Name: PinsandKneazles (Signed) · Date: 23 Mar 2022 10:25 AM · For: Introduction

Hey, I'm here for a galazy review - this story looked intriguing so I thought I'd check it out :)

 

Sirrah's internal monologue is hilarious, and the way that she talks as though the reader is responding cracks me up!! It takes a lot of creative ability to make her own clothes; I'm super impressed with how stylish she must be. Also love that she changes her hair colour a lot so she's obviously not afraid of standing out from the crowd. Love that dig at the Potters/Weasleys for naming their kids after dead people! And that Sirrah would choose less 'weird' names for her kids since her family don't recycle names and they are running out of star ones...which I kinda don't believe because there are trillions of stars and I'm sure there aren't trillions of Malfoys...anyway!

 

It's sad that Draco treats Sirrah and Scorpius so differently, at least in Sirrah's eyes. I wonder if he realises he's doing it; placing Scorpius on a pedestal and treating Sirrah as though she doesn't matter?

 

Great start to this story! Looking forward to reading on...

 

Meera <3

Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 10 Dec 2018 04:03 PM · For: Introduction

Hey Nix!

 

So I'm here for wishlists! hopefully I can spread a little cheer on your authors page!

 

I recognise this story so I think I must have read this on hpff like ages ago. I thought it was a very interesting start and I thought you did something which you don't see too much in fan fic which is how your main character is addressing the reader directly. I thought it worked nicely though, it makes me feel more part of the story like I am a new friend or something. 

 

I thought Sirrah was great because she seemed really realistic for her age, I like how she talked quite freely about her issues with school and family. I feel like she is someone that I would want to hang out with. I thought that she comes across really down to earth in this chapter. I thought that her inner monologue flicks around a lot but it makes it more natural because human thought process are quite scatty and slide into different things really freely.

 

I think this chapter says a lot about future chapters and has really nicely set up the issues Sirrah will be facing. Especially her relationship with Scorpius will be interesting to see how that develops over the course of the story. I haven't really seen him played with a sibling before so I'm really looking forward to see how that works out. I think there is so much promise from this chapter. great job at hooking the audience in. :)

 

- Abbi xo

 

Name: Sharah (Anonymous) · Date: 03 Dec 2018 05:14 AM · For: Introduction

Hey!!!

 

Well, its sad that hpff closed but good that I found you here .

I'm always looking for an update on sirrah and yes, I am the girl that has been following your story for years. I will be patient and wait for the next few chapters. 

Take care

Sharah

 

Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 22 Oct 2018 09:44 PM · For: Conversations

Hiya dear, I'm here for the HC Maze #1 Task :).

 

It makes sense that someone likeable like Rose Weasley would be a better contender for Head Student, rather than someone like Fiona, who seems pretty unlikeable from what I've read of her so far. It must be weird for Sirrah to watch someone she has extreme distaste for pine over her brother, too. (Or anyone, really.)

So, not only is Fiona looking at not having the Head Girl position with her crush...but the girl who is more likely to have Head Girl position is her crush's crush. It. Sucks. To. Be. Fiona. 

 

Oh my goodness, I love that they are essentially blackmailing each other into not telling their father about Potter & Weasley. that's pretty hilarious if you ask me. And Leighton knows Sirrah too well to know that James' kiss wasn't as bad as she lets on. It does suck that it was her first kiss, though -- first kisses should be done properly. 

 

I get the sneaking suspicion that Leighton isn't going to entirely drop the James Potter issue ;).

 

Another lovely chapter! 

 

-Rumpels

Author's Response:

Heyyy Rumpels! So happy to see you still reading this! Fiona is pretty unlikeable and so far Rose is not. I bet it is weird to see Fiona all over her brother though. And yes, lol, it does suck to be Fiona. But she doesn't know that yet. Yes! The Malfoy twins like to blackmail each other. It's quite entertaining. Leighton is pretty perceptive when it comes to Sirrah, she knows the kiss is bothering her more than Sirrah's letting on and not for the reasons Sirrah is claiming. And no, Leighton's not going to drop it. But you'll have to read on to find out more!

