
HELLOO, here for another galaxy review but you've caught me right at the end. a smirk? A SMIRK FROM OLIVER WOOD? gimme more please
anyway back to the beginning i guess. the aftermath of last chapter. you did a great job of showing that-of freya being like holy fuck what was i on last night, i look like a mess, not realizing until that morning about her feet. i thought you did so well of telling all that information about the morning after (and showing us how miserable a hangover can be without straight up telling us).
such an introduction to freya's mom. they clearly have some differences. it sounds like a lot to live up to, especially since her mom doesnt seem to respect freya's choice in career at all. let her do what she wants, she's celarly successful at it, daphne's sending her owls at lunch to books shoots!
that shoot coming up though. with a special guest. wink wink. i loved that daphne wass like oh he's just your type, dropping info like that right there in the letter. i am HYPED. i cannot wait. gonna be lit. let's gooo
-sarah
holy shit wow what a chapter! here for some galaxy reviewing but i jumped on this when i saw it on the list because i remembered how much i loved the first chapter and was THRILLED there were more!
and right away it didn't disappoint! the attraction between freya and oliver is literally palpable, that was so hot. i love the way you manage to write both sides, this like inner attraction that's just so simple and deep that you can't help it, that you can't fight it, but also this tension. "i'm not interested in being your flavor of the month." that was such a great line. and then oliver and freya just going back and forth from there, hurting each other right away. it felt so natural too, this progression from the moment. i'm so excited to see what happens next between them
i'm always in awe of how you describe things. the way you were able to bring me to that club after freya took those mystery drinks. the pain of the glass cutting her feet. the mark that oliver left on her, WOW. it was such a great end there. just like so powerful and setting up for more exciting things! cant wait
-sarah
kris! here with a little gift review; happy holidays ♥
somehow i've been sleeping on this story?? i've heard so many good things about it, and the first chapter doesn't disappoint. there's something truly magical and lyrical about the way you write and the way you can transport me into whatever setting your characters find themselves in
i love freya already, and the way she can accept herself as being veela and knowing how to work her way into a crowd to get the attention she wants. i definitely think that's gonna play a part later on in the story, as well as the fact that she seems to be vaguely well known in the crowd. and i love high society settings and i'm really eager to see how this is all going to go down, because we know it's gonna be a disaster before it gets better
all freya and wood have to do is look at each other and i love it so much. they both know they're hot and the other one wants them, and they're going to play it to their advantage -- that little bit with yael was incredible, and again, freya knows how to get the attention she wants and isn't afraid to play some games to get there. they're both cocky which makes them well matched in that sense and their banter was incredible, 10/10, but why is hooking up with wood such a bad thing?? i mean, clearly, he's a player, but so is she and it's all got me a little bit of :eyes: as to how this is gonna affect everything else
your writing is gorgeous as ever and i loved this and am very intrigued, will definitely be back to see how it all plays out
♥
Hi Kris!! Finally here, so sorry for the wait on our review swap, i hope my little flash reviews made up for it even a little bit, but I’m here now to finally finish this absolutely amazing story!!! <3
Okay so I know where we left off in the last chapter but damn we’re getting right back into it in this one and I love it.
Ugh they’re so cute together in a messed up way, and the fact that Octavia is kinda this looming presence honestly gives this pressure to the whole situation? I don’t know how you managed that but it’s just really impressive and a testament to your absolutely amazing writing.
WAIt whAt this is their last night together??? But what about my heart???????
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH IT HURTS WHY ARE YOU DOING THIS?!?!?
First the Skye thing, which is absolutely heartbreaking and I want to know everything about her and read all about her tragically short life, but then Freya just absolutely laying it all out on the table like that? To be that vulnerable and have him almost reciprocate but then to just leave i am a wreck!!
AHHHHHHHHHHHHH HE KISSES HER AND THEN THAT LINE?!??!!??!?! AND THE ENDING BEING SO AMBIGUOUS BUT NOT AT ALL?!?!?!??!?!??!??
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH?!?!?!?!?!??!?!?!??!??!
I choose to believe they go back upstairs and then a few hours later he calls Octavia up to end things and then over the next year or two, Freya and Oliver do the unhealthy break up/make up, all the while working through issues until they finally come together and fully commit and live happily ever after and you cant tell me otherwise unless its to tell me they have an even happier story okay???
