Name: Renacera (Signed) · Date: 17 Jul 2019 06:18 AM · For: Owls, Letters, and Roses.

This chapter brought up a lot of questions for me...

I have to start with the sudden shift in Draco's behavior. Though we knew a few chapters ago that he wanted to prove to Hermione that he'd changed, he's suddenly obsessed with her in a romantic way. It feels quite abrupt, unfortunately. I could see him asking her to dinner, even persistently, but I would have thought at this point that it would be as an attempt to explain himself and show her that he isn't a bad person. I wouldn't have thought it would be as an actual date...

In that same vein, Hermione is suddenly very attracted to Draco! I could see her acknowledging that he is physically attractive, but it was surprising to me that she's been thinking of kissing him. Hermione is usually a pretty careful person. I'm glad she's rejected his advances so far. It seems more appropriate considering their past. (Though, of course, I want them to get together eventually.)

Draco's reasons for wanting to talk to Hermione were all pretty surface level--mostly about physical attraction--except for the one where he wrote, "I'm sorry." I wonder if he realizes that he'll have to do more than tell Hermione she's beautiful to convince her to give him a chance, haha.

So, it seems things are moving quickly! I'm interested to read on and see how they go. :)



P.S. - The only grammatic problem I noticed in this chapter was that occassionally the tense shifts from past to present. When you edit/rewrite, be sure to look out for that!

Author's Response:

Not so much obsession, but a gesture to show he cares and wants to get to know her.

Attraction can start with looks, but Hermione is very hesitant. 

I think I got about halfway through this story and realised I had a "plot" in mind. This was a very rushed story, but also a time where I never had written before. I literally vomited out a chapter, disregarding ALL grammar and other mistakes, put it in the queue at HPFF when there were thousands of submissions a day, then rushed out my next chapter LOL

 

Name: Renacera (Signed) · Date: 17 Jul 2019 06:00 AM · For: Harry and Draco's Understanding

Oh wow. We certainly learned more in this chapter! But more questions arose too. And I can't wait to find out the answers.

I obviously have to start with Harry's proposal to Ginny. I honestly laughed to find out that he proposed over breakfast in Hermione's apartment. I would have expected him to plan something more elaborate and meaningful. I wonder if there's a reason why he did it spur of the moment or if he just felt like that moment was "right" for some reason.

I'm glad we got some explanation for Harry forgiving (if that's the right word) Draco. Though I'm still so curious as to what Draco was up to in the years he was missing.

It's so interesting that the Minister interrogated Draco on his own without any Aurors present. It shows a certain amount of trust in Draco to begin with, and then that seems to have been cemented by whatever Draco told him. I hope we find out at some point! (I'm sure we will.)

Good job with your characterization of Hermione. She definitely has reason to be suspicious of Draco still, and her curiosity about what exactly he knows is very appropriate for her.

On I read!

Author's Response:

I honestly don't know about Harry and Ginny. I think I get so wrapped up in romance, I don't always think of why things are happening the way they are - they just are.

As for the Minister and Draco...Keep reading ;)

Thanks for R&R :)

Name: Renacera (Signed) · Date: 16 Jul 2019 03:55 AM · For: Draco's Return

This is probably the best chapter in the story so far!

You've done a great job here. I'm really glad you didn't make Hermione forget her past with Draco immediately. He was terrible to her, and there's a lot of healing that needs to happen. So I think it makes so much sense for her to reject his company and him in general.

I was surprised that Ginny and Harry are fine with Draco but somehow haven't told Hermione that. The line where Hermione asks, "As of when is everyone fine with Draco Malfoy?" was perfect! It very much encompassed the moment for her, and you did a great job showing her confusion and discomfort. I wonder why her friends never mentioned Draco to her...

Luna explaining that Draco had been missing for years was a surprise to me too! I wonder what he was doing all that time and how he's changed since he's been gone. The ending seems to imply that he's changed a lot and wants to show Hermione that. I can't wait until he does! Your characterization of him is so interesting, and I'm really enjoying reading him.

Great job with this chapter. I can't wait to read on!

Author's Response: I love Draco. I'm a huge fan and it took me a while to get to the point where I will defend his character. While I understand JKR's POV and that young girls are not supposed to love a 'bad boy' - I am an adult. I can see Draco as the bratty little kid, to the scared teenager, to the redeemed man who realises his mistakes. To me, it makes sense that Hermione would question Draco, his intentions, and why her friends haven't mentioned it. I do explain things as the story unfolds :)

Name: Renacera (Signed) · Date: 16 Jul 2019 12:15 AM · For: Draco's Return

This is probably the best chapter in the story so far!

