Name: Dojh167 (Signed) · Date: 21 May 2018 03:19 PM · For: Chapter 1

I don't normally ready Ginny/Luna if I can avoid it, but today even with other good choices I chose this? So that's a thing. 

 

Your opening is absolutely beautiful, setting up the characters with such lovely fluid descriptions that really suggest an air of unspoken longing. 

 

I really like how much you focus on each if their careers and that they are very successful in their own ways. 

 

I love the line “They had sought safety in others, in friends and lovers and families who helped them create for themselves new people who didn't live in the darkness, at least not so often.” Not only is it a beautiful and concise way to express a complicated idea, it is a good reinforcement of the things Ginny and Luna have in common. 

 

The image of creatures adoring Luna is just too perfect 

 

As much as I normally prefer reading and writing short stories, in this case I was left wishing we got more details and full scenes about the letters rather than just summaries. It made me feel teased!

 

“Panicked with hope” is a very real feeling, though I've never thought of it in those words before. 

 

This was lovely! The emotions felt very genuine, to the point that I was wondering how personally inspired it was ;)

 

Sam. 

Name: MuggleMaybe (Signed) · Date: 10 Feb 2018 11:48 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hello! I thought I ought to review one of your stories, especially because I read War and Mint and it was so good! 

 

And this was SO good, too! For me, Luna and Ginny are a pairing that needs to be well written for me to ship it. I've read some that I simply couldn't buy. I definitely bought this. I love the poetic, sort of refective style you use in this piece. There seems to be a lot of distance for the narrator, in the same way that there is a lot of distance between present and the story in fairytales. (I hope that makes sense!) Anyway, the style makes it more believable, because you are answering all my questions about why this didn't happen sooner or differently through that reflective voice.

 

I loved how you captured both characters, and espeically Luna. I especially LOVE these lines:

"She read the letter seven times over, just to make sure it was real. Everyone was always telling her not everything she saw was real and though she was quite adept at ignoring such fools, their voices sometimes left a niggling worm in her brain, making her question her senses and her feelings and her world."

 

It's all adorably fluffy, without being cloying. It's great.

 

Really lovely piece!

Author's Response:

Hi Renee! Thank you so much and I am so sorry for this woefully late reply!

I love Luna/Ginny so much, I have no idea why but I just feel like they fit so well together? 

I'm glad this wasn't too overwhelmingly fluffy! I was feeling very fluffy myself when writing it, and I just kind of went with it - so I'm so glad it worked for you.

Thanks again so much for this lovely review! You're too kind <3