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Every time I reread this story, it finds new ways to kill me.
You have done an amazing job with this one. The fact that you were able to get me so invested in three characters who I almost never read about...wow. And they're each just so beautiful and real.
This story is such a testament to life. Even in the very first scene, with the line, "There are no rules! Live your life how you want to. Wish on one-twentieth of a dandelion, I dare you.", you show that this story is about what it means to be alive, what it means to live. And you don't shy away from the fact that the answers to those questions aren't always easy.
As Padma handles the fact that she's lost Lisa before she ever really had her, my heart breaks just a bit. And the "almost enough" of having Lisa's friendship; the "almost enough" of the connection with Sally-Anne; the "almost-enough" of moving forward and moving on...wow.
This story is just really beautiful. I love the way you're able to show the bittersweet way that Padma approaches life in the wake of so much death. It's just really a stunning portrayal of trauma and truth.
Wonderful job, my friend.
Best,
Emily
*for the Fairyland review event*
Author's Response:Eeeeeek I'm sorry I'm only just now seeing this incredible review <3 Thank you SO much, Emily! I really appreciate everything you said here and the depth of your analysis of the themes, and I'm so glad you were able to get so invested in the story and characters (especially since they're such minor characters in canon). I think this is definitely one of my most emotionally complex pieces and I'm quite proud of it. Thank you so so much <3 <3 <3 <3 <3
Hey Stella, here with your review from my thread a few weeks ago! :)
Some general thoughts I have about this piece is that it is such a unique take on how some of the students who died the Battle of Hogwarts maybe didn't pass on. And it's a rare pair in Padma/Lisa so double bonus! I think the tone you've written this in is very carefully crafted -- as Padma realizes she can't linger with Lisa at Hogwarts forever, the tone shifts more positive as she comes into her own with managing her grief and plans for the future. The progression through Padma's (repeated) seventh year flows well and we see enough of her changing feelings as she befriends and more with Sally-Anne and then moves on from that as well. You've written Padma so beautifully here too -- near the end when she finally realizes what she wants to do after graduating from Hogwarts. The ending to me doesn't seem abrupt at all. It really fits here because it allows it to be a clean cut from Hogwarts and from Lisa for Padma.
Again, I just love the rare pair here and the whole love triangle-diamond thing throughout! Great writing of this story! :)
~MadiMalfoy x
Author's Response:Hi Madi! Thank you so much for reviewing!
Thank you, it's lovely to hear that this is unique - and that you appreciated the rare pair :) and i appreciate your comments about the tone of the story as Padma changes throughout the year. I'm really glad the ending works and didn't seem abrupt, that's great to hear! Thank you!
Re: "love triangle-diamond thing" Haha, I love that description actually. This was written for a Love Triangle challenge and while there is a triangle at the heart of it, they all branch off in their own separate ways by the end so it does up like a hexagon or some shape that is not really a triangle. A diamond thing, perhaps. XD
Thanks so much for your review! <3
KRISTIN OH MY GOD I WAS NOT PREPARED FOR THIS (alright, I've written this after just reading the first section, I'll come back once I finish reading the story for the rest of this review, which will hopefully involve slightly less screaming)
I spent the entirety of the first section just in awe of your writing - your use of description, how eloquently you portray emotions, the way you wrote about Padma and Lisa's connection. Which means I was absolutely, completely, one hundred percent unprepared to discover that Lisa was a ghost and that she'd died in the Battle of Hogwarts right after they kissed for the first time. (Do you ever have a moment when you're reading that your jaw literally drops? Because that's what just happened. You have stunned me and broken me all in one go.)
And then I went back and reread that first section, and was once again in awe of everything because you managed to subtly weave hints throughout that first section about that twist without saying it outright, which is totally incredible even if it did shatter my heart into a million tiny little pieces. Like, at first read, I thought some of the comments about the Battle ruining everything and the kiss being both their first and last were just Padma being a little bit dramatic, but when put in the context of the twist, it's just so heartwrenching.
But I like that that plot twist isn't the end of things - it's only the beginning. From there the story goes on and turns into this beautiful exploration of the different facets of a relationship. Because you've got Lisa and Padma's relationship that has the emotional connection, but that's not enough - it's missing any physical touch, which is also such an important part of a relationship. And then there's Padma's relationship with Sally-Anne, which is totally different because it is more physical than emotional - it satisfies both girls' desires to have someone there to hold them when they need to be held, and it's a beautiful foil to Padma and Lisa. But that relationship isn't great for either of them - as you say, it's entirely built on grief, which is a terrible foundation for a relationship.
And I love how you ended this. Despite the heartbreak at the start, this ending has a more hopeful note - Sally-Anne is happy in a new relationship, Lisa seems to be happy with the Grey Lady and her ghosthood, and Padma's moving on and going on that trip to Spain with her sister and finally escaping the overbearing weight of it all.
And the note about Padma feeling beautiful at the end was just such a brilliant way to tie it back to the beginning of the story with Lisa saying the same thing. Ahhhhh ok this whole thing was a rollercoaster of emotion and I cannot believe you captured so much character growth in 3.5k words but you did and it's a masterpiece. I loved it. <3
-Taylor
Author's Response:I know it sounds evil of me to say so, but I'm like... really happy about all the screaming/reactions in this review? :P Honestly it means so much to hear that my writing affected you that much. So, thank you! Omg, also reading that you're in awe of my descriptions and portrayal of emotions has me flailing and blushing, so thank you for such an immense compliment aasdkjfaklsj ♥♥
Eee and I'm actually super glad to hear that you reread that first section after the reveal of the twist, as well, and that you caught all the hints :D Gah, your reaction is like everything I ever wanted from a reader on this story.
Thank you, I'm so glad you liked the exploration of her relationships, and how despite being such an angsty story as a whole, it still ends on a hopeful note.
I really like endings that come full circle in a way, so I'm glad you appreciated that bit at the end, thanks! ahh and I really appreciate everything you said about the writing quality and charater growth, thank you so much! This was such a wonderful review and I'm so thrilled you enjoyed the story. ♥♥♥
HELLO MONSTER I WANT TO TALK ABOUT SO MANY THINGS BUT LET ME START BY SAYING THAT I LOVED THIS EVEN THOUGH YOU KINDA SORTA BROKE MY HEART!
