frustrating, infuriating bunch sometimes, and Audrey should expect some hot-headed arguments. :D
Fred and George used the unicorn hairs as stabilizers, but George was just noting that if there was anything off about the hairs that would lead to them being temperamental, he wouldn't have noticed because the whole point of fireworks is explosions anyway. :D
I was very happy to be able to finally write the final scene of this chapter; it was a long time coming. <3
Ah chapter five for the review tag!!
omg that title drop, though :)))) And what a perfect chapter for it!
Their first date was so cute, and really highlighted the opposing aspects of their personalities. I love how Percy is sort of embarrassed at his rambling while Audrey enjoys it. I'm sure Perct was never really listened to home, what with a loud, competing voices. But he likes to talk as much as the next Weasley! He must feel so appreciative thst she likes listening. But it also shows maturity in his character, that he likes to talk but is aware of it and makes room for Audrey, too. :))
And I feel like Percy is shy, too. Like he definitely doesn't want to be seen by Ministry people. Not because he is embarrassed of her, just because he needs to keep things in order. And a personal relationship, one this young, is to be kept separate for the time being. And Audrey feels the same, which is another point of their compatibility :)
That feeling that you could talk to someone about anything for hours is making my heart warm (and making me miss my SO lol) And I know the heat that Audrey feels in her cheeks is much more than the fire :) I feel like their first date went splendidly well, and that they should go on anothet one sooner than later!! I hope it pans out that way, fingers crossed
Catherine
Oh!! Percy sent her flowers. He's so freaking adorable, I want to eat him up <3 And this bit:
Audrey: "should I be thanking you or do I have an admirer"
Percy: "both"
EEEEEEEEEEE!!! That was the sound of me squealing VERY loudly, just in case you weren't sure. I just LOVE these two, they are so good together and so in tune with each other, especially when it comes to their particular brand of humour.
Oh yes. Howlers. I expect the department is a magnet for loud red letters of complaint. I like the way that Percy coolly takes it in his stride and in comparison, Eoghan is looking quite put out by the whole thing. And I don't blame Audrey at all for doubting a five pm finish...but it is her birthday and nothing should keep Percy at his desk past 5pm...unless it's Audrey...
Audrey's work colleagues are a nosey bunch! I suppose it's only natural as she's dating the brother of a famous family.
For a quiet person who seems to keep out of the way most of the time, Madeleine can be very...persuasive. I wonder what it is about this particular scoop that's driving her, because I'm pretty sure there's some ulterior motive there. I just can't quite see what it would be at the moment. And she knew how to shift Demetrius on his stance.
The thought of attending every single Weasley get-together would drive anyone insane, agreed. I suppose if Audrey's and Hermione's birthdays are very close together, when they both become part of the Weasley family, hey can have a joint celebration, no? ;P
Ohh. Something has just dawned regarding the unicorns. Audrey mentioned injury. There was an injured/slain unicorn around the time of VoldeQuirrell if I remember correctly. Would that have something to do with the backfiring wands??
Hmm. I thought Madeleine was quite invested in this case? So why is she now acting as though the legislative proposal is a waste of time??
Another amazing chapter! I'm well and truly hooked <3
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Hermione Granger's office sounds like mine :/ Even down to the self-rearranging piles of paperwork, which I'm convinced must happen here because I lose papers with unfailing regularity, even when I'm certain of where I put them. Magnus doesn't seem terribly keen to be assisting - maybe he wanted to listen in to the conversation?
So much bureaucracy! I get the feeling it is almost impossible to change things within the Ministry and Wizengamot - too much emphasis placed on tradition and not enough placed on adjusting to changes in the modern world. But surely it would be in the interests of the Ministry to take the backfiring wands more seriously, because there's a Statute breach waiting to happen otherwise if one of these wands explodes in the presence of muggles. And I get the feeling there's something sinister at the foot of all this?
Hermione is so wonderfully written here! I see echoes of the student she was, coupled with how she's grown as an adult. How respected she is, her imposing appearance, but the sheer human side of having an office piled to the brim with paperwork and chaotic. And the helpful side of her nature hasn't altered. She does things not just to get ahead, but because it's a decent human thing to do - like help Audrey because it makes Percy happy.
Darcy. Hmm. She's quite the social climber, it would seem. Congratulating Audrey on making a connection with Hermione and dating Ron's brother. You've left me feeling quite conflicted about both her ... and Madeleine. I thought Madeleine might just be aloof and consider herself a bit above the others in the department, and I thought she was simply being nice to Audrey when showing a bit of solidarity against Noah and Lionel...but is there something in Percy's words? And I wonder what happened in IUM?
Fancy overcooking the chicken! ;) Percy, impressive (and what a liar)!!
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Did I ever tell you how much I ADORE this story and how it must never ever end? Just keep writing it for eternity, thankyouplease (Tag)
Percy's sense of humour gets me every time. It's so dry and understated and intelligent - the BEST kind of humour in my humble opinion - and Audrey matches him every step of the way. I love the reference to Percy's brothers and how you show us who they are with just a few words or descriptions. I can't wait for Audrey to meet the Weasleys because I think they will absolutely LOVE her, and I hope she loves them too. I'm sure she will.
Ginny seems to have a natural affinity with kids; Victoire seems at ease with her, but Percy isn't as unnatural as I expected - a bit awkward, perhaps, but he certainly didn't seem totally flummoxed. Ginny's introduction of herself as 'the normal one' HAHAHAHA. You're a Weasley, love. Everyone knows that Weasley is synonymous with 'not normal' *said with affection, natch*
OMGGGG I HEART this chapter SO MUCH!! It's so full of warm and delightful moments and conversations, and as always, the characters are so masterfully written. I'd love to regale all my favourite bits, but then I'd be reciting the whole chapter back at you, and it's not like you don't know what you've written. The dynamics between the brothers and the partners is just so much fun to read, and when I got to the e-l-o-p-e part, I was in hysterics!
