Name: Crimson Quill (Signed) · Date: 16 May 2018 03:29 PM · For: Gods Above All

 

Hey Pix!

 

I'm taking a break from gryffie tag to review this for my 'new beginnings' challenge!

 

I thought this was a really interesting piece. I thought you did a really good job of the characterisation of Bellatrix, she is creepy as ever. I felt the thought process was spot on. of course she would have this slightly unhinged feeling of greatness as being 'chosen' by her dark lord. I still find the concept hard to get my head around but I liked this piece because if it was going to happen then this is totally how Bellatrix would be reacting. I thought the adding nursery rhyme into the break it up that really gives it something extra because it added to this creepiness and just starting to make the whole scene a lot more sinister somehow? I thought that was fitting and creative.

 

Obviously the theme for 'new life' is very in keeping with the theme of 'new beginnings' so well done for your inclusion of the challenge theme successfully. 

 

thank you for entering my challenge! 

 

- Abbi xo 

 

Author's Response:

Hey, I am relieved that Bellatrix came out creepily.  I know that she can't always be a creepy thing, but people always expect her to be somewhat creepy.  I did try.  :)  I think the nursery rhyme did it quite nicely.    Yeah, the concept is rather creepy and thinking about it gives me chills.  But hey, if it's not disturbing to the author, then it won't be disturbing to the reader, right?  

Thanks for your challenge!  

Pix

Name: ShadowRose (Signed) · Date: 10 May 2018 04:43 PM · For: Gods Above All

Here for the Gryffindor review tag!!

 

This is a really interesting take, especially when taken in the concept of “new beginnings.” Bellatrix as a mother is such a strange concept, even though we know she was Delphi’s mother. I think you’ve captured her character well - she’s attached to this child out of her obsession and blind devotion to Voldemort, rather than a genuine love. I hadn’t really thought about how that situation would’ve affected her marriage to Rodolphus, but it would make sense that she would run away from him as a result.

 

The “eenie meenie minie mo” theme throughout the story was also incredibly well done. Bellatrix always has this unpredictable thought pattern in the books, so that whole concept really fits with her characterisation. I also think it’s really fitting that she pictured herself a queen, and that this action of carrying his child would make her Voldemort’s right hand. That’s also something that seems really fitting of her.

 

This was such an intriguing read!! I’ll have to read some more of your stories soon :)

 

Author's Response:

Hi there!

I was just scrolling through Wikipedia, trying to dig up some information on Bellatrix, and this tidbit came to me, so that's what happened.  I haven't read or seen Cursed Child, so I just imagined that this might have taken place like this.  It seemed like a good idea at the time... haha!

The nursery rhyme seemed to work out really well. I'm glad you recognized it.  I got a review asking about it, and it made me think that perhaps it's not as widely known as I expected it to be.

Thanks for stopping by!  I hope you get a chance to read more stories soon!

Pix

Name: Felpata_Lupin (Signed) · Date: 31 Mar 2018 04:29 AM · For: Gods Above All

Hello, Pix!

I'm here (finally) delivering awards for my Peter challenge... thank you so much for participating and congratulations for placing! <3

Oh, pregnant Bellatrix, that's interesting. We are not used to see a softer side to Bella... erm, not that she is that soft in here either, quite the contrary... but it's still very different from what we normally see of her and I like it.

I love the details of the black dress and black lips, as if to remind us of her character. And talking about her character, I think you wrote her pride and her devotion to Voldemort so well, I particularly liked how she mentions shrugging off any symptom/weakness of pregnancy because that's what he expected of her.

I feel slightly bad for Rodolphus? I'm not sure if he actually had any sort of feeling for her (their relationship was obviously forced on them and it doesn't seem particularly warm), but I still feel this is unfair to him.

Question, are the italicized lines from a lullaby or something?

Nice job! :)

Chiara

Author's Response:

Hi!  

 

Your challenge was quite fun!  Nah, it's not softer, just... different, I guess?  At this moment, she's very focused on making the break and starting her new life with her master.  She's definitely single-minded here.  I sort of feel bad for Rodolphus as well, but I also think he knows where he stands in all of this and he knows that there's not much he can do about it except go along for the ride.

 

Yes, it's a nursery rhyme kids use when trying to pick a between things. 

Eenie meenie miney moe,

Catch a tiger by its toe

If it hollers let it go,

My mother told me to pick the very best one,

And you are not it.

 

I should have used that last line, because that would have been fabulous!  Oh well... maybe in a rewrite one day.

Thanks so much for the review!

 

Pix