You've done a great job here. I'm really glad you didn't make Hermione forget her past with Draco immediately. He was terrible to her, and there's a lot of healing that needs to happen. So I think it makes so much sense for her to reject his company and him in general.

I was surprised that Ginny and Harry are fine with Draco but somehow haven't told Hermione that. The line where Hermione asks, "As of when is everyone fine with Draco Malfoy?" was perfect! It very much encompassed the moment for her, and you did a great job showing her confusion and discomfort. I wonder why her friends never mentioned Draco to her...

Luna explaining that Draco had been missing for years was a surprise to me too! I wonder what he was doing all that time and how he's changed since he's been gone. The ending seems to imply that he's changed a lot and wants to show Hermione that. I can't wait until he does! Your characterization of him is so interesting, and I'm really enjoying reading him.

Great job with this chapter. I can't wait to read on!

Author's Response:

I love Draco. I'm a huge fan and it took me a while to get to the point where I will defend his character. 

While I understand JKR's POV and that young girls are not supposed to love a 'bad boy' - I am an adult. I can see Draco as the bratty little kid, to the scared teenager, to the redeemed man who realises his mistakes.

To me, it makes sense that Hermione would question Draco, his intentions, and why her friends haven’t mentioned it. I do explain things as the story unfolds ???? 

Name: Renacera (Signed) · Date: 15 Jul 2019 11:52 PM · For: A Blast from the Past

What a great way to introduce Draco into the story! You've definitely taken his canon characterization and made it your own. I love that you began from where we know him in the books (as a Death Eater and a scared 16-year-old) and evolved him into a mature man who's not above coming to Hermione Granger's birthday party.

The way he thinks about Hermione as he watches her is so sweet! It's shallow, of course--he doesn't know her as a person these days, but thinks she's beautiful--but I also see the potential for him to get to know her, and I love that. I'm such a sucker for these two as a couple.

The moment when Draco finally reveals himself is fantastic! I actually laughed out loud when Hermione was thinking how attractive he was without realizing his identity.

This chapter was a little more in depth with the descriptions and details. I appreciated being able to see the scenes!

I'm really excited to read on and see how you develop their characters more so that they can become friends instead of enemies and then fall in love. I wonder what they've both been through since the war that they would be able to connect through.

On I read!

Author's Response:

as per the last response, I wrote this as if watching a romance movie. I love watching these little moments and just went with it :)

Thanks for R&R :)

Name: Renacera (Signed) · Date: 15 Jul 2019 11:41 PM · For: The Party

This chapter was another good one! I wondered if Hermione would change her mind about letting Luna throw her a party, but it definitely makes sense that Luna wouldn't back down.

Your characterization of Luna is still unique, but I think it was very genuine for her to pay for Hermione to get a new dress. That's so sweet and thoughtful and very much a Luna thing to do.

I love that Harry and Ginny were able to come back for the party. You mentioned that Hermione's dress was beautiful, but there weren't many other descriptions of it. Don't be afraid to "show, don't tell"! You have some fabulous opportunities in this chapter to show us the sights/sounds/smells/etc. of the party and its attendees.

The party itself sounds amazing though! I think Hermione being overwhelmed fits with her character very much. And I love that she takes a minute to get some alone time. I do that at parties too!

Finally, I really like that in her rush to get some space and a few minutes of quiet, Hermione doesn't even notice someone else is on the balcony. I assume that's our dear Draco? :D  I can't wait to find out!

Great job!

Author's Response:

Luna, in my head at the time of writing, was different to the books. I think back then I hated her alooftness because she was someone who was picked on. I wanted to make her 'normal' but still throw in a bit of her quirkiness that makes Luna, Luna. Instead what I got was this Luna :) 

I wrote this like a corny romance movie. It makes me do that goofy grin when you watch it on TV. 

Thanks for the R&R :)

Name: Renacera (Signed) · Date: 15 Jul 2019 11:16 PM · For: A Fresh Start

So much happened in this chapter!

I'll start with the plot:

Hermione moving back home must have been so difficult for her! Since this story was written before the release of Deathly Hallows, I see that Hermione's parents are still around. That's really lovely for her! I always feel like she would have had a particularly difficult time after the war, since her parents were gone.

The idea of Hermione going to a country retreat to relax was nice! I don't know if she'd have done that in canon since she can't seem to slow down, haha, but I think I would want her to do it! I'm glad she had Mrs. Tally to support her there.

