Name: Noelle Zingarella (Signed) · Date: 29 Apr 2019 06:21 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hi! I am here for April 2019 CTF team Gold.

 

I can see why Bella doesn’t like her brother Charlie. This opening scene where Charlie is letting—and even encouraging—his friends to ogle and fondle is younger sister is, honestly, gross bordering on creepy. If I were Charlie’s and Bella’s mother, I would be very angry with Charlie and would read him the riot act. One should feel safe and free from that kind of behavior in one’s own home.

 

You did a nice job showing us Bella’s irritation and discomfort with this situation. However, it’s clear that she is a young lady who can stand up for herself. She gives the snark right back to her brother and his friends. 

 

I find it interested that Charlie thinks that platform 9 and 3/4 is so cool. Does he wish he were part of this magical world? Or is it just the opportunity to flirt with young witches?

 

Bella seems to have a fair share of enemies at Hogwarts—but she also has a great group of friends too. Why is there such a polarizing response to Bella? Does she come off as abrasive if you don’t know her well? Is she very idealistic? All of the above?

 

I am curious to know what subjects Bella likes, what she is good at, if she belongs to any of the clubs at Hogwarts. Also, why have Bella and Scorpius become honorary Weasleys? Lots of questions.

 

Yours,

Noelle

Author's Response:

Hi! Yes, Charlie is definitely VERY immature - not having any brothers myself and having written this years ago, I think I may have overdone it BUT... Charlie does become very helpful and an actual brother later to the end that I wanted to incorporate.

I actually wish I explored more into whether Charlie liked magic, but to answer your question, I've always imagined him as being fascinated with the magical world, but never so much so that he wanted to be a part of it. I had always thought there is an element of it that is a bit scary to him, which is why he always thought his sister could handle herself very well if she was a part of it (hence, why he's a bit immature rather than overprotective). 

I imagined Bella as being one of those people that comes across as SO nice to other people that there's no way she could be rude. It's actually based off of someone I met IRL. She was so nice that I always wondered whether she was secretly rude or if she was genuinely that nice, but I noticed that a lot of other girls were suspicious of her kindness, so the inspiration blossomed!

I LOVE your questions! I will say I 100% didn't think that much about any of these details when I first wrote it but it's great to consider them as I'm writing nowadays! In my mind, the Weasleys are a family that accepts any and every friend that comes their way. Even when Molly Weasley thought Hermione was "dating" Harry because of Rita Skeeter in the Goblet of Fire, Molly Weasley still sent her an Easter egg. I've always thought of them as the family that accepts anyone into their family as an honorary member because that's the way they're raised (and because they're good people)!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!!! XOXO

Name: LadyMarauder (Signed) · Date: 29 Apr 2019 05:09 PM · For: Chapter 1

I've been meaning to stop by your AP for ages now, and this story jumped out at me. It's been ages since I've read a teenage pregnancy story and I thought it was time I resolved that one! This chapter was a good introduction to some of the main players in the story, so that was great. I feel sorry for Bella having such an annoying brother - my two best friends have embarrassing older brothers that used to be a constant pain when we were younger so I totally feel for her!

 

I did note the "try and not get a poor girl pregnant" line, which is definitely foreshadowing for Bella maybe? I see this one is marked as James/OC so I wonder when we get to meet James as I notice Albus is in the same year as her. This is all very interesting!

 

I love that Rose and Scorpius are together in this and I thought it was hilarious that Ron "was moments away from having a cardiac arrest when he found out that his precious Rosie was dating a Malfoy, even if it was a Malfoy who is his own nephew's best friend" - because this would totally happen with Ron.
I can't wait to find out how this all unfolds!

 

Tasha xx

For Gryffindor's CTF - Team Gold    

Author's Response:

Hi Tasha! I'm so glad you are here!! Wow, your review really took me a trip down memory lane because it's been a solid 5-6 years since I finished this! My best friends had brothers, but I never did so I really wanted Bella to have a brother because honestly, it just seems so much more fun than sisters!

I think I wrote this as everything I wanted to see, so it definitely remains very fluffy, but I wanted to try my hand at foreshadowing and irony, so I'm so glad you picked up on that! James will be the main character, but Albus will play a big role. I don't know why but I can never see Albus as the one doing something irresponsible, but I wanted to include him and Rose as main characters as well!

Rose and Scorpius is by far my favorite couple - there is just so much you can take their relationship and they're definitely my favorite Next-Gen couple!

Thanks again for reading!! XOXO

Name: Me (Anonymous) · Date: 27 Sep 2018 05:53 PM · For: Chapter 22

I really enjoied reading this story, and I'm so glad Bella and James got their happy ending after everything they went through. 

Also, I woukd absolutely love to read a sequel centred on Lucy and Ethan. 

 

Cheers X

Author's Response:

I definitely would love to explore Ethan and Lucy even more because it just seems like so many things have been left unsaid. I do have 3 other stories I am working on that have taken over my creative juices, but as soon as I can think of a good plot for Lucy and Ethan that would make sense, I'll keep writing. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Name: victoria_anne (Signed) · Date: 21 Sep 2018 07:19 AM · For: Chapter 1

Hey there!

 

Bella is a character I instantly empathise with. She seems like a sweet, quiet, insecure girl, and I find her easy to relate to. But she really does seem to be in a rather uncomfortable period of her life, but already I'm rooting for her to dig her way out. I think she needs more confidence in herself - and a new brother! Seriously, what a loser! I'm curious to see how the story develops :)

Author's Response:

Bella's personality is what I envision my actual personality to be. She is the introvert version of myself, and I took a lot of my high school timidness and lack of self confidence as a starting point for Bella. Writing her story was actually very therapeutic for me because it gave me a very clear sense of where I personally wanted to be at, and I will always love Bella for that. Thank you for reading and reviewing!