Name: WindingArrow (Signed) · Date: 13 Jan 2019 03:59 PM · For: The One Where You Snog In A Small Space

Pluuuuums! I find myself with some time on my hands, but no access to any of my WIP chapters to work on. So what do I do? I come to read about my favorite Ms. Darcy... Only to find no update. Well. Okay. That's fair. I'll scroll. (And I did not miss that Novus 5 chapter gem, I'm heading there next!)

And I find this and I just love this. (When do I not love what you write?) I love the dynamic, I love the cliché and I love how you have it structured. The only thing that got me thinking (and I don't know why it got me thinking about it) was that it is the guy who breaks the girl. (I don't mean 'break' in any sort of bad way, but just in that he gave in first and had to wear her down.) And now I sort of want to see this cliché reversed. And now I want to write, but I feel bad writing when I haven't updated anything in ages?

Anyway. I am proud of Rosie and Scorpius. A lot of Scorpius' I've read are very mild mannered and quiet and that he was even part of this scheme (though I'm sure Rose had a lot to do with his participation) is awesome. I do sorta wanna see what happens when they open the door, though? Purely because I had some side characters in a similar situation once and even though they got together, when the door opened, one of them tried to murder the person who locked them in there. XD

Well, then. This was a lot more ranty than it needed to be. But I've been out of the fanfic world for like a year T_T I reserve the right to be ranty. <3

Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 20 Oct 2018 11:13 AM · For: The One Where You Snog In A Small Space

 

Hey!

 

So I thought how your OC is really aware about cliches was amazing. She seems like a good character who has quite an cynical view on life or maybe she is just realistic but I really enjoyed how she acknowledges how silly the situation she is in is. I like the way you've decided to tell the story through time points which is good for getting an idea what happens when or how quickly Al and Cassia are able to resolve their 'tension'.

 

I think your characterisation is great, it's quite difficult to build up an OC character in a one-shot especially as this one isn't really long. Cassia feels so natural like I might have known her forever. I love her banter with Scorpius, her backstory has been fitted into the story seamlessly. I like how views on Rose but it's quite nice to see her view has changed too. It's interesting to have Al as a Gryffindor too. It's not often that you see someone choosing to write him in house other than Slytherin. He seems to be quite stereotypically Gryffindor too.

 

Cassia is so brilliant, I love how she is so layered! Al and her interactions are really rather intense. *sizzles* There is total chemistry between these too though. I like the reoccurring imagery of Al's eyes which you've used throughout the story too. I really thought Cassia's reactions to Al are understandable because if you've been brought up in a certain way then you don't know any different. I really like this story because it is the biggest cliche but it was so well written. Cassia's thought process to get from 'hating' him to kissing him was engaging and fun. Great job with fun cute one-shot!

 

 

- Abbi xo

 

 

Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 20 Oct 2018 09:25 AM · For: The One Where You Snog In A Small Space

Hey, dear! I'm here for the House Cup Maze #1 Task!

 

You know, having two characters who have inexplicable amounts of sexual tension trapped together for an indefinite amount of time, in which they are forced to face their feelings head-on is one of my secret favorite cliches. I also love that Cassie both recognizes the cliche in which she's become entangled, and positively hates it. Her attitude is brilliant, to be honest -- surly ladies will forever hold my heart. 

 

Her entire demeanour -- her complaining, teasing Scorpius, and her open distaste for the Weasleys (or at least the one who has been kissing on Scorpius ;) ) makes me laugh.   Plus, the entire idea that Cassie's making out with Albus was both and accident and his fault makes me laugh. I mean, it's understandable that she wouldn't want to tarnish her Slytherin-y name by making out with the 'poster boy' of Gryffindor, of course ;). 

 

I cannot imagine being more humiliated than being trapped in the dungeons and receiving a very blatant note stating that you can't be let out unless you resolve the sexual tension between you and someone you choose to hate (tension or no tension).  But love and hate are two sides of the same coin, right? Or...something to that effect? I do love that Al decided to tell her that he fancied her just as she was telling him how much she hates him. Haha! Plus, fantastic snogging is better than no snogging at all. 

 

This was a cute one-shot -- I enjoyed it very much!  Great job!

 

-Rumpels

Name: potionspartner (Signed) · Date: 09 Jul 2018 02:44 AM · For: The One Where You Snog In A Small Space

Sexual tension released! And now Cassie gets to snog with the kisser of the Greek Gods. Cassie is a great character: sassy, so Slytherin, and a balancing force for the reckless Gryffindor who appeared to start snogging in the Charms corridor last week without thinking of the consequences . . . or maybe Al is more calculating than Cassie gives him credit for. After all, given his family background and personal background, there’s a bit of snake in him too.

What I want to know is why hasn’t anyone fixed the door on dungeon ten? Such irresponsible adults. This room screams location for pranks, fights etc. In the Muggle world, it would be a lawsuit waiting to happen, but then again, the wizarding world doesn’t seem phased by creating potentially dangerous (or in this case sexually tension filled) settings for their children.

cute and fun. Perfect read when it’s 3:00 in the morning and I can’t sleep.

Name: MadiMalfoy (Signed) · Date: 04 Jul 2018 08:53 PM · For: The One Where You Snog In A Small Space

Hey Plums, here for 4/4 reviews!! :)

 

So I was considering picking one of your other Jily pieces but then i saw this lovely piece of NextGen so I just had to read this one!! FIrst of all, super cute and super well-matched to the parameters of the challenge! I haven't read a ton of Albus Potter fics, so this was neat to see, especially as you've placed him in Gryffindor rather than Slytherin like many people like to do. He is totally Harry's son, but he's also definitely James Potter's grandson as well with the swaggering and such that you've written him doing.

 

The character you've created here in Slytherin Cassia Latimer is phenomenal! She's got that perfect mixture of sass and air of superiority about her that just oozes Slytherin, but she is also very smart and still shows her teenage years in her thoughts about Albus. Sometimes people get so caught up in portraying their characters a certain way that they forget to write humanity into them, but you've given both Albus and Cassia a nice level of humanity in the way they treat each other both in front of others and in private that just screams teenagers! And of course they end up snogging in the dungeon after they yell and bicker at each other for 35 minutes. LOVE IT!! 

 

Great job on this one, plums! It's one of your more light-hearted fics (as far as I can tell from your AP) and I really enjoyed it as much as your darker stuff! :)
~MadiMalfoy x