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Hi for the last time on this story (for now)!
The opening of this chapter was very nice because not only are we seeing more of Paris, Albus is finally feeling free from the weight of his name when those girls giggle at him. Also, I definitely forgot he's like, super jacked, so that was a nice reminder, lol! The boys needing a second breakfast is endearing and so lovely, and then they see Hermione. Oh boy! But really the conversation they end up having is quite productive and Hermione has also definitely grown as a character and a parent compared to Ignite. She's finally recognized her daughter's and nephew's and their friends' abilities as capable young adult wizards, and also their slightly more innate knowledge of Prometheus Thane. The caution Hermione gives Rose too in private about Lilian Rourke and her potential, ahem, interference through Selena (possibly) is very interesting indeed. I'm also happy that Hermione is okay with Rose and Scorpius being together, and especially being together now that they're hunting Thane. I think she's wistfully thinking of the extended Deathly Hallows camping trip she went on with Harry and Ron, but in respect that her daughter is in a confirmed relationship instead. I'm so happy that Rose and Scorpius are going to dinner, but I can only imagine that it'll likely end in disaster if these two chapters of relative calm are anything to go by. Bye for now!
~MadiMalfoy x
(Magical Menagerie 2: Team Griffin)
Guess who's back, back again!?
Ah, good ol' Paris. Love it!! And I love how you've created a little island just for the magic people to live in!! The gang is staying in a nice hotel now too thanks to Scorpius realizing they're gonna need privacy over cheapness and at least they all agree to that. To be honest, I think my favorite part of the chapter is just the WHOLE inneudo bit when Rose is telling Scorpius to go into the bedroom so she can actually examine his leg wound! XD That was just too funny and I'm happy you decided to write that in there -- first of all, they are still teenagers, second of all, they needed a bit of levity before they really dive into the deep end here. Also, just casually, Rose doing wordless healing magic is no biggie at all, right? The fighting practice between Matt and Albus with the girls as audience is neat too -- it's preparing for actual fights sure, but also sets up a stronger relationship between the two guys I think also because they can recognize each others' skills. Lastly, the conversation between Selena and Scorpius about Methuselah is just written astonishingly well. They definitely respect each other more now and basically I'm just happy that everyone seems to be getting along better ahead of what I'm sure is going to be a brutal brutal time.
~MadiMalfoy x
(Magical Menagerie 2: Team Griffin)
I'm back!! :D
Cath, this chapter is just so lovely. I mean, it's a huge one that's basically mostly exposition and set-up for what I'm sure is going to be RiDICULOUSLY challenging for our little gang, but still. SO WELL DONE. Albus casually leading the meeting and then the bombshell dropped by Scorpius -- I was wondering if/when he was going to tell the group about that fateful moment in the Forbidden Forest with Thane and the Resurrection Stone! Thane is definitely still such a slippery guy and I'm happy that with this new information courtesy of Scorpius, the rest of them really have a better idea of just how dangerous he is and his unpredictability. Everyone has their reasons for wanting to do this, but I am so glad they've all agreed to let Harry & Hermione know what their plan is -- they're not NEARLY as reckless as their parents were back in their day with Voldemort, so thank you for having them decide to do this. And that good good cousin chat with Albus and Rose -- what's that I hear? Is that good character development? Oh yes it is!! If you can't tell, I just absolutely love how you've portrayed Albus here and especially revealed even more of his character just by having Rose exclaim that he's not stepping out of Harry's shadow. He definitely needed to hear it. Also, their little discussion about Scorpius and Rose -- perfectly natural and awkward. Love it!! Great job as always :)
~MadiMalfoy x
(Magical Menagerie 2: Team Griffin)
OKIE DOKIE LET'S DO THIS.
I......was not prepared. Creepy magical chamber with suits of armor, ancestry tracing requirements, fighting Golems and talking to a ghost of one of Grindelwald's most loyal followers. That's a heck of a chapter I tell ya! First of all, I really liked your writing in this chapter. Like, I love it already, but since this chapter was just so full of action and fighting, it really showcased your fantastic skill with words in scenes that are very fast-paced. The descriptions were clean, short, and illustrative enough to make me feel like I could truly visualize the whole room as the fighting was happening, even with the main focus on Scorpius for a good chunk of it after he's hit -- I could still see Albus and Rose and Selena and Matt fighting their own Golems in the background, and I just am so ecstatic that your writing made me be able to visualize all of that!!! I can clearly tell how much effort and time you put into researching for this chapter with its layers of other cultural elements and also the whole Grindelwald backstory thing. And then once they've had their admittedly unsettling chat with the former Grindelwald follower ghost dude, and they are back in the tent.
