Name: justawillowtree (Signed) · Date: 29 May 2018 09:44 PM · For: Farewells

Awww. This chapter was really, really sweet. When Charlie ceased joking about the werewolves and got all serious with his “I’ll miss you” statement, I actually put a hand over my heart because of how cute it was.

 

I’m really looking forward to more of these two! Their dialogues are always so much fun to read. <3

 

I wanted to wait until the last review to address all your concerns; as for relationship pace, I definitely think it’s believable! I’ve met people where a week later I was really saddened at the idea of being separated from them for a long time. The main thing I would say is, we just haven’t seen enough of these two together, just yet, to feel the same emotions that they were feeling here in the last chapter, but ahh these two are so cute together so I can still definitely understand them here.

 

You also wanted to know about Maggie’s character development (and you said that you were going to go deeper into that as the story continues). As of right now, we haven’t seen much development (which makes sense, since we’ve only just met her), but I’m loving her personality! I’m curious to see what plans you have in store for her in the future.

 

As for your last concern – whether the Weasleys were in-character – YES. A thousand times yes to this. I thought they were all perfectly written, and I really enjoyed hearing George’s voice all throughout.

 

This was such a fun read! Let me know once you have more. :)

 

~Eva

Name: justawillowtree (Signed) · Date: 29 May 2018 05:42 PM · For: Field Notes

Oh no the rain threw a wrench into their ice cream plans! That’s such a shame, but at least they came up with a Plan B that was even better than ice cream. Also @Tom, wyd, that’s so rude and disrespectful to both Maggie and Charlie, DON’T MAKE WINKY FACES AT THEM WTH. Basic etiquette, man.

 

I loved getting to learn more about Maggie! (Though I wonder what’s going to happen once they part ways…will we get to see them in their respective fields of study?? :O Because I love seeing people write characters doing what they’re good at, it just makes me really happy.) Okay I’m really impressed by the way you managed to write the scene where Maggie’s explaining all her research; it sounds super professional and scientific and believable, and not to mention it was super fascinating reading about the connections between thestral skulls and dragon skulls.

 

Also omggg, I got hit with all the feelings when Charlie retold that story about Ron, Hermione, and Harry and Norberta. And Hagrid, you great, careless, lovable giant. <3

 

The dialogue in this was super interesting throughout, so even though the chapter consisted mostly of just talking, it kept me hooked. Maggie’s family sounds so, so interesting, and I do hope we’ll get to meet her sister one day because she sounds like such a hilarious character (maybe not by herself, but with Maggie I’m sure she’ll present some side-splitting situations), and also I want to meet her nephew!! And her Muggle mother sounds awesome, too.

 

(That joke about Charlie being a prefect was the greatest thing ever omg.)

 

And they kissed! It made me happy haha. Again, I wonder at what will happen between them once they move farther away from one another…

 

Anyway, this was such a fun chapter! <3

 

~Eva

Name: justawillowtree (Signed) · Date: 29 May 2018 12:38 PM · For: Brews and Stews

Hey there! :)

 

Hahaha omg the awkwardness of first dates…I think you showed that really well in this chapter. I thought it was understandable that Charlie felt uncomfortable and self-conscious all throughout (though I kept wanting to give him hugs any time he talked badly of himself) – after all, this isn’t where he’s most comfortable. I wonder if Charlie’ll feel infinitely more confident when he’s in a place he’s more familiar with? (Such as, handling dragons? ;D Which I am still very excited to get to, but you said it was “slow-burn” so not getting my hopes up too early haha.)

 

These two really do seem to have a lot in common though, even aside from their interests in magical creatures. They’re both vegetarian, they can both see thestrals, they both like Maggie’s butt, haha. ALSO. I love the name Maggie! And it suits her, too! (Silly me for confusing myself that her name was Chloe lmao.) We actually have two Maggies over at HPFT already; it seems to be a very common name around here.

 

And omg the end of the date was so cute, when they decided to go out for ice cream sometime and then she KISSED HIM ON THE CHEEK. I hope we’ll get to see more of Maggie’s personality soon! Her interests are fascinating so I can’t wait to find out more about the type of person she is.

 

The pace that these two are going at is really believable. Though, Charlie is better at the dating game than he gives himself credit for, because it’s not everybody who can manage to get a date with the woman he fancies within the first half hour of meeting her. I mean, he’s already doing better than average! He needs to chin up a bit.

 

This was another fun chapter! I can’t wait to read the rest of it. <3

 

~Eva

Name: justawillowtree (Signed) · Date: 29 May 2018 12:10 PM · For: George Spills the Beans

Hi!

 

So I was smiling all throughout this chapter! Everyone’s characterizations felt so on point; especially George’s! And Molly really seems like that type of mother who’s desperate for her children to get married so that she can stop worrying about it, you know? I’m sure she wants some grandchildren as well, and is exerting all her effort into getting her children to give her some haha. We never really get to meet Charlie properly, so there’s not much to go on for his personality, but I love what you did with him.

 

Is it just me, or do George and Angelina sound a little strained with one another? If that’s the case, then I feel really sad about that (though it’s definitely a fairly common headcanon that they end up divorced, I think, unless it’s technically canon and I just haven’t known about it haha). Also, will we get to see Roxanne Weasley? I love Roxanne. She’s one of my favorite Next Generation characters.

 

George stealing the frosting as soon as Molly turns around is freaking hilarious. And then teasing Charlie about her name was also hilarious. (Which I’m really curious to find out now as well haha.) I felt bad for Charlie when he went on that self-deprecating rant, but, I mean, he was so charming in the last chapter, I don’t know what he’s talking about, the poor guy.

