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Hey there beautiful
Reading Hermione’s point of view and now seeing how Severus sees their first meeting was truly an amazing feeling. I was glad to get some closure on the Lily Potter thing, seeing first hand how she treated him so poorly after his mistake, yes he was terrible but he didn’t mean it. But to see how terrible she was how she just ignored Potter and Sirius’ bullying because it was him. That it was okay they were humiliating and harassing a student because it was him. That was horrible and heart breaking.
How he sees her when he first lays his eyes on her blew me away and made my heart skip(seriously) and made me fan girl shriek inside. I love how you write him, so sad and broken and yet so alive and sweet. I like seeing that he does have people he is in some way friends with that he wasn’t completely alone even if they are to be death eaters one day.
The way you wrote with Severus’ voice here was really moving. I quite enjoyed it!
Looking forward to reading more!
LB
Hey there my sweet friend!
Seeing the final chapter of the DH from a SSS / Severus point of view literally had me darn near tears! How he had to give only the few memories he would allow for Harry to see, keeping him from knowing the truth about him and hemrione, how in his final moments he questioned her love for him unknowingly that this hermione hadn’t gone back yet oh my gosh y heart T-T
Still in his final moment he thought of only the two women he ever loved Lily his best friend and Hermione the love of his life. I love how you wrote this, totally pulling everything together and confirming that he waited his whole like still loving her and wishing he could hate her which in itself is heartbreaking. I’m on the edge of my seat for thisstory because I desperately love Severus
Once again, you’ve nailed Snape’s mood, his anguish at himself, his disgust at just about everyone around him. I can’t decide which you’ve depicted better: Avery and Mulciber or Potter and Black. In other words, I can’t decide which group I detest more. Avery and Mulciber are definitely in Severus’s words “dunderheads.” Their arrogance and narrow-minded behavior shines here. James and Sirius are, in their own way, just as bad. I really don’t understand how people moon over these two. (Of course, I don’t understand why Lily finally goes for him herself. A tiger never changes his stripes for long. I often wondered if they had lives would their marriage have been happy in the long term.) Anway, back on topic, those two boys are self-absorbed brats who can’t see anything good past their own house. . . . It sounds like the two are actually a lot a like.
I love Severus’s point-of-view when he meets Hermione. “It was the kindness in her voice that startled him as much as annoyed him.” Severus doesn’t seem to handle anything positive directed at him. Indeed if one compares the two stories, his thoughts say, “Merlin, she is beautiful,” but in SSS he snarls at her to get lost. It’s so sad he can’t accept that he might have the possibility of being happy. Of course, who can blame him because when he does find happiness with her, it’s almost immediately snatched away.
For the Magical Menagerie.
I kept meaning to write a review for this story (since I’ve already written the fanfiction of it, so here it goes.)
I love the opening chapter. Making it second person point of view really grabs you and pulls you into Severus’s pain and confusion. It’s so descriptive coming into your life “like a tornado and then leaving behind the ruins of your abandoned and damaged hearts.” My open heart just aches in pain for poor Severus and my first thought is “Maybe this is all for naught. Maybe she won’t be able to save him!”
I also love the yes, how you compare the green and brown eyes the two different women that he loves: Lily and Hermione. I also like the way you kept with canon, how Harry thinks Severus is looking at his eyes but really he is looking over Potter’s shoulder to Hermione’s, the entire time only wanting the answer to one simple question: Why? And then of course all fades to black and you throw us back twenty years. Using magical words to draw us in and when we are practically salivating, leave us hanging by thread-so typical MegGonagall.
This was really interesting! I think I'm going to have to read the story it goes along with, because I'm really intrigued. This is a tough ship to write, but - and I know it's still just the prologue, but even so - it felt believable to me. I also loved the way you didn't gloss over Lily's importance to Snape - you just someone else important, too. It was wonderful because I can totally see how Lily wouldn't have been able to give him everything he needed when it came to love. She gave him a lot, but it's very clear from canon that she didn't give him any faith in his worth as a romantic partner, because she never fulfilled that role for him. It always bugged me that there was never any indication that someone else was there for Snape, because I find the idea that the only genuine love he ever knew was unrequited romance where the person cut him off when they were 16. Justifiably, but even so. And, now that I think about it, I can see the appeal of Hermione - she and Lily do have some pretty significant similarities, though not to the extent that I think for a second that you'll be writing a "I want you to be Lily" fic. Yeah, I'm definitely going to have to check this out!