Then we have Hermione starting a job with Luna! I can't imagine Hermione as Luna's assistant, haha. I'm sure there's going to be a lot of hijinks because of it. Luna herself was a little more down-to-earth than I would have expected. She rambled, but it was all pretty coherent. I wonder if that's because she's older now or if it's just the characterization you chose for this story.

A bit of constructive criticism for this chapter might be that there weren't many descriptions of the characters and settings. I'd have loved to be able to picture Mrs. Tally, the retreat, Hermione's apartment, Luna's office, etc.

Other than that, good job! On I read! :)

Author's Response:

I think Mrs Tally were an afterthought. I wanted to explore them later in the fic, but it never fit in when I first wrote this. I was starting a re-write on this story which does go there. Unfortunatly, it remains unfinished/

Thank you for R&R :)

Name: Renacera (Signed) · Date: 15 Jul 2019 11:07 PM · For: Growing up and Apart

Hello again!

I've reached novels in my quest to read all the Dramiones on HPFT, so here I am now! I'll review every chapter, though it may take me a while! :)

I have to start with compliments on the age of this story. I have very few fanfictions that are as old as this one. Most of mine from back then were so egregiously terrible that they don't see the light of day anymore. So I'm always happy to see stories from back before the books were even finished!

I like that this first chapter sets up where Hermione is at in life. It makes sense to me that she would do anything to be with Ron after waiting so long, but I think you've also shown that doing that wasn't really "her." And she needs to get back to living a life she loves, not just following Ron's dreams. I think that would be a really hard decision to make, but I'm glad that Hermione made it and is staying firm in her choice.

I'm interested to see what will await Hermione when she goes home. What's left for her there without Harry, Ron, and Ginny? We'll have to see!

Good job writing a solid first chapter to what's going to be quite a long novel I see! This feels almost like a prologue, and I'm really interested to see how the plot moves forward and how your characterization changes or goes along with canon. So far, I think you've captured this version of Hermione well. I look forward to reading on!

Best,
Emily

Author's Response:

I love this story. It's not my best writing, and mostly was purge and post back in the day. But I wrote what I love to read. I can re-read this story and completely forget I wrote it. That's why it stays. 

Thank you for reading and reviewing :)

Name: MrsSiriusBlack (Signed) · Date: 07 Sep 2018 11:11 PM · For: Surprises

Omg! You definitely should write more! I am curious to know what the wedding looked like anf turned out to be and a sequel would be awesome! I love your writing and I cannot wait to continue on to your next book in line.

Author's Response:

A sequel was meant to happen called "Daughters of the Earth", but I never did write it. One day, I hope to finish it.

And thank you for reading and reviewing :)

Name: NutsAboutHarry (Anonymous) · Date: 20 May 2018 12:18 AM · For: An Interesting Find & The Date Begins

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Very nice! Please update soon!!

Author's Response: Thank you :) Updates...Well...I kinda hit a brick wall with the ending...So I'm going back and re-writting this story. It will be the same plot, just a little bit extra here and there so I can get to the ending a lot more smoother.

Thank you for reading and reviewing :)

Name: forsakenbryee (Anonymous) · Date: 20 May 2018 12:18 AM · For: An Interesting Find & The Date Begins

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Originally left on 08/02/2007

I do love this story so far! It's wkd brill! :] I must finish it tonight! Lovely

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm glad that you have enjoyed reading it so far.

Name: Elf_ears13 (Anonymous) · Date: 20 May 2018 12:18 AM · For: An Interesting Find & The Date Begins

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Well, that was quick. Luna seemed too rational - I think it would be more likely for her to say something like, ""Twenty-first birthday parties are traditionally viewed as important reintroduction times to society"" in a way that suggests that this is common knowledge, and that she's surprised to find that Hermione doesn't know this. Or something.

A few common problems that I noticed more than once were pronouns and punctuation after dialog. It's not that you used the wrong ones, you just didn't use pronouns at all in some places where you definitely should have. I think I was overloaded on reading ""Mrs. Tally"" (nine times), and she wasn't even all that important in the chapter. You can be creative with what you call her - the motherly figure, the kind witch, her building's owner, etc. Then for dialog, there were just a few times where you didn't end with a period or a comma, and there was just a blank space (“Okay” Was all that she could say.). Easy enough to fix, right?

Her father had died in the war and she had picked up right were her father left off (were should be where, and again, pronouns: 'her father' shouldn't be said twice); nobody really wants the job as they think my ideas are just to out there (to should be too); Well of course its necessary, Hermione (its should be it's, and there should probably be a comma after well).