 

And I loved Molly’s last line!

 

I really enjoyed the banter and the dialogue in this chapter, I think you write conversations so remarkably well. <3

 

~Eva

Name: justawillowtree (Signed) · Date: 29 May 2018 01:54 AM · For: Thursday Morning

Heyyy! I thought I’d get one of your reviews done before I went to sleep. <3

 

And omggg this first chapter was so cute! I loved getting to meet our female lead (whose name we are still currently unaware of haha), and seeing a little bit of her personality! Also I think your faceclaim for her is so, so pretty, even though I have no idea who it is, and I could picture her super clearly from the very beginning. Ooh, what if her name is actually Chloe, and that’s what she was referring to when she gave him the name? (Though I’m totally throwing out guesses here haha, please don’t laugh if it’s too off-base.)

 

I loved how she was in this shop to buy something for her nephew to annoy her sister haha. Personally my siblings are little angels (they’re actually not, they’re grumpy little monsters but at least they give me hugs when I ask, so I love them anyway) so I would probably try to avoid making them hate me by doing this, but I also love the sibling relationships where they just live to annoy each other. Makes my day, those do.

 

[I keep wanting to call your OC Chloe. I think I’ve managed to delude myself into thinking that her name actually is Chloe, instead of just a random guess on my part.]

 

I also really liked the part where she explained that she was from Castelobruxo instead! Though I’m not a fan of Jo’s additions of new schools, it’s still really great seeing different styles of education across the world. Her love for magical creatures makes me happy! I hope we’ll get to see some dragons soon because those are awesome. Also your description of the pygmy puffs were really good. It threw me off at first because I’ve always imagined them to look like the Puffles from Club Penguin (I don’t know if you’ve ever seen those haha), but then I realized that yours made more sense haha.

 

If I had one bit of concrit, it would be that the level of Charlie’s attraction towards her is unclear. When she first walked in, he seemed relatively unfazed by her appearance, but then later, when George briefly joined them, Charlie began to look at your OC with interest, and I think it would be cool to get an assessment of his initial reaction to her! But honestly this is very cute already. <3

 

I’m really excited to read on, but it’s nearing 1:51 a.m. so I should probably sleep haha.

 

~Eva

Author's Response:

Hi, Eva!

 

Thank you so much for reading and leaving a review!

 

You definitely hear a little more about dragons through exposition, but you don't see one until later in the series. It's a dragon-slow-burn. ;) And I promise, you will find out her name!

 

I always love receiving concrit, but in this instance I'm extra happy to read yours because I think it might mean I'm actually doing a good job at nailing Charlie's character, haha.

 

I intentionally avoided him describing any kind of physical attraction in this chapter, other than the mention in the beginning that he does think she's pretty (right after the line where he's trying to figure out her accent) and then agreeing with George at the end. He's demisexual in my story (which is hinted at here and then explicitly stated in the next story in the series), so while it definitely doesn't escape his attention that the female protag is pretty, he's not really going to be feeling an intense physical attraction until after they start to establish a mental/emotional attraction, which is already brewing here. By the time George walks in, there's already some chemistry in the air, which they are both feeling, and then as he finds out more about her it gets even stronger. As the story progresses, he starts to notice and mention more and more physical characteristics that he's attracted to, but it's something that starts out gradually and builds as they become closer. If you think I can improve on this at all and maybe make it more clear, please do shoot me a PM! I am always down to talk about how to make stories better!

 

Thanks again for spending the time and energy to review this chapter! I really appreciate it a lot.

Name: Phoenix Potioneer (Signed) · Date: 28 May 2018 10:45 PM · For: Thursday Morning

I love this woman already simply because she wants to giver her nephew something that will annoy her sister. That is sibling goals right there.

 

I'm impressed with George for not making fun of Charlie's interest in the woman and simply giving him space. He's matured quite a bit from his Hogwarts days where he made fun of everyone's relationships. Respect.

 

AW that woman with the Pgymy Puffs is so adorable.

 

You know, Thestrals and dragons do probably share a common ancestors. They're both winged creatures that are remarkedly similar except thestrals are more horse-like. And dragons are a bit more scaly and breathe fire.

 

I really like you integrating Castelobruxo in the story. I haven't seen any fics deal with that, so I like that you did.

 

I love Charlie FINALLY realizing at the end that he never got the name. I was waiting for it the entire time! When they named the pygmy puff Chloe I was like, "But what's her name!?"

 

Great that Charlie finally found someone who likes magical creatures just as much as him. This was a heartwarming, great introduction to their characters! I love the instant chemistry between them before they even found out that they both love magical creatures.

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

Exploring sibling relationships has been really fun for this series. You see a lot more detail about the female protag's relationship with her sister later, and some more interactions between Charlie and George. (I will say that George is not TOTALLY cured of his immaturity in regards to other peoples' relationships, but he has come a long way.) It's been fun to flesh out the dynamics of both families, but especially the Weasleys. (And who doesn't love hearing more about the Weasleys?)

The Thestral evolution theory has been a lot of fun to develop as well! She gets into more of the nitty-gritty of it later, but it seemed like a fun way to tie her interests into Charlie's and give them a good chunk of common ground to romp around on.

I'm enjoying doing some world-building for Castelobruxo, since we don't know a lot about it. There are a few details, but it's kind of just a big sandbox, and I'm having fun playing in it. :)

Thanks again for the kind review!  I really appreciate you taking the time.