(originally posted 7/12/15 on HPFF)
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After that tease of a prologue, here we are with Severus headed off on the Hogwarts Express. Bad enough Lily didn’t respond to any of his letters, now he has to put up with Avery and Mulciber. The tension is nearly palpable when they start badmouthing Lily. Of course, Severus cleverly points out that Lily is now a Prefect. Ten points to our one-day Potions master.
You did a lovely job handling the confrontation between James and Severus. The trousers trick is perfect - both of the boys are in character and it all makes sense, having read SSS. I love seeing the events from there played out from his point of view!
Poor Severus, though. It’s hard not to feel for him as he stares up at Hogwarts and is overwhelmingly lonely without a friend. But of course, how could he ever imagine the new girl that arrives and turns his life upside down in the most unexpected manner?
And once again you leave us wanting more! Really, how could you? Well, I guess it’s understandable if more would spoil SSS - that won’t do! Having said that, though, I’m not above begging for an update soon on SSS! Please!
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~Alexis
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Wheee, I'm on a roll catching up on this story(ies) lately! I love that you're telling these two stories concurrently.
I love that Snape's method of calming himself down is to mentally recite the twelve uses of dragon's blood XD that's kind of cute, actually.
No. Even though he and Lily were no longer friends, she had better sense than to wind up with that arrogant prat. -- Hahaha... Bummer, dude.
I like the attention you've drawn to how Hogwarts really is Snape's home, since his real home is a place of abuse and neglect - but how much of the feeling of home that Hogwarts gave him was because of Lily. I do almost feel badly for Snape here.
It was foolish for her to throw away years of friendship over a slip of his tongue. He did not mean it, and he just had to get her to see that he was truly sorry. -- this so accurately captures the essence of what Snape is. He'll apologize, beg, do whatever is needed, but ultimately still thinks it's her being foolish and doesn't step back and look at what he's become and why she cut him out of her life.
And then we get the overlap with SSS! I'm really excited for this because I love the way the same story can be different when seen from two different POV's. This was a great place to leave off too, because just as Lily leaves Snape at the lowest point he's been at, Hermione walks in and you can just feel that things are about to change.
Love it! I know this won't be updated for a while but I'll be back when it is! :)
♥
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Meggg!!! I was so excited to see that review you left for me this morning that I had to visit your AP and leave a thank you review :P (Sorry about increasing your unanswered review count... i'll try and keep this short so you don't have to work too hard on the response hehe. But omg it might be hard for me to keep this short just because I'm so excited about this new story!!)
I am really glad to see that you're writing from Snape's POV, because honestly I don't see many stories from Snape's POV - and when I do, they're usually about Lily - so this already starts out quite original and I can't wait to see how you balance out his love for Lily and his feelings for Hermione as well. Not to mention that I'm just really eager to have an insight into Snape's mind because he's such an enigmatic character.
Ooh, also SECOND PERSON, I love it so much. I also love when things start at the end and then go back to the beginning. And things that have sad endings. Basically from what I can tell of this story, it's a recipe for all the things I love and is going to be amazing!
I love your descriptive word choice too! Aaah this line -- When she came into your life like a tornado, and left just as quickly; leaving behind the ruins of your abandoned and damaged heart. -- that's so vivid, and tragic in a beautiful way.
And let's not forget that really interesting spin you put on that scene as Snape dies, when he begs Harry to look at him - I love how you reworked it such that it doesn't contradict canon, but adds more to it. So cool the way you did that.
LOVE IT! I am a little sad that there will be a long time before the next update but I am hardly one to judge people on that - you're still a much faster writer than I am :p I'm looking forward to the next chapter of this (and of SSS)!!