Perfectly written and delivered. <3 <3 <3
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Is there such a thing as unacceptable toffee?? *Does not compute* Tag, btw!
"I'm watching my figure" Ah yes; good old society with its ideals and unattainable standards. I love the cynical thoughts that crop up in Audrey's mind.
Good old Brian, agreeing to talk and whisking Audrey away for a coffee to enlighten her. The phoenix statue in the foyer is a much more sensible idea than magical creatures gazing lovingly up at a witch and wizard, or - shudders - muggles trapped under the weight of a wizard on a throne. I wonder if anyone has counted its feathers? Presumably the artist and maybe the person who commissioned it...
Gosh. That's the thing about take-overs, isn't it? They rarely happen in an abrupt out-with-the-old-and-in-with-the-new way it's often an insidious change that takes place. People accept things better that way (or are less likely to notice). And of course, when faced with improbable, unthinkable revelations, people don't want to believe. Poor Percy; not a great situation to find himself in (understatement of the century). Perhaps it completely altered his perceptions of being someone of power and importance because I think part of it started there with him.
It's fascinating to listen in on Audrey's thought-processes and how she rationalises her Percy-based decisions with the current topic of wand-wood and the rose-bush's help, of course. And the mention of the word 'love' AWWWWWWW!!! It's love, most certainly. Even the plant knows it <3
I feel so bad for Percy after reading your response to my last review, that hs whole life is like a job interview :((( So it makes me SO HAPPY to hear that he's passed this one with flying colours. Now maybe he'll start to believe in himself more?
Elm. I KNEW IT!!!!!
LOVE that they are back together again :) Happy happy
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Hello again & tag again! Let's hope this one works out a little more cohesively
Once again no idea if you meant it as a jab but I had to laugh at Audrey pointedly turning away from the Auror office. So much of the HP canon and fanon ended up there so I admit I snorted a little when Audrey saw it and immediately went nope, not me, bye. Good for her!
Oh no, you have to love a little meet-awkward. I love the bad first impression Percy makes lol: condescending, put-upon, complaining about his coworkers, all business no fun at all ever. But he has got nice hair! At least he has that going for him right off the bat 8D And to top it off Audrey's new workplace sounds absolutely exhausting agjsdgs you got that across very well I think. Being asked not to work but to entertain a bunch of new coworkers sounds like an absolute nightmare, I sympathise with her. But at least they do send her over to meet Percy again which is probably far more than her old department ever did for her romantic life so I can't be too harsh on it
Audrey's second meeting with Percy did tickle me, I cannot help but laugh at how exasperated he is. He gives off such immaculate vibes: poor man is the only competent worker in the whole department and his standards are so low but nobody ever meets them! He asks so little and has to deal with so much! Everybody detests him agjsdgs. I'm already instantly so fond of this character dynamic, congratulations. And Audrey is definitely being very gentle in her descriptions of him, I can't wait to see how their relationship develops. Looking forward to coming back :')
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Gosh, was it really a three-year estrangement from his family for Percy? I suppose it was; I'd forgotten. Vivian wasn't that much help but at least she listened, even if all she could say to begin with was "Well." But Percy's admission isn't something that leaves the listener with a lot to say. Anything after that would seem a bit trite, and who knows what anyone should do with that information? Percy's ears must be burning, Lord love him :( I guess the parting advice before settling down to watch Casablanca (great movie choice btw) of "date him if you want, don't date him if you don't want, he's not a saint; if a saint's what you want, ditch him" was the summing up that Audrey needed and it's clear she isn't ready to shove Percy away just yet <3
I love how Audrey's Dad's ingenious plants creep into little corners of this story, btw!
Yikes - the backfiring unicorn wand issue is getting out of hand and it looks like it's going to be a big problem to sort. Unfortunately, I don't think the magical population of the UK are going to volunteer to hand in their wands, and I can't see the wand manufacturers being too pleased about having permits revoked and abiding by a change in regulation...good luck with that one :/
It's interesting to see Madeleine making a bit of effort with Audrey, and she's not so cold as she made herself out to be earlier.
Percy breaks my heart "you will let me know, won't you? One way or the other." Like a job interview. Sob. Don't dump him, Audrey!!
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Author's Response:Hi!!
Vivian doesn't really see it as her place to give Audrey an opinion on whether she should stay with someone, not unless it's like some way they've wronged Audrey (like if someone cheated on Audrey -- like Nev, fuck him btw -- Vivian would be like, "ok, leave him, he's done with"). But she's willing and able to see the shades of gray in Percy's actions because she's not as close to the situation as Audrey, who's sort of reeling from learning stuff like 'my boyfriend followed orders under the death eater regime' and 'my boyfriend has such a temper and holds such a grudge that he once didn't speak to his family for 3 years.' But yeah, when it comes down to it, her vote goes to not having to stay in a relationship you're not excited about. (Though, put a pin in this concept. For reasons.)
I liked that you used the comparison "like a job interview." Because it's true, he's literally just waiting to hear back, waiting to find out whether he makes the cut. Really I think Percy's entire life feels like one big job interview for him that never ends. Always just needing to find out if he's good enough, if he's made it.
Thank you so much! <3
Tagtime!!