Like, ok seriously THAT BEGINNING SCENE! It's so freaking cute and I was SO FREAKING HAPPY FOR THEM UNTIL I LEARNED THAT LISA FREAKING DIED! That flower scene is so adorable. I love the cutness of Padma and Lisa teasing and joking about the dandelion and making a wish. what did you wish for? you.
IF SHE HADNT DIED IN THE BATTLE OF HOGWARTS
tRULY, this was the BIGGEST plot twist and I NEVER saw it coming! which defintiely dug hte knife in deeper for the heartbreak (but also, really served to make this SUCH a great story, like wow the shock factor was incredible!) It was such a neat concept to have Lisa remain a a ghost! It was honestly so fascinating to see Lisa and Padma's relationship this way. Like, it really would have been hard enough to for her try adn get over Lisa post battle but for Lisa to still be there, even in her ghostly state, it really makes it difficult (as Padma comes to realize).
It's nice that Padma has her relationship with Sally Anne to help her realize this and the realness of this one contrasts with her relationship with Lisa nicely. But the point of it being born out of grief is a great one and very important for both of them, so I'm happy that Sally Anne is happy at the end with Susan.
I think the ending is perfect (which is what you asked me to comment about haha)! It wraps everything up nicely that Padma and Parvati are off in Spain and Padma is getting closure away from everything!
I apologize for the hot mess that this review is but I loved this so much <3 It was an absolutely beautiful peice about love and grief and friendship and moving on and EVEN THOUGH YOU BROKE MY HEART AT HTE BEGINNING I LOVED EVERY BIT OF THIS 20/10 WOULD RECOMMEND <3
-Sarah
Author's Response:Omg Sarah where do I even start with this? This was such a great review. Honestly, I love revies like this :P
eeee, thank you, I'm really glad you liked that beginning scene (...at first, anyway). It was so bittersweet to write such cute flirting, especially becuase at the very beginning it's not obvious what's happened. ah, but I'm so glad you thought the plot twist was compelling! (again, sorry for the heartbreak, but. you know.) I was really proud of that twist and so I'm glad whenever anyone appreciates/is surprised by it.
yeah, regarding Lisa still being there and preventing Padma from moving on - as you said, it would have been difficult anyway; in the beginning I think Padma found it easier having Lisa around as she could still talk to her and so she didn't have to deal with that stage of grief when you come up with all these things you wish you could have told the person first... so it's easier at first, but doesn't work in the long run, much like her relationship with Sally-Anne. PRobably the only thing those two relationships have in common as they're quite opposite otherwise.
Considering how angsty and sad the first half is, I had to at least let them have a somewhat happier ending, even if both of the relationships in the central love triangle are doomed! I'm really glad you liked the ending and thought it wrapped everything up nicely - that's great to hear.
Thank you SO much for this review, I really appreciated it and I'm so glad you liked the story. <3 <3 <3
Hey there!
I'm here to drop off a review for our review swap! You already know I love your writing, so I'm looking forward to this.
Wow. I don't know what I expected, but it wasn't this. This was so soul crushing and heart breaking. Like a serious gut punch. Excuse me while I go get myself together enough to write a coherent review.
Ok, so in case it's not sad enough for Padma to be in love with Lisa, finally kiss her just before the battle for the first time, and then to lose her in the war, but now you've brought her back as a ghost? Do you just want to absolutely kill everyone's emotions? How torturous to have to see the ghostly figure of the person you were in love with every day. I mean dealing with regrets is tough enough without having them rubbed in your face daily.
I thought the details that you included like Lisa being able to smell food if she leaned into it made it all the sadder. It really shows how she's just a shadow of her former self. I could see why it was so hard for Padma to be around her.
I think Sally-Anne was just what Padma needed in that moment. You can see them really bond over shared misery and obviously the way they understand each other helps them both heal. But it is filled with sadness and not a good long term relationship. It's just good for the moment and you can see it running it's course.
I'm glad that Padma decides to go to Spain with Parvati. The time spent with her sister under the warm Medditeranean sun will do her wonders. That's exactly what I do when I need to recover from heartbreak...travel. I'm sure the cute lady on the beach will probably help her out too.
Ugh. I need to go get some hot cocoa and a fuzzy blanket now. Good work!
~Kaitlin
Author's Response:eep *blushes* Thank you! Ah, and, I'm sorry about the soul crushing and heart breaking. I guess I should have warned you...
as for the next paragraph - I am sorry for stomping all over emotions in writing this heartbreaking situation, but at the same time it's incredibly flattering to hear that my writing can make you feel so many things about it. So like, I feel a little badly about it, but also isn't this what writers dream of? :P
Thank you, I'm glad you liked the inclusion of those details and that it added so much to the depiction of Lisa.
Yeah, Padma's relationship with Sally-Anne I think was really important for both of them, even if they knew all along it could never last.
Yay for Spain. Padma deserves something nice after everything she's gone through, especially being so far removed from everything that went on but also not alone, as her sister is there too.
*sends you a virtual hot cocoa and fuzzy blanket* *and also while I'm doing virtual gifts here's a virtual Mediterranean Sea to sit near and recover from your stomped-on heart*
♥ Thanks so much for the swap!
Hi Kristin! It's been so long since I read anything of yours, and I was so intrigued by this! I don't tend to read a lot of love triangles but there were so many good stories that came from this challenge, so I couldn't wait to see what you did with it.
This was a really beautiful story. That doesn't surprise me, because everything that I've read of yours is beautiful, but there was so much about this story which really struck me. There were shades of light and darkness rippling through it, and it was such an original piece - even as the reader knew this was written for the love triangle challenge originally, you still managed to include some really clever twists that I didn't see coming at all.
The opening scene was so light and sweet. The dandelion that Lisa and Padma were blowing on to make a wish felt like a physical representation of the tone and spirit of the scene. Padma seemed so happy and relaxed with Lisa at that moment, and there was a lot of chemistry there as they played off each other, with the compliments and teasing. It was really sweet to read and I couldn't imagine Padma wanting anything else.
