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Aww, well that was a really sweet ending! It was nice to see where they had all ended up several years down the line, and how things had progressed with everyone. The ending with the proposal was a really cute touch. They all seem really happy which was a nice way to end things, who doesn't love a happy ending?
I know you said you wrote this in 2012, and I'm sure your writing has improved (as everyone's does over time!), but I did really enjoy this. And I think a follow up about Ethan and Lucy would be really interesting.
Shaza
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Aww, their time at Hogwarts has ended which has to be bittersweet. Although I suppose it has to be different when you've got a family and your own place waiting for you. That is very cute though, what James and Harry did with the house, and one less thing for her to worry about.
I'm glad everyone got to go and visit eventually, they must have been dying to meet the baby, especially Rose and Albus, now that they know they are Godparents. I can't believe this is almost the end, the last part felt like a really nice ending so I'm curious to see what happens in the final chapter!
A really nice chapter.
Shaza
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Wow, that was an action packed chapter. I loved seeing other people's thoughts and feelings, especially Garrets. I'm glad he's sort of coming around to the idea, she's having (had now I suppose) the baby so he may as well get used to the idea. I can see why it's not a good idea for all of them to be in the waiting room, that would get crowded, fast so I think that was a good touch. It was a nice idea to let the muggles come as well, that was interesting. I can imagine they would be so shocked by everything that's going on,and then to see St Mungos and what's happening there, that must just top everything.
Aww, that was cute at the end. A really sweet chapter.
Shaza
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Aha, oops, don't speak too soon. I think Bella might have spoken a little too soon, because that definitely sounds like labour to me! I'm glad they got everything sorted out beforehand though, because that would have been a bit awkward for all of them, especially Bella and James.
It made me laugh though, imagining trying to round up all of their family members from all over Hogwarts and then having to use the room of requirement to hold a sort of meeting/gathering because there is just so many of them. I suppose that's quite nice though, because even though it seems like everyone else is out to get them, there's still a lot of people to support her. Which I think she's going to need.
Can't wait to see what happens next.
Shaza
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Aww, I'm sure Ellie meant well but that didn't seem to help Bella very much, especially since she hasn't even spoken to James yet so she must be feeling all sorts of different things. I hope she speaks to James soon, just to get everything sorted out. I think they both still care about each other, but they need to tell each other that.
Wow, again with the teenage girls. Horrid, absolutely horrid. At least this might get James and Bella, not that I wish it had taken a slap to do that but whatever it takes I guess.
Another exciting chapter.
Shaza
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This seems like a major misunderstanding, on everyone's behalf. They need to communicate, and do it better, but I suppose that's teenagers for you. I think that's actually such a realistic reaction from Bella as well, who wouldn't want to hide away from the world after everything that's just happened. I hope they can all sort things out soon enough though.
Oh wow, if Scorp could actually do that, that would be amazing and so helpful as well. Especially if he does get Bella's dad to calm down a little bit because even if he had since Christmas, that newspaper article probably didn't help matters.
Another exciting chapter.
Shaza
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I forgot how mean teenage girls could be, they are the actual worse. I thought Sapphire might talk to Ruby and convince her to not do something so evil, but no. She managed to twist her too so that she thinks they've trapped the Potters/Weasleys and manipulated them. She probably should have checked first.
I feel so bad for Bella, not only does she have the wizarding world now but also the muggle world too and the entirety of Hogwarts as well. I think that would be the hardest though, since she has to live there and see the people at Hogwarts every day, and I can't imagine they'll all be pleased about the news.
Another nice chapter.
Shaza
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That was an interesting game, I'm not sure I could ever play it though. I don't know what's worse, not knowing anything about your other half or realising they don't know anything about you. Especially in front of other people, at school. I guess they had a laugh though, especially Louis!
Aww, that was a rather sweet moment at the end as well though, him realising he loved her at Christmas and her finding out that was when he loved her from. That definitely seems more important than only getting 5/10 lol.
A really sweet chapter.
Shaza
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Oh wow, well I couldn't have been more wrong if I'd tried. I can't believe he punched James, I think muggle fighting is more satisfying than with wands though. I almost feel sorry for James, Ethan was out of line when him and Bella have made peace with their decision. I do feel really sorry for Lucy though, she's definitely not done anything wrong and Ethan is acting like a jackass.