Oh, I really feel for Audrey following the drama of the last chapter. Of course its not her fault; how was she to know Percy would flip his lid over something he's not prepared to divulge? It doesn't stop her feeling apprehensive, and is a natural reaction following a confrontation, especially for a non-confrontational person like herself. I love Vivian's input - 'here, have some of my words' - ha! But unsurprisingly, Audrey's not going to take her up on that offer. But stop blaming yourself, girl! And no...you're not the one who overreacted. And ow, I feel the pain of getting make-up in the eye; not only does that mascara wand hurt, but so does the damn mascara :(
I'm still wondering what this is about, just like Audrey is. And really, WHY couldn't Percy have told her earlier whatever this thing is/was...dammit!!! I want to know NOW... If it turns out to be something really trivial, I will storm into this story and give him a good kicking myself. And yes; dating a work colleague has its advantages when all is going well, but is bloody uncomfortable when it's not :(((
Gerry Ollivander seems very amenable and not nearly so weirdly mysterious as his father. As for Swynn's - matchmaking via wandlore? This should be good! I love Audrey's quip about dating a muggle and can't help but wonder whether Percy has an Elm wand?
Oh Percy. Okay. I get why he held back, because it's not the sort of history you burden someone with on a first date, or even a second, third or fourth one. But it's also in the past and yes, it sounds like he faced legal proceedings and there may be a record on file somewhere in the Ministry...but he wasn't convicted, wasn't found guilty of any particular crime. Lots of people did things they perhaps shouldn't have during that period, without considering the long-term implications.
And the admission about Fred is just - :(((( He was right there, and gosh, that's got to be hard to live with in so many ways. The fact that Fred annoyed him and Percy thinks he was a tosspot towards him is also a bitter pill to swallow, but that's siblings. There's bound to be some banter, rivalry, fights, diagreements. It doesn't mean he didn't love Fred any less than his other brothers.
More heart-break, but I can see a light at the end of the tunnel for Audrey and Percy now, and that gives me hope.
Another stellar chapter. This story delivers on so many levels. I will be GUTTED when I finish it :(
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Author's Response:Thank you so much for this. :) This is really the part where I got to start sinking my teeth into things, and it's one of those things where life works in mysterious ways, because like I've mentioned I started this 10 years ago and only got as far as ch 9 before abandoning it -- back then I had not a single clue where the hell I was going with any of it, except that I just wanted to write mushy fluff, and I really just had very naive and bland plot ideas. I've grown since then as a person and a writer.
And yes, you got it exactly -- this was one of those things where there was never going to be a "right time" to bring it up to Audrey. It was always too soon until suddenly it was too late.
You're right about the thing with Percy's regrets about Fred, and he's actually (in my opinion) being a little too hard on himself because his siblings were actually pretty horrible to him, too, and you're right, he loves them. He was never wantonly cruel to them or anyone. But that's the survivor's guilt talking.
Thank you so much again. You and I will BOTH be gutted when this is all over, I literally don't know what I will do with myself. But at ch 26 currently I foresee something in the area of maybe another 10 chapters. :D
<3
Hello Melanie! Here for a review tag review (hoping I don't get sniped, wish me luck). I've always meant to check out this fic of yours so this seems like the perfect opportunity.
Honestly, the comfort of boredom & being boringly competent at your job is underrated, I'm with Audrey here. Especially if she's being confronted by rogue shirtless chests in the morning, o woe is her. I like the relationship you've set up here between the sisters - ribbing, understanding, maybe ribbing because of that understanding, but ultimately really loving.
I always feel a little awkward pointing too much out or making predictions because what if the author did not mean for any of that At All, but I do think I see a bit you've set up to be explored in later chapters and I'm excited to see where they go -- the thing about Audrey not liking being alone in the dark, a little, and of course the career shift between departments which I hope is going to bring us into contact with A Certain Man, ho ho. Good on Moira for giving Audrey a bit of a boost, and good on you for including the endless hidden power & influence that secretaries definitely have over all our lives in this fic :P 10/10 accurate, true to life detail.
Audrey's dad is great, and I am so charmed by his self-conscious plant that you have to Not Pay Attention to before it will show itself off. Like a cat, but less (?) destructive. Although that might be a dangerous assumption to make if its gardener also works with venus flytraps and venomous tentaculas.
This was a cute first chapter, I'm excited to come back to it to see where Audrey goes from here & how she deals with her new job ?
Author's Response:Hi Emily!! Oh thank you for checking this out. :)
I hope you'll continue to enjoy if you choose to read on (past ch 2 and 3 which I also saw you've reviewed, thank you!) I started writing this and abandoned it 10 years ago, when I'd hit chapter 9, and since then I've grown as a person and a writer, so while I've just done a few teensy revisions to these earlier chapters sometimes I look back and I feel all insecure about it, and it's really nice to still hear nice things about them. <3
One big thing I wanted to do with Audrey was just to make her absurdly normal (but also hopefully interesting enough to still actually want to read!) XD And to have her just have this kind of mundane bureaucratic job, because wizards have a government and (some kind of) infrastructure, too, and someone's got to run it! They can't all be sexy magical jobs. And we know who else in this story likes boring things and structure, too! Because they're safe and comfortable, and like you say, that isn't necessarily bad!
Thank you again!
<3 Melanie
Hi Melanie, here to tag!
My heart is pumping faster just thinking about reading this chapter! It really takes me back to my contemporary romance days :))
I think it’s so funny how you explain the logistic issues of the offices, because it sounds like something wizarding folk would do. Like yeah, just pop it in that corner, don’t worry about the structure, we’ll make it look the same on the outside anyway lol. And it makes for great run-ins with other departments ;)
Oh no :( How horrible for Percy. Especially since we are not sure they even properly mended their family. Kind of annoyed at Mads’ quip, but at least Lionel had the foresight to warn her away. That is such a clever flip, btw, a holiday that often brings up such painful memories. Everyone else seemed happy about it, but there are probably plenty of people who will be sad.
