Name: magemadi (Signed) · Date: 13 Jul 2020 11:43 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hey Lex!

 

I saw Hermione/Fred and immediately had to click in! Although thanks for that heartbreak, oof. You do a great job of pulling moments from canon that would have been great opportunities for Fred to notice Hermione, and vice versa, even if he never thought she did. Such a sad sad story, but it’s definitely a different take on Fred’s death, especially as what I recall is that he doesn’t even make it to the Great Hall alive, but by giving him a few more moments to live for the family to say goodbye that makes it that much more emotional. ESPECIALLY since Hermione gets there too, and he gets that closure that she did know the difference between him and George, and she was thankful he found her crying that night in his fifth/her fourth year. Ugh so sad but that just makes me want to read more of this ship, so thanks I guess? Great writing on this fic! :)

 

~Madi

Broom Racing

Name: TreacleTart (Signed) · Date: 02 Feb 2020 01:14 AM · For: Chapter 1

Hey Lex!

 

I'm here to leave you another review for the CDMC Event - Round 2!

 

I love that Fred recognizes how beautiful and smart and unassuming Hermione is. She's magnificent and she doesn't even realize it, but he does.

 

I thought the detail you included about George having a freckle that looked a bit like an anchor on his temple was nice. Twins always have a distinguishing feature, so it was a good thing to include here. Of course, it would be something Hermione would notice too. She's very observant of minor details which is often what makes her such a good student.

 

I really like that you give Fred a few more minutes before dying so that he can say goodbye to his family. That was always one of the hardest parts about his death in the book for me is that he died suddenly. There was really no closure around it. So while I'm still upset that you decided to kill him off still, I appreciate that you gave him some finality and time for his family to say goodbye.

 

That last moment was so sweet with him and Hermione. He doesn't go into a soppy monologue because that isn't who he is. He just touches her face and acknowledges that she's the only one who can ever tell him and George apart. It's like he's saying that she's the only person who ever really saw him for who he was and I think that's beautiful.

 

Lovely work on this piece (even if it made me want to sob)!

 

~Kaitlin

Name: Renacera (Signed) · Date: 15 Jul 2019 04:00 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hello!

Oh my gosh. I came across this story while searching for Dramiones to read, and I saw that "How Things Have Changed" listed this as a prequel, so I just had to read it. And, my dear, you broke my heart!

Although I'm a Draco/Hermione fan forever and ever, one of the first ships I liked was Fred/Hermione. It absolutely crushed me to read this story of what-might-have-been for them. You did such a good job capturing the emotions throughout this.

Your characterization of Fred was spot-on. I loved how he was so reflective in his final moments, and how he thought of Hermione as strong and capable. I love that he didn't want to change her. That's such an important part of really loving who a person is, not who you want them to be. And the fact that Fred knew that all along...ughh. So perfect.

Great job including small bits of humor in Fred's final minutes. I think that's very appropriate to his character. And though I wish he'd been able to tell Hermione how he felt, I also understand that doing so would have been out of character for him. He wouldn't want to have the selfish moment to tell her he loved her and leave her immediately after. But something in me thinks maybe she loved him to, in her own way, so maybe she'd have wanted to hear it...

You did so well with this story. The emotions were raw and real. The characters were recognizable but unique to your style. The scene was set beautifully. Great job!

Best,
Emily

Author's Response:

Hey emily!

thank you for reading my story! I am so so glad you enjoyed it! I hope you do take the time to read the next multi chapter though it will be a much longer story and it’s barely broke the surface at 3 chapters.  Unfortunately for Dramione shippers like myself ;) Draco doesn’t appear for a while yet in that story. 

I find Fred a very difficult character to write at times, so it means a lot to me when you say I did a good job, especially with his humour because that the major thing I struggle with. I love Fred as a character and Fremione and Dramione are my two favourite ships (after my new found obsession with Wolfstar that is haha)

I feel like the twins, Fred specifically was close enough to the trio to see hermione for who she was and maybe in ways other people didn’t. 

Anywaaaays,

thank you for reading I’m so so glad you liked it and hope that you will give the sequel a shot! It should be updated again soon!

xo

lexi

Name: ReillyJade (Signed) · Date: 14 Jul 2019 02:15 AM · For: Chapter 1

Hi, Lacey!

