Name: Dojh167 (Signed) · Date: 03 Nov 2016 03:44 PM · For: Wound Tight

Review transferred from HPFF 4/26/16:

 

Hello!

I know I said I wouldd keep away from non-Puff stories while I try to catch up on reading for Keckers, but I couldn't help it in this case.

To me, it is very clear that the MC is Ginny, and she is talking about her connection with Tom. Of course, the listed characters did clue me in. Was that why you included both Harry and Voldemort, to make the reader question which one it was? The way that I interpreted this story, I didn't really see him here.

I think that you definitely could just put "othercanon" if you wanted to make the reader guess at it more, and I think most people could figure it out. At the same time, knowing who the characters were is part of what drew me to this story (As I may, er, be writing my entry on the same broken connection...)

I really liked how you talked about their souls separating. It was both literal and metaphorical, and I think that worked really well.

The hours under scalding water was very evocative as well. I could really picture it, both physically and emotionally.

I do often get frustrated by stories where the characters are not clearly identified, but I think the emotions and language you used made it very clear and effective in this case. In fact, not naming the characters also added to Ginny's sense of isolation and not completely knowing who she is, which is very appropriate.

Good luck in the challenge. I'm glad I stopped by!

Sam.

Author's Response:

Hey Sam! 

Thank you again for this lovely review! I appreciate your attention to detail and all of the little things you noticed about this story. Ginny and her connection with Voldemort certainly is an interesting connection to explore, so as soon as I saw the prompt I knew what I wanted to write.

Thanks again. *hugs*

~Kaitlin