Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 02 Feb 2020 01:22 AM · For: Chapter 1

Hey Lex!

 

I'm here to leave you another review for the CDMC Event - Round 2!

 

I bet Sirius would look good dancing in a club! He always seems the sort to be very fashionable and with that beautiful long hair of his, he'd be quite the sight. It's no wonder he's always got some bloke to shag. As handsome as he is, I'm sure there'd be a queue for his attention.

 

I love that you have the randoms he's bringing home as a distraction for his real feelings. I mean, I always imagine him as a bit of a playboy initially, but the sort to be loyal once he found someone worth his time...and here you make it clear that Remus is the only person he thinks is worthy of his time.

 

How torturous for him though to share an apartment with Remus, be secretly in love with him and then see his best mate bringing women in and out of the apartment. It must be heartbreaking each time.

 

Aww. I love that Remus came to protect him when the big guy was being a creep. I mean seriously, once he was rejected he should've backed off. Even if Sirius was a smaller dude, no means no. I guess the creep didn't get that message, but seems like Remus made it amply clear.

 

And I'm so glad that in the end Remus finally kisses Sirius. To make it  better he does it at exactly midnight on New Year! What a way to celebrate!

 

I think I've said this several times today, but I really enjoy your fluff writing! You have such a talent for these cute, happy little pieces. Thanks for filling me with the warm fuzzies.

 

~Kaitlin

Name: Noelle Zingarella (Signed) · Date: 20 Aug 2019 11:25 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hi Lexi! I’m here for your Challenge Entry Review!

 

This is a fun twist on the wolfstar, both because it is a muggle AU and because it show Sirius not being sure about Remus’s affections. It seems to me that I’ve mostly read Remus being the one who wasn’t sure about Sirius, and it is a humanizing twist to have Sirius be the one who isn’t sure.

 

But he’s still Sirius, and so he does things to draw attention and to keep his mind off his troubles. I loved how you described the club with loud music and strong drinks—and the fact that it’s more of James’s and Sirius’s place than Lily and Remus’s. That little detail pulled in the fact that James and Sirius are so close in a nice way. 

 

I liked how you portrayed Sirius as pining for Remus—but in a brass way, he’s not going to let anybody know about it if he’s not sure—especially since they have been friends for so long and they live together. Talk about awkward if things don’t turn out well.

 

The way that you turned the evening on its head was also nicely done. There was this roller coaster where first everybody (but Sirius) is enjoying the count-down to the new year, and then Sirius is assaulted. I really wasn’t expecting that—and you wrote it well—enough detail to be uncomfortable but not so much as to be graphically upsetting. But poor Sirius! I usually don’t remember to think of him as being vulnerable, and you put that vulnerability on display in a stark manner here. 

 

Remus stepping up and coming to the rescue was also an unexpected twist. Remus is a hero—and it was good to see him act the part here.

 

Another really fun entry! Thank you for taking the time to write this for my Challenge! I’ll have the results up soon.

 

Yours,

Noelle