God i hate endings because this is such an amazing story and ill never get to read this last chapter for the first time again, and i think thats why its taken me so long to get to this, because while i wanted closure i dont want it to end aghhhhhhhhhhhhh i suppose i have to get sucked in to another one of your amazing stories (oh no, what a difficult ask ;) ) but ugh this was… everything i couldve wanted.
Absolutely amazing chapter, beautifully heart-wrenching ending, and masterful story all together Kris. It’s one of my favs, and I loved every word of it.
Lo <3
Okay idk if i’ve said this before, but i love your names for substances in this. Serpentgin? Iconic!
SHE DID!!! SHE DID CALL HIM OLIVER AHHHHHHHHH
Okay i love the song afu, 10/10 here for the title and line
AHHHHHHH THEYRE BOTH SCREWED UP IN THEIR OWN WAYS AND I JUST WANT THEM TO BE HAPPY AND HEALTHYYYYYY
Again, love that this cat has just decided to adopt these people, i just fucking love cats who do that especially when the people are a bit… nefarious? Because cat doesnt care if its in an apartment with illegal weapons, as long as theres food!!
Tattoos that move to music? Brilliant!
I’m like kinda super in love w Daphne too, if you ever wanna write about her, I would def read all of it!
Love the stray cat that has adopted her, idk i just love when cats do that to unwilling humans lol
AHHHHHH WHAT A FUCKinG CLIFFHANGER I LOVE IT
The durmstrang thing is like such a throwaway line but i love it so much?!?!?!
THAT RESPONSE IS SO HOT WHAT THE FUCKKKK (i mean its probably because of who said it but w/e)
Hi Kris! Here for your final review for your challenge win! In going through your AP I had a :facepalm: moment where I realized that I never continued reading this story, so here I am to get back into it. <3
The way you describe a hangover here, or at least one instance of one, is totally believable. And having a living creature to take care of in spite of one, whether or not it's officially yours...such an "urgh" sort of mood. You convey to us that even though your MC might not have it altogether or they're trying to be guarded and hardened, there is a glimpse of softness about them, whether or not they admit it or not. So great to see this additional layer of personality in them, even if it is such a tiny detail.
"...I stir in a lot more coffee grounds than is good for me." No such thing. Unless of course our MC has like a weak heart or a caffeine sensitivity xD. Ok that was mostly me trying to be funny because it seemed like maybe you were trying to also be funny in that moment. Sorry if I'm being stupid and missing the point lol.
This whole after morning scene though is such a mood. I felt comforted by it and also felt our MC's nagging "mehness," that generally comes along with a hangover. So well done in stirring up those relatable emotions.
Mothers and daughters. It's always a complicated thing and I think you show an instance of this well. Parents often have some level of "what they think is best," for their children, but there comes a point when they have to let that go. Some people do it better than others, but it's apparent that Freya's Mum can't. I can see her point of view, but also, she has to let it go because what might be demeaning for some women is liberating for others. And that's kind of the differences between their opinions on Freya's modeling career. So I think you showing this stirred up some additional conflict that makes us even more intrigued about Freya.
And uh oh...having to go to Berlin with playboy Oliver Wood. Ok, welp. You have my full attention. Again.
Another great chapter! I really liked learning more about your MC and how you worked that into everything!
<3 Courtney
Okay, so remember when you guessed correctly that I baked pulla? I said that I would leave you a review, and I started reviewing this fic during the review event, and yet... I couldn't bring myself to count those reviews as your pulla review, so....
This is your pulla review! :D
Bloody hell, Kris! What an ending! This is probably my favorite chapter in this entire story, seriously. After everything that's happening: all of the partying, flirtying, drug use, drinking, fucking, petty jabs at each other, it all builds up to this moment! Now, I know that you're reworking the Quinn Jones story, but I remember that Jax (I think that was his name, sorry if it wasn't!) is the product of this wild love affair between Oliver and Freya, so I can't help but wonder how together together they are at the end.
AND I LOVE IT EVEN MORE THAT WAY!
Yes, having loose ends tied up neatly is satisfying on so many levels. But this kind of ending, slightly ambiguous and a little hopeful... these are the endings I live for, omg. This was sooooo good!