I'm glad you showed that it's starting to affect her education already, and that she's missing parts of class. It was only a matter of time, I wonder when everyone else will find out?
Another interesting chapter.
Shaza
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Aha, I knew the party would be full of hormones. I'm glad nothing too disastrous happened though, and that even more positive things seem to happen between some of them. There are so many names though, I'm trying to keep track of them all but they're right, they have such big families! The image of her dreaming about their happy ending is kind of cute though.
Oh dear, Ethan was going to find out at some point though. I hope his reaction isn't too bad though, although I don't think it will be! Maybe more shocked than anything, I hope!
Another exciting chapter.
Shaza
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Aww, I'm so glad Harry and Ginny were more supportive than her own parents, and Lily and Albus as well, I loved the title of the fic in there as well, a nice touch! I'm glad her mum seems to be coming round to the idea though, even though I think she needs to stick up to her dad for her, especially if she wants her to go home at some point.
I think this party may be fairly interesting, Hormones, pretty girls and a lot of people who may or may not be drinking. That tends to be a recipe for disaster, but I'm excited to see what happens!
Another great chapter.
Shaza
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So it’s been a while, but I’m back!
Oh no, that puts her in quite the predicament. I’m glad she managed to talk with her friends to figure it out though.
That seems like such an awkward conversation to have to have with a muggle, how do you even begin to explain magic? I think you did a fab job showing her reaction and the surprise to everything that she was bombarded with. It must be such a lot to take on.
Charlie really stuck his foot in it haha, too right girls can be active.
Oh my word, I was not expecting that reaction. Poor Bella, her dad was so harsh. She must be so upset, I’m glad she’s gone to a friend's house, especially james’, but I hope his family has a better reaction to the news. I guess he'll have to explain things soon enough cause I imagine Ginny and harry will want to know why Bella is there on christmas eve.
Shaza
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Hahaha I loved it when Scorpius said “You don’t like anyone” to Bella, because it’s so true! She has a negative word to say about everybody, even when they seem like perfectly nice and harmless people. I also feel bad for when she pushed Grace and Ellie onto the dance floor because some people just don’t want to dance, particularly not with strange boys! I hope they figured things out alright.
OH, BELLA AND JAMES. Somehow it did not occur to me that the pregnancy would be a result of a drunken hookup, but that makes sense -- they’re not in the proper state of mind to even think about casting a contraception spell, let alone actually doing the wandwork for it. I wonder if there’s like a Plan B type of spell, for post-sex mornings? :P But I argh I’m so nervous for Bella! She’s going to bear the brunt of the consequences, and I hope that her friends continue supporting her, truly. <3
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Ooof, it’s not Ethan’s fault but I’d imagine it’s very difficult for Bella to really properly enjoy his company, given his resemblance to her prat-faced brother! WAIT SCRATCH THAT, I read on and found that Ethan seems like he has a healthy dosage of prat-ness as well -- I hate that he wouldn’t defend his cousin even after she used the word “violated.” And he has the gall to blame her clothing!! What a dingbat.
“Ethan Hart’s heart” hahaha, these three ladies are really entertaining! I’m curious about how all the ships will play out in this story. :D
I love that you invented a contraception spell for this story! I’m a little nervous because it really seems like Hogwarts doesn’t teach sex ed (something that you seem to be hinting at in your summary). Having a spell automatically seems like it would be easier than physically using a condom or something like that, so I’m curious (and kind of scared) to see how Bella gets pregnant. <3
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Hi! Shaza (ShazaLupin) recommended this story to me, so I’m here to check it out!! Immediately, I feel so much for Bella -- I feel offended on her behalf! Her brother sounds like the absolute worst! He sounds like one of those inconsiderate roommates who’s always bringing people over when you’re just trying to have a nice calm morning to yourself, you know? :P And the worst part is that he brought friends who OBJECTIFY his sister, and he doesn’t even care! That’s so upsetting, I feel so bad for Bella.
I am so glad that she has this wonderful support group of friends though, ready to tell her brother off behind his back if she ever needs it! Though I am somewhat concerned that eventually this group of friends will fall apart; I know this is a teenage pregnancy story, and I feel like teenagers who get pregnant are often ostracized by their friends. :(
Fingers crossed that doesn’t happen! I would love for Rose and Lucy to remain by Bella’s side. <3
This was a really interesting first chapter!! <3
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I’m so excited to see James tell his parent’s, I think Bella is right to be worried about Ginny haha. Aww, that must be difficult for James, feeling like he’s living up to a reputation by letting them down. I hope it’s not too bad. He’s definitely being so sweet, and it makes sense that he’s nervous about what will happen to them. I hope they’ll be okay.