They are totally flirting and Audrey totally has a major crush. All that self-reflection on how she should react if he looks at her???? Come on. And the elevator scene is too cute, though I know Victory Day is on both their minds.
I’m going to go around screaming “lady present!” from now on. I love it. AHHH ANOTHER ELEVATOR INTERACTION AND THEY HAVE A DATE!! I am so happy. Also I love audrey’s voice, you have her down pat. And Percy and Vivian and Darcy as well :)
So lovely, thanks again,
Catherine
Hey, Melanie, hi!
Here to catch up with this lovely story, and also as a little thank you for your surprise review on TLATN :D
This was another wonderful chapter! And yes, there's hope for my adorable idiots to fix things, finally! I loved the way Percy was watching her during the hearing, I bet he felt super proud of the way she was handling it! And I have to say, I was very proud of her, too. I bet it couldn't be easy, trying to make her point across with such a biased and thick audience (urgh, Fawley!) By the way... I found it wasn't terribly hard, after all, to answer their questions when it was as simple as telling them the current state of things - just reporting the facts. When I knew a question had a right answer - an answer that I knew - I didn't have to worry as much about sounding stupid. Again, are you writing this story about me? :P
I really enjoyed watching the proceeding, all the questions asked and how Audrey handled them. Will the Wizengamot be lungimirant enough to approve the bill? I hope so...
Most of all, though, I loved those little moments of distant communication between Audrey and Percy, and especially when she looked at him as if to ask if she was doing it right and he nodded to her. I loved it.
And then, when she ran into him right off the courtroom... in retrospect I should've expected it, but it caught me totally by surprise, too :P I kind of expected Percy to run off as well... I should've known better... :P
And yes, finally they are going to talk! I hope they can actually make up, I don't want to see this fight go any longer... ;)
Wonderful chapter, can't wait for more! <3
Snowball hug,
Chiara
Hahahah!! Such normality on waking but still so endearing to read Audrey's description on waking up with percy Weasley in her bed. None of this impossibly unattainable romantic perfection first thing in the morning ;) I do love reading the little RL-esque snippets that totally complete this genius story <3
OMG, putting me on hold is the sort of thing my Mum does whenever someone else calls at the same time, and it's nearly always someone she speaks to every day. Vivian taking the piss out of Audrey is hilarious but also shows how much the sisters care for each other as she doesn't go overboard with the teasing (as she could have done).
Ooh, Vivian has finally got a position working as a paediatric Healer? Where's Jane? Did she get devoured by cannibals? I kinda hope so...
Awww, Percy!! He's brave to face Audrey's parents so soon - there was no hesitation in saying yes. I wonder if he knows what he's letting himself in for? Oh poor guy; it dawns on him when he arrives that actually, this is quite a big thing really. I think Audrey's father must have quite a wicked sense of humour to greet Percy as though he's going to interrogate him and then ask him a (weird) question about Quidditch?? HA!!! I suppose it's his way of putting Percy at ease, but I'm not sure Percy feels the same way about it! Still, it sounds as though they are getting on and have Quidditch in common. I'm a bit disturbed that it's all Michael talks about, though. Vivian strikes me as someone who'd have a lot to say about many things; does she really want to settle for someone who has only one topic of interest to discuss??
It's funny how easily Percy wins Audrey's Mum over, by the simple act of pulling out a chair, but there's a sense of light, playful sparring between Percy and Audrey's Dad, and I think maybe her Dad is flexing his protectivity over his daughter? I dunno. I love the family dynamics and conversation and Percy involvement though!!
What a batchelor pad! Sounds so typical of men who live alone - one cup, one plate, one set of cutlery. That's if they are the washing up, tidy sort. Even if he has left a cup half full of tea on the side. He seems to have the few photos on display which are really important to him, such as the last full family photo that was taken, and one of his parents. I wonder who the watch once belonged to?
NOOOOOOOOO!!! I wonder why Percy is backing off, all of a sudden?? What's wrong? What did Audrey do? IS there someone else?? Is he getting cold feet, all of a sudden - things progressing too quickly? HE was the one who agreed to meet Audrey's parents, FFS!!! WHY is he saying he hasn't been fair to her?? WHAT IS GOING ON, DAMMIT? :wail:
OMG :(((( That wasn't the ending I was expecting to such a light, happy chapter. Gulp.
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Love the title of this chapter! And the opening lines are so relatable about things seeming very uninteresting when you are ten years old. Especially a sport like Quidditch, with its unnecessarily complicated scoring system and excessive number of balls and slightly crazy rules - how is any child (or reasonable adult) supposed to follow the game at all? Especially if no-one catches the snitch and the game goes on for days. Sorry, I'm digressing. But it'll be different with Percy. They could be attending a wall-painting contest and Audrey still wouldn't mind because it's time spent with him. Ahhhh <3
In total sympathy with Robbie on the sheet of stats. UGH! Maths is far too complicated for my liking. It's a shame they don't have some form of Excel to calculate everything for them in the magical world...
Those scones sound as though anyone could be bribed with them. I can almost smell them from here and now I want pastries, dammit!! Clever of Vivian to guard them with a curse, and I loved the back-and-forth dialogue over the phone with her mother and Audrey and the little interjections about Jane - just brilliant and so down-to-earth natural! Audrey's convo with her Dad is hilarious and now I want to know what happened with Nev Baker and Bobby Price, eh?! I feel like Audrey is closer to her Dad than her Mum somehow. Not that she doesn't seem close to her Mum, but the rapport with her Dad seems stronger...