Thanks for the lovely review!

xxNix

Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 28 Jun 2018 08:49 PM · For: Slytherins

O Hey Nix! 

 

The introduction was fun -- Sirrah's a really interesting and unique character (and I think, above all, that making her own dresses is pretty awesome). She must be under a lot of pressure being a Malfoy because, even post-war, I'm sure that the Malfoys didn't stray too far from their Pureblood views (just maybe not as violently). Sirrah's voice is so clear and so pronounced in the introduction that I immediately made connections with her. I also loved the bit about Draco and Scorpius having the same...equipment...meaning that Scorpius was more 'valued' in their father's eyes as the heir to the Malfoy name. But I just can't see Sirrah allowing herself to marry a hideous man in France, haha!

 

I wanted to hit the second chapter as a review, though, as oftentimes first chapters and introductions wind up with a ton of reviews that peter off towards the end so I hope that it was okay that I skipped the review for the intro and just recapped here :). And onward we go!

 

Scorpius' friends see like they're...less than desirable to hang out with (I also take it, given Fiona's description, that Pansy wound up with Marcus Flint in this verse -- which is an interesting pairing...I dig it). And as we move onward, I figured that out, haha! Though, given their canonical descriptions, Sirrah might be right -- let's hope that Fiona inherits her genes from other members of her family as she gets older o.O. 

 

I really love how Sirrah breaks the fourth wall continuously, as she introduces us into her world. It's a fun tactic (and I think it's what makes her voice just so tangible), it's almost like chatting with someone, who is recapping their story. So when Sirrah says something like, "shut your mouth!" I laugh because I'm like, "Hey, I didn't say anything...wasn't even thinking of it!" ;) So, reading a story that's this interactive is a blast. And, hey, life would be more interesting if he was a cannibal, wouldn't it? Then Sirrah would have a lot more worrying to do over him ogling her. 

 

Speaking of the ogling -- he can't just seem to take the hint, can he? Sirrah and her book, haha! I mean, her morals are sound...good for her! It's just the way she says things, she's so dramatic and I love it. She is a Malfoy, after all. And her goals are sound too (maybe not for a pureblooded woman according to their standards) but getting a job and having a career before thinking about marriage is another wonderful aspiration that she's set for herself. Nevermind gorgeous drooler and rock on, little Malfoy-ess. 

 

I don't know, I quite like the name Kensington ;), haha! Sirrah seems like she could handle a bully or two, should her friends ever be in need of her assistance. I also really love that you included a gay character in this -- he seems awfully sweet, too -- especially for a Rosier. I also love that Leighton was introduced on a comical note -- you did a fantastic job with introducing the characters in this.

 

This was so much fun to read! Thank you so much for the swap! <33 (Sorry for the brief delay, too -- phone calls and such *eyeroll* it was my mother in law).

 

-Rumpels

Author's Response:

Hey Rumpels!!! <333 I'm glad you enjoyed the introduction! And that you read on! Reviewing the second chapter is totally fine. Sirrah is an interesting character, she's certainly been a lot of fun to write. And she's VERY dramatic, and set in her ways. I think I make Scorpius' friends worse than they seem in this chapter. Well, Fiona's terrible of course. I love how you figured her out before you find out who she's the offspring of. But Tybalt isn't so bad. He'll come in later though. Talon being a cannibal though... that would certainly change the plot of this story. Only you would think of that, though, lol.

I loved breaking the fourth wall with her. It's been a lot of fun. There's a lot of less of that further on, sadly, but I try to add it in here and there. I also kind of like the name Kensington, but it's a very posh, upperclass kind of name. Leighton and Kenny are total squad goals, they're quite fun to write along with Sirrah. 