Author's Response: Again, thank you. I feel as though I should say more, but as we've already spoken about this issue, I'm just going to leave it at thank you..lol..Although, if you want to keep reading...You can ;)

Name: Elf_ears13 (Anonymous) · Date: 20 May 2018 12:18 AM · For: An Interesting Find & The Date Begins

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You never said it would be this long of a read! I don't have a lot to point out plotwise or in terms of characterization, so don't take it the wrong way when I point out a few errors (well, that's what you asked for, but you can never be too polite in a review).

However after she almost lost her two very best friends during the war (there should be a comma after however); Ron Weasley was her hearts desire for so long (hearts should be heart's, since it's possessive); Ginny was finally happy to be with Harry that she really didn’t care about the amount of travel they did (awkward sounding, would be better as 'Ginny was so happy to finally be with Harry,' since there's a 'that' that follows ... if that makes sense); when you do manage to climb into bed with me, your too tired to (your should be you're, since it's a contraction of you and are); playing the one sport he loves the most and getting paid to do so (loves should probably be loved, even though it's an ongoing thing, it sounds better in the past tense); Hermione responded heading to their room to pack (there should be a comma after responded).

Author's Response: LOL...Thank you :)

Name: secretly_inlove (Anonymous) · Date: 20 May 2018 12:18 AM · For: An Interesting Find & The Date Begins

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Originally left on 05/19/2007

i love the story. please update soon.

i can hardly wait for the next chapter let alone the squel.

you are extremly talented.

best of luck to you.

Author's Response: Thank you. Updates are happening :)

Name: hottiebhp (Anonymous) · Date: 20 May 2018 12:18 AM · For: An Interesting Find & The Date Begins

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Originally left on 05/13/2007

hi when are you going to post again its been a long time since you have

Author's Response: Hi there...I'm really sorry. Real life and other things have kept me busy of late. None of my stories will be abandoned and I hope to update soon.

Thank you so much for sticking with me, although my updates haven't happened in a while, I really appreciate it, more than I can ever say :)

Name: thebfsgf (Anonymous) · Date: 20 May 2018 12:18 AM · For: An Interesting Find & The Date Begins

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Originally left on 05/08/2007

NO! WHY IS IT STOPPED! This is such a good story! I am putting off my homework to read this! Oh well, you force me to return to researching the Red Crossbill's reproductive cycle and strategies... ugh! Hope you write more soon!

Rebecka

Author's Response: Thank you Rebecka :) I stopped because I had this huge writers black that I couldn't pass, however that stage is over and I'm back to writing.

Updates will be coming soon :)

Name: thebfsgf (Anonymous) · Date: 20 May 2018 12:18 AM · For: An Interesting Find & The Date Begins

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Originally left on 05/07/2007

Oh my gosh! This is such a good story! And the fact that someone is watching them is just plain scary! I can hardly believe that Draco is changed to the good side! I love the way that you explained everything! You should definately become a writer! I would like to get updates, if you don't mind me asking for this, on your stories. gamergurl91@yahoo.com you can e-mail me there, and you can add me as a friend if you have yahoo. Well, I will get on reading the rest of your story, and I want to thank you for writing such an incredible story!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this fabulous review :) I can honestly say that it brought a smile to my face!

Unfortunately, I don't have a mailing list set up, but I am known as Elena78 on the HPFF forums and as soon as I have an update out for ANY of my stories, I will post the update on there :)

Name: Griffindor_girl102891 (Anonymous) · Date: 20 May 2018 12:18 AM · For: An Interesting Find & The Date Begins

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Originally left on 04/28/2007

cute cute cute!

Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you :)

Name: TheWorldISee (Anonymous) · Date: 20 May 2018 12:18 AM · For: An Interesting Find & The Date Begins

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Originally left on 03/01/2007

This was a great first chapter. You did the set up quickly, but gave enough information to let the reader know where they were and what had happened. One thing this chapter does lack a little is description. It seems you wanted to get the set up done and over with. Which I certainly cannot blame you for because I am quilty to it too. But I still loved it! The part where Ron says ""Obviously you have made up your mind. Do what you like."" is perfect. It's classic guy talk. I can't count how many times my boyfriend says I already have things made up in my mind but I make him go through the motions anyway. Hey, at least we give them a chance right? hehe, anyways, marvalous first chapter I will definitly read on!