Oooh, that scene from Ellie’s P.O.V was so bittersweet. What a sad backstory, I hope we see more from her as well, although I’m a bit conflicted. Cause it’s either her and Louis or Lucy and Louis. I’m glad she wants to take control of her life though.
That’s probably a good plan/way to tell their family, especially with it being so big. Percy as the prime minister! I love that headcanon and it’s something I can totally see him doing. The meeting on the platform was chaotic and fun which I imagine sums up the Weasley family very well.
That was an interesting meeting, meeting Rachel. She seems nice enough and at least she didn’t defend Charlie for what he did. I’m intrigued about her asking about the pregnancy though, is she just being nice or is their more to it?
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I’m glad Lucy apologised to Ethan, even if things are a little weird. That invisibump sounds so strange but very useful.
I’m excited to see Grace hanging out with them and to learn more about her. She sounds like a really interesting, fun character. The populars name is such a high school thing, and I can see how they would get that title as well to be fair. I also love that description of Bella, and of course, James would love her to now be known as his girlfriend :P
That’s so sweet that they’ve asked Grace to stay with them, although it’s really sad that they even need to do that. I’m glad that Bella also told Grace that she was pregnant, she seems like she can keep a secret and now Bella doesn’t have to hide it in her dorm which is a double bonus.
- Shaza
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Oooh, I forgot Albus was James’ brother, bet that was a fun conversation to be in. It doesn’t seem like they’ve told them they’re pregnant though, so that should be another really fun conversation.
She is super jealous right now, I suppose that’s part hormones but also worry about the baby? I’m glad James’ went to St. Mungos with her though, that was nice of him. I hope the receptionist keeps that information confidential though, or he’s probably going to be regret going.
Oh my word. That was a dramatic fight. I don’t know how anyone kept things clear but now I’m not sure whether Ethan/Lucy is still a possibility. I’d just love to lock them in a room and make them talk. I’m glad she has her friends though.
That was a very cute scene to end on, I’m excited to see what happens next. :)
- Shaza
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Oh dear, poor Bella. This conversation probably would have gone easier if James had more clothes on :P
It’s interesting that she is feeling a little disappointed in his reaction, she definitely still likes him and I suppose their current predicament does make things a little more difficult.
Aww, I’m glad James seems a little more supportive now, at least he’s not being a total ratbag. It’s understandable that he’s a bit nervous and freaked out though. I suppose he also needs some time to process it all.
Oh dear, that scene by the quidditch pitch heartbreaking. It’s so easy to just say be involved, it’s your child, and sure that is the right thing to do, but it’s not that easy. It’s understandable that they both had other plans and ideas, I’m sure no one plans for this. I’m glad they’re at some sort of agreement, I think (?).
I’m excited to see how their parents react now that she’s told James.
- Shaza
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I never thought about how difficult it would be to get a pregnancy test at Hogwarts, but I supposed it stands to reason that unless you’ve got someone you trust on the outside, it’s probably quite difficult.
Family can be complicated I guess, maybe this is why you shouldn’t sleep with your best mates family member. Although I suppose Rose is right, he definitely has a right to know. It’s nice to know that they do have her back and you can tell they care for her regardless.
That scene is a bit intense, although Louis is right, if he’s asking every girl then she deserves better. Lucy’s response is interesting, I suppose she is developing a crush on him which is sweet. I hope it isn’t too late for her!
I hope Charlie does this for her, especially since he was such a moron in the first chapter. And hopefully, he does it discreetly!
Aww, that was the sweetest letter! I’m so glad he’s not actually horrible and can be nice. It’s especially nice that he was glad she wrote, that was really sweet.
Oops, I guess Louis is really perceptive.
This was another great chapter, I’m excited to see how James’ reacts when she tells him.
- Shaza
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Oh dear, this feels like the start of symptoms :P I wonder how long it will take for her (or someone else) to work it out! I’m glad her friends are being nice to her while she’s feeling so rotten, hopefully, they’ll be just as nice when they figure things out.
