Name: Dojh167 (Signed) · Date: 04 Dec 2017 12:29 AM · For: Corners

My first thought from the mood of the first line was that this was about a typical high school couple, but the fancy ballroom seems a step above typical high school dances. Oh, and champagne! So these are probably not teenagers, but maybe adult socialites?

 

It confused me that the girl is referred to as both a fling and a trophy wife

 

It seems like there is a lot more to these characters, their dynamic, and the world they live in, than what you wrote down. It is like teasing, in a way, to just give us a glimpse. I think the thought you put in helps make this little drabble feel more like a slice out of a full world.

 

Nice job!

 

Sam.

Name: abhorsen (Signed) · Date: 01 Dec 2016 05:31 PM · For: Corners

Oh, wow. Now this, more than almost any other drabble I've read so far, I want to hear more about. You pick your words so, so well - there's clear bitterness and resentment in the "trophy wife" comment, and I really love that the bitterness is largely aimed at the woman who's supplanted the narrator rather than the narrator's former partner. It's not really fair, but it is very honest - as is how quickly the narrator jumps to at least maintain some semblance of a relationship with their former partner. Excellent job.

Name: PaulaTheProkaryote (Signed) · Date: 21 Nov 2016 11:47 AM · For: Corners

I'm seriously so proud of everything you've been writing lately! You should definitely know that when I read this the first time I pictured Dramione (AHEM, WOULDN'T THIS BE A FUN WIP). Let's be real, trophy wife isn't what he was after anyway. The ring bit was absolutely so well written. My heart. Oh, my heart.

Author's Response:

<3 Aww Paula!

NOT DRAMIONE THOUGH.

And even if it was, Astoria is practically a trophy/housewife.

Thank you!

I'm not commenting on my reaction to your heart tearing in two.

Thank you for reviewing!

Hayden

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