Oliver is a bit of a marshmellow on the inside, isn't he? lol. How he wants Freya to stop calling him a fuckboy and how he's affectionate with her and how he opens up about his sister (heartbreaking head canon, by the way, how DARE) and, probably most importantly, HE MAKES PANCAKES. PANCAKES, KRIS! :elmo fire:
And I love how his sincerity drives that final confession from Freya. Finally, we get a vocalization of Freya's self depricating view of herself--it's definitely heartbreaking and I know that her relationship with Oliver itself won't heal her mental health, but at the end, we get to see Oliver and Freya for who they really are! And Freya is ready to walk away forever--something I can see her attempting to do again in the future, but Oliver, this time at least, gets her to stay, uses her own language to communicate his desires, his acceptance of her.
I'm not sure if this relationship will be able to last forever, but I'm thrilled they get to have this golden moment. (And pancakes ;) )
Fantastic job, Kris! Finishing this story is quite the accomplishment, and I am proud of you for completing it. <3
Kris! Guerrilla tag gift and because I just couldn't leave things like that from the last chapter.
Let's start with my favorite quote of the chapter: " And if there is something I am good at, it is sowing discord and creating chaos." I mean... that is probably the most upfront and self aware that Freya has been throughout the entire story, so... yay character growth? But also... character growth into something a little... destructive? :elmo fire: This whole situation at the beginning is a trainwreck, Kris, and I cringe but I can't look away...
Because chaos is definitely created! :O
The whole Raphaël flirtation was so well written because of how tedious the emotions were in this entire part of the chapter. The pettiness and jealousy between Freya and Oliver are escalating to epic proportions, and I can just tell how bored Freya is of Raphaël because of how bland his flirtation is with her. Like... my dude, can you be a little more interesting before pulling a woman into your bed? Not impressed. lol
But then Oliver comes over when Freya gets what she wants from Roger, but before anything can happen between the two Quidditch players... Freya's father shows up! And suddenly, it makes so much more sense that Freta reacted so poorly to Oliver's previous accusation of her using her Veela charm on him without his consent, because wow, her father is a dick. I'm glad that Freya was able to walk away from the situation without anything explosive happening right then and there, and then to see Oliver come out after her, confessing that he's not like her father--I mean, that's not really true, since they've said similar things, but I think him admitting shows that he at least understands how his words were hurtful to Freya, so... that's something? I hope? Because I love their chemistry, but they need to iron out a few problems if they want to be long term.
And I say that because them having sex in the grove while Oliver is engaged isn't... necessarily healthy behavior on their parts if they continue their charade as is. But! Freya calls him Oliver, and he's happy about it, and now I'm suspicious. I feel like I'm being set up for a happy ending, and yet... And yet.
Must continue reading!!!!! :elmo fire:
Kris! Here for some reviewing love for the guerrilla event! And because of the story.
Ummmmm... what?! I knew Oliver would be at this event (because how can he not be? lolol) But... he's engaged? To one Octavia Blackthorn? Ooof. That's... wow, I would be happy for him, but considering how he acted a month prior with Freya, I'm not confident that this engagement is one based on mutual love and respect (maybe they respect each other? I don't know, I'm hoping so, but more for Octavia's sake--unless she has skeletons in her closet, as well). That is a mighty and teasing cliffhanger you left us with, Kris! How dare you!?
(Writer me is cackling in glee--that was a fantastic build up)
And I also worry for Freya who is one a rather self destructive path with the drugs and drinking... and then hooking up to fill a void when it seems that partying and hooking up is all she does to fill the void. I enjoyed Yael and Freya's banter--and their chemistry is really good, but I'm writh Freya, it's not as flaming as her chemistry with Oliver. That's such a great skill to have as a writer, so well done!
But really, I do worry for Freya, if she's bed ridden after partying and she has to take more drugs to be functional. And now with Oliver in the picture with another woman, I don't think she has the emotional regulation to get through this evening unscathed... Ahhh! :elmo fire: Kris, what have you done?!?!?
