Name: Wicked (Anonymous) · Date: 12 Jul 2020 08:10 AM · For: Chapter 2

Very engaging.   Really enjoyed it. 

Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 24 Oct 2017 01:07 AM · For: Chapter 2

EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!

I'm so excited by this updated!

 

Marcus is going to have to try a lot harder than that to try to talk Pomfrey out of letting him leave the infirmary before she decides it's time. Though, I would like to see him ready for action (but since Remus is still there, I'm sure that this will lead to some fantastic conversation or "observations".

 

Gooooood -- Marcus' comments will be the death of me. Now all I can see is Remus vs Killer Trees and it's hilarious. Maybe he and Marcus should team up and go beat up some trees ;). Haha!  What's better is that Remus completely ignores the statement :P. And his sarcasm is on point -- I'm not going to make it through this, I can feel it. Marcus is going to fit in alongside the Marauders so EPICALLY that it'll put me in the grave. My god. I can't. 

 

Of course Marcus would be skeptical of Pomfrey's potion, but I can totally see it from her end of things, too. I would probably get hella frustrated with having to treat patients who refused treatment :D .  Also, I love that he's trying to play I Spy with Remus, who wants absolutely nothing to do with it! Oh my goodness...this is too funny.

 

And then he threatens to SING if he doesn't play! Ahahaha! I assume Remus' 'W' was for Werewolf, something Marcus could've never guessed. Sneaky. Poor Remus is going to be outnumbered even further with Marcus in the mix. 

 

Yeah, I can imagine that being introduced to magic so suddenly is a bit of a shocker (especially when you're first introduced by way of hostile tree).  I also love that it hasn't been revealed to the others that he's from a different universe due to his rather vague answers (which he thinks nothing of, because he thinks he's still in his 'verse but with magic).

 

Yay! Marcus finally sees that he's been turned into a youngling ;). 

 

Okay, so I know you just updated. But. I need more. Soonish. Please. :D 

 

Ahh, this is so much fun! I love Marcus! He's going to tie into the Marauder's verse so awesomesaucily (forgive me, it's late).

 

Rumpels! 

Author's Response:

Ack Rumpels!  

 

I haven't forgotten this!  Truly I haven't.  I was hoping to do a monthly update for this story and yet that went crashing and buring.  I hope to get you more eventually!  I am so glad you like this.  Marcus singing and wanting to play I Spy is something he did in the TV show only he and his traveling companion were is a cargo hold that had nothing but boxes.  So they spied B - Boxes, M - More boxes and E - Even more boxes.  I didn't reference that becuase in my head that has not happend in Marcus' personal time line, but it fit for him to do similar here.  You actually landed on something that Remus did not pick.  Remus actually was going for Windows.  He doesn't want to deal with Marcus demanding what W thing he spied.  Too much risk.

 

But yes Marcus once finally teamed up with James and Sirius may be the death of him lol.  Marcus will fight right in once everyone starts trusting one another.  As for Marcus' vaugeness that is a safety thing on his part!  But I'll see what I can give you here in the future, I am stuck on and excuse for Marcus to be at the school so late in the year ect.

Name: Rumpelstiltskin (Signed) · Date: 23 Sep 2017 06:13 PM · For: Chapter 1

Hey, dear! I'm here for MAGIC! 

We've already discussed my unfamiliarity with B5, but I'm sure I can handle my way through this, especially given the fact that it's one character being transported into a world I'm familiar with.

 

Just from the beginning, Marcus seems like an extremely rational and brave person. He knows that he's dead if he can't figure out how to stop the tear in the fabric of time and space, so his rationale is to try something rather than do nothing at all. Also, black holes are the perfect portal for world-hopping!

 

I really enjoyed the transitional period (in Marcus' semi-conscious state) where he was only mildly aware of what was happening but at the same time oh-so confused). It felt very realistic.