I just, all of the emotions that are shown in that scene, especially between Selena and Scorpius. The rawness of her grief, still, months after he'd sacrificed himself to save Hogwarts, really just shows the true depth of her love for him, and I think that rawness scared all of them because she had been so good at hiding it from them, from everyone, for the past few months. Scorpius knew he messed up as soon as she raised her voice and man was I pleased to see Rose end up going after her because we need some female solidarity around here.
This review went on so long, I'm so sorry. I'm just absolutely in love with your writing and this story!! <3
~MadiMalfoy x
(Magical Menagerie 2: Team Griffin)
Hello again!! :)
ROSE AND SCORPIUS ALONE TIME!! Ugh I'm so glad that you're having them talk things out, even if it is done in their typical yelling and miswording manner. The tension is worked through just insanely well, and then resolved ever so well. I really liked the sneaky way you put in Scorpius describing exactly how Rose actually felt about Matt, and then conversely her realization of Scorpius's insecurity. And then they resolve it by doing lots of kissy kissy which I am ALWAYS down for!!! BUT THEN. ALBUS HELLOOOO! I was wondering how you were going to make him pop in. His blatant ignoring of them making out on the table is perfectly in character considering the news he just found out. Alrighty then we jump straight into the action now with Matt and Selena deciding to take the long hike to look at the ruins of Badenheim Castle. AND THEN THERE'S A TROLL. A very angry troll. Very nicely done with that whole sequence -- I could picture it crystal clear in my mind and the heroics were super cool!! But then they discover what's truly behind the walls of the ruins and ooooh boy are they getting into some doo-doo now! Ugh, Cath, your writing is just so good and seems to flow so effortlessly, and this cliffhanger is just ridiculous so you'll be seeing me again in a few moments because I can't take it!!!
~MadiMalfoy x
(Magical Menagerie 2: Team Griffin)
Cath!
I love the exploration of the quaint little village of Badenheim!! You really took the time to really set up the village and the woods here -- the scenery descriptions are just absolutely gorgeous writing. I'm also happy you gave Albus and Scorpius some bro time to just hang out by themselves. But of course the tension between Rose, Matt, and Scorpius surfaces almost immediately after he returns from his hike in the woods. Scorpius leaving in a huff with Albus then proceeding to have to explain how relationships work is just hilarious and also very well done -- it's like Albus is the relationship whisperer, lol!! There's just so much going on emotionally between everybody right now but you really wrangle everything so well and I can't wait to see how things develop for them all, especially if Matt and Scorpius quit being stupid and Selena reveals her intentions with Matt more plainly. Albus is the most levelheaded of them all for sure, and also deals with this all SO WELL. Bless him for being such a great, caring friend and cousin. I'm happy he got to take a little bit of time for himself, even if it really was just so Rose & Scorpius could have some ~alone time~ for a few hours while Matt & Selena went off on a hike. The bakery owner is a wizard, whoa!!! WAIT NO NOW I KNOW WHY SELENA WANTED TO COME HERE. YOU SET THIS UP SO WELL HOLY CRAP. I SHALL CONTINUE NOW BECAUSE I NEED TO KNOW HOW EVERYONE REACTS WHEN ALBUS BREAKS THE NEWS. PREPARE FOR MORE SHOUTING FROM ME!