(Sooo... this ended up being a tiny bit longer than I intended, sorry. I just have a lot of feelings.)
Awesome chapter!
♥
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So Meg, dear, I’ve said it before, but allow me to say it again: I owe you a crap-ton of reviews for the sheer wonderfulness that is your writing. This measly one will simply have to suffice as the beginning, yes?
I probably should have started with reviewing Saving Severus Snape, but I couldn’t resist the story told from his point of view. And wow, barely four paragraphs in and I can’t wipe the silly grin off my face. Swollen lips? Soft, passionate sighs? Salazar’s Knobby Wand! You sure know how to whet the appetite! When does that part come into play with SSS?
*squees and dances around the room*
The way you so deftly weave the scene from DH, remaking one of the parts that I dislike the most into something so promising. Simply incredible! I loved how it was Hermione that Severus was saying those words to - look at me. Even if at that point she hadn’t gone back into the past, he longs for her. Part of me would love to have seen Harry’s reaction to those memories that Severus withheld - just to see him go bug-eyed.
The thought that Severus had instructed Hermione all this time, knowing who she was/will yet be. Oh so good! But at the same time, what a tease!! Not even 700 words? Meg, this was unconscionable, even for a Slytherin! I demand a second chapter!
Oh wait, you already posted the second chapter. :p What can I say? I do love me some Severus/Hermione and you handle them so well I can hardly sit still! Best I just click the button and move onto the next chapter.
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~Alexis
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Hello, my dear!
Here for our swap!
You'd probably need some yelling here! How can you just come, write this way too short but absolutely amazingly perfect prologue and then disappear??? Ahahah, sorry, I like too much to pretend to be angry at you... :P
Anyway, I loved this! It's simply amazing how you managed to take the canon scene and remould it to fit with your story, even if it makes me a tiny bit sad, because I have this irresistible affection for the idea of Snape's endless love for Lily. And right for that reason, I loved how you included his love for her too, how you played with Lily's eyes and Hermione's eyes, that mix of conflicting feelings in Snape's heart as he dies (in a way) under the stares of the two women he loved (does anything that I've said make any sense at all?)
Anyway, I found this so poetic, beautiful and sad. And I can't wait for an update! And may I remind you that I'm still waiting for updates on a thousand other stories of yours???
Lovely work, Meg!
Thank you so much for swapping!!!
An ocean of love,
Chiara
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Meggg!!! I was so excited to see that review you left for me this morning that I had to visit your AP and leave a thank you review :P (Sorry about increasing your unanswered review count... i'll try and keep this short so you don't have to work too hard on the response hehe. But omg it might be hard for me to keep this short just because I'm so excited about this new story!!)
I am really glad to see that you're writing from Snape's POV, because honestly I don't see many stories from Snape's POV - and when I do, they're usually about Lily - so this already starts out quite original and I can't wait to see how you balance out his love for Lily and his feelings for Hermione as well. Not to mention that I'm just really eager to have an insight into Snape's mind because he's such an enigmatic character.
Ooh, also SECOND PERSON, I love it so much. I also love when things start at the end and then go back to the beginning. And things that have sad endings. Basically from what I can tell of this story, it's a recipe for all the things I love and is going to be amazing!
I love your descriptive word choice too! Aaah this line -- When she came into your life like a tornado, and left just as quickly; leaving behind the ruins of your abandoned and damaged heart. -- that's so vivid, and tragic in a beautiful way.
And let's not forget that really interesting spin you put on that scene as Snape dies, when he begs Harry to look at him - I love how you reworked it such that it doesn't contradict canon, but adds more to it. So cool the way you did that.
LOVE IT! I am a little sad that there will be a long time before the next update but I am hardly one to judge people on that - you're still a much faster writer than I am :p I'm looking forward to the next chapter of this (and of SSS)!!
(Sooo... this ended up being a tiny bit longer than I intended, sorry. I just have a lot of feelings.)
Awesome chapter!
♥
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