 

And, of course, I especially love that he landed beside the Whomping Willow! You have quite the penchant for humor. Between "this was most certainly not dead", dueling the Willow with what I have imagined in my mind as some sort of metallic Bo, "fighting a tree was not exactly part of his training", musing about winding up in the land of the killer trees, and so much more in-between, but I probably shouldn't quote the entire section back at you has me dying. Oh my goodness -- so funny (he didn't try to pee on it or sit beneath it :P ). I love it!

 

Wait, how'd that castle get there? Lol, I love Marcus' 'voice' coming through in this. It's so quirky and funny, and I'm loving every bit of it. Also, it was pretty clever to have him arriving during the morning after a full moon, that way Pomfrey would surely be heading out to the grounds.

 

Oh, the Marauders! I love how well you're portraying them through voice alone (as Marcus is currently refusing to open his eyes). And though technically he didn't know anything about Remus being a werewolf before they started talking, he probably has some idea now! 

 

Heheheh... well, Sirius kind of asked for it.  Can't just go around grabbing at unconscious people! I love Marcus' confusion over the wand, too. It obviously completely makes sense that he's unperturbed by a stick, but he has NO idea just what that stick can do.

 

I assume his den'bok was the weapon he used earlier against the tree (the metallic Bo)?  I also love that Marcus is used to being older but hasn't quite realized the age-reduction just yet -- that'll be a fun surprise. I also love how Madame Pomfrey has to intervene.  It figures that the Marauders wouldn't back down from the world-hopping stranger :P.

 

Anyway, I thought this was awesome! And I demand you tell me when it's updated! It doesn't even matter that I'm not familiar with B5, because Marcus' character is amazing -- I love him already!

 

Awesome job!

-Rumpels 

Author's Response:

Eeek!  Rumple!  I was soo not expecting to EVER get a review on this story - despite the fact that I have been DYING for thoughts on it!  So while I was out and about yesterday getting the notif and reading this helped make my day!  It turned an awesome time even greater.  Like seriously I gushed about the review and you to my best friend who bless her heart puts up with my ramblings and crazy stories.  

 

Anyway, I am so glad you took a chance on this.  I had intended for this to be something that anyone outside of Babylon 5 could enjoy the story and yet those who know it won't get patronized.  That is like almost always my goal when doing crossovers or looking at posting a fiction for an HP community. Anyway, I am so glad you are in love with Marcus as much as I am.  You have made me super excited to post the next chapter because Marcus' sense of humor really plays there in my opinion.  It's not posted yet because I am aiming for something new... consistent updates!  (Shocking I know!) But I figured that I could aim for a monthly update on this story though I don't have the third chapter written.  I am actually thinking of making this my Nano project.  That way I'm forced to write and can keep with monthly updates. (Course that means I'll have to pause during nano and edit chapter 3 and oh my, I just realized I posted this like on the 18th or 19th meaning an update will land around my birthday *blinks*)  Sorry I am so going down a rabbit trail.

 

As for the den'bok, yeah it's a collapsible metal staff that Marcus can kick butt with.  He keeps it in the front of his robes.  Which is a bit different than Hogwarts school robes.  (Now I wanna request a chapter image to help with some of the visuals cause nothing is more boring than describing the minutia of a person's clothing and appearance (though there is room for some when Marcus realizes he's youthened).  Also, I am sorry if I missed mentioning that the weapon he used when fighting the tree was the very same weapon.  I'll have to go back and clear that up!

 

But yes, this was a lot of fun to write, particularly getting the characters clearly identified by voice alone.  Honestly, when I wrote and Marcus told me he wasn't opening his eyes, I nearly died.  That scene was actually the inspiration of my 'Devil is in the Details' challenge. Anyway, thank you for this amazing review - I am sure you can tell with all my going off on tangents that this review made me really excited and still does!  Like I am making myself shut up now cause I don't want the MAGIC judges to think I'm rambling for words!  *waves to the judges*  I <3 you guys too!  And seriously Rumple your reviews like totally make my day always.