Author's Response: Thank you :) Yes, this chapter is a bit rushed and major edits and improvements are going to happen to this fic. This was my first ever attempt at fan fiction, so I was actually happy that I got anything written at all :)

Name: tiffers (Anonymous) · Date: 20 May 2018 12:18 AM · For: An Interesting Find & The Date Begins

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Originally left on 01/29/2007

ELENA! I came, I read, and I am reviewing! You think this is bad? *slaps Elena again for good measure* You are insane my dear! First off I love your Hermione, you have captured her personality amazingly. That is most definitely the Hermione that I have come to known and love! You have a really good concept here too, I am always interested to see how Dramione writer will choose to dispose of dear little Ronny. I think it was refreshing to see a story where it just ended, nobody died (thank goodness, poor Ron can't die anymore, the poor man is just a giant zombie floating around HPFF).

The only war that existed was that of personal growth.

OMG the line was amazing, for some reason it just reached out and grabbed me, taunting me, gripping until I finally apprecaited the amazingness of that statement. I just loved how you slowly unfolded their history, and explained what was happening. I think you have the characters right on so far, I can see each of them acting that way. Ginny would go to the ends of the earth for Harry, and I can see Ron choosing his career over Hermione. I loved their conversation, it was perfect.

This was a wonderful first chapter Elena and I am so excited to continue on reading this story. I am excited and anxious to see how this turns into Dramione! *huggles*

Author's Response: Yay!!! Your here reading my Dramione!!!..lol..Ouch!!! what's with those slaps??...hehehe

I think now that a year has almost past since I first started writing this fic, that I can make it much better. This is my first attempt at a fan fic, so I really did rush it. I just had an idea in my head and started typing :) So, in that respect, yes, I think its bad...lol..

I'm happy that you think I captured Hermione, that was what I was aiming for. I thought if Hermione had a choice, what would she do? Normally Hermione is about rules, logic and doing the right thing. But after almost loosing Ron in the war, I could see Hermione actually following her heart for once and not hear head!! lol..And yes, Ron does seem to die a lot. But he is quite ummm...Surprising in this fic...I can't say any more then that!!

You like my lines, huh???...lol..I thought that line would kind of sum up what this story is about. Learning and growing and finding your place in the world. We all go through this in life, so why not these characters too.

I'm glad you liked the conversation too. It was the hardest thing I have ever written I think..lol..Mainly because I'm a Hermione/Ron shipper in Canon, so it was heard to make them break up, but it needed to be done so I could introduce Draco :)

Once again, thank you soooo much for taking the time to read and review. I will be over at your Author's page once I get this top secret work finished ;)..*huggles*

Name: Princ3ssMarvolo (Anonymous) · Date: 20 May 2018 12:18 AM · For: An Interesting Find & The Date Begins

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0ok why does hermey propose???

this is so unlike her.

Author's Response: The whole basis of the story is that Hermione wants to settle, she knows what she wants and she's not letting anything in her way :)

Some people find it odd that a woman proposes to a man, yet it happens more and more often these days...lol..Majority of this story is odd and OoC when you really think about it, but that is how it is meant to be ;)

Thank you for the review!!

Name: Princ3ssMarvolo (Anonymous) · Date: 20 May 2018 12:18 AM · For: An Interesting Find & The Date Begins

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Originally left on 01/29/2007

cool. love the whole back ground theme.

Author's Response: Thank you :)

Name: MysticalE (Anonymous) · Date: 20 May 2018 12:18 AM · For: An Interesting Find & The Date Begins

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Originally left on 01/18/2007

Cute stuff! I can't wait for the ending, and I'm looking forward to the sequel even more!

Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you :) I have been stalling on this fic...I don't want to finish it, but I know I have to :)

This fic will be wrapped up soon and the Sequel will be posted shortly after that :)

Name: MysticalE (Anonymous) · Date: 20 May 2018 12:18 AM · For: An Interesting Find & The Date Begins

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This is a FANTASTIC story! I can't wait to finish it (unfortunately, that will be tomorrow). I love how everyone's fates are wound together. I'm glad Ron's finally coming to his senses, and I can't wait to see what happens next!

Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you :) Yes, this was my first fan fic, and it took me a while to get it all to connect, but it did. Thank you for reviewing :)

Name: kiara_black (Anonymous) · Date: 20 May 2018 12:18 AM · For: An Interesting Find & The Date Begins

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Originally left on 01/09/2007

aw. this is so sweet! i love this story now, though i generally hate hermione/draco. you did a good job of making them seem real! and like i said, i loved it!!

Author's Response: Thank you :) I was the same was about Draco/Hermione for a while. Then I read some really fantastic fics, and my mind began to change. This story is my attempt to make this ship more believable :)