I suppose their first encounter alone was always going to be awkward, and I suppose her ending up in detention for it isn’t going to make it any better. It seems like she still has a little crush on James though, which is kind of sweet, but I hope he’s nice to hear!
Albus is right, that was a good lie :P
Oh dear, I think she’s figuring it out. I always wondered if that was true about girls who lived together haha. What a way to be pulled out of that realisation, by being asked out by a boy who is not the father! Poor Bella.
Oh my word, what an ending! Can’t wait to see how Lucy and Rose react to this news!
-Shaza
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Oh dear, although they both know it’s a mistake it must still be hurtful to have the other party admit it.
Haha, I knew this conversation was going to be good and you wrote it so well!! I’m glad she told them cause let’s be honest, there was no point in not. They’d have figured it out in 2 seconds once Bella and James were in the same room as each other.
Bella’s really got herself into an unfortunate situation, that party definitely wasn’t a good idea for her, for a lot of reasons! And this is why Albus should have listened to the girls, but I suppose sometimes you have to learn the hard way :P
Aww, I’m glad Bella decided to apologise, that was a lovely scene to read. It was nice to see that side of Ethan. Maybe this means he would be a nice match for Lucy?
That was an even nicer way to make things up with Ben haha. Although I’m glad she stopped when she did or she could have ee in an even sticker situation later down the road! It’s nice that they can be friends though.
Another great chapter that I really enjoyed! :)
-Shaza
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All these things that the next-gen get up to, such as parties, makes me wonder if people got up to them in Harry’s time and he just never noticed! I feel like Scorpius saying “Don’t worry about it” means they really should worry about it.
Aha, poor Albus, it can’t be much fun when no one likes who you want to take as a date. Although I’m glad James and Louis apologised.
It seems so funny to see them with such muggle problems but I suppose why wouldn’t they, they’re still teenage girls after all! They have to get dressed for the party and that in itself causes a million and one problems haha.
Oh dear, I bet Ellie and Grace were not having much fun during that conversation. There’s not much worse than having to deal with someone who’s had a drink when you haven’t.
Oof, that’s not fun! I mean Ethan and James should definitely not have pulled her off him, it seemed like she was having fun :P But she also shouldn’t have said that to him. People do stupid stuff when they’re drunk though, and I feel like with James now around, they’re gonna do more stupid stuff haha.
Oops! That was definitely at least a silly thing to do, if not stupid! Can’t wait to see how they both react to that, and Lucy and Rose if (when!) she tells them! Another great chapter! :)
-Shaza
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I love how you keep including both OC characters and next-gen characters, it’s so interesting seeing how other people view them.
Wow, a bigger womanizer than Sirius Black? That must involve nearly all the women at Hogwarts :P
Haha, what an argument and an announcement to make in the great hall about Bella! I love how fiery they are, I suppose she is a Weasley so it makes sense :P
I like that Rose and Albus are prefects, I can see that fitting their personality, although Louis seems like a terrible head boy.
That seems like such a guy conversation, but poor Lucy! I mean, she shouldn’t have eavesdropped but it’s still not nice to hear people, especially family call you names. I love that Percy is most definitely pompous though.
That last scene was so much fun to read, it makes me wish I had gone to boarding school :P You can tell they really care about each other and the fun jabs and jokes make their friendship even more likeable and relatable.
Another great job! Excited to see how the boys get on with their plan to get girlfriends haha.
-Shaza
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Hey! This seemed like such an interesting story I just had to stop by and read it!
This makes me so glad I’ve not got a brother! Although I can’t blame him for being so amazed at platform 9 ¾, if you’re a muggle it must be so exciting to see part of the magic.
Wow, I feel like we might see Megan again and I hope so because that was very catty haha! Which I suppose is something that would definitely happen at Hogwarts. Ergh, it makes me not miss high school at all though.
Aww, they’re such great friends, and they’re right. It doesn’t matter how many friends you have. It’s more important that they’re great friends who care about you which these three obviously do.
Oh dear, is that a crush developing? Now that bit of high school I do miss :P
Ha! I bet that conversation with Rose telling her dad she was dating a Malfoy went down really well! Poor Ron.
This was a nice chapter and a good introduction to the characters. I’m excited to see what they get up to at Hogwarts, they seem like the group of friends who would get into some kind of trouble, especially Albus and Scorpius!
-Shaza
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