~MadiMalfoy x(Magical Menagerie 2: Team Griffin)
Hiya, I'm back for more! :)
Selena is totally up to something and she just hid it from Scorpius and her mother -- she's DEFINITELY not over Methuselah yet (and neither am I, tbh) and she's wanting to go after Thane herself since the task force isn't doing it. THE LINE "They think we're as damaged as they are" is just PERFECT. I like how easy and comfortable together Albus, Rose, and Scorpius are now -- it really does harken back to the Golden Trio during their days at Hogwarts, and that's a great connection to make. DRACO MALFOY, YOU TERRIBLE, TERRIBLE MAN. That's some deep stuff he was getting into with Scorpius there, but then Ms. BA Hermione Granger comes in and just DESTROYS him. I love when Hermione is strong like that!! You did a fantastic job describing Scorpius's feelings and also how that affects his body language -- it makes the reaction not fall flat, so excellent job there. And then they're off to the Ministry, woohoo!! And then, Selena sidles on in with her own agenda, hmmm....I'm definitely not taking her at face value. But anywho, onto the next chapter!
~MadiMalfoy x
(Magical Menagerie 2: Team Griffin)
Hello again Cath! :)
So now we get to see Selena for the first time since the end of Ignite! And we also see how Scorpius interacts with her as well in public considering the knowledge he has about her true feelings towards Methuselah and this front she has on is probably going to crack sometime, and I just can't WAIT for that to happen!! I also enjoyed the mild awkwardness of the scene at Matt Doyle's house with Rose -- his father's confusion is just perfect and the description of the house and Matt's room just lifted his character so much and added personality to him that we didn't really get to see much of in Ignite (for obvious reasons). AND THEN. THE SIT DOWN. BY THE GOLDEN TRIO. CATH!!! Honestly though, phenomenal writing here because not only do you weave in memories of what Harry, Ron, and Hermione did during the War to defeat Voldemort, you're also emphasizing that even though the same type of thing is brewing during their children's teenager years, the kids literally just want to go on holiday while the "adults handle it" like they're supposed to be doing. The comedic timing is great here too and the tension is diffused nicely, which can be quite tough to do with a situation like this, so great job! That last line from Albus though definitely doesn't persuade me of this being a normal holiday for them, no matter how much they want it to be. (Also, because this is only the third chapter of a novel, it's definitely not :P ).
I'll be back for more soon and I hope you continue updating this! :)
~MadiMalfoy x
(Magical Menagerie 2: Team Griffin)
Hello again Cath!
So we're reunited with our dear protagonists from Ignite in this chapter, yay!! I'm happy to see Scorpius is adjusting well to staying with the Potter family, and also that they're treating him like a son but also a son who is of age and can come and go as he pleases. I think that he definitely appreciates that from them more than they know. Scorpius still having nightmares about Methuselah :(((( But then he simply slips out and disapparates to go and see Rose at her house, and she immediately knows what's bothering him. And then she ever-so-cleverly distracts him and also tells him his worth, and honestly I just want to gush about the strength and solidity of their relationship forever, but I won't do that to you, lol. The teasing promise of what they could do when they're alone is just perfect and I just absolutely love how you've written their snogging session -- not too over-the-top but still showing the emotion behind the actual snogging too! And then Scorpius being caught out returning by Harry drinking his morning tea in the kitchen is just GOLDEN. He handles the situation well though, and I honestly really like how you've characterized Harry as a parent so far too. I'm looking forward to seeing how the conversation with Selena goes as she was so broken after Methuselah sacrificed himself at the end of Ignite and also if Matt will end up coming along on their trip too. Great job! :)
~MadiMalfoy x
(Magical Menagerie 2: Team Griffin)
So I absolutely LOVED Ignite, and I was so excited to see you had started posting the sequel here on the archives because I can only imagine what's going to happen with the raggedy band of these next-gen characters as they go through an even darker time post-Phlegethon at Hogwarts, as noted by the story summary.
This prologue has me intrigued RIGHT AWAY and also illustrates just how dark this sequel is going to be relative to the darkness we got in Ignite. The introduction of this new OC Eva Saida on the side with Thane is very curious indeed and I hope you'll be revealing more of her role and her character as the story progresses. Her innate knowledge of Thane's "obfuscation" giveaways is very interesting indeed -- how could she have known he was lying about losing the Resurrection Stone at Hogwarts? Either way, I'm very very intrigued about this mysterious Chalice, and also who this German Professor character is. Your writing, as always, is full of wonderfully detailed and imaginative description!
I'll be back for more later for sure!
~MadiMalfoy x
(Magical Menagerie 1: Team Wyvern)
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