GAHHH, the end of this chapter! So brilliantly-written without gving any details away and leaving the reader to fill in any details they wish - LOVED Audrey's inner dialogue, especially about sending her good sense on holiday BAHAHAHA! But also the little notes of self-doubt and the way they get (awkwardly) to the bedroom, almost taking out a lamp and the glasses falling to the floor, and Percy not really caring because they are both wrapped up in the moment
ALLLLLLL THE FEELS!!! Go Team Percrey (or Audey) ...I'm not sure I can wait until I tag you again for the next chapter...
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Author's Response:I love fade-to-black a lot honestly. I did eventually, as my first ever foray into smut, write a companion one-shot called Irrepressible, from Percy's POV about what happens at the end of this chapter. It's very dorky and involves humor since I cannot write smut in total earnest. :joy:
Oh hey! Tagging you back ;)
Moira!! I'd forgotten about lovely Moira, who helped Audrey get out of the clutches of that dreadful Cornwell man, and into M.E.C. :) It is no surprise that Darcy has already dropped by to give her account of Audrey's love life, but testament to Moira's character that she takes Darcy's opinion with a pinch of salt and makes no assumptions until she's heard from Audrey. Ahhh! We all need people like Moira in our lives :) Oh and the way she puts Cornwell in his place is PRICELESS, hahahahah!! Has him skulking back into his office like a chastised child. I'm guessing Moira is being diplomatic about Thad's lack of attention to detail ;)
Audrey noticing Percy's nose wrinkling habit is totes adorable!! I keep squealing like an excited child over this story, because there's so many lovely understated moments in there which give a nod to someone's character and it's all so beautifully done. SO many charming sentences or parts of sentences that make me smile, such as this bit:
"one of those people who always seemed to be thinking about five different things at once"
And the way that Percy's expression seems less distant when he speaks to Audrey <3 <3 <3
I am INTRIGUED by this backfiring unicorn wand plot. There's something sinister about it - not just a batch issue - are the affected wand cores all from one unicorn or are ALL unicorn-core wands a potential disaster waiting to happen? Oh, haha - I've just read on - and I've just essentially repeated what I was about to learn ;P No surprise there that Percy feels wands aren't regulated well enough!
Oh Percy :((( Those teenage years are obviously still painful to recall. I like how he protects Audrey from knowing exactly how much he must have felt her curiosity, innocently delivered as it was. The portrayal of their relationship has been so beautifully done so far and I'm GUSHING and wishing that everyone could experience the deep connection that Percy and Audrey share, because it is a glorious thing.
Another great chapter <3
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Oh yes, time is a fickle bitch indeed. The things you dread are on you before you know it. I feel this opening.
Afternoon anything at work in general is the worst. Another relatable thing, for sure. I do love the people watching here hah. You write adult Hermione fabulously!
NAVY WINDOWPANE SUIT SHUT UP SEXY. I mean. Stop. No. I didn't say that. Scratch that off the record, please.
Fawley's such a dick. Audrey's so composed as she stands up for her work and herself and she's doing it HER WAY. Yaaaaasss.
Ok. Can I just say that only you could make me silently shriek about encouraging looks and telepathic conversations? Because it's true.
SHOULD I NOT HAVE? OMG SHUT UP I CANNOTTTT. :pleading face:
"I miss you." *silently screams self into an early grave*
Oh well, of course, all the defective wand stuff and your lawyery logic was very good too. I would be a terrible reviewer/friend not to mention that and notice all the hard work you put into those areas of the plot and how they better Audrey's character development and the like. I saw it. I absorbed it. I absolutely adored it.
BUT I AM EMOTIONAL ABOUT EVERYTHING THAT IS AUDREY AND PERCY AND THE LITTLE THINGS OK?
I will need the next chapter pronto, mmkay?
Oh and also, I really like this chapter title and the (possible) multiple meanings of it, yeah? Like it relates to the tedium of the "let's change this word here because of this reason the average human won't notice, but still just in case." (GOD MY LIFE WRITING POLICIES AND BULLSHIT. :rolls eyes:). But also, that's the vibe I got from Audrey's observations sitting in on the other items to be addressed. So there's that obvious, technical aspect of it. But also there's like the whole, oh gee, I dunno...Audrey and Percy "we're just taking a pause here and not a break, break," thing? No idea if you meant that. But I interpreted it that way and just thought it was cool if you did. And if you didn't and nothing in the above paragraph makes sense, just ignore me.
No, but seriously, I love how Audrey is growing on her own terms in her own way. It's still scaring her, but she's going for it, in a way that suits her so yes. I LOVE IT. And yes, there's more than one way to be assertive and strong. You can be soft and not want to crush everyone you come into contact with in order to get a leg up/advance yourself. And I love that. She's growing, but also still recognizable as the Audrey we love.
Well done you. Now next chapter, ok? Must I send you cookies? Just let me know, ok?
<3 Courtney
Author's Response:Lol you can 100% be more excited about Percy/Audrey than about the legal/debate bullshit -- while that was the thing holding up this chapter, it wasn't because I was exceptionally excited about the content, haha, it's just that it literally needed to be done so I could post the damn thing.
No matter how pissed he was, Percy was never not going to show up for her. He worried a bit that his presence might be counterproductive, might put her off, which accounts partially for why he spent so much time staring at his shoes. I think if he'd been watching her from the beginning she'd have been even more flustered.
Glad the "I miss you" landed. ;)
You're totally right about the chapter title, 100%.
And the navy windowpane suit will be back in the next chapter. XD
Hi Melanie! I’m back :D
I’m going to start this review with my comment from yesterday:
AHHHHHHHH!! I AM SO PROUD OF AUDREY!! WE STAN A QUEEN!!