Digging deeper into that scene, I did wonder what Padma meant by the "thing" that was happening between them, but at first I just assumed that they were kind of getting together and there just wasn't a definition to the relationship at this point.
The way that you used the thoughts of the Battle of Hogwarts to frame the scene and let the reader know when the story was starting was really effective. And of course, you also used that to drop the bombshell that what was happening between Padma and Lisa was a "thing" and not a relationship because Lisa had died in the Battle and she was a ghost. That really left me reeling.
That was so original - I actually don't think that I've ever seen a story when any of the people who fought and died at the Battle of Hogwarts became ghosts, but it makes perfect sense that there would be people who weren't ready to move on yet and lingered behind. It brings in so many different dimensions to the relationship that you explored in this story, and it was fascinating.
Once I knew that Lisa was a ghost, I have to admit that I viewed their scenes differently. They were still so sweet and there was obviously a wonderful closeness and understanding between them, but it was bittersweet, because anything they might have had in the future had been stripped from them just as they were beginning, and anything they could have now was only a pale imitation of what they deserved.
I loved listening to Lisa's reasons for remaining behind - they seemed like very Ravenclaw reasons, and it was so interesting to see her curiosity for why ghosts existed, and her thirst to learn more. At least as a ghost she'll have as much time as she wants to acquire that knowledge.
Herbology class being one of the places that Lisa couldn't go and participate seemed symbolic; it worked very well as the space for Sally-Anne to step into Padma's life and provide the human warmth and contact that Padma really needed, the important aspects to a relationship that she couldn't have with Lisa.
Even though there were traces of guilt to the moments that Padma stole away to spend with Sally-Anne, it was so understandable for her to experience that bond in a way she couldn't with Lisa. I don't think it means that her feelings for Lisa were any less real, but it definitely felt like the start of her realisation that eventually her and Lisa were going to have to go their separate ways. There's only so long that you can hold onto a relationship over what might have been, rather than what could be.
Something that was so refreshing in this story was the complete lack of drama over it. So often, stories featuring love triangles are dramatic with lots of angst and arguments, and this just wasn't. There was almost a calm acceptance - from Lisa, when Padma said they couldn't keep things up, and from Padma, when Sally-Anne told her she was seeing Susan now. It was really refreshing to see that and to read a story where it didn't feel like the reader should be taking sides.
And at the end of it, I really feel like Padma chose herself - and it wasn't just because both Lisa and Sally-Anne had moved on with different people. She was right when she wondered if Lisa still being there, albeit as a ghost, had probably hindered her grieving process. The ending, when she and Parvati went to Spain just as she'd always dreamed of doing, felt so fitting. It read as the start of Padma's acceptance of herself and what had happened, and a willingness to start processing what had happened, and maybe even healing. And hopefully finding love again one day.
I really loved this story, and it was so creative and original. I'd love to read more of these characters if you ever write them!
Sian :)
For House Cup 2018-2019 Opener
Author's Response:Sian!!! First of all, thank you so much for this incredible and insightful review. And, I'm so sorry it's taken me forever to respond to it - I haven't had internet for months and you deserved better than a response typed on my phone.
You know, I don't even enjoy love triangles that much either, which is partly why I decided to write this? Like I just wanted to write something that was so different from any love triangle I'd ever seen, and this is where I ended up!
Eep, thank you for saying this was a beautiful story. That means a lot, especially coming from a writer as talented as yourself! And I'm glad that the twists surprised you.
I'm glad you loved that idyllic opening scene with the dandelions and the flirting. I honestly loved writing that part, because as you said yourself, what you get from it at first read is so different to how you see it after the revelation that Lisa is a ghost, which changes the whole image and the tone in retrospect. It's also wonderful to hear that you liked the idea of her being a ghost and what it means for her classmates and everything, thank you!
Yeah, Lisa is SUCH a Ravenclaw, haha. And it was really interesting writing someone who's newly a ghost, as compared to all the other ghosts at Hogwarts, who as far as we know, have been ghosts for at least fifty or up to a thousand years, and so I think it makes her approach her existence differently to how all the known Hogwarts ghosts do? And that on top of how much she already loves learning, it interesting writing a ghost who hasn't lost her zest for life even though she's no longer alive.
It's great to hear that you thought Padma's bond with Sally-Anne was understandable, and especially that you didn't see it as making her feelings for Lisa any less real. Both Lisa and Sally-Anne gave Padma such different things and brought out different sides of her that she couldn't necessarily have with the other.
I'm glad you found the lack of drama refreshing. I think it could easily have been too much, just given how many layers there already are to the relationships here. Things are hard enough for them without drama, haha.
"And at the end of it, I really feel like Padma chose herself" -- YES. This is EXACTLY what I was going for, and I'm so glad that came through. You know, it's funny, because love triangles always focus on two possible choices, but we all know a triangle has three sides, three corners, and no one really focuses on that third part of the triangle. I'm so glad the ending came across that way and that it hints at her acceptance and her beginning to heal.
Thank you so much, I'm so glad you loved the story and that you thought it was creative and original - that's so wonderful to hear. And hahaha, the last thing I need is another WIP but I won't say never :P
Thanks so much for this review, I really appreciate how much thought and time you put into it, this was so wonderful. ♥♥♥♥
Howdy Kristin! I have arrived, two (2) days late, to complete our swap! I was digging around to find something current with less reviews and almost went another direction, but realized that was many years old so here I am.
This story was so powerful and you kept throwing me throughout the whole thing TBH (because I never read one-shot summaries). First, you open with these great descriptions and this just...EASY relationship between Lisa and Padma that has you rooting for this rare pair (even if I admittedly have particular affinity for rare pairs). And then comes the bomb. Lisa is DEAD. What?!
Almost instantaneously you're feeling a similar letdown to Padma. It sets up this incredibly novel idea of a relationship or quasi-relationship between a living person and a ghost. Which is...creepy really, but somehow okay in this context? I thought Padma's yearning really set up the use of the first part of the quote perfectly.
The transition to the part where Padma remembers how to live via Sally-Anne is really nice in that it's really natural. I don't ever really feel anything for the two of them, but you create this calm progression from acquaintances to friends, to lovers. It's bittersweet to see Padma moving on and Lisa moving on because I enjoy the writing of them and the potential there so much, but from a practical perspective it's obviously necessary to make this work.
