Name: pookha (Signed) · Date: 13 Nov 2019 11:31 PM · For: Chapter 1

EvS review

This is a very neat little collection of stories and I appreciate each for different merits.

 

In the first, I can picture James the prankster trying this out and it seems so like canon James (I) that I can see James (II)doing this too. Harry would probably be cross with him in public but then laugh about it with Ginny in private, so it feels very true.

 

The second story,with the dainties is something I really like. It seems a bit like Felix Felicis on a small scale, where it just gives erudition. I llike that it's not a love potion (they're gross) but instead allows you to be able to express yourself, but just in a better manner. This feels really good and true to the magical world.

 

The bats are just a typical wizard candy, but they also show how experimenting with charms on food can have unexpected consequences; it doesn't look like they expected them to fly off.

 

The last one with Scorpius is just really sweet, and shows him in a good domestic situation which tells us a lot about his character. He cares about his family and it shows in his actions, which seems very Malfoy.

 

A great job with all these and I really enjoyed these small stories.

Author's Response:

Thank you, Carl, for taking the time to give a little love to my story of four tiny glimpses into the place of four seemingly insignificant candies in the lives of the magical community.  James II tries to buffalo the firsties but backtracks hasitly when they threaten to rat him out to the prefects; the Dainties are sweet and tasty with positive effect but they stir up bittersweet memories; the fruit bats prove to be a little bit out of control; and the candy corn is a loving gift from a boy to his dog.  These moments are so tiny that if you blink, you will miss them, and how can candy have any deeper meaning?  But it does.  I like to think that Scorpius was happier in his family life than Draco ever was, and it is enhoyable to write him that way.

Vicki