Name: Oregonian (Signed) · Date: 18 Sep 2021 12:56 AM · For: Blending in Time

Hi, Elena.  I reviewed a couple of your short stories during the review drive, when speed was of the essence, but now I'm taking time to read one of your longer pieces.

 

This is an engaging story.  I like the going back and forth in time because it's a mental challenge to keep up with what is happening.  Everyone is confused by the impossible-to-explain appearance of Hermione in the Marauders' era and her apparent familiarity with them, Dumbledore, and Madam Pomfrey when those people don't recognize her at all. Then in the modern time period, the people at Hogwarts know who Hermione is, but they can't understand her odd behavior, falling unconscious for a week, then wanting to go out into the forest to hunt for clues about Harry's whereabouts.

 

Despite the challenging time frames, the story flows smoothly, the dialogue is well-written, and the details and descriptions make the scenes easy to envision and to follow.  When I consider the main threads of the plot, I see two themes: what has happened to Harry (where is he?), and why is Hermione going back and forth in time?  Perhaps there is something that happened (or will happen) in the Marauders' era that is the ultimate cause of what is happening to Harry now, but Hermione can find it only in her ventures back in time.

 

A good beginning to an intriguing story.  I hope you will be able to finish it eventually.  Thank you for writing.  For Slytherin glory!

 

Vicki

Author's Response:

Sorry it has taken me so long to respond to you.

I so desperatly love this story, and I too hope to get back to it at some point.

If you can find it, this story was inspired by Timeturner's The Present (was on HPFF, but might be transferred to A03)

Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Name: Oregonian (Signed) · Date: 03 Feb 2019 01:27 AM · For: Hermione's Unknown Helper

Hi, Elena,

 

I wasn't sure about a story where Hermione goes back and forth in time, but I thought I'd give a fellow snake's story a try.  And I'm glad I did.

 

After two chapters, nobody has gone back in time yet, but you've given us some crackerjack action in these first two chapters.  The depth of detail and the short declarative sentences, without a lot of digression into inner contemplations, ensure a rapid-fire pace and give immediacy to the action.

 

I also appreciate the AU approach.  Because of it, the situation is at once familiar and not familiar, and the differences capture my attention, even though we are talking about the same main characters that filled the seven books and have been written to death in fanfiction.

 

I will continuing reading your chapters.  Keep up the good work!

 

Vicki

Author's Response:

Hi Vicki :)

Firstly, thanks for reading and reviewing. This is a story I started writing many years ago but never finished. I'm hoping a new audience and a new life to it will help motivate me to finish what I started. Please keep reading, this was one of the stories I was most excited about.