I will be honest when I say that the Sally-Anne "breakup" felt abrupt to me. You got the sense previously that it could end - all relationships can obviously, but this one (1) in a more specific sense - yet we didn't get an explanation at all really. I suppose it can be inferred from "their" segment that they were a blaze of love that burnt out quickly after they fulfilled a certain hurt/comfort need for each other, but yeah.
I still liked the end though and I think it was necessary for Padma's growth. She's no longer relying on others to carry her through or give her the ability to be happy (or at least not depressed). IDK if the ghostcare (hilarious BTW) is a sign that Lisa and Padma will still always be connected, but I hope it is. But by the end, the future is bright and there's symmetry in this beginning-ending pair with the feeling beautiful.
Thanks for sharing this wonderful story with us!
Author's Response:No worries on timing, that's perfectly fine! Thanks for swapping with me! Ahahaha, yeah, trying to find something *current* on my page is a difficult task - this is the only story I've written all year XD
Thank you, I'm so glad to hear that the story was powerful to you! And also glad it threw you, haha. I set out to subvert the love triangle trope and was not about to do it halfway, so I'm happy to hear that it worked ;)
The 'relationship' between a human and a ghost definitely has the potential to be creepy, so I'm very glad to hear that this wasn't. And thank you, it's great to hear that you liked the way it reflected the quote.
I agree, the breakup with Sally-Anne is a bit abrupt, but I liked the juxtaposition with the relationship with Lisa, which kind of continues to linger - so, yeah, it was intentional. There was a line in there somewhere foreshadowing it, I think, about how they were kind of doomed from the start because of the relationship growing out of grief thing. But yeah, aside from that, there wasn't an explanation. It was more of an inferred thing, as you suggested. I hope it didn't take away from the story too much for you!
I'm really glad you liked the end though, and how it reflected Padma's growth and also returned full circle. I really have no explanation for the ghostcard aside from I thought the pun was too much fun to resist, and I'm glad to hear it didn't take you out of the story with its inanity :P Thank you so much for the review!
hi! i'm here for our swap :D
your descriptions are beautiful. i just love the way you both intertwine the description of lisa with her actions and the general descriptions of the place and day - it really makes the story come alive and play out in my mind. and the way padma describes how she's been in love with her for the longest time but not really knowing it's love was amazing to read. especially the part about finally kissing her before the battle of hogwarts! i can just imagine the two of them, not rally knowing if they'd even survive, finally acting on their feelings.
oh merlin, no. why did i read this part about...lisa dying?!?! that's absolutely heartbreaking :/
padma's wistful daydreaming is obviously a way for her to cope with loss but it made me feel so sad for her, for lisa...and now lisa is a ghost??? i'm not sure if that's even worse, being there but not really, not being able to experience anything, padma still being reminded every single day of the girl she loved, possibly not being able to move on??
lisa's explanation for becoming a ghost is such a ravenclaw thing to do! i love that you managed to work a tiny bit of humour into the story.
bonding with sally-anne in the empty classroom gives me hope that padma will be able to move on...to not get lost in ghost-lisa and actually live. i'm glad they managed to find each other and possibly help each other deal with loss of friends (and lover). but their relationship (?) was born out of mutual grief so i'm not sure how long it will last, but at least it's something!
the part about lisa becoming the ravenclaw's new house ghost and of course, luna not being at all bothered by her was very cute and endearing to read!
i feel like this ended on a perfect note - the part about lisa and the grey lady being in love made me chuckle. but sally-anne found someone and padma is healing with the help of her sister and just...it was wonderful to read, really. the whole concept is wildly original, being in love with a ghost is something i don't think i'd ever think up but it turned out to be a perfect story and i'm really glad i read it!
kris
Author's Response:Hey Kris!
Ah thank you, I'm so happy to hear that the descriptions made the story come alive, that's wonderful to hear. And I appreciated what you said about how wonderful it was to read Padma and Lisa realizing their feelings for one another... Although yeah then it does make the next part harder to read :-/ I felt a little bit bad descibing this beautiful relationship only to crush everyone's dreams - Padma's as well as every reader :P
You're spot on with the downside of Lisa being still there, as you noticed later when Padma comes to that realization. And, you saw before Padma did that the relationship with Sally-Anne wouldn't last... it's like you're one step ahead of the narrative the whole way haha ;)
I'm glad you liked Lisa's reasoning for becoming a ghost haha, and that you appreciated the little touches of humor here and there.
Ah so glad you liked the ending!
Thanks for the swap, and for this lovely review!!
Tag!
This one shot is incredibly well written. You start off with a scene the audience can picture: two girls outside, blowing a dandelion. Padma's wish is so vulnerable, and I find myself rooting for her to receive her wish. After all, Lisa is right there, and she has such a good rapport with Padma. They fit well together.
Then, you give a flashback to the Battle of Hogwarts. It's jarring, but in a way that's fitting: now the reader knows the setting and the time. Padma's lingering horror puts a shadow on this lovely scene between two girls. But then... the revelation that Lisa is dead and she's a ghost... Suddenly, Padma's wish is unattainable and her flashback brings a fresh wave of horror and loss.
Sally-Anne is an interesting addition to the dynamic of the story. She allows Padma to realize that she can move on--in small increments--from Lisa. Salle-Anne also has her own demons from the Battle. These two girls share a huge connection in their loss. I got the sense that this relationship wouldn't last; both of them aren't quite ready to leave their grief behind and so they find temporary solace and release in each other. I think there's something powerful in relationships like that. They don't last, but they're important for those moments, and they still carry us on after the fact.
I like Lisa's determination on what she wants to learn, and I'm glad she's found an eternal companion! I'm also happy for Sally-Anne. But I'm sure Padma feels a little isolated, since the other two have moved on. But I also sense her determintion to continue. I love how so goes to Barcelona with her sister. Having suffered a huge loss myself, I know how important it is to follow through with your dreams. Padma dwells on hers for a while, but then she realizes them. She's so powerful. Thank you for sharing.
Author's Response:Thank you so much! I'm thrilled that you liked the story and the different layers in the first scene as more of the background information is revealed.
