Name: AbraxanUnicorn (Signed) · Date: 04 Dec 2017 01:56 AM · For: Chapter 1

Hello!

 

The opening three words certainly piqued my interest, and I wondered what the curse was referring to. A worldwide curse affecting Germans, Americans, Australians and English - a world war? Then you tell us that no-one will evr know the reason or process behind it, except for you, the writer. So, not war in the conventional sense. 

I wonder if it's a curse of curiosity?

Or perhaps curiosity as to what the writer is thinking, if the narrator is the only one who knows the answer.

Wow! Definitely food for thought! I love the way you have packed so much intrigue into so few words and it's such an original viewpoint. Thank you for the great read!

Brax X

Name: Dojh167 (Signed) · Date: 04 Dec 2017 12:45 AM · For: Chapter 1

When you started the list of countries with Germany and America, my first thought was that this might somehow be connected to the World Wars. I guess the inclusion of Australia helped dispel that.

 

UM. THIS IS RUDE.

 

You can’t - what . No. Answers? Very, very rude.

 

Baha, and very effective. You build suspense through dramatic statements and repetition, making the reader certain that they will find out what the curse is and then nope. Very rude, very effective.

 

I’m not sure if I would have put “narrative narrator” though  - the first word feels a little redundant.

 

I hated (loved) this XD

 

Sam.

 

Name: PaulaTheProkaryote (Signed) · Date: 21 Nov 2016 11:57 AM · For: Chapter 1

I LOVE THIS. Why do I love this? Because it's such a good little mystery.

"For I am the narrative narrator, only I know the answers."

I swear that you are the master of drabbles.

 

 

Author's Response:

Aww thank you Paula!

The whole drabble was based off the premise that the narrator/author of a story is the only ones who knows everything that comes and is ahead.

You're awesome.

Thank you for reviewing,

Hayden

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Name: abhorsen (Signed) · Date: 18 Nov 2016 11:36 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hey, Hayden! I found this to be so intriguing - it's everything a good drabble should be! I don't suppose you'd be willing to write a longer piece to follow it up, would you? :P

Author's Response:

Hey Branwen! Thank you, this was easier to write than the other two before it, actually. I'll try if you really want! :p

Thank you for reviewing!