Name: potionspartner (Signed) · Date: 26 Jan 2019 07:37 AM · For: Starring...

Oh my goodness that was absolutely hilarious. I, literally, almost fell out of my seat laughing so hard. I loved Lily’s description of her costume as a Christmas Tree and then later as a evergreen marshmallow. Sirius is so awesome. His own little interpretations of the story are so well. . . Sirius.

You have a good point about the innkeeper that I never considered. Not that I think the guy was on crack, but he obviously wasn’t being as kind-hearted as he could have been and yet he’s the only innkeeper that didn’t completely turn them away so maybe we should give him some credit.

And then there is James giving in to animal instincts but of course who can blame him since it is treacle tart.

Don’t worry, there wasn’t too much going on. I understood the narrator shifts and the scene shifts.

 

Giving a nod to Barbara Robinson’s Best Christmas Pageant Ever book, I will say this one is the 2nd best Christmas Pageant ever!

Author's Response:

Hello! (I’m finally getting round to responding to some reviews :p)

 

Honestly I don’t consider humour to be one of my strong suits in writing so I’m glad you found it funny! I don’t even remember where Christmas Tree Lily came from, but I imagine it would look a bit disastrous with her hair XD And Sirius is always such an icon, we love him.

 

Oh, the innkeeper. I agree that he deserves credit for actually giving them a place to stay, and I personally don’t believe he was on crack. I guess if all the rooms were taken, no one can blame him, but him being high was an interpretation I could see Sirius making when I was writing this.

 

Its reassuring to know the story wasn’t too confusing- I always stress over making sure the reader doesn’t get lost and end up not understanding stuff. I played around with narratives and italics much more than I usually do here, but it was fun to experiment.

 

Thank you for the review and all the lovely comments! <3

 

 

Name: you-make-me-wander (Signed) · Date: 13 Jan 2019 02:37 PM · For: Starring...

I came here to help catch a creature for The Magical Menagerie, and I couldn’t feel better about having chosen your story. It’s hilarious, and so ingenious I haven’t a clue how you came up with this idea!

Everything about it is genius. From their discussions as they rehearse the play to all the little comments they make about the props and costumes, which I can perfectly imagine, to the poor first years that are stuck with them and McGonagall spying on them without them knowing, especially as she seems to enjoy their antics.

I wasn’t sure what to expect from the story but I got more than I bargained for. You had me smiling and laughing throughout, and the imagery is just pure gold. From Remus being kind of out of place and constantly correcting Sirius, to Lily complaining throughout the whole ordeal, Sirius thinking he’s the mastermind behind all of this, James being the donkey and McGonagall being the know-it-all and ever present figure we’re used to seeing… It’s likely the funniest story I’ve read in quite a while!

I loved all the little details, like the gnome as a baby and the wings from Zonko’s and Lily dressed as a tree. They made the story all the funnier, and helped me visualize the entire scene all the better. Not only that, but this is totally something the Marauders would likely do given too much free time xD

Great job! Will definitely be back for more of your writing soon ^^

Author's Response:

Hi! Sorry I haven’t responded to this sooner :/

 

I’ve been meaning to write more Marauders because I absolutely love their friendship dynamic and they all have distinct personalities which make them fun to write. Tbh, this fic was born from me watching Peter Pan Goes Wrong right before Christmas and thinking ‘wow, imagine if the Marauders put on a play this bad’. (Although PPGW is, like, 10000x funnier). I’m glad it made you laugh, though, as there were some points where I was worried it was kinda too much.

 

Haha, I’ve fully accepted the fandom’s collective headcanon that McGonagall is the mum of the Marauders. And I just HAD to get James in his Animagus form to be the donkey because he’s so well suited for the role, right?

 

(Sirius needs to be fired as narrator).

 

Anyways, thank you for this lovely review, I really appreciated it :)

 

Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 13 Jan 2019 12:15 PM · For: Starring...

Hello! I'm here for the Magical Menagerie reviewing event! 

 

I knew walking into a Marauder-run Christmas Pagent story was going to knock me off my feet, but I hadn't expected the formatting, which did everything to add to the humor. I mean, honestly, having Sirius as the narrator, who is completely butchering the story of Jesus's birth, with Remus trying to correct him was absolutely hysterical. Plus, poor Lily having to dress up in some sort of Christmas tree costume, with too much make-up made me laugh, too (but I do feel bad for her, poor thing). Tie that in with her inability to act and I'm pretty sure that this is the best Marauder fic ever. 

 

I'd also pay a good sum of money to see Remus Lupin (whilst glowing) float down from the sky in pink angel wings. James in his animagus form as a stag being the "closest" thing to a donkey they had, Lily not actually being able to ride the "donkey" because Sirius made her stuff her Christmas Tree costume in order to make her look pregnant, and the constant back-and-forth between the characters is too much -- I'm dead, you've killed me, thank you. 

 

Oh my gosh, the implication that the innkeeper was drunk or something for suggesting that Mary give birth in a barn was amazing. Sirius should never, ever be allowed to narrate a play ever again (or, alternatively, he should do this for a living because I'm crying). Plus, having to use a garden gnome as a baby, and the whole exchange with Lily calling the baby ugly and the "your it's mother" bit -- oof I can't breathe. I don't even know what I'm saying anymore. 

 

Of course, the entire Treacle Tart situation was too good -- the panicking, the shrieking, the shouting, and poor James choking while nobody does anything to help...oh my gosh. At least Sirius intervenes. And then to have McGonagall there...poor McGonagall, she's probably beside herself with confusion, haha! Thank goodness she has a sense of humor (I suppose she would have had to in order to survive having to teach and supervise the Marauders).  Also, it's sort of sweet in a way, that they were trying to put on a pageant for the Professors...as horrible as it was. 

 

Beautiful job -- I've nearly peed myself laughing!

 

--Rumpels