"I got the sense that this relationship wouldn't last; both of them aren't quite ready to leave their grief behind and so they find temporary solace and release in each other. I think there's something powerful in relationships like that. They don't last, but they're important for those moments, and they still carry us on after the fact." -- I love that you said this. That is very much what I was going for there, as I do think that even though that relationship can never last, it's still so important in helping them process their grief.
Yeah. I think there's probably an element of isolation at the end for Padma once her two love interests have found other love interests, but she is learning to move on, so she's okay - defnitely a lot more okay than she was a few months ago. And she has her sister there with her which helps a lot. I'm so glad you liked the story - thank you so much for your review <3
Hihihi! :) It's been so long since I read anything of yours and it's such a shame because you're such a lovely writer and always write such beautiful stories. So I'm so glad I get to come back :)
You know, I don't tend to ship various pairings in the Hogwarts era, because there's so many combinations and so many writers producing beautiful and fascinating stories with different characters, but. But this story is just so perfect and so wonderfully sweet and hopeful in a way I wasn't really expecting when I started it and honestly, if a story became headcanon this would be it. I don't even really know where to start with this review, other than to say that I love it.
I love the way you write Padma and Lisa - that first scene, with the dandelion and blowing the little bits of it away, it's so gorgeous. It's just incredible: it's soft and delicate and so so sweet, and I kinda forgot that they'd lived through a war, that you'd mentioned it sentences before: the dark, difficult times they'd had, how they'd had their first kiss just before the battle. The way you didn't mention for almost all of that first section, about what happened to Lisa - and I reread that section you know, and I noticed that you very carefully said that Padma slung a bag over her shoulder, that they 'made their way' back inside the castle. You didn't ever mention anything which contradicted what you then told us about Lisa and, ahhhhhh it's so clever and so obvious now I know, and it makes that second reading so much richer :)
Padma is such a lovely character. I love how you write her - and all of the other characters - struggling to deal with the aftermath of the war, with the different marks its left on them all, how she's scared of telling her family about who she loves, how she grows throughout this, learning that love will stay but it's okay to move on as well, to love multiple people in different and the same ways. I'm picking on Padma, but really, all of your characters were amazing and so well written: Sally-Anne with her love of photography, her PTSD from Colin being killed right next to her; Lisa with her love of learning, her drive to learn and learn and learn, how she finds some kind of solace in staying on and remaining behind.
I have to comment on how you wrote the whole concept of love in this: Padma isn't limited to loving one person, and her relationship with Sally-Anne isn't limited by the fact that she loves Lisa as well, and vice versa. She loves Lisa, she dates Sally-Anne, and it works. It feels so natural and so simple, and there's a beautiful kind of honesty which I love when Padma tells Sally-Anne 'yes' and then doesn't answer.
The way you write this is amazing. I already said how much I loved the dandelion scene - and honestly, it is just such a perfect image, I'm not sure I can get rid of it :P But just everything about this, really, was so so good. The details were incredible: how you used them to impart the absolute horror of war, the difficult realities of PTSD and living after war: the way people's eyes are blank, how Padma finds herself crying in a bathroom, how they can't escape mentioning the war in some way and conversation always stops there. It grounds this fic in a kind of horrible past, but it never makes it really dark or grim, it always stays in this kind of light-hearted, angst-ish sort of place which I love, with that hopeful undertone. You've always been a great writer, but this... this is amazing. Honestly. I think it's probably the best thing of yours I've read in a while, and it's most certainly the best fic I've read in a while.
Also, I love the idea of ghostcards! Lisa and Padma could go into business together, start it up :P Ghost postal service. I mean, you literally have a captive audience so yk... :P
Loved. It. Loved it loved it loved it. Recc'ing everywhere.
Aph xx
Author's Response:Gah, where to even start with this review! I have already re-read it like 7 times and I am still flailing about it :P
I feel the same about Hogwarts era ships XD I literally ship everything in that era. But eep, I'm flattered that you said this would be headcanon if you had headcanons about that era. Thank you!
I'm so happy to hear that you like the way I wrote Padma - and that dandelion scene! Haha, I was so proud of how that scene turned out, so thank you, it means a lot to hear that you liked it and that it stuck with you! <3 Also I love that you re-read that section :P I'm glad to hear it was richer on the second read after finding out the truth about Lisa.
Your analysis of Padma's character growth throughout the story is so wonderful - and I'm so glad you liked the way all of the characters were written in their post-war lives and dealing with it in their own ways. Thank you so much. It's so good to hear that you thought the details were effective and that it made the story come to life (...lol pun not intended). And I absolutely love what you said about the 'light-hearted angst-ish sort of place with a hopeful undertone' - it's an odd description but also perfect, I think it does fit the fic very well, and I'm so glad you liked that tone. Eeee and as for it being the best fic you've read in a while - *flails* *sobs* thank you!!!?! gah
The ghostcards XD I put that in on a whim because I thought it was funny, and I really hoped it wouldn't take away from the story (which is otherwise not funny) so I'm very glad to hear that it didn't. But anyway, now I kinda want to write a fic about the ghost postal service XD
Thank you so, so much. I'm thrilled that you enjoyed the story and thank you for such an insightful, amazing review! ♥♥♥♥♥
Hello,
This was beautiful. That's the first word that popped into my mind after finishing the one shot because it's rare that I read something so poignant? Wistful? I'm not sure there's a word that can do this justice; just know that it really made me feel something in my heart.
I'm not a fan of love triangles either so whenever they pop up, I feel such dread. The way you veered away from that here was done so beautifully (there's that word again!) and in a way I would never have considered. I most especially like how there's no resentment involved with any of the parties. It's certainly bittersweet, yes, but the ending note is also so hopeful and I loved it.
The dynamics are so interesting. When I realised Lisa was a ghost, I genuinely gasped. I most especially liked her characterisation: her reasoning behind being a ghost, her love for exploring her 'condition' so to speak, her relationship with Padma. She's so happy and it's such a contrast to what she is and how she became a ghost, such a difference to the melancholy and grief that Padma and Sally-Anne feel because of the war that I couldn't help but warm to her. You can understand why Padma fell in love with her.