Thank you so much for the lovely review! Sorry, I'm so late to replying to this!

xxNix

Name: sunshine_locks (Signed) · Date: 14 May 2018 08:35 PM · For: Incident

i read this a while back, nearly two years ago, and let me tell you: i am so glad that you changed this chapter up a bit. it always had rubbed me the wrong way that james kissed sirrah without permission, and hated that. 

 

thank you for addressing it. 

 

on the other hand, i'm excited to start reading this new version of sirrah malfoy; i very vaguely remember that this was one of my first james/oc stories, and i vividly remember screaming to myself: "just get together, oh my god!!" 

 

i shall continue reading.

Author's Response:

Hello! Thank you so much for this review! Glad to know some of my old readers are finding this here. I did have to change this chapter a bit, and leave a note at the end. It bugged me too much not to with everything that's been going on lately. When I first wrote this, I didn't think much of a it, it was just a plot point to get things going, but I also didn't want to edit it out. I'm not trying to do a full rewrite, just fixing some things along the way. I'm am super excited that you're excited to read this again. I hope you like it. This was my first James/OC too, when I first started writing this, it was my first next gen, and for a while I remember I actively avoided reading next gen and especially james/oc because I didn't want it to affect my story. Anyway, thanks again for the review!

xxNix 

Name: ravenclaw-dirt (Signed) · Date: 11 May 2018 03:36 PM · For: Morning

"You're timetable, Miss Malfoy." - should be 'Your'

Also, I was so sad when HPFF shut down and SO glad when I found this site and your story was back - it's one of my favourites! 

Is Sirrah still a metamorphmagus? It's hinted that she is but doesn't outright say, which I think it did before!

I'm amazed you've managed to keep going on the same story for ten years, you must know Sirrah inside out by now! Taylor Momsen is the perfect face claim for her. 

I can't wait to read the rest!

Author's Response:

Thanks for notifying me of the typo, it's been fixed. Aww, I'm so glad Sirrah's one of your favorites! I've definitely enjoyed writing her. I'm amazed at myself for managing to keep going all this time as well. I think it's actually only been eight years, but it definitely feels like ten, and I may have said ten in the intro. Can't remember. I don't know if I know her inside out, I definitely know her pretty well, but she has surprised me at times, that's for sure. But maybe not so much recently but I kind have a plan for how I want the rest of the story to play out for a time. Still no idea how to end it but I've got time and a lot of ways to go before then. I do love Taylor Momsen as the faceclaim, and I love all my other faceclaims as well, of course.

 

The metamorphagus actually isn't mentioned until much later, although she does allude to it quite a few times beforehand. I hope you enjoy reading the rest! Thanks so much for the kind review!

xxNix

Name: victoria_anne (Signed) · Date: 25 Apr 2018 05:17 AM · For: Introduction

Hey Nix! Here with a review, as promised! :)

 

Oh my goodness. Sirrah. What a firecracker. I can already tell this story is going to be a wild ride! She is so sassy and strong-willed. 

I can't help but pity her, though. She's been born into a family of traditions that are rather outdated and clearly oppose what she wants, even though no one will really consider what she wants. Somehow, though, I feel like she's not a girl who will let anyone tell her what to do. She already has her mother wrapped around her little finger.

 

I wonder what happened between Sirrah and Draco? I can't wait to see how she and Scorpius interact, either. Do they get along?

 

I really enjoyed this opening chapter, Nix! The thought process through which it's written is easy and fun to read!

Author's Response:

Hi! Thanks so much for this lovely review! *hugs*

 

Sirrah is definitely something. She's a lot of fun to write, that's for sure. She's certainly a pureblood of the new age, she's very against the old traditions but she's sure she'll have to suffer some of them as a compromise to get what she really wants. But she's definitely not someone who takes direction well. If you keep reading, you'll find out more about Sirrah and her relationship with her father. And you'll see how she and Scorpius interact even sooner. They don't tend to get along alot of the time...

 

I'm so glad you enjoyed the chapter. Some of the beginning chapters aren't the best, but it does get better! Thanks again for the review!

 

xxNix