I came into this chapter with a lot of hope, because of the title. And even though that phrase is used within the chapter to describe Mr Fawley’s constant interruptions and how he can’t stop talking (he must love to hear himself talk) I still feel hopeful that this semicolon, not full stop, means something for Audrey and Percy too. These rough weeks have been a pause, not a stop (I hope I hope I hope).
You did a great job showing Audrey’s nerves. She does not want to be here up in front of the Wizengamot, even if she’s not the one doing the talking. But there is Demetrius being his wishy washy self, and she has to step in. I ADORED watching her get pulled in to answering questions, because even though she’s nervous and doesn’t really want to be public speaking—she still wants the questions answered the *right* way. And she’s got the knowledge to do that—so she does.
When Percy walked in I about swooned. He totally came to support Audrey, and even though it was super awkward at first, he does wind up supporting her. I loved how he was nodding encouragement and how she was uplifted by that. My heart was going pitter pat.
Audrey even got to be sassy!! I think it was unintentional, but it was so funny. I am so so proud of her and I want this bill to pass, and then I want her to figure out what she’s passionate about, because she is so *good*.
The beautifully awkward way Percy and Audrey ran into each other (literally) after the reading was perfect. Like they still have to talk—but they *are* talking now instead of avoiding each other. I can’t wait for the dinner!
Yours,
Noelle
Hello Melanie!!! I’m here to catch up on your fic :D
I just love what you’ve done at the beginning of this chapter, characterizing the way Vivian and Audrey react and like to be taken care of when they’re really upset/low. There is so much love in this family and it does my heart good to read about it, even though Audrey is having such a rough time now.
Omg, having a dad who interrogates people for a living XD Of course he would know exactly how to coax his daughter to open up and talk about whatever is bothering her. It’s so sweet to see him use his experience to help her—but it also makes me wonder what he was like when he was Auror-ing (I suppose we might see some of that later in your Eileen and Sev fic).
Oh my, I love that you threw in this curveball with Audrey running into her old boyfriend. And of course he’s gone and gotten married and had an adorable kid and appears to have all his shit together right when Audrey’s life feels like it’s falling apart. I just want to hug her. It super sweet how her dad sends Bobby home with a plant for his Mum.
“You’ll be alright” that is such a Dad thing to say. Yes, of course Audrey will be “alright” in that she’ll survive. But whatever happens, she feels awful now, and she might feel a whole lot worse later. And whether she and Percy make up or break up, there’s going to be a lot of uncomfortable feelings between now and when they make up their minds.
Oh my goodness, what is the deal with Percy’s new boss?? Obviously he’s dealing with some serious work shit that Audrey doesn’t even know about. (when did this work shit start happening Percy? Why haven’t you told Audrey what’s up you doof?) The whole misunderstanding at the end of the chapter was wrenching to watch, but great drama. When Audrey finds the note in her inbox with Percy’s explanation (too late!) I just wanted to cry with her.
Yeah, wizards seriously need some cell phones.
Yours,
Noelle
I'm back! I knew I wouldn't be able to stay away for long!
I absolutely adore your descriptions of Audrey's work colleagues and the discussions in the office. You've really nailed creating these memorable, fleshed-out characters without writing great paragraphs about them and I really admire your ability to do that. Also, it's not easy to build exciting, meaningful office scenes, but somehow you manage it with aplomb - I think it's in the little, amusing details, such as Lionel's ability to find out gossip, and the way that Noah and Madeleine listen in without appearing obvious, haha! And I nearly spit my tea out when I got to the part about Noah losing his bet over Percy's sexual orientation and acting like it was Audrey's fault, BAHAHAHAHA!!
Ohhhhhh and that little nudging match between Audrey and Percy!! Just having a squeal out loud moment here!! I love that they've got to 'elbow battle' stage in their relationship - can I call it a relationship yet?! Please?? - and despite their adorable awkwardness, there's a pleasant 'ease' about their conversations, body-language, and Percy's behaviour when in Audrey's company. I am shipping these two SO badly now that I don't think I will ever EVER cope if you decide that Audrey and Percy would be better off with different partners...
"You don't speak Italian"
"It's called language immersion, my dear"
And when she pokes the plant with her quill and the plant hits back!! These comedy gold lines just crack me up!! SO Darcy! I've decided I'm in the love Darcy camp btw; she's such a bold vivacious character that I can't help but love her! And sometimes people like Audrey NEED people like Darcy in their lives and vice-versa.
I can totally relate to Audrey's anxiety over her cooking. And she can cook, and I bet she doesn't go to pieces chopping a carrot for instance. There's a huge amount of chemistry between Percy and Audrey, just of the understated variety, and the thought about losing track of time "felt like both a minute and a month" is such an astute observation of how those intimate moments can feel...
Just...love this story so much <3 <3 <3
Pins x
Author's Response:-- "I am shipping these two SO badly now that I don't think I will ever EVER cope if you decide that Audrey and Percy would be better off with different partners..."
Aww I love hearing this so much. They are just my favorite precious beans. Percy is so misunderstood IMO and just deserves someone to love him for who he is.
(If you ever want to be really angry with me hahaha, I wrote a one-shot called Children in Common where they are divorced, eeek! It was for a challenge, however, and not my actual vision for how they turn out -- just kind of a "what if" experiment. I depressed the fuck out of myself writing it, hah. Even though it's uplifting on balance.)
Also I LOVE that you felt that even in spite of their awkwardness there is an ease between them -- because yes, that is exactly what I was going for! Like the fact that they've each found a person who's like, "No, actually, I'm pretty cool with the way you are right now."
Thank you for your amazing and enthusiastic reviews!!
Melanie
Hey! Back to tag ya!
Haha! Vivian!! You could have let Audrey make her own announcement about seeing Percy - if she considers that she's 'seeing' him yet - in a time of her choosing, rather than drop her in it like that, knowing that she'd feel awkward and self-conscious.