I have so many thoughts on this, but I'd be here all day. I'm so glad I chose to read this, it was phenomenal. Truly a wonderful piece.
Plums <3
Quodpot Review: Match 2 - War
Author's Response:Plums! Thank you so much! Ahh, I'm so honored that you said this story made you feel something in your heart, and that you described this as beautiful. That's so lovely to hear.
To be honest, I actually really dislike love triangles as well, which is why I decided to write this XD And knowing that you don't like love triangles, I'm especially glad that you liked the way this was done and how it ended. I'm so happpy you liked Lisa's characterization, as well - thank you!
I really appreciate you reading and reviewing this, and am so glad that you enjoyed it so much. Thanks for the very thoughtful review. ♥♥
Hello!
the beginning of this is just beautiful, I love the energy in the first scene like you set the scene perfectly. it is this dreamy surroundings which just highlights this romantic and pure scene of Padma's feelings. it's wonderfully written but then you contrast this scene with a vivid depiction of the Battle of powers which is very powerful (my poor Lavender). The fact that Lisa had died at Hogwarts at that first scene had an amazing emotional punch to it. I'm not sure if that scene was a memory or Lisa talking to her from the grave type thing. I suppose a dream. (edit: I was reading this going along so now I realise that she was a real ghost)
I love that Padma was so clearly in love with Lisa that she sees Lisa everywhere. it's heartbreaking to see how much she cared about Lisa and this storytelling is the perfect way to showcase this. this line is so emotional as she compared to the food. 'Almost enough. Just like Lisa herself, now.'. There are so many wonderful lines here that show her grief. it's so difficult to chose a favourite because it's packed full of them. your writing is wonderful and captured Padma's state of mind. Even your use of weather which matches the mood of the piece.
I really enjoy the build up with her relationship with Sally-Ann Perks. It makes perfect sense and the progression is realistic. I really feel for all the characters involved here. It's tragic but full of love. your writing reflex that perfectly. I thought the way you bring back the weather to reflect the story was really good like spring has come and it's a new start for everyone.
I'm really happy for everyone, this was difficult to know how to end a piece like this but I thought it was so good that Padma didn't end up with either of them that she was able to go forward with them in mind but live her life to full. the last sentence is lovely at giving us a little look into what might be to come for Padma. there is a sense of closure, just lovely.
- Abbi xo
Quodpot Review: Match 2 - War
Author's Response:hi Abbi! Thank you! I'm so glad you liked the energy in that first scene. And that Lisa being a ghost kind of threw you off, haha. I definitely wanted to build up all the emotions there before the reveal that she was a ghost, so I'm really glad that came across well. And thanks, it's great to hear that you thought the battle depiction was vivid. Aw, Lavender :( (For the record, I don't think she died. I think she /almost/ died. Lavender lives!)
Ooh, I love your descrption of this story as 'tragic but full of love'. That's a wonderful thing to hear, thank you. I'm so glad that you felt the storytelling is effective at showcasing Padma's grief and the progression of her relationships.
I'm so happy that you liked the end and that you thought it had a sense of closure. It was wonderful reading your thoughts about this story. Thank you so much for reading and for this kind review! ♥
KRISTIN!!!!!!
So, I had to stop by and check out this because 1) it was nominated for Hufflepuff SotM and 2) something on your AP I haven't read yet???
And this was just as beautiful as all of your writing is! And the concept is so wonderful! Because, yes, it is about love (and a love triangle... sort of...) but mostly it is about moving on and letting go and learning to live even when life hurt us... And that's just so beautiful and resonates so much with me (as I'm sure you have no trouble guessing...)
At the beginning, when you pictured that scene with Padma and Lisa, I would have never guessed she was a ghost. That first scene felt so idyllic and it was so sad when you made the reveal. It's so sad they never got the chance to live their love.
And then there is Sally-Anne, but once again their relationships is just a way to help each other getting through. Which is sad, but hopeful at the same time.
I love how all three of them find love and happiness in the end, even if (or maybe especially) not with each other. I actually found quite amusing how Lisa ended up falling in love with Helena Ravenclaw. That's just so cute!
There's so much I could gush about in this story, it's just so, so good! You are awesome and such a talented writer and I'm in awe!
Huge snowball hug rolling your way, darling!
Chiara
Author's Response:Chiara! <3 Thank you so much! I'm so happy you liked this story, and I appreciate that it resonated with you so deeply.
Hehe, that was definitely the goal with that first scene. I wanted it to start out seeming like it was going to be about a conventional love triangle before I threw all the rules out the window. And I'm glad to hear you liked how Padma didn't end up with either of them and they each found happiness with someone else.
Thank you, I've been quite pleasantly surprised by how the Lisa/Helena ship has been received! I didn't even plan on that ship from the beginning but then when I thought of it, I loved it so much that I had to add it in there :P
Thanks so much for reading, and for your thoughtful review! You're the best! ♥♥♥♥♥
Hi Kristin! Here for our review swap. I was so excited when you commented on my status update; it gave me an excuse to stop by your writing. I just had to come here because of Padma! Ravenclaw girls represent hahaha.
Oh, Kristin. This was so lovely. My heart is so full of love—and so broken at the same time. Why do you do this to me??
Sometimes when I read a story, I’m really struck by so many emotions I don’t quite know where I should start. That’s generally when I try to find a line or two that really struck me. Let me tell you—choosing just one line for this fic was SO hard, because your writing is so lovely, so beautiful. So I’m going to cheat and pick my favorite section instead. (Well, actually, I’m double-cheating and picking two sections, but whatever. Technicalities. It’s your fault for writing something that’s made me think and feel so much).
So my first favorite section was the section where Sally-Anne and Padma kissed for the first time. Strangely, I’ll start explaining why I loved this section by talking about why I loved Lisa and Padma’s relationship (believe me, there’s a logical reason hahaha). Lisa is so... bright. I was actually so surprised that she was a ghost—not only is that such a creative choice, but it’s a complete unexpected choice because Lisa is just so not ghost-like, you know? She’s so vivacious, so full of energy—she doesn’t seem at all troubled by her own death, but instead focusing on continuing to live in whatever way she can. (Also, she’s such a Ravenclaw; you’ve captured that essence of wanting to know more and do more always so perfectly—and thank you so much for not perpetuating that stereotype that Ravenclaws are just nerds obsessed with their grades!)