(Answer: write a really good story, but I'm all for the drama right now)
Kris! Here for the guerrilla gift tag and to shower you in some love! <3333
I forgot to mention this in my last review on your Narcissa/Gideon fic, but how do you come up with such cool names for places (especially clubs)? :eyes: I have a feeling I might have asked you this before, so maybe I'll have to transfer this question to your wj to immortalize for the ages! lol
All that to say, once again I love your take on magical Berlin (and the name Morgenstern)--do you have an aesthetic made of Hexenheim? :eyes: It would be really good to see how you imagine this intriguing magical place, just sayin'. :P
Oh dear, what a chapter. Lots of sexual tension, rough sex, and... catching feelings, uh oh. Freya and Oliver have a lot to figure out if they want to continue, and the path they're on is definitely risky and kind of toxic. I really enjoyed reading your description of Freya's high, it really encapsulating the magnetic pull she feels to Oliver, and I think it raises the stakes of their relationship, too. I can't help but wonder if there's a mountain of hurt and insecurity behind Freya's actions and Oliver's mask, and if so, how it will be exposed more so than what is already leaking through the cracks at their disastrous morning after conversations.
Right now, it seems like they're assuming the worst of each other: Oliver suspicious of Freya's Veela charm (love how you bring up consent with this) and Freya's assumption of Oliver's fuck boy mantra--and her overwhelming fear of being abandoned, especially from someone she's tempted to commit to. The angst is real!
There are only three chapters left, and I'm wondering how you will resolve (or not resolve) all of this, Kris! I'd be really surprised that no one saw Freya and Oliver walking home from Morgenstern, so I'm anticipating some external fallout in additioni to their interpersonal frurstrations. Should I brace myself to an unhappy/bittersweet/unresolved ending? Either way, I'm still invested in this story and will be back soon to read more!
Kris! Here for the fairyland event (and the story).
That cliffhanger was worth it (the wait between clicking next and submitting my last review to the dance, ahhh, soooo painstaking, lol).
The worldbuilding in this chapter is incredible! I wonder if you have ever been to Berlin, because the way that you described it seems pretty spot on (besides, you know, all the magical embellishments). Also, Hexenheim and Morgenstern are great names for a magical Berlin, because the German language has such practical names for things, lol. I also love your description on the clothes (and tattoos) in this chapter, how they move. Tattoos are mentioned in passing a bit in this story--do they have a particular meaning, or is it your way to really draw the reader into your world?
The photoshoot was obnoxiously Oliver, ahaha. Freya is definitely attracted to him, and it was nice to see her struggle and succeed at the same time. However, Oliver and Freya can't keep their hands off each other for every long because that ending scene, wow, was there a lot of heat!! I do feel a bit for Freya's clothing... Oliver ripping them off of her seems to be a developing pattern, and at this point, Freya might have to end up living in a nudist's colony because Oliver will have shredded all of her clothes, lmao (or she'll just steal his, I like that alternative as well).
And the fire continues! I'll be back soon to see how their relationship develops! :)
Hey Kris! there for the fairyland event and the story!
Oooh, I appreciate the character dive we got for Freya here: waking up in her sketchy flat in Knockturn Alley with her cat (!!! Yeeeeees!) and her overly charming neighbor, Rhys (do you have a faceclaim for him? Asking for a friend, lol), and then her... quite toxic relationship with her mother. I like how we get a lot of nuance with Freya (from preparing coffee to "bartering" for hangover potion to her defensiveness with her mother to her sudden job booking in Berlin). I like how we (the readers) are just thrown into the mix of things, along for the ride.
I'm very intrigued with the tension between Freya and her mother. Modeling is heavily stereotyped, and I can imagine that veela stereotypes are rampant in the wizarding world... but for a woman who seems to have based her career on dismantling discrimination for non- and part-human magical beings, she sure has a lot of prejudice towards what Freya does for a living. Sure, there are risks that come with modeling (discrimination is also pretty common in this field, but for different reasons), but as long as Freya is safe (which I think she is for the most part) and healthy (ehhh, that's a bit debatable atm, given her substance habits and what I'm guessing is an irregular sleep schedule) and she finds fulfillment, Freya should be able to do what she wants. And even if she's not particularly happy... if she's good at it and wants to keep doing it... goodness, I'm getting all worked up! I am curious to see how you develop this plot point in the story...
