Name: MadiMalfoy (Signed) · Date: 30 Apr 2019 02:36 AM · For: Chapter 1

Hi Paula! :)

 

This is such a cute little piece about Rose and Scorpius! I like the magical equivalent of Icy Hot here too with a pasty potion instead -- it's a nice touch. Rose clearly just needs a break from Quidditch and leading the team, but I definitely think if I was in her position I'd also be overworking myself too. :P Scorpius barging into the girls locker room with a wild look on his face like he couldn't believe what he was about to do is just priceless. His craziness about the kiss after the fact is quite hilarious too -- he doesn't know about the Fire and Ice potion that Rose had accidently swiped on her mouth beforehand and I'm sure she wouldn't be willing to tell him that either considering the amount of drooling over her he's doing in the Great Hall and risk embarrassment by all of their collective friends and family. :P Great job with this, lovely! :)

 

~Madi

 

For the 2019 Nargles Pre-Nominations Review-a-thon

Name: StarFeather (Anonymous) · Date: 14 Aug 2018 11:49 PM · For: Chapter 1

Quodpot Review Match 3

 

Hi, Paula. The lovely banner caught my eyes, so I stopped by.

The first description about Rose's calming down her aching thighs after the Quidditch game is marvelous. I guess your speciality told you how to write the scene, right? I have read the similar titled story written by the old Gryffindor, but yours is very different, I think nobody thought of writing like this, the aftereffect of the potion and the sudden kiss.

 

I got more surprised at the kiss scene. So many questions popped up in mind. Why did Scorpius barge in the girl's locker room? Had Rose been his first crush since he entered Hogwarts? And he couldn't endure his own feeling and he dared to kiss her? Not a few authors have written the ship though, yours is totally new to me. How dramatic!

 

Then my questions are cleared in a better way in the latter half. He and his friends tried the game and Scorpius simply challenged it. I remembered Weasley twins used to bet on Quidditch games. The history was repeated. And you created more not only pranks but also that romantic part. Their game turned into a real romantic episode. I love the way how you ended, the start of the romance between Rose and Scorp.  :)

 

K