I think maybe that’s what attracted Padma to Lisa in the first place? Her genuine love for life, especially when in this troubling time, death always lingers in the shadows. The section where Sally-Anne and Padma kissed seems to be a perfect demonstration of that! I liked how at first, it seemed like Sally-Anne would be the complete opposite of Lisa, you know? I mean, for one, Sally-Anne’s alive—she’s something real and tangible that Padma can hold onto, which as you described, is possibly one of the main reasons Padma was attracted to her. But Sally-Anne also felt sort of dead to me, maybe just in a more emotional sense? The line about how her eyes are black holes and in the void Padma could see Colin Creevey really reinforced this idea for me. I think that’s such an interesting choice though because now Sally-Anne sort of acted as a foil to Lisa: physically alive, but emotionally dead.
But anyway: that section. That section to me, so demonstrates your amazing grasp of complexity. Every one of your stories is filled with so many nuances; it’s never quite what I expect, you know? Like, I expected Padma to be happy with Sally-Anne as someone who can understand her grief—and I like that you had a suggestion of that at first. But then you introduced this really true dose of realism: a relationship borne of grief can’t possibly survive. I know you were twisting the classic love triangle in this story, but here you also twisted that idea that people can find joy in shared suffering, which I feel is kinda stupid because if you’re looking for joy, why would you ever go to someone who’s just as sad as you? That’s also why I loved that both Lisa and Sally-Anne eventually found love in their own places, with girls who were joyful.
But Padma finding her joy was honestly the best part of this fic. The last paragraph was my other favorite section (Okay it’s not technically a complete section but go with it hahaha). I think in love triangles, the main character’s growth is often linked so tightly with the growth of their relationship. Whoever they end up with in the end largely defines the character arc they follow. But in this case, you’ve extricated the love triangle from Padma’s growth entirely and made it just a small part of her story rather than the entire story; she doesn’t find joy with Lisa or Sally-Anne, but with her sister, a true source of joy—just as Lisa and Sally-Anne only find love with people who are truly sources of joy. And it’s really this deeply fulfilling moment that left me with so so much joy—kind of like when Lily found Celeste again in Icarus? It was that kind of moment. I think that creative twist is really what makes this story so unique to me, because you’ve effectively dismantled what I consider to be the most harmful part of love triangles!
If I can offer slight con-crit, I do wish that Parvati would’ve showed up in other places pf the story too, rather than the end. Maybe it’s just because I’m a twin and I can’t imagine suffering so much without my sister beside me. Either way, I do think it would help that last paragraph feel slightly less out of the blue? Not that it didn’t have a very conclusive and fulfilling feeling. Ahhh. I hope I haven’t offended you here. Please feel free to ignore me here because as it is, it’s quite perfect <3
Ufh Kristin. This review is such a mess, I apologize hahaha. I’m just so awestruck by your insane creativity and your lovely grasp of complexity. Every one of your stories makes me think and feel so much. I’m absolutely in love with your writing.
This was beautiful. Thank you so much for sharing it. <3
Author's Response:
Shreya! I’m so sorry for taking forever to reply to this, it was such an incredible review and makes my day every time I read it. Eeep! You are too kind. ♥ I’m honestly so flattered that this fic made you feel so many things. ♥
Hehe, yeah, I really wanted Lisa’s existence as a ghost to come as a complete surprise after the false sense of fluffy security given by the opening paragraphs. I’m so glad you liked that as a creative choice – and that you thought she seemed so Ravenclaw but not stereotypically so. I really strive to avoid stereotypes (after all, Marta is a Ravenclaw too :P ) so I’m really glad to hear that her very pronounced Ravenclawy-ness (yep, that’s a word) and passion for knowledge and new experiences came across in a positive way.
And yes, that’s probably a lot of the reason Padma liked her to begin with, because as I imagine, Lisa’s personality when she was alive was the same – just as vivacious – and that didn’t change, as I don’t think ghosts change in terms of personality after they die. (This is not my first fic about ghosts and as a result I have a lot of headcanon about ghosts hahaha) I love your comparison of Lisa and Sally-Anne as well.
YES. I think shared misery is really important, because often it is helpful in terms of processing grief, and in the case of Padma and Sally-Anne their relationship was a good thing for them because they were able to grieve, but just because it’s important doesn’t mean it is going to create a healthy, happy relationship that lasts. You picked up on everything I was hoping to say there and I really liked your take on it.
I’m so glad you appreciated that about how she doesn’t end up with either of them. Your analysis of love triangles and how they affect the main character’s growth is such an insightful point, too – I don’t even know if that was something I was consciously thinking as I wrote it, but I don’t particularly like that aspect of love triangles either, how the main character is then somewhat defined by the person they ‘choose’. Ahh, I’m so glad you liked her growth outside of the love triangle and that you think it dismantled the most harmful part of love triangles – that’s so wonderful to hear! Love triangles are a mess, but sisters are forever. (I am not a twin, but I do have a sister who is the closest person to me in the world.)
re: Parvati – I wish that too! I didn’t mean to imply that Parvati wasn’t around/wasn’t suffering with Padma, only that I couldn’t find a place to mention Parvati and keep the flow of the story as it focuses on the triangle. I actually deliberated over this for ages haha. But actually – now, maybe because I’ve had some time away from the story and was able to look at it with fresh eyes lately – I found one occasion to at least mention her again so she’s present in the background and I think it works a lot better. You absolutely haven’t offended me, btw – I think your opinion is extra valuable particularly because you’re a twin too, so I appreciate that you pointed this out!
This review was SO wonderful. I can only offer profuse apologies that I took a month responding to it (in my defense I have not had internet, and I wanted to be able to do justice to this review by giving you a long response haha). Omg, and honestly I don’t even know what to say about the rest of it, just THANK YOU ♥♥ I’m so flattered. Gah. You’re a wonderful reviewer. I’m so happy you enjoyed this story and thank you for reading and for your thoughtful comments!! I’m in love with your reviews. All of them.