 

I've been meaning to swing by your author page for a while now, and I'm super glad I did! Now, full disclosure: I'm a huge Romione fan - always have been - but, I've always harbored a soft spot for Fremione. This was heartbreaking to read, of course, but it was a great depiction of Fred's longing. He's always been such a confident person who takes everything in stride, so to see him feeling insecure about this girl who likes his brother (and therefore keep these feelings to himself) was a refreshing change of pace. It was an interesting juxtaposition to the Fred we know and love, and I liked seeing this alternate side of his personality.

 

Despite Fred's surprise about it, I find it completely believable that Hermione could tell the twins apart early on. I think her motivations initially may have been to avoid some of their trickery, but it shows how much she really did care for them. Heck, even most of the Weasleys couldn't tell them apart most of the time. Setting aside his romantic feelings for Hermione, I think that alone meant a lot to Fred.

 

I think you made an interesting choice in giving Fred a moment with his family before his death. The fact that he kept it as lighthearted as humanely possible was so in-character and a very nice touch. 

 

Your writing flows nicely and is very easy to read. I like how your descriptions weren't bogged down in unnecessary detail. Although this story centered on some heavy content, it still felt light and almost whimsical in certain spots, which is perfect, seeing as Fred's narrating!

 

This was a wonderful read and I'm glad I stopped by!

 

Cheers,

Reilly

 

 

Name: beyond the rain (Signed) · Date: 08 May 2019 05:47 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hey! I'm so sorry that it's taken me so long to get to this review - I've been really busy at the minute. I chose this story because Fremione is a rare pair, but a quiet favourite of mine. I don't read them often enough. 

 

Poor Fred, having to watch his crush fall in love with his brother. I can only imagine how painful that must be. I'm glad he stayed away though. It proves his loyalty to Ron - and respect. We all know the fear of the unknown, what if he had told Hermione how he felt and been rejected? What if Ron found out and reacted badly. I love Ron, but we know what he's like - he wouldn't have taken that news too well. 

 

 

I think it shows that behind the facade of self confidence and humour - there was some vulnerability in there too. You showed that side of him really well. He didn't think Hermione would be able to tell the difference between him and George, that she didn't think much of him, that she wouldn't feel the same. You kept it open ended, which was nice, but I like to think that at one point Hermione might have felt something for him. There were lots of reasons for her not to act on it, maybe you could write a follow up fic on whether she knew about how Fred felt for her and if his feelings were reciprocated! 

 

 

Towards the end, the imagery was so sad - but had some nice detail. You gave us all a really clear picture of what was happening! JK robbed us of one Weasley too many - but I really enjoyed your spin on it! 

 

Bex

 

 

 

Author's Response:

Hey there! No worries :) glad you decided to start here!  Actually there is a sequel multi chapter that is a current WIP if you wanted to see the continuation of the story:) it’s called How Things Have Changed. Thank you for coming to read my story and I’m glad you enjoyed it! Hermione really was such an intelligent girl, and her odd crush on Ron would have made it quite difficult for her to see one of his brothers as more then a friend.  At least during hogwarts days. I hope you do take the time to check out the WIP.  Maybe we can do another swap for it! It’s going to get a new chapter soon too.  

Take care! And thanks again for stopping by :) 

Xo

LB

Name: crestwood (Signed) · Date: 26 Feb 2019 12:01 AM · For: Chapter 1

Hello Lacey! I apologize for how long this has taken me, I had two back to back birthdays the past two days and I’ve been out more than usual.

I haven’t read a Fred/Hermione in years, but I do like the ship, if only to see how different authors deal with the conundrum of the fact that she has this thing with his brother going on. I really enjoyed the way you approached it, as a pining that Fred held in private for her all along.

I liked reading through the observations he gives about her, showing us how much he really watched over here for all this time. It’s incredibly sad that he has to die without actually expressing what’s been pressing on him for so long. It is nice that he keeps his sense of humor until the end, as he would.  

 

By far my favorite aspect of this was Hermione’s ability to tell him apart from George--I think it was a beautiful note to end on, implying that maybe she kept him in her attention the way he did her. This is a really nice read, I enjoyed myself. Thank you for the swap!