Her Dad has a good policy of staying out of discussions. Amazing what can hold your interest when you're pretending not to listen, eh?!
I'm very curious to find out more about the backfiring unicorn hair wands, because unicorn hair is a very popular choice of wand-core, is it not, and surely that means potentially a large number of people could be affected by this issue. Maybe it's not France who will have an explosion problem with their veela wands, but the UK... Yikes :/
Percy's gone and got himself some new glasses - I wonder what prompted that decision? Hmm?! All these little details, such as his enthusiasm for crossword puzzles, make this story really come alive. That, and the delicious dialogue which is just so enjoyable and funny to read! I love how Audrey isn't afraid to tell Percy to ease off his assistant, and to appreciate the fact that not everyone is as talented as he is for regurgutating rule books.
Oh Lionel!! MUST you put your foot in it like that?? I can feel Percy's awkwardness from here...but the end of this chapter was PERFECT, with that perfectly awkward perfect kiss between them, and ahhhhhhh!!!! ALL THE FEELS!!! What a great Monday indeed!!
Pins x
Hi Melanie, back for the tag!
Lol what an opening line here, I love how Vivian and Audrey are so opposite, even their cup choices are different. And I hope that some of Vivian's ire will rub off on Audrey, she deserves to complain about her job, too :) This relationship honestly reminds me a lot of my sister and I'd relationship, and it makes me smile reading them interact.
Darcy and Vivian seem to have some similar traits, and it is interesting how Audrey is attracted to people with out-of-the-box personalities. Talented and intelligent, but not willing to abide by societal expectations. The thought that Darcy treats her as a pet is not great...I wonder if Percy will be someone who she can fully be herself with, without having to be "worked on". But either way, going out after work is bound to stir up some fun trouble!
I'm kind of dying at the repetition of the "someone I'd like you to meet" line, it's totally hilarious. Awww, Cepheus, don't leave him standing! You write Darcy so well, she is honestly convincing me that Audrey should go and meet this Cepheus! SUCH a red flag that he doesn't let her talk at all, though. Technically speaking, I love how we read all about Cepheus in that one paragraph. Just seeing that bulk of text makes me see how self-centered he is.
Yay, Percy arrives. I love reading people fall for others. Just the descriptions, "so much more pleasant," and "hesitant enjoyment" show us how much she is considering his appearance. A tell-tale sign, Audrey. (ok bye Cepheus) I love how Percy immediately jumps into work talk when prompted. That is so much like the Percy I have imagined. But unlike Cepheus, he is able to redirect attention to Audrey at some point lol. AHHHH I am so happy about that interaction, and I can't wait to read more of the two of them interacting. And yes, Darcy, take Cepheus and stay out of their sparking relationship :)
Catherine
Tag time! I couldn't resist jumping back into this story <3
Tap-dancing, clog-wearing butterflies, eh?! And conjugating French verbs, haha! HOW is she worried about her personality when her inner monologue is so adorably funny? I actually Lol-ed at that bc, you know, Percy. Even though we all know now that Percy is nothing like how others picture him; bland and two-dimensional.
OMGGGG I am squealing - Percy is SUCH a good listener and so thoughtful of him to encourage Audrey to talk, as she's probably more used to a listening role. And the little voice in her head telling her that her life story won't last beyond the first pint is hilarious. This is just sooooo cute!! <3 That line; "I really think you must be the nicest person I've ever met" and the way he said it as though it was something valuable - I have just melted into the gooiest puddle ever. I'm shipping this Percy/Audrey ship as hard as it is possible to ship anything. The dialogue flowed so naturally between them in the pub and I loved Percy's description and pride for Ginny. Your writing is such a delight to read; I am completely sold on this story!!
Pins x
Oh hey! You've been tagged ;)
It must be such a refreshing change for Audrey to call her superiors and colleagues by their first names rather than having to use title plus surname. I love seeing the Ministry of Magig through her eyes and how she notes that there's barely any logic in the location of departments - it seems like the wizarding (and witching) world have to do everything in the most illogical of ways. She has good observational skills! I love hearing her inner thoughts such as this one: "how exactly were you supposed to act when you weren't perfect strangers but nothing close to friends?" because I can kind of relate to that type of anxiety that comes with the simple art of passing a door in a corridor, haha!
Oh gosh. I felt for Audrey with that slip - calling Victory Day a 'holiday" in front of Percy - been there many times myself, because you say something and then panic that it's insensitive - but as usual, she's reading more into it than she needs to. Either that or Percy acknowledged that the slip had no intent behind it and chose to bypass it, but I enjoyed that bit of exchange, you know? Percy's as human as everyone else and I kinda hate how he's been portrayed in canon, because rarely is anyone that two-dimensional, but you've already given him such depth in character and charm! Did I say Percy had charm? Oh my! Anyway, I am LOVING your portrayal of him so far.
And Audrey!! I absolutey adore her! She's unobtrusive with the most hilarious and delightful inner monologue and she can really see the good in people that others may struggle to find - not just Percy, but also her friend Darcy, who would certainly rub some people up the wrong way.
And this line tickled me:
"I supposed other people might have thought of something more interesting or clever to say. I was not one of those people" OMG I think Audrey is my spirit animal hahaha.
And OMG MY FREAKING HEART!! Percy "um, fancy bumping into me again tomorrow?" Is quite possibly the dorkiest but absolutely sweeeeetest thing I've ever read. I'm DEAD <3 <3 <3
Pins x
Author's Response:Oh dear, yes, I have enough Opinions (TM) about Percy's portrayal in canon to fill a book (hence, this fic, lol).