And then you leave us with a bit of a cliffhanger: Oliver Wood! Getting the same letter! Smirking at Freya (because of course he is, lol). I wonder what's going to happen next; they didn't end on a very good note the night before! I know that I'm one to talk, lol, but good thing this fic is finished because this is a cruel cliffhanger, Kris!
Yes hi ok so this gave me a lot of feels because while it is nice to have Oliver and Freya sexy times again and in such luxurious surroundings, this time definitely felt different to read, and I think that comes down to how you were describing it and how their dialogue when this time compared to all of the earlier times. Freya is definitely thinking about feelings and the feelings she’s caught and the feelings she shouldn’t be having and the feelings he shouldn’t have and shouldn’t want to have about her, and it’s a lot. Her walk in the woods really not clarifying anything for her and then the return inside to Oliver having made toast and pancakes? Damn I’d be hella confused if I were her too. :/ Her mental health has been so bad since she was so young because of how her father treated her and goddamn if that doesn’t suck so much, but Oliver recognizing where it comes from and knowing that he doesn’t see her like that and knows he wants more than just a good fuck buddy is sweet. So it’s not a super sweet ending but hey it’s semi-good and I like that for these two. :) Great fic, Kris!! <3
~Madi
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Bless Roger for trying to keep everything calm and collected at this event, and for doing his best to maintain professionalism even as Yael and Freya are dressed with very specific goals in mind for tonight’s event. I feel like we’re inching towards a blow up between Oliver and Octavia (how convenient, two “O” names) later on… :eyes: The Nymph Grove sounds like a cool as fuck place and I would totally love to go to some place like it someday. OOoooh Freya gonna make Oliver jealous with his biggest Quidditch rival, niiiiiiiice :elmofire: I also like your invention of the Serpentgin drink -- details like that really embellish the worldbuilding you do here, so great touch :) NO FREYA’S DAD, YOU’RE SUCH A TERRIBLE MAN!! >:( Oliver immediately trying to step up to Freya’s defense is admirable of him, but also like, bro he is hella rich that is dangerous territory to be stepping into. And of course they fall back together, Oliver’s engagement notwithstanding….I cannot see this ending well :grimacing:
~Madi
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All right so some time has passed since Freya left Oliver in Berlin after he pulled his stupid shit and she’s currently with Yael but it’s obviously still not cutting it for her, but she is doing the best she can to forget Oliver, even though she probably won’t :’( Also we do support our bisexual ladiesssss :fire: The two of them seem like a good match, as friends and as lovers, if they want to be, and in the aftermath of their club night out and return to Yael’s flat, Yael shows that she really does care for Freya, which I appreciate. She’s in the same industry as her, so of course she’s gotta support another lady in the industry <3 The two of them showing up and then Roger introducing Freya and Yael to Oliver and his fucking fiancee??? OHHHH NOOOOOOO :scream: Not a cool cliffhanger, Kris!!
~Madi
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Okay hi first off I LOVE the words you’ve used to describe how Oliver and Freya keep coming back together in the fourth paragraph of this chapter -- it really elevates how strong their connection is, even though it’s definitely not super healthy but they still need it, still desire each other, and that takes over logical thought sometimes. WE GET MORE SEXY CLUB TIMES!!!! :elmofire: Ahem the only thing I’m concerned about for both of them is the broken mirror and bleeding hands but you know it’s fine I guess :sweat_smile: I really liked the description of the streets outside as they walk back to Wood’s hotel with the little blurbs of nightlife being seen or heard from elsewhere. The drunk centaurs trying to dance is hilarious, by the way, so nice touch there. And then Wood has to go and fucking ruin everything by assuming Freya’s using her Veela-ness on him!! >:(((((
~Madi
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Hi Kris! LOL at Freya just dropping the cat into Rhys’ arms and literally going “oops sorry I am late thx for watching the communal cat k byeeee!” is so funny :joy: I love this description of magical Berlin -- it really feels like I’m in the city with Freya and taking in the sights until Daphne whisks her off to do the photoshoot with Oliver. Freya having to play coy and as if she doesn’t know exactly who she’s modelling with is funny but obviously Daphne probably knows more than she lets on to Freya, but I suppose it’s all the same to both of them. We love a sexy photoshoot, yasssss! Oliver and Freya both basically rubbing on each other as Felix directs them in the sexy photoshoot is so great and clearly also does things to the observers in the room as well, and of course they have a lil quickie in the club afterwards. :elmofire: Looking forward to the next chapter!