Name: starbuck (Signed) · Date: 23 Feb 2019 03:17 PM · For: Chapter 1

hey, i'm here for our swap!

 

i thought this was quite an interesting take on fred and hermione's relationship (or lack thereof). i liked how you incorporated canon things that happened with fred's take on them and they way he perceived hermione throughout the years. him impersonating george in order to comfort her just goes to show how much he cared for her but he also cared for ron and didn't want to come between them even though he was frustrated by ron's behaviour towards her.

 

the fact that hermione could tell fred and george apart tells us that she might've viewed fred as something more than a friend, but she never actually ated on her feelings. which makes the whole thing even more heartbreaking because not only does fred die, but the two of them could have had something and yet....they didn't.

 

it was an interesting read, and even though fred and hermione might be a rare pairing i thought you did the ship justice!

 

kris

Name: Oregonian (Signed) · Date: 14 Feb 2019 06:24 PM · For: Chapter 1

Of your four stories that I have read so far, Lacey, I like this one the best of all.  The structure is simple -- Fred reviewing in his mind how much he has admired Hermione over the years, and then the death scene in the Great Hall, his final minutes of life.  Simple is good.  It is easy to get tangled up in complications, but sometimes we just want to focus on a few simple truths.

 

True, in the book Fred dies instantly, but I like your little alteration where he clings to life for a little longer before succumbing.  People speak of their life flashing before their eyes when they are close to death -- well, in this story a part of Fred's life flashes before his eyes, his admiration for Hermione.

 

I liked your premise that Hermione could always tell the twins apart.  That is so like her.  Her determination to know everything and to be right would compel her to discover a way to tell the boys apart, perhaps at first just to avoid the frustration of being fooled, but ultimately because she did care for them, and recognizing each one is a symbol of that caring.

 

Nice job.

Author's Response:

Hey there Oregonian!

Thank you for your kind words, and for continuing to read my work’. I cannot express how it feels knowing that there are people giving my stories a chance!  Makes me all warm and fuzzy! Ever since my grandmother who read the books before me ruined the ending of the series informing me of Fred’s Death and I knew there had to be a better way for it all to end.  This story probably took the longest for me to write to be honest yet it is the shortest.  I likely rewrote it ten times before I was finally satisfied with the portrayal of the characters.  

 

I really hope you will come to read my future stories and tell me what you think of them :3 

 

thanks again! 

 

LB

Name: Willow (Anonymous) · Date: 14 Feb 2019 05:31 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hello there lovely!

You really picked a heartbreaking moment to introduce Fremione! I like the idea that Hermione could tell Fred and George apart -- especially when no one else could. I can really see Fred feel frustrated with Ron and Hermione's relationship and how much of a ponce Ron was through most of it. 

I love the moments that caused Fred to fall for Hermione. They are very defining moments for Hermione and I can definitely see how that would influence how someone watching her as intently as Fred was. 

Fred's attempt at humor as he's dying is so gut wrenching to read. :( :( He's very brave to face his own death but still want to keep others in high spirits. 

I'll be honest. My heart broke a lot with "she saw him." I can imagine how it's hard to feel like you have your own identity as a twin but Hermione saw him as a person, not just half of a set. 

Your profile says you're a new author. Is that just new to fanfic or new to writing all together? I really like how you tell stories and am excited to read more of your work. 

-Rose

Author's Response:

Hey there!

Thank you so much for taking the time to not only read but  analyze and truly appreciate my writing.  That really makes my day!  I really wanted to find a way to make Fred’s death more then a quick moment, he deserved more then that!   Keep an eye out for my story that could be a continuation/alternate ending for this story, but this was only because I had requests on my website to continue the story.  

 

To your question: I have been writing short stories, poems, lyrics and screen plays that no one ever saw since before I can remember.  My mother used to find me at all hours of the night typing on my old desktop or writing in my many notebooks. I have a crazy imagination and would talk to myself for hours coming up with new stories to entertain myself.  Though writing isn’t new for me, I am new to fan fiction and my grammar punctuation and spelling skills need some work and I am hoping to work on that this year!

 

Thank you for reading and I hope you check out my new stories in the future!