Actually, no -- I take that back -- I don't know if it's his portrayal in canon that bothers me because, after all, canon is from Harry's POV, and he's as biased a narrator as any other in his own way. Whatever information about Percy isn't directly observed by him is channeled to him via Ron, who is also his own biased reporter. And I wouldn't necessarily expect kids like them to be huge fans of this guy who's 4 years older and bossy (of course he's bossy to Ron, he's his older brother, who almost certainly had to help Molly parent the younger kids) and *gasp* actually cares about achievement, lol what a nerd amirite?
What does bug me is when nobody thinks critically about the biased perceptions of other characters or look past them to think that just maybeeeee there is a reason Percy is the way he is? And that yeah he's not perfect and he isn't always justified, but is he just a dick or is he a guy whose entire family aside from his mum have been picking on him for 18 years for being a wEiRdO? And there's so much humanity in him that you see in little moments even Harry's POV can't skew, like when he runs into the lake to pull Ron out in GoF, he's obviously scared shitless for Ron and it's just... he. loves. his brother. SO much.
Anyway, shut up Melanie. :D
There will be some discussion about that in future chapters, too.
I liked that you called Audrey unobtrusive, it's so true. She really can be very passive, which I know is risky in an MC, especially one who's the narrator, because she could just come off as boring (which I always fear she might but hope she doesn't) and events are always being propelled by forces outside herself. But I wanted her to just be this absurdly normal person, who not only tends to fade into the background in her own life but actually is mostly okay with that fact! Like for the most part she's just okay with *existing* and she still has just as much value as any other person who is super [whatever trait].
Though, yes, she does see the good in people, so if there's one superpower she has it's being genuinely kind and gracious and slow to judge, and if there's one thing Percy needs in someone else I think it's that. And it just kind of surprises him to find it in her, like you saw in the next chapter, because he's so used to what most people think of him, it's like a foregone conclusion. ("Really, she actually wants to stay and have another drink? Wtf?")
Thank you for these amazing reviews!! <3
Oh hey!! You've been tagged! I'm intrigued by the chapter title and DYING to find out its relevance :))) And get stuck into this chapter, of course <3
Uh-oh; I don't blame Vivian for being mad about losing out on a job to someone so incapable - I mean, how can they have someone in a paediatric department who doesn't like children?? And it sounds like potential disaster if they end up being in charge of a patient with a clotting disorder or a snake-bite, or anything else liable to cause unregulated bleeding. Yikes! Eloise Camden really should have shelved her paranoia on that one... I love the natural, easy flow of dialogue between the sisters and how it highlights their contrasting natures, even if physically they look similar.
One thing I will say... I absolutely ADORE how you introduce new characters in such an effective way, giving us plenty of information in just a few short sentences and bringing them to immedate life. I can relate to one or two of them already!! Your story is so easy and enjoyable to follow, but your character descriptions really enhance the experience! Darcy sounds as though she could be one of those troublesome friends in certain circles, but I expect her character traits balance Audrey's out nicely. And as an aside I LOOOOVE the name 'Hinkydrunk' for a pub, haha!
Oh no! Poor Audrey being set up with someone called Cepheus. Good grief, what a name!! And OMG, he goes on a bit about himself, doesn't he? Honestly, it sounds as though he needs the looks - his personality is a lost cause, haha!! Or maybe it isn't - I might be being very mean - but crikey, who wants to listen to tales of Italian stitching in a pub when there are far more interesting conversations to be had?? Brilliant!! I feel Audrey's pain; I've been there too (although not stuck in a convo about textiles, TF), but a similarly dry topic.
Oh Percy, bless him. He...tried. Sort of. He's obviously lacking in confidence rather than unable to hold an interesting conversation as he seemed to be doing okay with his friends/colleagues when Audrey was otherwise engaged with Cepheus. I wonder whether anything will become of Darcy and Cepheus? Ha!
Another brilliant chapter; I cannot wait to see what's in store for Audrey next!!
Pins x
Author's Response:"obviously lacking in confidence" yessss -- I think Percy at his core is driven by raging insecurity (and anxiety, I headcanon a lot of anxiety there) and copes by rule-following and overcompensating (in contrast with Ron, who is also eaten alive with insecurity but just sort of throws up his hands and assumes he'll never be good enough). And this side of the war I think Percy *tries* (or at least *wants*) to be less of a schmuck, but some things are so deeply ingrained.
Darcy is a super divisive character, I've found, among readers -- they either love her or hate her -- so as things go on I'll be interested to know your thoughts!
The interaction with Cepheus was actually inspired by a story my friend told me about trying to date after she moved to New York City. She said this one guy was showing her his really expensive cufflinks, like in total earnest trying to impress her that way, and she was just like... omg, people like this actually exist?
Thank you again!!
<3 Melanie
Hi Melanie, here for the review tag!
AH the Audrey and Percy (I'm 99% sure) meet-cute! I love it, especially how she notes that the only cheerful thing about him might be his hair. The making for a proper enemies-to-lovers thing ;)
I love the banter she has with her new coworkers, and I also love how you write their past relationships. Particularly the part about how Noah reassures Audrey that Madeline is always acting this way. It sort of reinforces that previous relationship, and it's something I always struggle with! I love finding great examples of characterizing through relationships. It makes the characters come more alive.
And she is already going to fall back into Percy's arms, great Dibble. Well, we can at least thank him for getting these two started lol. I am really looking forward to seeing how they develop, because right now all Audrey thinks is that he's rude. Which is not really wrong, in my opinion. She definitely admires his brain capacity, remembering those numbers and all, but they have a long way to go personally!
I also can't wait to hear Audrey's thoughts aloud to Darcy when they get to meet up for lunch :)
Another great chapter!
Catherine
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