KRISTIN <3
I saw that you wrote something new, and so of course I had to come read it because omg your writing. It’s so sad that this wasn’t written in time for the ‘Anything But a Love Triangle’ challenge, because it would have been a serious contender, but anyway I’m so happy you posted this!!
From the beginning your writing is beautiful. Third person present yields a lot of room for descriptive magic, and you use it to its fullest; all the descriptions of summer and the girls’ expressions just suited the tone of the piece so well sldkjfl. You are so talented!!! I love how versatile you are; the style of this piece is so different from anything else I’ve read from you, and I find that to be so, so impressive.
OKAY. Onto the story!
From like the very first section I was like SHIPSHIPSHIP because the teasing and the flirting between these two girls was just #goals. The images of the dandelions!! Oh it was so good. And when Lisa and Padma both wished for the other in their wishing game, my heart swelled for a moment. And life was good.
BUT THEN LISA TURNED OUT TO BE DEAD?? The first time I read the line “If only Lisa hadn’t died in the Battle of Hogwarts” I performed a double-take, like, what?? I went back and reread the beginning, because I was sure that I’d misinterpreted something along the way – because, if Lisa had died in the Battle of Hogwarts, then how would she be talking to Padma after the war was over? At first I thought Padma was having a sort of imaginary friend instance, but then I read the bit about the translucent hands and I was like OH. IT’S A GHOST.
WHICH IS SO CREATIVE.
I felt like the entries to this challenge would definitely intrigue me a lot, because love triangles are some of my least favorite aspects of many YA novels and so to see them written differently would be so much fun, but I didn’t expect to be this mindblown. Being in love with a ghost, whose death happened during the Battle of Hogwarts, is just such an amazing and creative idea. *sobs* Kristin, you’re amazing. Especially because, in many ways, this question of loving a ghost presents a number of other questions, like, about how it might work or whether it’s actually possible to (and whether we should) be in an exclusive relationship with a ghost.
And what I love about this is how it removes the icky aspect of so many love triangles; how it’s creative not only in the placement/roles of the characters but in how it subverts the trope. Because there’s no morally grey area here, with characters in some sort of relationship with another but cheating on them. Yes, it raises questions, but not once did it make me uncomfortable reading, and I think that’s actually a pretty amazing accomplishment with a love triangle.
The development of the rest of the story is so beautiful. I love how Padma begins to get a little closer to Sally-Anne without being in a full relationship with her. I also really love how Padma makes it clear to Lisa that they have to move on, because they’ll never be able to be together and to pretend otherwise would be painful to both of them. [Also, Lisa/Helena is a ship I never, ever would have thought of in my entire life, so it’s amazing that you came up with it omg. <3]
I love how, in the end, Padma goes off traveling. The girl’s been through a lot, and since the weight on her shoulder originally holding her down has been removed, at least a little bit, she’s free to leave. And I love that. I love that she potentially meets another girl there, but we never know if it’s the one true love, or if it’s someone fun that Padma gets to meet, kiss, love, before moving on.
THIS IS AMAZING. (Also so sorry if this ended up sounding a little rambly, I’m weirdly tired at this hour. ;~; )
~Eva
Author's Response:Eva!! <3
Omg thank you! I'm so flattered that you rushed over to check this story out so quickly, and even more flattered that you think my writing is so versatile. Thank you so much <3 (Though, like... I'd be kind of worried if you said this was in any way similar to Death Eater's Kitchen, haha)
I'm glad to hear that I succeeded in making that very shippy :P Ehehehe yeah I definitely wrote that first bit to make it seem like nothing is amiss upon first read, but then if you already know to look for it, there are subtle hints there in the details (like the breeze that blows in and /coincidentally/ Lisa rolls over in the grass). So, haha, I'm glad to hear that it tricked you at first and, more importantly, that you appreciated the twist!
Okay I also admit that I am generally not a fan of love triangles either, which is the reason I wanted to do this challenge, haha! But, knowing that you don't like them, I'm especially glad that you liked this story and thought it was creative and raised questions! Thank you!
I'm specifically glad you mentioned that nothing in this story made you uncomfortable, either. That was actually something I worried about a little, not necessarily because it's a love triangle, but just because of how unconventional the story is - the human/ghost "relationship", as well as Lisa/Helena, there's just a lot in this fic that's very unusual and when posting something like that I always do wonder how it will be received. So thanks!
Thank you, I'm so happy to hear that you liked the development of the story and the open-ended conclusion. I really appreciate this absolutely wonderful review, and am so glad that you enjoyed the story! Thanks so much <3
This was so, so beautiful and sad and fantastic!
I was not expecting Lisa to be a ghost. Like, not at all. And once I read a few paragraphs past that reveal, I absolutely LOVED the concept of one of the students becoming a ghost and staying at the school, and what that would mean for their classmates.
It was so sad to watch Padma go through the mourning process continually, having Lisa constantly there only serving as a reminder that she wasn't truly there. It felt very real, especially when she begins to turn to Sally-Anne to get the kind of tangible physical comfort she needs that Lisa can't provide. I wasn't surprised to see that Sally-Anne and Padma were both sort of leaning on one another as a temporary thing, to allow themselves to process and heal, but probably both knowing deep down that it wasn't a Forever Thing.
Seeing that Padma did indeed go to Spain with her sister made me so happy! I'm glad that she was able to move on and let go of the past, and go out in the world to seek her happiness. And I thought that the little detail about Parvati doing a tarot spread on the beach was such a nice nod to her affinity for Divination.
This was just so well-written and heart wrenching and wonderful. Thank you so much for taking the time to share it with us all.
Author's Response:Hi! Thank you so much! This review honestly made my day, not only because it was the first feedback I've gotten about the story, but also because you just had such lovely things to say! Thank you!!
I'm glad that twist surprised you, and that you enjoyed the concept as the story unfolded. And I'm thrilled to hear that the development of the story felt real - that's always something that means a lot to me (especially as an author of fanfiction about magic :P ) And it's so wonderful to hear that you liked the ending and what it meant for Padma, as well as the detail about Parvati's Divination haha ;D
Omg, thank you so much for saying it was all of those things. I'm flattered. I'm so happy that you enjoyed reading this - thank you for the amazing review!! <3
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