~Madi
Fairy foxy review event
Kris!! Here for the fairyland dance!
W-o-W what a chapter.
I mean... what else can I say? Maybe I need to open a window because of all the heat, oof...
That is to say, that was one hot chapter. If I remember correctly, you starting posting this story around the time FFT was exploring smut more boldly, and this is a very bold exploration, indeed! ;)
Freya and Oliver are both pretty passionate people and clearly enjoy sex. But afterwards... you really bring the atmosphere down as their defenses are shot right back up, how they both kind of hurt each other. It's definitely not a foundation for a healthy relationship, but I don't think this is a story about a healthy relationship (from what I remember from your Quinn Jones tale--which are you reposting under a different title? :eyes: consider me curious, lol).
Anyway, the smut was intense, the afterwards brought us back to a cold reality, and then how does Freya cope? Getting high. I do noooot envy how she's going to be feeling in the morning, lol. But at the end of the night, Freya still can't get Oliver out of her mind. Ooooh, something tells me that they're going to meet again (and it's not just the fact that there are more chapters posted, lol. This feeling comes from your excellent set up!). Great job, Kris!!
Hey Kris! Here for the fairyland dance, staying for the romance ;) lol
You have a way with opening lines. I love how informative it is: it tells us, very practically, where we are: The Serpent. But you also lay out the expectations while simultaneously flipping them on their head (by your creative use of the line "What happens at BLANK, stays at BLANK")--we never get the satisfication of the snappy ending because you draw out the sentiment, covering us in enticing (and maybe slightly dangerous) secrets and shadows. Brilliant writing!!
You keep up this craftiness throughout the chapter, laying out the foundations of the story in a very natural way. Instead of only describing Freya's outfit, you tie Daphne and their relationship into the outfit--and you tie the outfit to the setting beyond the "I'm at a dance club in a dress" way... Freya's outfit is a way for her and Oliver to banter, and Freya also uses it and her body (and, frankly, Yael) to her advantage against Oliver. In short: very effective description.
The banter between Freya and Oliver is sizzling with tension in the most tempting of ways! Of course, my "healthy relationship brain" is noticing the red flags, BUUUUT my reader brain is eagerly reading the interaction for the romantic/sexual heat as well as for the vast potential of character development (or... not, which only amps up the tragedy of the story).
This is been a very effective opening chapter, and I have a feeling that I'm going to be both thrilled and heartbroken by Freya and Oliver (how dare you have the audacity to be... such an awesome writer! ;) )
She is back in euphoria in his arms, and I love it but I hate it. AHhh and they're turning into lovey dovey lovers, even though neither would admit it. And wow, his poor fiancee. I feel really torn. Ooh that morning reminder that this is Oliver and Octavia's place. Rough. Oh my gosh my heart hurts, him talking about his sister and making pancakes and Oliver is suddenly so soft.
We finally see her break down and acknowledge her problems and avoidance and self hatred :( I'm so sad for her. But he wants her, and he wants her with all her problems.
A few problems I have with that: you are engaged Mr. Wood, Freya needs to heal not have her habits perpetuated, and you gave up on her rather quickly in the first place.
Can't wait for more chapters!!
blackballet (for the Ice Otters)
Umm, no no no way that Oliver is engaged to someone after three months. Even if he is the most unattainable Quidditch star. Nope, it's not true. YES Freya don't let it go unsaid. Argh she is so cool. And so damaged, but right now it's coming across as cool. I'm so mad that Freya's prediction came true, and that he would leave her for someone else. Though she didn't give him much a choice, considering he was left hanging by her as well.
Oh and now a rival to make him jealous, perfect plan, Yael you are perfect. And she needs yet another upper, poor Freya. It's no wonder her mother disapproves. Man, her absent, ass of a father now? All these men are toxic. But of course Wood gets into her mind and heart and panties, and she calls him Oliver. And now they start an affair. So wrong, so wrong, so right.
blackballet (for the Ice Otters)