Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 02 Feb 2020 12:37 AM · For: Chapter 1

Hey Lex!

 

I'm here to leave you another review for the CDMC Event - Round 2!

 

There's that beautiful description that you're so good at! OMG. You set the creepiest scene with this story seriously. I can't even imagine waking up the way Tara did and being so confused and afraid and surrounded by mangled bodies and blood. Its horrific. It's even scarier because she has absolutely no idea what happened at all or how she got there.

 

As soon as I saw that she was the only person left alive, she was nude, and she had lots of scratches and minor wounds, I began to suspect that she was the werewolf. I wonder, did she not know she was a werewolf? Was she recently bitten and this was her first transformation?

 

OMG. I FEEL LIKE THERE HAS BEEN SO MANY SHOUTY CAPS IN MY REVIEWS TODAY, BUT SERIOUSLY HOW COULD YOU??! REMUS LUPIN TURNED HER?! I feel like that was always the one thing he feared above all else in canon was allowing his lycanthropy to turn him into a monster. He was so paranoid about biting others, so for him to have bitten her is just so tragic.

 

And I'm a bit confused about why she was alone with all of these other students when a transformation was coming. Did she not realize she'd been bit? Did Lupin not warn her about what would happen on the full moon? I just I'm at a bit of a loss for words.

 

And poor McGonagall and Dumbledore having to deal with a murder scene like this at the school. I'm sure the board will have their heads for it.

 

Really a creepy, disturbing, but well written story.

 

~Kaitlin

Name: Unwritten Curse (Signed) · Date: 06 May 2019 02:04 AM · For: Chapter 1

Hello! I am here for our Review Swap! :)

 

First of all, HOLY CRAP.

 

Okay, now that that's out of the way, I have so many questions! Why did Remus turn her? Was it an accident? WHY DID THEY LEAVE HER ALONE ON HER FIRST FULL MOON? What is going to happen to her now? Are they going to lock her up? IT WAS AN ACCIDENT.

 

I am screaming at the computer. Except I have a cold so it kind of sounds like wheezing.

 

I love how you throw the reader into the middle of the scene. It leaves us just as confused and scared as Tara, so as she discovers the morbid details, we are horrified right alongside her. It creates so much tension and suspense and I JUST LOVE IT. I thought you did a really nice job of describing her emotions. It never felt over-the-top; it was just enough to help me get inside her head.

 

When the Marauders showed up, it felt like a huge relief, because finally there was some familiarity. UNTIL REMUS FREAKING ADMITTED TO TURNING HER. That threw me for a loop and now I feel utterly disoriented. I don't know who to trust or what to believe.

 

Okay, so I see in your Author's Note that this is a one-shot. Are the other one-shots in this series going to explore Tara's story? I am so intrigued and I NEED ANSWERS.

 

Thanks for doing this swap with me! I've been meaning to check out your writing. :)

 

xx Gina

Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 24 Apr 2019 05:34 PM · For: Chapter 1

Heya, Lexi! I'm here for our swap and April's EvS (#TeamSilver)

 

I need more of this, please! Where are these other one-shots?! Ugh, so, starting from the beginning, I love the way you described Tara coming-to; the sheer amount of confusion and the use of the senses before she opens her eyes was awesome, and I think helped build the intent of the opening. The idea that she'd been the one to kill all these people because she was a werewolf makes must take an incredible toll on her, especially since she's just waking up after a transformation (which, in it of itself, must be nothing short of torturous). 

 

As she's helping the dying student, I feel so bad, both for her and for everyone in the room. Obviously, she has no control over what she does while transformed, and having murdered people without meaning to must be so hard to try to cope with. Plus, I feel bad for the people attacked (for obvious reasons). Why wasn't she locked up properly like Remus? What happened? 

 

I loved the bit about her being snatched away by Remus and Sirius, attempting to help her out of the mess she's in. It's so like Remus to try to help her as he feels like, inadvertantly he feels like it is his fault [as he's the one who turned her (#plottwist)]. OF course, her feeling enraged at Remus for turning her into a werewolf is probably pretty natural. I have so many questions, though! How and when did she turn! What's the story there? What's going to happen next? Clearly it's a werewolf attack and there's only two werewolves at Hogwarts (that I know of) so is Remus going to take the blame? What will happen! 

 

Please let me know where I can find more in this one-shot series or, if I need to wait, when you do update! I love the first wizarding era, and I also love the Marauders, so I'm definitely down to read more in this 'Verse! 

 

Thanks so much for the swap! 

 

-R

Name: starbuck (Signed) · Date: 15 Mar 2019 07:26 PM · For: Chapter 1

i thought that the opening to this was great – we don’t know what’s happening to tara, she has no idea where she is, why she’s in pain….why she’s laying in a sea of bodies and a pool of blood! and it’s a great opening, making us want to know more about what happened.

 

your descriptions of her pain and then her horror after she realised where she was, what she’s done, what she is…are amazing – they really manage to portray all these things in a manner that you can almost feel tara’s pain.

 

her wanting to out herself was definitely brave but then i briefly wondered who the people who stopped her were – i thought they might be other werewolves…and it turns out i wasn’t completely wrong since it was remus and sirius.

 

what i found a bit peculiar was how the marauders decided to keep her secret? i mean, she just murdered i don’t know how many people and even if it was remus’ fault that she became a werewolf i just can’t wrap my head around them being so nonchalant about the massacre. so i’m thinking there has to be more to this story!

 

you mentioned this will be a series of oneshots and i think that’s great – i’d love to know more about tara and the marauders!

 

kris

Name: Bunbury (Signed) · Date: 10 Mar 2019 08:25 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hey Lacey! Here for EvS, team silver!

Tara’s disorientation is a great opening hook, and her pain and nausea is really visceral.

 

The series of reveals is really effective. I was surprised to find that she was in the Great Hall, I definitely expected her to be outside. The realization that she’s lying in a sea of bodies. . .And of who the perpetrator is. . .And of who turned her! You do a good job at creating a sense of mounting horror. (I hesitate to say more, I don't want anyone to be spoiled!) And the last paragraph is just devastating. Are you planning on continuing this story? I was left feeling curious about the circumstances under which Tara was turned, about how this massacre was possible.

 

Thanks for the read in any case!

 

Jane